Nazm : Raat bhar .........
raat bhar thandi thandi hawa jo chalee
soz-e-gham se charaaghaaN ye dil ho utha lab pe aane lagee khud-ba-khud tishnagee koyee naghma bhi hothoN pe khulne laga kis qadar ghaibat-e-yaar khalne lagee (soz = burning, ghaibat = absence) yaad aaye puraane naye kuchh rafeeq haadse kuchh puraane bhi yaad aa gaye kuchh nayee ranjishoN ke naye waaqye ab shikaayat bhi kis se kahaaN tak kareiN jab puraane hoN khanjar naye haathoN meiN dhooNdhtee reh gayeeN aaNkheiN chehra shafeeq (rafeeq = companions, shafeeq = compassionate) kis ke hone ka ehsaas hota hai ye kis ko deti hai aawaaz tanhaaiyaaN kis ke qadmoN ki aahat sunaayee si de kaNpkapaatee si kis ki ye sargoshiyaaN nak’hat-e-zulf kis ki hawa meiN urhe kaun haule se hai uNgliyoN se chhuwe paas kya door bhi tum naheeN ab rahe ho raha phir hamaare ye kya darmiyaaN (sargoshiyaaN = whisperings, nak’hat = fragrance) ZARRAA |
bahut khoobsoorrat nazm hai zarra jee.................
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bahut khoob zarraa bhai dili daad hazir hai............radhe radhe
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bahut khubsoorat rachna hai zarra ji ...........
aise hi likhte rahein |
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Masha Allaah mere bhai........... waaaaahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh
awwal to takheer se pesh hone ke liye nacheez muafi ka talabgaar hai.. baad iske gar is nazm ki taraf ayeN to uff taubaa qayaamat hai qayaamat saahab......... Wallaaah aise alfaaz aise ehsaas ke barbas hi muh se waahhh nikal jaae.... kisi saagar kinaare thandi hawa ke jhonke saa mehsoos karaati hai aapki nazm..... aur is kaam me to aap maahir hain... beshaq har baar ki tarah is baar bhi dil jeet liya hai aapne bhai.. hame mureed kar liyaa hai..... likhte rahiye... kalam ka jaadu chalaate rahiye... Shukriyaa Shaad............. |
Bohot khoob... Dil ko lage seed he ehsaas aapke...
Duaon ki guzarish, Abrar. |
bahot bahot umda .............................. :)
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achchhee thi naheen usse barhkar ho gayee hai .... Bhai bahaut bahaut inaayat apki ....lakh lakh shukriya aur lakhon duaein .... Khush Raho aabaad raho .... Zarraa |
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Zarraa bhai, aadaab aur namaste
BGM saahab ne aapki is nazm ki farmaayish ki thi to maiN dhooNdhte hue idhar aa gaya aur yaqeen kijiye mujhe apni qismat aur masroofiyat donoN par itna gussa aa raha hai ke maiN is baab par haaziri pehle kyoN na de paaya aur aapka shukurguzaar bhi na ho saka bhai kya kamaal ka takkhayyul aur taGhazzul ataa kiya hai aapko uupar waale ne aur kya hi kamaal ki pakaD hai aapki zabaan-o-lehje par, khuda kare qalam, zehan aur dil ka taal-mel yooN hi banaa rahe aur hum aapke in nageenoN ke husn ka lutf yooN hi uThaate raheN daad "Tikaa" lijiyega, yaad se. rab raakha maikash |
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Zarra bhai ..bahut acha nibhaya pure kalam ko aapne ...Yaar apse tau dil ke taar jure haiN.Aaplo perna yaqeenan bahut achcha kagta hai mujhe .
Bhai thora keemti waqt humlogon ko bhi de diya karo bazm mein shirkat ho kar . Baki.khuda khair kare , aapke naye kalam ka intezar rahega. Sanjay Sehgal |
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Just one word i say.......SUPERB.....bahut achche se jazbaat bayan hue hain sahab......mubarakbaad aapko..... |
Zaraa ji adaab or tasleem pesh karta hoo.n aapki nazam sach me bhut lajawaab hai mai.n hamesha aapki likhi huii shayri ke intezaar mei.n rehta hoo.n bhut khub likhte ho aap...Raj...
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