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main kaanch ke tukdon se aaina bana leta hoon
toote hue khwabon se jindagi bana leta hoon,
main kaanch ke tukdon se aaina bana leta hoon, phenkte hain log jo patthar mujhpe, main sabko jodkar moorat bana leta hoon, raaah-e-manjil mein ho kitni bhi mushkilein, main jab thaanta hoon raasta bana leta hoon, raat ke andhere mein bhatkta nahin main, har sitare ko apna chaand bana leta hoon, na poocho mujhse meri sehat ka raaj, main har dard ko dawa bana leta hoon vo itrate hain apni haath kee lakeeron pe, main mehnat se apni taqdeer bana leta hoon, mere ret ke mahal dekh ke hansne walon. main iradon ko faulaad bana leta hoon, aate nahin jo bure waqt pe kaam mere, main aise doston ko gujra hua waqt bana leta hoon, aasmaan mein chaand ko takta nahin main, aage haath bada ke apna bana leta hoon, milta nahin jab mandiron masjid mein vo. main mohabbat ko apna khuda bana leta hoon, manjil pe pahunch ke rukta nahin main, ek naye sooraj ko apna mukaam bana leta hoon, jeevan mein ho mere kitna bhi andhera, insaan hoon do patthar se aag bana leta hoon, apnon se karta nahin koi gila shikva, main dushmanon ko bhi apna dost bana leta hoon, daulat shohrat ke peeche bhaagta nahin , bheed se alag pehchan bana leta hoon. umeed ka daman kabhi chhodta nahin 'aru' ek deepak se diwali bana leta hoon, |
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Bahut khoobsoorat ghazal kahii aapne..! Umdah peshkash..! Khaash t`aur pe mat`la bahot pasand aaya! Daad qubool farmaa`en.! |
main kaanch ke tukdon se aaina bana leta hoon - 14th October 2012, 02:05 AM
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wow bahut nice lines hai , may be ye lines me haqiqat chipi hai
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toote hue khwabon se jindagi bana leta hoon,
main kaanch ke tukdon se aaina bana leta hoon, phenkte hain log jo patthar mujhpe, main sabko jodkar moorat bana leta hoon, raaah-e-manjil mein ho kitni bhi mushkilein, main jab thaanta hoon raasta bana leta hoon, raat ke andhere mein bhatkta nahin main, har sitare ko apna chaand bana leta hoon, na poocho mujhse meri sehat ka raaj, main har dard ko dawa bana leta hoon vo itrate hain apni haath kee lakeeron pe, main mehnat se apni taqdeer bana leta hoon, mere ret ke mahal dekh ke hansne walon. main iradon ko faulaad bana leta hoon, aate nahin jo bure waqt pe kaam mere, main aise doston ko gujra hua waqt bana leta hoon, aasmaan mein chaand ko takta nahin main, aage haath bada ke apna bana leta hoon, milta nahin jab mandiron masjid mein vo. main mohabbat ko apna khuda bana leta hoon, manjil pe pahunch ke rukta nahin main, ek naye sooraj ko apna mukaam bana leta hoon, jeevan mein ho mere kitna bhi andhera, insaan hoon do patthar se aag bana leta hoon, apnon se karta nahin koi gila shikva, main dushmanon ko bhi apna dost bana leta hoon, daulat shohrat ke peeche bhaagta nahin , bheed se alag pehchan bana leta hoon. umeed ka daman kabhi chhodta nahin 'aru' ek deepak se diwali bana leta hoon, bahut hi khubsurat peshkesh hai aru bhaiiiiii |
ek dipak se diwali bana leta hoon ..... beautiful !
bahaut hi khoobsurat rachna rahi Aru ji .... vichaaron mein bahaut gehraayee, vishwaas aur saahas hai ..... dheron daad !!! |
bahut khoob, bahut hi sundar
laazwaabbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbb |
aapki ye ek behad puraani peshkash hai Aru bhai... lekin jis lihaaz jis muhabbat aur jis tadap se is kalaam ko sajaaya hai wo waaqai kaabile tareef hai....... bahot bahot badhaai aapko Aru bhai.......
aasmaan mein chaand ko takta nahin main, aage haath bada ke apna bana leta hoon kyaa kehne hain... bhai waahh Shaad.... |
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thanx a lot shakir jee...........
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thanx zarra jee....aapka saath yun hee bana rahe..
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toote hue khwabon se jindagi bana leta hoon,
main kaanch ke tukdon se aaina bana leta hoon, vo itrate hain apni haath kee lakeeron pe, main mehnat se apni taqdeer bana leta hoon, aasmaan mein chaand ko takta nahin main, aage haath bada ke apna bana leta hoon, milta nahin jab mandiron masjid mein vo. main mohabbat ko apna khuda bana leta hoon, Arvindji, Kya khubsurat tehreer hai, bhai.................... aalatareen soch pe daad.................. Adil. |
Hello Aru
Truly Inspirational.Due respect to u for the motivation that this poetry conveys. Harivansh rai bachan ji ki kavita yaad aa gayi..koshish karne walon ki kabhi haar nahin hoti. keep up the good work Regards |
Arvind bhai ,
Shayad ye vohi pehli rachna hai jo maine SDC pe pehli baar pari thi Oct 2012 aur isi se inspire ho ke yahan jur kaya . Aapka dhara pravah bahut hi kamaal ka hai is rachna mein aur shabdon ka jaal bun.ne ki kala aap mein God gifted kala hai .. Thora sa last ki line mein mujhe abruptness lagi ... Umeed ka daaman kabhi chorta nahi 'aru' Ek deepak se Diwali bana leta hun. Isme saani { second } ke ehasaas bade ache hain per adaygi thori raw lagi mujhe ..Ho sake tou is pe gaur farmayein .. Bura na man~na main apni niji ray de raha hun.. Regds Sanjay Sehgal |
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One of your best, I must say Hats off. ..ghazal ke liye bhi aur usme maujood josh aur himmat ke liye bhi you truly deserve reps for this one...+++ |
Amazing, incredible, superrb.......����������
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thanx adil g for reputation..................
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Aru ji muhabbat ho ya Dushmani......ek sunder aagaaz ho to anjaam bhi achha hone ki umeed band jaai hai....aapka ye peskarda kalaam bahut hi khoobsoorati se apne anjaam tak pahooNchaya hai aapne.... umeed ka daman kabhi chhodta nahin 'aru' ek deepak se diwali bana leta hoon,.....................bahut hi oomda ..waah...merii jaanib se dhairoN daad qabool farmaaiyega.... Harash Mahajan |
bahut badhiyaaa.. likha hia sahab..
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toote huye khwaabon se....
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Ek to khoobsurat rachna au uspe aapki behtareen soch. ... Aapki positivity isme aur bhi jaan daal rahi hai... Itni Achhi kavita ke liye dheron badhaiyaan..ummeed hai jald hi aapki koi nayi Peshkash padne ko milegi... |
bohut bohut badhiya
yun hi likhte rahiye aur hamen luftandoz karte rahiye. |
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aapki reps points ke haqdaar hai :) reps +++ god bless u vry sorry, abhi reps pont add nahi kar paa rhi hu...pending rhe :) |
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bahut khoob rahi Aru jee aapki yeh rachna
daad kubul farmaayen likhte rahen duaon ke saath radhe radhe |
Dear aru ji,
aapki ghazal bahut hi beshkimati hai... bahut achchha likha hai aapne.. ese dobara aap jarur padhiyega .. aap ese kanch se heera bana denge.. mujhe ummid hai.. Akant... |
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टूटे हुए ख्वाबों से ज़िन्दगी बना लेता हूँ
मैं कांच के टुकड़ों से आइना बना लेता हूँ फेंकते हैं लोग जो पत्थर मुझपे मैं सबको जोड़कर मूरत बना लेता हूँ राह-ऐ-मंजिल में ही कितनी भी मुश्किलें मैं जब ठानता हूँ रास्ता बना लेता हूं रात के अँधेरे में भटकता नहीं मैं हर सितारे को अपना चाँद बना लेता हूँ न पूछो मुझसे मेरी सेहत का राज मैं हर दर्द को दवा बना लेता हूँ वो इतराते हैं अपनी हाथ की लकीरों पे मैं मेहनत से अपनी तक़दीर बना लेता हूँ मेरे रेत के महल देख के हंसने वालों मैं इरादों को फौलाद बना लेता हूँ आते नहीं जो बुरे वक़्त पे काम मेरे मैं ऐसे दोस्तों को गुज़रा हुआ वक़्त बना लेता हूँ आसमाँ में चाँद को तकता नहीं मैं आगे हाथ बड़ा के अपना बना लेता हूँ मिलता नहीं जब मंदिरो मस्जिद में वो मैं मोहब्बत को अपना खुदा बना लेता हूँ मंज़िल पे पहुँच के रुकता नहीं मैं एक नए सूरज को अपना मुकाम बना लेता हूँ जीवन में हो मेरे कितना भी अँधेरा इंसान हूँ दो पत्थर से आग बना लेता हूँ अपनों से करता नहीं कोई गिला शिकवा मैं दुश्मन को भी अपना दोस्त बना लेता हूँ दौलत शौहरत के पीछे भागता नहीं भीड़ से अलग पहचान बना लेता हूँ उम्मीद का दामन कभी छोड़ता नहीं 'अरु' एक दीपक से दीवाली बना लेता हूँ |
Aru bhai bahut hi khubsurat peshkash he aapki
w!aaaaaaaaaaah bahut khub |
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Arvind Bhai,,,,,
Itne saare comments aur likes ke baad, mujh adna se shayer ki DAAD koi Maayene nahi rakhti, phir bhi ye zaroor kahunga ki ... aapki ghazal me ek JOSH hai , aage badhne ka, isme honsla hai, ummeed hai, lekin NIRASHAA nahi... aur yeh kaafi acchi cheez hai,,,,,, bas wo KHUDA waala sher thoda Na-Gawaar guzra mujhe. sorry agar bura laga ho to... baaki,, ghazal me har ek ash-aar par DAAD hai meri... likhte rahiye. God bless you... |
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Dear Arvind Saxena
You’re a SweekStars winner! Congratulations! Your story मैं कांच के टुकड़ों से आइना बना लेता हूँ has won the1st jury prize in the SweekStars writing competition! If you’re in Europe please give us your bank details so that we can arrange your prize. If you’re outside of Europe, please share your paypal details so we can start on the prize transfer. We were also wondering whether you would be willing to answer a few of our questions so later on we can publish small interviews (as Sweek Stories) of our winners? :) Please find the badge attached to put on your cover, so that everyone on Sweek can see you’re one of the winners! If you don’t know how to do this, you can send us your cover and we’ll do it for you. On behalf of the Sweek editorial team as well as our jury members, once again congratulations on becoming one of the winners! Publishing SweekStars 2017 edition We would like to bundle your story in the special SweekStars 2017 edition book via Sweek publishing as a paperback. For some genres we’ll publish the book with genre finalists, but we’ll also combine some genres if the stories are too short. If your story is a novel or book in itself, so about more than 20,000 words, we can publish it together via Sweek publishing and we’ll help you with creating a book cover including SweekStars! Please send us your bio information before Wednesday the 24th of January to have it included and read the note at the end of this mail. 1. Full name or alias 2. Short bio (max 50 words) 3. Your favourite 3 words 4. Your favourite book (including author) 5. Your favourite writer on Sweek (username) 6. Optional: note about your story (max 50 words) We will publish the book via https://publish.sweek.com/site/. Once the book has been published, we’ll inform you right away. Best, The Sweek team Please note, we already indicated in our competition description that your story will be published in the book, and that you as an author keep the copyright. We would like to clarify this again, and if you have any objections, please state them before Monday the 24th of January. - You, the author, will keep the author rights of your story - You, the author, will keep the publication rights of your story. You can publish and/or sell your story digitally, in print or in e-book format via any distribution channel, without notifying us. Of course we would like to see you publishing your work through the Sweek self-publishing platform (https://publish.sweek.com/site/) where you'll get high margins for each copy sold - You, the author, grant us the right to publish your story in the SweekStars paperback book and e-book - We cannot compensate individual authors for their contribution to the bundles and we can’t send finalist a copy. Unfortunately our budget doesn’t allow that! However, if you have your story published as a stand-alone, you’ll receive the royalties for all the sales of the publication. About Sweek self-publishing This is our print and e-book publishing platform. In case you would like to publish your stories or any other work, you can do this via Sweek self-publishing. Publishing and selling your books via our webshop is free of costs and you’ll receive an attractive royalty per sold copy. When a customer buys your book, we’ll print it and ship it within 4 working days. Let us know if we can help! |
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