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"yeh duniyaa ki reet kitni niyaari babul"
Mahfil ko Diya ka Salaam,
aaj ek sachai ko aap sabke samne rakhne ja rahi hun , yeh woh pal hai jo har ladki ke zindagi mein aate hai .... aur har koi isko mehsus karta hai..... yeh sirf mere dil ke ehesaas hai jise mein aap sab se share kar rahi hoon Shayad aapko pasand aaye ....yeh ghazal humesha mere Dil ke kareeb rahegi ghaltiyan keliye muaafi ki haqdar hu.............. Har koi nibhaaey yeh duniya daari babul beti vidaa karne kii teri hai baari babul Chhor ke chali jayegi beti maayka apna sunehri yaadeiN bachpan ki saari babul Rah jayenge pichhe apne khoon k rishte yeh duniyaa ki reet kitni niyaari babul Maa ke aanchal ki chaw jab naa milegi khoob royegi tab teri raaj-dulaari babul Saat feroN me banega rishta saat janam ka fir paraaii ho jayegi beti tumhaari babul Kaise jiyegi Maa judai beti ki seh kar ye rasm padegi uspe bahot bhaari babul Teri har yaad ko dil mein basa kar Diya ho jayegi apne saajaN kii pyaari babul |
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har ek ashar complete hai... kitna dard bhara likha hai tumne!!!!!:confused: padh ke dil bhar aaya..ki meri diya aisa bhi sochti hai... babu sach me tuney aaj bahut hi umda likha hai... ye ghazal mujhe ab tak ki sabse achi ghazal lagi... dil se daad tujhe... mere paas abhi shabad hi nhi hain bayaan karne ke liye... tuney badi hi aasaani se ek sachaai ko naya roop diya hai... bus kabhi kabhi dar lagta hai ki tu bhi ek din aise hi humein chhod ke jayegi.. i will miss u humesha... keep smiling... take care... |
Aadaab Diya Ji
Diya ji bahut khoob ehsaas pesh kiye aapne ek beti ke dil ki baat bakhubi keh si aapne apni is umda gazal mein dil khush ho gaya aapko itna aacha likhte hue dekh kar khaaksaar daad deta kai unhi likhti rahey...TC Quote:
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its just AWESOME diya..........u've touched my heart...har ek lafz ki sachchai ne dil aur rooh ko cheer ke rakh diya...is sachchai se chahe jitna dur bhaago,par hota aakhir yahi hai...ladki to hoti hi hai PARAYI......u made me cry....har ko baar baar padha aur zaar zaar royi...:( |
Diya ji,
Aap ladkiyo ki ye sachhi padi maine, kafi dard bara hai, mayka chhod ek jaate ek dulhan ke man ke conditon ko aap ne kafi achhe se represent kiya hai.. Kafi kaabile tarif hai hai, aap ke ye lines.. :) :) Aap ke Line ke liye main bhi aapni likhi kuch line sunata hu, jara dhyan deke padiyega kyuki isme mera desi touch hai, local language ka bhi kafi use hai isme.. hope aap ko pasnd aayegi.. Regard --> ** OMi ** ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ " ..Beti praya dhan,kal kisi aur ke ghar jai.. " ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~Yeh duniyaa ki reet Sada se chali hai aai.. Beti praya dhan, kal kisi aur ke ghar jai.. Moh na laga babul aapni betiya se itana... Jab Jai hai aangahn chhod, tohe bhi rula jai.. Itana kahe ko tutat hai jawat dekh ooke... Tor gharana chhod ke woh kahi aur ghar basaye jai.. Hash ke Vidaa kariya, aashirwad deva tor ladali ko.. Taaki aage oohar jindagi khusiyoo se bhar jai..!! ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Meri aapni kalam se.. ** OMi ** ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ |
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Wah Wah Wah .................. Kya ahsas hai Diya jii har line's haqeekhat bayan karti hai,
aur aapne ise baqubi pesh bhi kiya Daad kabul kijiye, Aur likhti rahiye. Quote:
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diya ji apne bahut acha likha hai. aise vida jab hoti beti tab humesha aisa hi mahol bana hota hai. khush rahiye humesha humari bhi khusi mil jaaye apko. apne ye baat bilkul sahi kahi hai saat fero se banta hai risthna saat janam ka Saat feroN me banega rishta saat janam ka fir paraaii ho jayegi beti tumhaari babul |
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very nice diya.....................:) zainy |
Very Good Job
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Ek aisi sachaii ko tumne chand labzo.N mei.N bayan kiya hai...... jis sachaii mei.N chipe dard se waqif hote huwe bhi har Maa-Papa ka yehi sapna hota hai ki apni ladali ke jivan mei.N yeh rasam dher saari khushiya.N le kar aaye.... Yeh ghazal padhkar mere samne woh saari baate.N tazza ho gayi......:( har baat ko tumne bahot hee khubsurati se is ghazal ke zariye pesh kiya hai....Very good job Diya.....:) |
Diya ji
aapki "yeh duniyaa ki reet kitni niyaari babul" ye Rachna pad ke anayas hi meri aanke gili ho gai. bahut hi zindgi ke paas ki rachna hai. Naari ke marm ko uzagar karti sashakt kriti lagi mujhe. aage bhi aap se mann ko chhu lene wali rachnaye padne ko milengi. Iss ummeed ke saath apni baat puri karta hu. MERI TARHA TUMNE BHI KABHI AISE SOCHA HOGA ! JO AB TAK NAHI HUAA, WOH AAGE BHI KAISE HOGA !! --NARESH MEHRA-- |
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Vicky , abhi se mat rula ....main to is ghazal likhte waqt itna roi hun ki ab sach mein darne lagi hun....jane kab kis mod per kya kya chhut jayegi mujhse tujhe mera ehesaas achha laga ehi bahot hai khus raha kar ..........dosti itne aashani se nahin chhute tujhe bina sataye mujhe chain kahan :D Diya |
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Kashif jee, kaise ho aap ...? sukriya aapne humari ghazal padhe aur ehesaas ko mehsush kiye daad dil se Qabool hai apna khayal rakhiyega Diya |
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tumhe meri ghazal pasand aayi ..mujhe khusi hui ...yeh to har ladki ka ehesaas hai dear maine bas isko labz dene ki koshish ki hun.......:(Rona nahin sweety ehi reet hai ...aur hume nibhana hai ........... take care Diya |
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So nice of u Omi jee youn hi saath detey rahiye aapki dost Diya |
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aapki saath raha to hum aage aur achhi ghazal kahne ki koshish karenge khus rahiye Diya |
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Sukriya sameer jee aapko humari koshish achha laga hume khusi hui younhi bazam mein saath detey rahiyega apna khayal rakhiyega daad kabool hai :) Diya |
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kahan ho tum aaj kal nazar hi nahi aate ho apna khayal rakhna ...mahfil mein aate rahna Diya |
Me hamesha uparwale se yeh dua karta hun ki meri ek beti zarur ho, aur yeh ehsaas itna kareeb hai mere dil ke ki ab kya bataun..........
aur apki yeh poem padke , meri aankhon me aansu hi aa gaye.........Apne toh har ladki ke haal-e-dil bahut khub bayan kiya hai............... Quote:
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aik achi koshish per daad qabool fermaieN ,
yuN hi likhti rahiye Mujeeb |
Babul tere da dil kare dhiye meriye
doli tennu kade na bithavaan sada rahe guddiyaan patoel to khed-di chuk chuk goudi te khindavaan ma kade bhen bibi kade beti tere bina dunia adhoori hai teri is kukkh bich dunia de sukh dhiye teri doli toruni zaroori hai "Marjana-maan" ta hai gunahaa.n da hi marya doli wala punn ta kamavaan ............. >>Guru Gurdaas man ji |
Bahut khoob Diyaa,
Really tum to ab bahot badi shayar ban gayi ho, Bahot pyaare khyaal aur usse bhi pyaare alfaaz. Great. Keep writing, Take care Bye -Rashid Quote:
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Pleasure is mIne :)
ji.. jaroor... siQayat ka mauka naa denge..;) dun worry.. :) Quote:
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Wow diya.. Itne khoobsoorat jasbaat... Very nice... Full of feelings.... Ek kadvi sacchai ko bahut hee sundarta se byaan kiya hai aapne... I appreciate it
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khus rahiye Diya |
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kaise ho aap ..? yeh vo ehesaas hai jis se aap gujar chuke ho ....har ladki ke life mein yeh din to jarur aati hai .........yeh aisa dard hai jis se bayaan karne ko alfaz bhi kam pad jate hai :( kya kahoon main samjh meN nahi aa rahi hai sukriya aapki Diya |
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Diya
Real Writers write on hearts! And you did that here! This is one of the best creation I have ever read! It has an ocean of real feelings. will wait to read more from you as From now on you are among My Favorates. God Bless You! Regards Susheel |
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Naresh jee, aapko meri kalam achhi lagi mujhe khusi hui yeh rachna ek sachai hai jiske saath har aurat ko jina padta hai yeh dard sirf ek aurat hi samjhti hai aapne is dard ko samjhe apni rai diye mujhe achha laga Youn hi saath dete rahiye main koshish karoongi aage se isse bhi kuchh achhi ghazal kahu ab ijazaat dijiye Diya |
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main uparwale se duaa karti hun tumhari 2 beti ho is dard se tum bhi gujro .............;) betion ke saath har ehesaash ko mehsoosh karo betiyaN ghar ki rounak hai :) ghazal achhi lagi mujhe khusi hui apna khayal rakhna Khus rahna tumhari dost Diya |
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daad kabul hai youn hi hosla detey rahiye Diya |
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ehesaas ko bayaan karna bahut muskil hai maine bas chhoti si koshish ki thi aapko pasand aayi mujhe bahot khusi hui yun hi saath rahiyega take care Diya |
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Pyari Diya.....tere yeh ahsaas maine bahut baar padeN hai, par har baar pad kar aise hi lout gaye, lafzo.n ki kami lagi har baar, ki kya reply karuN, ahsaas bahut najuk se haiN, dil ko chu gaye har baat, yeh ahsaas jitna dil ko gudgudane wala hai ki ab muje mera jivan saathi mil raha hai utna hi dil dukhane wala bhi hai (ki babul mera naihar chutta jaye)....tumne ba-khoobi pesh kiye haiN yeh ahsaas. aur meri dil se dua hai ki har ladki ko apne sasuraal meiN etna pyar miley ki woh apna maykaa bhool jaye.....ameeN duao.n ke saath teri diii |
Diya ji
Aapki ye ghazal mere dilko chhu gayi. Woh lamha yaad aagayi jab meri bidayii hui thi. Daad dil se qubool kijiye. Humesha khus rahiye. Tc |
bohut shukriya jiya ji iss nayaab peshkash ko ek baar phir humse rubaroo karaane ke liye..
wah diya jale ji bohut khoobsoorat ehsaas aur umdaa peshgi........ daad kabool kijiye |
bahut khoobsoorat kalaam diya jee.....................................
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Logged in after months. It was indeed worth.
Beyond words. True expression of feelings. Could not stop tears pouring from eyes. God Bless you Take Care |
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