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heart_killer 18th May 2009 12:10 PM

>> Iskadar mere ishQ kaa asar hoo jaye..
 
Mehfil me sabhi dost ko, Omi ka salam.. kafi dino ke baad kuch likha hai, hope aap logo ko pasand aayega..:)

<<..Iskadar mere ishQ kaa asar hoo jaye..>>

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

Iskadar mere ishQ kaa asar hoo jaye
ki uske dil meiN meraa basar hoo jaye

rag rag meiN bahta hai vo lahu ban k
bas us se bhi ab yeh khabar hoo jaye

aayine mein dek sakooN maiN aks uskaa
uskii soch meiN shaam-e-sehar hoo jaye

naam se uske hi machalta hai mera Dil
kaash uske dil mein mera ghar hoo jaye

palkoN pe bithaa kar rakhega "Omi" usse
Ki ab wo mere khawabo ka sahar hoo jaye

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Meri Apni Qalam se : OMi
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

Rani Aflatoon 18th May 2009 12:19 PM

WOW omi ji
its awesome yaar
kya kahe bohot ziyada khoobsurat hai
jazbaat bhi aur andaaz bhi

heart_killer 18th May 2009 12:20 PM

Thx u my frnd... :) aap ki nazar padi iss nacheez pe, aap ne hamari koshiso ko saraha.. iske liye tahee diL se dhanywad.. :)

yuh hi mehfil me aate rahiye..:)

Quote:

Originally Posted by Rani Aflatoon (Post 354653)
WOW omi ji
its awesome yaar
kya kahe bohot ziyada khoobsurat hai
jazbaat bhi aur andaaz bhi


Rani Aflatoon 18th May 2009 12:22 PM

,,,,,,,,ab toh aana hi padega ji,,,,,,,

heart_killer 19th May 2009 01:22 PM

diL ke armanoN ki mahak se, aa usko mahka dooN,
aaj apne zakhm-e dil ke lahoo se dulhan ki maaNg sazA dooN..
NM


Quote:

Originally Posted by heart_killer (Post 354648)


palkoN pe bithaa kar rakhega "Omi" usse
Ki ab wo mere khawabo ka sahar hoo jaye



khanak 19th May 2009 03:38 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by heart_killer (Post 354648)
Mehfil me sabhi dost ko, Omi ka salam.. kafi dino ke baad kuch likha hai, hope aap logo ko pasand aayega..:)
<<..Iskadar mere ishQ kaa asar hoo jaye..>>



~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~




Iskadar mere ishQ kaa asar hoo jaye
ki uske dil meiN meraa basar hoo jaye

rag rag meiN bahta hai vo lahu ban k
bas us se bhi ab yeh khabar hoo jaye

aayine mein dek sakooN maiN aks uskaa
uskii soch meiN shaam-e-sehar hoo jaye

naam se uske hi machalta hai mera Dil
kaash uske dil mein mera ghar hoo jaye

palkoN pe bithaa kar rakhega "Omi" usse
Ki ab wo mere khawabo ka sahar hoo jaye

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Meri Apni Qalam se : OMi
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

superb again...............

naam se uske hi machalta hai mera Dil
kaash uske dil mein mera ghar hoo jaye

it was very nice........ but omi ji aisa kyu lag raha hai ke aap isse aur khaas likh kar sakte the........... :)

Rani Aflatoon 19th May 2009 07:56 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by heart_killer (Post 354874)
diL ke armanoN ki mahak se, aa usko mahka dooN,
aaj apne zakhm-e dil ke lahoo se dulhan ki maaNg sazA dooN..
NM

nice sharing omi ji
bohot acha hai,,,

heart_killer 21st May 2009 12:04 AM

hey thxx yaa... :)
kosis kar raha hu..;) waise bhi suna hai simple word me khud represent karna jayda better hai ruther den shabdo ke jaal me ulajhne se.. ;)

yuhi aake, haula badate rahoo..

Quote:

Originally Posted by N@zneen (Post 355010)
Excellent feelings, sabhi sher khoobsurat hai, simple but powerful, gud attempt, KEEP IT UP ;)


heart_killer 21st May 2009 12:20 AM

hey khanak.. :)

1st i wud like to say.. thx 2u.. for ur reply..:)
and dear dekhiye.. likh toh bahut kux sakte the, bt deemag me har tym ek se thot nahi aate hai, may be next tym me isi gazal me kuch chnage karke aur achaa bana du.. :)
anyways.. tumari iss point ke bhi thx.. :)


-- Omi
Quote:

Originally Posted by khanak (Post 354912)
superb again...............

naam se uske hi machalta hai mera Dil
kaash uske dil mein mera ghar hoo jaye

it was very nice........ but omi ji aisa kyu lag raha hai ke aap isse aur khaas likh kar sakte the........... :)


naresh_mehra110 21st May 2009 08:20 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by heart_killer (Post 354648)
Mehfil me sabhi dost ko, Omi ka salam.. kafi dino ke baad kuch likha hai, hope aap logo ko pasand aayega..:)
<<..Iskadar mere ishQ kaa asar hoo jaye..>>



~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~




Iskadar mere ishQ kaa asar hoo jaye
ki uske dil meiN meraa basar hoo jaye

rag rag meiN bahta hai vo lahu ban k
bas us se bhi ab yeh khabar hoo jaye

aayine mein dek sakooN maiN aks uskaa
uskii soch meiN shaam-e-sehar hoo jaye

naam se uske hi machalta hai mera Dil
kaash uske dil mein mera ghar hoo jaye

palkoN pe bithaa kar rakhega "Omi" usse
Ki ab wo mere khawabo ka sahar hoo jaye

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Meri Apni Qalam se : OMi
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

Omi ji

aapki iss nazm ke kuch sher toh bahut hi laazawaab lage munjhe....kahi dil chhute hai....aise hi likhte rahiye...

---naresh mehra---

khanak 21st May 2009 02:56 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by heart_killer (Post 355114)
hey khanak.. :)

1st i wud like to say.. thx 2u.. for ur reply..:)
and dear dekhiye.. likh toh bahut kux sakte the, bt deemag me har tym ek se thot nahi aate hai, may be next tym me isi gazal me kuch chnage karke aur achaa bana du.. :)
anyways.. tumari iss point ke bhi thx.. :)

-- Omi

omi ji........... us change ka besabri se intzaar hai................. bas u hi hamare saath bane rahiye.........

heart_killer 21st May 2009 03:34 PM

Hey Naresh.. :)

Aap ka bahut, bahut sukriya, aap ne hamari Qaalm ko yuh saraha, dekh ke achaa laga.. :)
Yuh hi mehfil me aake hausala badate rahiye.. :)


-- Omi

Quote:

Originally Posted by naresh_mehra110 (Post 355120)
Omi ji

aapki iss nazm ke kuch sher toh bahut hi laazawaab lage munjhe....kahi dil chhute hai....aise hi likhte rahiye...

---naresh mehra---


heart_killer 21st May 2009 03:36 PM

hey khanak.. :)

Thx again, tumhare reply, dekh ke achaa laga..:)
yuh hi, mehfil me sath banaye rakhiye..:)

thx again..:)


-- OMi

Quote:

Originally Posted by khanak (Post 355168)
omi ji........... us change ka besabri se intzaar hai................. bas u hi hamare saath bane rahiye.........


Diya_Jale 23rd May 2009 04:08 AM

Omi jee,
bahot achha likha hai aapne .....ghazal dil pe asar kar gayi .....janab aapki ghazal se to mahfil ko char chaand lag gayi .........khus rahiye

Diya

heart_killer 23rd May 2009 10:16 PM

Diya Ji..

Hamari gazal se nahi...
Aap ke aane se hamari mehfiL me char chand lag gaye hai ji..:)

aur aap ki tareefoo ke liye tahe diL se sukariya madam ji.;)

Yuh hi aapna sath banaye rakhiyeee.. :)

--> Omi

Quote:

Originally Posted by Diya_Jale (Post 355576)
Omi jee,
bahot achha likha hai aapne .....ghazal dil pe asar kar gayi .....janab aapki ghazal se to mahfil ko char chaand lag gayi .........khus rahiye

Diya



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