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dosto ko aadaab/salaam/ssa
is section ka silsila badaate huye meri ek koshish pesh kar raha hu... aaj hi likhi hai dosto se guzarish hai ki ise durust karne me meri help kijiye. all suggestions and corrections are welcome. -------------------------------------------------- kadam dagmagaye najaane kaha tak khuda jaane jaayen fasaane kaha tak bhatakte rahe raah me apne dil ki diya saath dilne na jaane kaha tak jaha hum khaDe the wahi tak thi manzil game ishq jaate sunane kaha tak divane huye hai sabhi hosh wale sambhalte phir akhir divane kaha tak uTho zidd na cheDo ye baate purani chalaa.ooge sikke puraane kaha tak |
Wah wah mere bhai Bohat khoob Ghazal ke 3 shero me se yeh tay karna mushkil ho gaya hai ke sabse kamaal ka sher kaunsa hai..............waise to poori Ghazal ghazab dhaa rahi hai mere bhai.
Rep++++ kadam dagmagaye najaane kaha tak khuda jaane jaayen fasaane kaha tak divane huye hai sabhi hosh wale sambhalte phir akhir divane kaha tak uTho zidd na cheDo ye baate purani chalaa.ooge sikke puraane kaha tak |
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Zidd Ji...! Aaap Ki Ye Ghazal Hr Taraf Se Mukammal Or Khubsurat Hai..... Aap Ki Soch Ki Wussat Or Alfaz Ko Piranay Ka Fun Ja-baja Nazar Aaya Hai Is Nazar Me........ Is Shandaar Takhleeq Pr Me To Tah-e-Dil Se Aap Ko Daad Pesh Krta Hun.......... Qabool Farmayen Yunhi Likhtay Rahen Or Aatay Rahen |
YuuN toh saari ghazal ka lafz lafz taareef ke qaabil hai .. har ashaar aap se aise adaa huaa hai jaise kisi murtikaar ne khoobsurat muzasmaa shaahakar kar diya ho .. sachaai toh yeh hai Zidd Bhaai ! jo mujhe nazar aai ... yun toh tajmahal banne ke baad bhi logo ne nuqtaachiinii ki hogi ... ! magar jo kharaa woh kabhi nahi badaltaa ... !
iss sab ke baawjood nayi zubaan kehtaa .. tazaa tareen khayaal ... maqtaa ... mujhe behad pasand aayaa ... uTho zidd na cheDo ye baate purani chalaa.ooge sikke puraane kaha tak aakhir kehna hi padhega ... humari dil se daad le hi li jiye ... ! iss behtar kalaam ko janam dene ki khushi meN ...! abhi toh bahut kuch aap kehne aur likhne waale hai ... intezaar ke saath khadhe hai ... aate rahen likhte rahen ... khush rahen ... ! duaaon ke saath ... ! |
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kadam dagmagaye najaane kaha tak khuda jaane jaayen fasaane kaha tak divane huye hai sabhi hosh wale ---------------------------------------------------------sambhalte phir akhir divane kaha tak Bahut khoooooooooob....:rolleyes: Waise Mr Khanna naraaz hai par chalta hai, aise bahut log naraaz hote hai mujhse :p |
kadam dagmagaye najaane kaha tak
khuda jaane jaayen fasaane kaha tak bhatakte rahe raah me apne dil ki diya saath dilne na jaane kaha tak divane huye hai sabhi hosh wale sambhalte phir akhir divane kaha tak Ji .. nice one ...................... :) |
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it means a ton. waise koi to galti kahi huii hi hogi....vo batate to double thanks kahta regards |
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yu hi hausla badaate rahiye,,,, apka teh e dil se shukriya regards |
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apka izzat afzai ka apna ek alag dhang hai,rang hai....zara darr bhi lagta hai ki agee apko nirash na karu.... hausla afzaii ka bahut shukriya your appreciation means a lot. and my respect and affection refards |
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kyu galatfahmi paalte ho? |
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regards |
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Ghazal pasnd aai, magar ik sawaal reh gaya.. ]kadam dagmagaye najaane kaha tak khuda jaane jaayen fasaane kaha tak bhatakte rahe raah me apne dil ki diya saath dilne na jaane kaha tak Kaafiya dohraaya kyuN gaya hai? Aap se siikha so puuch rahaa huuN. Be-adabi ki muafi chahta huuN. Shab-ba-khair, Naadaan |
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aa ke patthar to mere sahan me.n do-chaar gire jitane us pe.D ke phal the pas-e-diivaar gire [sahan = courtyard; pas-e-diivaar = other side of the wall] aisii dahashat thii fazaao.n me.n khule paanii kii aa.Nkh jhapakii bhii nahii.n haath se patavaar gire mujhe giranaa hai to mai.n apane hii qadamo.n me.n giruu.N jis tarah saayaa-e-diivaar pe diivaar gire [saayaa-e-diivaar = wall's shadow] tiiragii chho.D gaye din me.n ujaale ke Khutuut ye sitaare mere ghar TuuT ke bekaar gire [tiiragii = darkness; Khutuut = letters] dekh kar apane dar-o-baam laraz uThataa huu.N mere ham_saaye me.n jab bhii ko_ii diivaar gire [dar-o-baam = walls and roofs; laraz = tremble] [ham_saaye = neighbourhood] vaqt kii Dor Khudaa jaane kahaa.N se TuuTe kis gha.Dii sar pe ye laTakii hu_ii talvaar gire [Dor = string] ham se Takaraa ga_ii Khud ba.Dh ke andhere kii chaTTaan ham sambhal_kar jo bahut chalate the naachaar gire haath aayaa nahii.n kuchh raat kii dal_dal ke sivaa haaye kis mo.D pe Khvaabo.n ke parastaar gire kyaa kahuu.N diidaa-e-tar ye to meraa cheharaa hai sang kaT jaate hai.n baarish kii jahaa.N dhaar gire [diidaa-e-tar = tear filled eyes; sang = stone] dekhate kyo.n ho 'Shakeb' itanii bulandii kii taraf na uThaayaa karo sar ko ki ye dastaar gire [bulandii = height; dastaar = turban] Shakeb Jalali |
Very Nice gazal ; wish you all the best for bright future
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