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Madhu 14 21st August 2015 10:32 AM

teri bateiN......
 
namaskaar dostoN.......
fir se ek baar dil ke kuch khyaal pesh kar rahi hoon...
aap sab ki rai ka intzaar rahega..........
teri gulaab ki khushboo si mahakti bateiN
chaman ke phool par titli si hain sajti bateiN..

Meri udasiyaaN gamgeen iNhe karti haiN
meri khushi me udti aur chahakti bateiN

Jo dooriyaN banayeiN dil ko kabhi deewana.
Lage yun wasl ki chahat me tadapti bateiN

bina piye he maiN madhosh huyi jati hooN
Nasha sharaab ka ye teri bahakti bataeiN

Mujhi se roothti aur mujhko manati bhi haiN
madhu ke jaisi haiN bachchoN si machalti bateiN....



aadeil 21st August 2015 10:46 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Madhu 14 (Post 485254)
namaskaar dostoN.......
fir se ek baar dil ke kuch khyaal pesh kar rahi hoon...
aap sab ki rai ka intzaar rahega..........

Ye dooriyaN kabhi dil ko jo kare bekabu..
lage yuN wasl ki chahat me tadapti bateiN

bina piye he maiN madhosh huyi jati hooN
lage sharaab si ye teri bahakti bataeiN



waaah waaah waaah.....
bahot khub alfaazo.n se saji hai ye rachna, Madhuji...
dheroN daad hamaari jaanib se aapki iis kaavish ke liye.....

sameer'shaad' 21st August 2015 11:02 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Madhu 14 (Post 485254)
namaskaar dostoN.......
fir se ek baar dil ke kuch khyaal pesh kar rahi hoon...
aap sab ki rai ka intzaar rahega..........
teri gulaab ki khushboo si mahakti bateiN
chaman ke phool par titli si vo sajti bateiN..

zara ho gam to bateiN bhi hoN pareshaN jaise
meri khushi me fir udti vo chahakti bateiN

Ye dooriyaN kabhi dil ko jo kare bekabu..
lage yuN wasl ki chahat me tadapti bateiN

bina piye he maiN madhosh huyi jati hooN
lage sharaab si ye teri bahakti bataeiN

jo roothti haiN gar fir khud hee manati bhi haiN
madhu ke jaisi haiN bachchoN si machalti bateiN....




Madhu ji sabse pahle to main aapke is athak prayaas ki saraahnaa karta hoon.....

aap nirantar apne kalam ke jaadu se bazm ki roshnii me izaafaa kartii aayee hain aur is baar bhi aapne wahi kiya hai....

Agar aapki ghazal ki baat karun to na jaane kyon (merii niji raay ) mujhe aisaa lag rahaa hai ke is baar is ghazal me wo baat nahi nazar aa rahii hai jiske liye aapkii tahreer mash'hoor hai.... main mahaz khayaal aur lafzon ki bunaai ki baat kar raha hoon.... technically kuch point out nahi kar raha hoon....

ummeed hai meri baaten aapko nagawaaraa saabit nahi hongee aur aap isse bhi acchaa likhne ka prayaas kartee rahengee.....

khush rahiye.... likhtii rahiye

Shaad......

Qasid 21st August 2015 05:57 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Madhu 14 (Post 485254)
namaskaar dostoN.......
fir se ek baar dil ke kuch khyaal pesh kar rahi hoon...
aap sab ki rai ka intzaar rahega..........
teri gulaab ki khushboo si mahakti bateiN
chaman ke phool par titli si vo sajti bateiN..

zara ho gam to bateiN bhi hoN pareshaN jaise
meri khushi me fir udti vo chahakti bateiN

Ye dooriyaN kabhi dil ko jo kare bekabu..
lage yuN wasl ki chahat me tadapti bateiN

bina piye he maiN madhosh huyi jati hooN
lage sharaab si ye teri bahakti bataeiN

jo roothti haiN gar fir khud hee manati bhi haiN
madhu ke jaisi haiN bachchoN si machalti bateiN....



Madhu - ehsaas behad khoob huye hai mere jaanib se aapko mubaarakbaad. Shaad bhai ki bhi baaton par gaur kiya hai maine aur jaanta hoon ki vo aapki is rachnaa ko aapki likhi hui aur rachnaaon ke aankalan mein tol rahe hai....aap yunhi aacha achaa likhti rahiye aur bazm ko roshan rakhiYe

trialbyfire 21st August 2015 06:23 PM

Madhu di, I always like whatever you write and liked it this time as well. I will request you to write more often as I love reading you :-)...yeh sher bahaut achha laga :-)

Ye dooriyaN kabhi dil ko jo kare bekabu..
lage yuN wasl ki chahat me tadapti bateiN

Thank You di share karne ke liye.

fakhri 21st August 2015 08:53 PM

Madhuji bahut achche khayalat se is ghazal ko saNvara hai. Mubarak ho. aap ki her paishkash lajawab hoti hai. Shaadsaheb ka bhi shukria ke woh hamesha achchi raey dete hai.N

ISHK EK IBADAT 21st August 2015 10:01 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Madhu 14 (Post 485254)
namaskaar dostoN.......
fir se ek baar dil ke kuch khyaal pesh kar rahi hoon...
aap sab ki rai ka intzaar rahega..........
teri gulaab ki khushboo si mahakti bateiN
chaman ke phool par titli si vo sajti bateiN..

zara ho gam to bateiN bhi hoN pareshaN jaise
meri khushi me fir udti vo chahakti bateiN

Ye dooriyaN kabhi dil ko jo kare bekabu..
lage yuN wasl ki chahat me tadapti bateiN

bina piye he maiN madhosh huyi jati hooN
lage sharaab si ye teri bahakti bataeiN

jo roothti haiN gar fir khud hee manati bhi haiN
madhu ke jaisi haiN bachchoN si machalti bateiN....



bahut hi sundar rahi aapki yeh rachna
likhti rahen
duaon ke saath

Madhu 14 22nd August 2015 02:41 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by sameer'shaad' (Post 485260)
Madhu ji sabse pahle to main aapke is athak prayaas ki saraahnaa karta hoon.....

aap nirantar apne kalam ke jaadu se bazm ki roshnii me izaafaa kartii aayee hain aur is baar bhi aapne wahi kiya hai....

Agar aapki ghazal ki baat karun to na jaane kyon (merii niji raay ) mujhe aisaa lag rahaa hai ke is baar is ghazal me wo baat nahi nazar aa rahii hai jiske liye aapkii tahreer mash'hoor hai.... main mahaz khayaal aur lafzon ki bunaai ki baat kar raha hoon.... technically kuch point out nahi kar raha hoon....

ummeed hai meri baaten aapko nagawaaraa saabit nahi hongee aur aap isse bhi acchaa likhne ka prayaas kartee rahengee.....

khush rahiye.... likhtii rahiye

Shaad......

Shaad ji aapke atoot sath aur rahbari ka tah e dil se shukriya ada karna chahoongi.....vaise to aap jante hee hain bas koshisheiN kiya karti hoon main...ki kuch dhang ka likh paun par apki baton par gaur kiya to paya ki wakai kahiin na kahiin koshish me kami rah gayi....isiliye dubara isme kuch changes kiye haiN...shayad pahle se kuch behtar ho payi ho....

Aur aapki bateiN kabhi nagwaar nahi lag sakti mujhe...kyun ki vo hamesha improvement ke liye hee kahi jati hain...ek nek irade se....to aap bina hichak apni rai dete rahiyega aage bhi....:)

Salamat rahein.....
Aate rahein..........

bhushan 25th August 2015 08:46 AM

Madhu ji namaste,

Bohot achha laga is peshkash ko padhkar......bohot hi sundar dhang se alfazo me sajaya hai in khoobsurat ehsasoon ko apne.....ek behad khas andaaz hai aapka...kabhi kabhi lagta hai ki aapki gazlen aur kalam agar bina signature bhi padhne ko mile to bhi shayad aapke andaaz e bayan se pata chal jayega ki ye jaroor hamari Madhu ji ka likha hai....dher sari shubhkamnaye..

Aapka apna
Bhushan

Madhu 14 21st September 2015 07:13 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by aadeil (Post 485258)
waaah waaah waaah.....
bahot khub alfaazo.n se saji hai ye rachna, Madhuji...
dheroN daad hamaari jaanib se aapki iis kaavish ke liye.....

Bahut bahut shukriya adeil sahab jo aap meri ghazal par aaye aur mera hausla badhaya.....
Aage bhi sath dete rahiyega...

sunita thakur 23rd September 2015 10:32 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Madhu 14 (Post 485254)
namaskaar dostoN.......
fir se ek baar dil ke kuch khyaal pesh kar rahi hoon...
aap sab ki rai ka intzaar rahega..........
teri gulaab ki khushboo si mahakti bateiN
chaman ke phool par titli si hain sajti bateiN..

Meri udasiyaaN gamgeen iNhe karti haiN
meri khushi me udti aur chahakti bateiN

Jo dooriyaN banayeiN dil ko kabhi deewana.
Lage yun wasl ki chahat me tadapti bateiN

bina piye he maiN madhosh huyi jati hooN
Nasha sharaab ka ye teri bahakti bataeiN

Mujhi se roothti aur mujhko manati bhi haiN
madhu ke jaisi haiN bachchoN si machalti bateiN....




Madhu Bala.............khoobsrat ehsaas...hame accha lga aapko aik baar phir padna...yu hi likhti rho...khush rho.

god bless u

Madhu 14 24th October 2015 02:40 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by mast (Post 485322)
Madhu - ehsaas behad khoob huye hai mere jaanib se aapko mubaarakbaad. Shaad bhai ki bhi baaton par gaur kiya hai maine aur jaanta hoon ki vo aapki is rachnaa ko aapki likhi hui aur rachnaaon ke aankalan mein tol rahe hai....aap yunhi aacha achaa likhti rahiye aur bazm ko roshan rakhiYe

shukriya mast sahab....ehsaas aapko pasand aaye khushi huyi mujhe....
Shaad ji ki baat bilkul sahi hai...kuch changes bhi kiye the maine..ummeed hai aapko bhi pasand aaye honge.......koshish karoongi agli baar kuch behtar likh sakoon.....

Duaon me yaad rakhiyega...

Salamat rahein...

Madhu 14 24th November 2015 11:40 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Sweet_Rain (Post 485330)
Madhu di, I always like whatever you write and liked it this time as well. I will request you to write more often as I love reading you :-)...yeh sher bahaut achha laga :-)

Ye dooriyaN kabhi dil ko jo kare bekabu..
lage yuN wasl ki chahat me tadapti bateiN

Thank You di share karne ke liye.

thank you for your lovely comments jiya...
achcha lagta hai sunkar ki tumhe meri poetry pasand aati hai....
hame bhi aapko padhna pasand hai.. hamse apne thughts share karti raha karo..'
aati raha karo...:)

takecare..
madhu,

Madhu 14 13th December 2015 12:47 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by fakhri (Post 485334)
Madhuji bahut achche khayalat se is ghazal ko saNvara hai. Mubarak ho. aap ki her paishkash lajawab hoti hai. Shaadsaheb ka bhi shukria ke woh hamesha achchi raey dete hai.N

Aap ne mere likhe ko padha aur saraha..bahut khuahi huyi fakhri ji.....
Aate rahiyega...

Shukriya..

Madhu 14 1st January 2016 01:17 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by ISHK EK IBADAT (Post 485342)
bahut hi sundar rahi aapki yeh rachna
likhti rahen
duaon ke saath

Shukriya ishq ji..............

Aate rahiyega. .........

Regards
madhu

Madhu 14 15th January 2016 11:36 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by bhushan (Post 485446)
Madhu ji namaste,

Bohot achha laga is peshkash ko padhkar......bohot hi sundar dhang se alfazo me sajaya hai in khoobsurat ehsasoon ko apne.....ek behad khas andaaz hai aapka...kabhi kabhi lagta hai ki aapki gazlen aur kalam agar bina signature bhi padhne ko mile to bhi shayad aapke andaaz e bayan se pata chal jayega ki ye jaroor hamari Madhu ji ka likha hai....dher sari shubhkamnaye..

Aapka apna
Bhushan

bhushan sahab ye aapki dariyadili hai jo aap aisa samajhte hain...aur khoobsoorti to padhne walon ki nazro me hoti hai.....

meri khushkismati hai ki aap jaise doston ka sath hai..

behad shukriya aapka..

kafi vyast nazar aa rahe hain aajkal aap..sdc ko intzaar hai apka..
aate raha kariye...

takecare
madhu

Madhu 14 31st January 2016 10:11 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by sunita virender (Post 487150)

Madhu Bala.............khoobsrat ehsaas...hame accha lga aapko aik baar phir padna...yu hi likhti rho...khush rho.

god bless u

Shukriya di......

Aati rahiyega....

aapke sath ki hamesha ummeed karti hun...

Regards
Madhu..


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