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Originally Posted by zarraa
Waah !! Bahaut khoob !! Mohabbat mein khud ko mehboob ke haathon mein supurd kar dene ka jazba badi hi shiddat ke saath bayaan kiya hai !! Bahaut bahaut daad Ananthpak ji !!!
Just a small point, mere limited opinion meiN, yahaan "tera zindaanee hoon" (I am a prisoner) ya "tere zindaan mein hoon" (I am in your prison), might sound more appropriate .... but just my opinion ... any other opinion is most welcome 
sher par phir se daad !!!! |
bohat bohat shukriya Zarraa sahab .....I whole heartedly agree to your opinion sir ....yes your suggestion would add life to my sher ...thanx a lot.....
mureed hoon ,tera zindaanee hoon main
ab chhahe tu jaa.n lele ya zindagi baksh de