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27th September 2002, 08:05 AM

mehak ji
aap kaa is mehfil meiN sawaagat hai..

aap kii ghazal paDhii.. aur maiN mubaarkabaad denaa chaahtaa huuN ke aap ne itnii achchii koshish kii.. zaahir hai ke aap ne duniya e sher o sukhaN meiN abhii abhii qadam rakhaa hai.. is liiye aap se ghuzaarish hai ki aap apnii har ghazal ko "siikhney kii khwaahish" se post kiiyaa kiijiyegaa. bahr kii samajh aaney meiN kayii dafaa der lag jaatii hai .. lekin ye naa mumkin kaam nahiiN..

mere khyaal se sab se aasaan tariikaa hai ke aap kisii mash_hoor e zamaanaa ghazal ko paDh kar us kii bahr par apnii ghazal kahaa kareiN.. kaash mere paas har qism kii bahr kii misaaleiN hotiiN to maiN zarur bataa detaa.. lekin jaisaa mainey kahaa ki aap shuru shuru meiN kisii mash_hoor ghazal par apnii ghazal kaheiN .... jab waqt ho to aisii kisii ghazal kii taraz gungunaatey huey.. puuraa sher na sahii, ek misraa hii kahney kii koshish kiijiyye..

jo ghazal aap ne kahii hai us ke baarey meiN kuchh baateiN...
1.
Pyaar kiya Tumse to Sazaa me Paayi Tanhayee
Toote Dil ki hain Parchchaayi Tanhayee
>...is sher ka bunyaadi khyaal bahut achaa hai.. is sher ke pahley misrey ko paDh kar sochtaa huN ki aap ko ye ghazal is bahr par kahnii chaahiye thii
pyaar kiiyaa tumse to humney sazaa meiN paayii tanhaayii
tere saath guzaarey lamhoN kii parchchayii tanhaayii

I want you to read this sher that i have suggested and try to fix the rest of the ghazal urself....



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