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20th June 2014, 05:07 PM
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Originally Posted by aadeil View Post
Ziddsaab, TUM - TERI ko dhyan meN rakhke misra nahi banaayaa hai, aapke misra-e-uulaa ka 'Mai' pe gaur farmaayaa hai...

Mai bhi ashiq ,nahi hone ka, bharam rakh lunga
Tum bhi kahna, (teri) ?? aadat puraani hai ye

yaa phir..
Mai bhi aashiq ,nahi hone ka, bharam rakh lunga
Tum bhi kahna, (meri) ?? aadat puraani hai ye
Aadil zidd ne second line me jo 'afwaa' word use kiya hai wo frst line ko achchese support kr rahi hai 'aadat' word sher ki intensity khatam kr rahi hai aur meaning bhi change kr rahi hai.

Pehli baat to zidd ki sher matlaa k mood k hisabse sahi nahin lag rahi hai
   
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