shuuruu shuuruu meiN kuch galtiiyaaN huii, par koii baat nahiiN, aisaa aksar hotaa rahe gaa. manoj saahab ne ik sher kii jagah do sher pesh kiye, aur salman bhai ghazal kaa khatmaa karnaa bhool gaye
koii baat nahiiN dostoN, ab shyad thoDa behtar samajh aa gayaa hogaa.
aur haaN, maine takhallus kaa isthemaal nahiiN kiyaa, kyooN kii ghazal mehfil ke naam thii.
here is the complete ghazal --
- Dekho yaaroN dekho, sajaavaT mehfil kii
Har ghaDii rahe gii yeh chaahat mehfil kii
aman
do jaam pee kar jab ladkhadayenge kadam
benaqaab ho jayegi sharafat mehfil ki
manoj saahab
shamma ki jageh dil bhi jale hai yahan
dekh sako to dekho banawat mehfil ki
manoj saahab
Is bazm main hai shareek hazaron Shayar..
ye rind bhi hai shamil, hai inayat mehfil ki..
varinder saahab
Sadiuyn ka safar te karke 'hum' yahaaN paunche
Aisii bhi kia thi humme.....mohabbat mehfil ki
salman shaikh saahab
maafii chahtaa hooN salman saahab, aapke aakhrii sher ko thoDa edit kar diyaa, kyooN kii ghazal kii lambaaii paanch she'roN se zyaadaa nahiiN ho saktii. khair, gar buuraa laggaa ho, to chhoThaa bhai samajh kar maaf kar dii jiye gaa. aur manoj bhai kaa 'latest' pesh kiyaa huaa sher ghazal meiN shaamil nahiiN ho sakaa, kyooN kii lambaaii bahot bhaD gayii hai. maaf kar dii jiye gaa, par unke sher pe nazar zaroor daaliiye gaa:
jawan nazaaron ka khumar dil par chada hai
ban ke kayamat aayi hai yeh raat mehfil ki
ek baat aur dostoN -- aap is 'thread' jab bhii apnaa sher likho ge, to meherbaanii kar ke sabko bataa dii jiye gaa kii kaunse 'number' kaa thaa. only reson for that is so the writer compsing the last sher (Makta) knows that it is time to end the ghazal.
and finally, the lecture comes to an end with the last rule! as much as we all want to comment the compositions of others, please try to keep it low, as it gets confusing for the writer(s).
aur haaN, aglii ghazal kii shuruuvaat maiN nahiiN kar rahaa, jiskaa bhi dil ko, wahii karde. but remember, the first sher of the ghazal consists of two radeef(s).
goodnight