hi -
3rd February 2005, 05:48 PM
Anant shubhkamnaye pulkit.. bahut achchhi pakad hai aapki...bas likhane ki kami thi jo ki aap pryas mein laane lage hain... bahut achchha likha hai aapne... agar yah pahali koshis hai to super duper hai... i am happy ki aap likhe...
aur ha aapki likhi rachana mein kuchh correction kiye hain maine jise aap khud hi dekhiyega aur phir sochiyega ki maine kya correction kiya hai..
Originally posted by Pulkit_gupta
Mere dil me chhupe hain kucch ehsaas,
ankahi ansuni si kuchh baat,
Woh baat kehne main aya hoon...
Uska saanson se mehkana mere tan-man ko,
aankhon aankhon me kar lena hajaaro baat
Uske is andaaz se dil ko naa bachaa paya hoon
Tanhaiyon me zara muskurana,
sochte rehana unki hi har ek baat
Behek jaane se khud ko naa rok payaa hoon
Kaise keh doon dil ki baat unse,
kaise karloon izhaar-e-mohabbat
Badi shiddat se kalam uthhaya lafz chaar hi likh paya hoon...
bas ek baat kahunga ki jab bhi hum kavita ya shayri likhate hain to hamesha koshis kerte hain ki kam shabdo mein apani puri baat kah de... well likhate rahiye..humari shubhkamnaye aapke sath hain...
Akant...
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आहट सी कोइ आये तो समझ लेना कि तुम हो...
AahaT si koi aaye to samajh lena ki tum ho...
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