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Originally Posted by fezan
Dear Diya ,Apko shayri ka shokh hai lekin shairy ke liye Urdu zabaan janna bahot zaroori hai,jaise intezar thi ki jagha kaho intezar tha,sayri ki jagha kaho shayri, then only you can become a good shaira. i hope you don,t mind.
Aap meri ghazal ki radeef hain, Qafiya badalta rehta hai radeef nahin badalti....................ek aur sher malaheza farmayen..........
Honton se tu pilaye main peeta rahun sharab
Bujhne na paaye, pyaas ka aisa diya jale..........
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aap ke saath rehete rehete bahat kuchh sikh jayenge ...hume achha laga aapne humare galti bataye ...aage se hum sudharne ki koshish karenge ....
tere intezar main aisa kuchh kar jayenge
jab bhi hume chahoge nazar ke samne paoge ....