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talib · **Welcome BACK -** 12th December 2001, 10:01 PM

Thanx for the COMEBACK...

I am writing this sher here please find the mistakes and and correct me...also do try to add something to it and make it sparkle a bit more..

Aakhen nahi hai Surkh heena ka rang lag gaya
Lagta hai meri haddiyon ko zung lag gaya
karta tha kal talak jo marne maarne ki baat
uss rustam-e-hind ko rog-e-palang lag gaya.

Ta Gaur tumhara

Talib

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talib Registered User Offline Posts: 775 Join Date: Aug 2001 Location: Dubai, UAE Rep Power: 29	Welcome BACK - 12th December 2001, 10:01 PM Thanx for the COMEBACK... I am writing this sher here please find the mistakes and and correct me...also do try to add something to it and make it sparkle a bit more.. Aakhen nahi hai Surkh heena ka rang lag gaya Lagta hai meri haddiyon ko zung lag gaya karta tha kal talak jo marne maarne ki baat uss rustam-e-hind ko rog-e-palang lag gaya. Ta Gaur tumhara Talib Ta- Gor Tumhara Talib.