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2nd February 2010, 09:57 PM
kaise rang badla i's tasveer ka…? mehfil-e-dard ko mera salaam…! ek nayee koshish le kar bazm se mukhatib hooN, umm’eed hai ki aap ko meri yeh adna si kavish pasand aayegi….khamiyoN ki gunjaish hamesha rehti hai….dekhiyega aur mile to bataiyega….aap ki rae ka muntzir….. x-x-x-x-x-x-x-x-x-x-x-x-x-x-x-x-x-x-x-x-x-x-x-x-x-x-x-x-x-x ishq ka hai dagh maathe, Kya kahuN taqdeer ka…? zrra-zrra puchhe, kaise rang badla i's tasveer ka…? ukhadi-ukhadi har shae lage, ghamshuda sara jahaN…! chaah na rahi koi, kehna kya mayoosi-e-aalam geer* ka…? sham dhale aate haiN ashq, palkoN ko meri dhundate… tham_ta hi nahi ye karvaaN, teri yaadoN ki zanjeer ka….! qismat meiN likhe honge jisne, nagme ye mere dard ke… aaj bhi karta hooN maiN sajda u's kalam ki sareer* ka…. suna tha ishq ko yahaN khuda bhi kehte haiN dosto….! weham tha mera ya hoga mugaalta* meri taabeer* ka….! umm'eed nahi baqi hai koi, phir bhi agar tu mil jaaye… mar hi jaye 'masttt...' ye, dekh rang apni taqdeer ka….!!! x-x-x-x-x-x-x-x-x-x-x-x-x-x-x-x-x-x-x-x-x-x-x-x-x-x-x-x-x-x mayoosi-e-aalam geer: sadness spread world wide sareer: scratching sound produced by a pen while writing mugaalta: confusion taabeer: interpretation Uss Rizk Se Tau Maut Bhali Jis Rizk Se Aatee Ho Tere Parwaaz MeiN Kotaahi.... vikramjethi@gmail.com |
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2nd February 2010, 10:05 PM
Vikram bhaa'ii:
namaste! aaj aapka janamdin haii ... sab se pehle tou aapko bahot bahot mubaaraQbaad... baRii hi Khoob Ghazal kahii hay aapne... umdaah soch haii aapki...! aur Ghazal ke maQ'te ke baare meN maiN kyaa kahuuN dil jeet liyaa bhaa'ii... mujhe be-Had pasaNd aayaa Ghazal ka maQ'taa... liKhate rahe.n aage bhee! dil se DheroN saarii daad aur duaaeN... KhuSh raheN... apnaa Khayaal raKheN duaaoN ke saath ijaazat aapka ~ Dhaval  kaaSh dunyaa meN ye"kaaSh"nah hotaa zinda ho kar bhii maiN laaSh nah hotaa *~*Dhaval*~*....Ek ehsaas... |
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2nd February 2010, 10:08 PM
Bahut Khub Vikram ji....SuperB Sher....
sham dhale aate haiN ashq, palkoN ko meri dhundate… tham_ta hi nahi ye karvaaN, teri yaadoN ki zanjeer ka….! dil se daad hazir hai....yuhi likhte rahen... apna khayal rakhen... duaaon ke saath... |
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2nd February 2010, 10:24 PM
bhai!!!
aapne intizaar to karwaya lekin vo kehte hai na, intizaar ka fal meetha hota hai.......bahut hi umda, puri kavita ek hi khayal se labrez hai......aake shabdo se banti tasveer saaf dikhayi deti hai mujhe....... reps to de nahi paa raha hu.....abhi filhaal mere dil se hi kaam chalaiye....shabd kewal shabd nahi hote bhai....dil ki awaaz sitaro ka rukh bhi badal sakti hai........ aapke kalam ki khoobsurti hamesha barkarar rahe yehi duaa hai Aandhiya Gam Ki Chalegi To Sawar Jaoonga Me Mai To Dariya Hu Samoondar Me Utar Jaaonga Me Mujhe Suli Pe Chadane Ki Jaroorat Kya Hai Logo Mere Haato Se Kalam Cheen Lo Yuhi Mar Jaoonga Me (When i received You in my heart everything changed for me) |
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3rd February 2010, 08:32 AM
Vikram ji namaskaar
 aapki poetry hune bahut acchi lagi, sabhi ashyaar tareef ke kabil haiN, par yeh 2 ashiyaar khaas acche lage : ishq ka hai dagh maathe, Kya kahuN taqdeer ka…? zrra-zrra puchhe, kaise rang badla i's tasveer ka…? sham dhale aate haiN ashq, palkoN ko meri dhundate… tham_ta hi nahi ye karvaaN, teri yaadoN ki zanjeer ka….! bahut khoob likha hai aapne, keep it up. duao.n ke saath  ............Sunita Virender Singh............"पोंछ कर अश्क अपनी आँखों से मुस्कुअराओ तो कोई बात बने, सर झुकाने से कुछ नहीं होगा सर उठाओ तो कोई बात बने" |
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3rd February 2010, 06:13 PM
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kaise hain aap...? aapka bahut bahut shukriya.....meri koshish ko pasand karne ke liye...... yuN hi saath dete raheN..... aap bhi apna khayal rakheN.... aapka..... vikram..... Uss Rizk Se Tau Maut Bhali Jis Rizk Se Aatee Ho Tere Parwaaz MeiN Kotaahi.... vikramjethi@gmail.com |
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4th February 2010, 05:30 PM
sham dhale aate haiN ashq, palkoN ko meri dhundate…
tham_ta hi nahi ye karvaaN, teri yaadoN ki zanjeer ka….! very nice vikram ji, this one is just superb...... |
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4th February 2010, 06:57 PM
Bohat khooob Vikram saheb...........kya khoob kaha hain yeh sher.
suna tha ishq ko yahaN khuda bhi kehte haiN dosto….! weham tha mera ya hoga mugaalta* meri taabeer* ka….! Par tujhe bevafa bhi kehna achcha nahi lagta... Mob.: +91 9967511713
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4th February 2010, 07:42 PM
Vikram ji,
Namastee, Bahut khoob !!!! har sher ba khoobi se pesh kiya hain aapne ..ghazal umda rahii... likhte rahye duaon ke saath mandeep ~ Mandeep Kaur ~ |
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5th February 2010, 05:16 AM
Bahut hi khoobsoorat likhia hai tusiN Vikram ji........sachmuch tusiN shabdaN de jadugar hoN.......eddaN hi likhde raho.....apna khayal rakhna
 Mittar Pyare Nu Haal Murida Da Kehna Tudh Bin Rog RajjaiN Da Odhan Naag Niwasa De Rehna Sool Surahi Khanjjar Pyala Bing KasaiaaN Da Sehna Yaarde Da Saanu Satthar Changa Bhatth Kheriyan Da Rehna ----------------------------------------------------- You never know how strong you are Until being strong is the only choice you have ----------------------------------------------------- |
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6th February 2010, 10:07 AM
ukhadi-ukhadi har shae lage, ghamshuda sara jahaN…!
chaah na rahi koi, kehna kya mayoosi-e-aalam geer* ka…? sham dhale aate haiN ashq, palkoN ko meri dhundate… tham_ta hi nahi ye karvaaN, teri yaadoN ki zanjeer ka….! qismat meiN likhe honge jisne, nagme ye mere dard ke… aaj bhi karta hooN maiN sajda u's kalam ki sareer* ka…. BOHAT KHOOBSURAT KALAAM HAI VIKRAM JI, Aapki mehnat saaf nazar aa rahi hai,sabhi ashaar lajawaab haiN per yeh teen zyada acche lage mujhe...yuhi likhte rahiye DuaoN ke saath Aap ki dost........ ....Zainy.... 1)PLEASE SELECT THE "SUPER GHAZAL OF THE YEAR".. |
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6th February 2010, 01:54 PM
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6th February 2010, 05:28 PM
Dear Vikram,,
Kafi dinooN baad tumhe phad rahaa hooN, Aur yeh improvement, yeh nikhaar dekh kar hairaani k saath boht ziyaada khushi hui k tum ab pehle se kahiN ziyaada achaa likne lagay hoo...... Meri dua hai k tum is se aur ziyaada taraqqi karoo... Likhtay raho,, Faqat,,, SaaHibo! hum Ghazal ki Soorat meiN zaKhm-e-dil aashkaar karte haiN! tum udh`ar ihtimaam-e-daar karo ham idh`ar Zikr-e-yaar karte haiN...(Sarwar Raz) |
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7th February 2010, 04:38 PM
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 maiN aapki baat ba-khubi samjh gaya hoon.....aur aage us'e aml mein lane ki purzor koshish rahegi......aur haaN aapka dil aisi karodoN reps se achha hai....mujhe to wahi theek hai....reps aapbaqi sab ko diya karo......mujhe to sneh aur aashirwad chahiye......aur sitaroN ka rukh bhi kabhi na klabhi mod hi denge milkar....aap ba's khush raha kijiye...... aapka apna...... vikram... Uss Rizk Se Tau Maut Bhali Jis Rizk Se Aatee Ho Tere Parwaaz MeiN Kotaahi.... vikramjethi@gmail.com |
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kaisi haiN aap...? aapko pasand aaya mera likha, meri khush kismati hai..... aapka tahe dil se shukarguzaar hooN..... aapaka apna, vikram... Uss Rizk Se Tau Maut Bhali Jis Rizk Se Aatee Ho Tere Parwaaz MeiN Kotaahi.... vikramjethi@gmail.com |
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kaise hain aap...? mujhe jaan kar achha laga ki aapko mera kalaam pasand aaya... aapki daad tahe dil se qubuul hai janaab..... aapka bahut bahut shukriya..... aapka dost, vikram... Uss Rizk Se Tau Maut Bhali Jis Rizk Se Aatee Ho Tere Parwaaz MeiN Kotaahi.... vikramjethi@gmail.com |
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7th February 2010, 07:08 PM
sham dhale aate haiN ashq, palkoN ko meri dhundate…
tham_ta hi nahi ye karvaaN, teri yaadoN ki zanjeer ka….! bhut khoobsurat ghazal VIkarm jee saare hi sher asardaar jisne sabse ziyada attract kia wo sher yahan likh rha hun, daad hazir hai qubool karein aslam behta dariya hu.n mujhy haath se choo kar daikho |
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bohat bohat shukriya thoda..... tusi vi apna khayal rakhna.... Uss Rizk Se Tau Maut Bhali Jis Rizk Se Aatee Ho Tere Parwaaz MeiN Kotaahi.... vikramjethi@gmail.com |
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meri koshish ko padhne aur pasand karne ka bahut bahut shukriya.... Uss Rizk Se Tau Maut Bhali Jis Rizk Se Aatee Ho Tere Parwaaz MeiN Kotaahi.... vikramjethi@gmail.com |
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10th February 2010, 10:40 PM
ismat meiN likhe honge jisne, nagme ye mere dard ke…
aaj bhi karta hooN maiN sajda u's kalam ki sareer* ka…. suna tha ishq ko yahaN khuda bhi kehte haiN dosto….! weham tha mera ya hoga mugaalta* meri taabeer* ka….! waaaaaaaaaaah vikram ji kamal ke sher likhe hai..bahut badhiya. bahut umda. badhayi.  ~*~*~* उदास पथिक ~*~*~*दिल की चीखे जब बढ जाती हैं और जज्बातो की आंधी रोके नही रुकती.. तो लिख लेती हू.... |
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Vishal Sharma -
10th February 2010, 10:56 PM
Khudkushi se Phle
Uf ye bedard Seaahi (ink) , Uf ye Hwa ke Veelaap, Kisko maalum hai ki ess Veelaap ki Raat hogi ki nhi ? Ik njr tere prde ki trf dekh lu , Dubti aankho me phir dekhne ki taaqat hogi ki nhi ? Abhi roshan hai tere shyan - kaksh ke Deeye ( oil lamp) , neele prde se chlakh rhi haiN prchaaeyia Ab talq ... Ajnabbi baaho me hlke se lchaq rhi hongi , tere mahke huye baalo ki ltaaaye ab talq .... Srd hoti raaat meiN buzh rhi LoN (lamp light) ki trh haath failaaye gin rhe hai smma Maut ke bojhal Saaye . Le jaayegeN vo mujh ko apne saaath , Aur chlaa jaauga Abb ki baar tuzhe binaa Btaaye . Ah ye Veenaaash ki kndra , Ah ye Deeye (oil lamp) ke veelaap , teri bewfaai ke baad Umar meri inhi deewaaro me ktti . Aur seh nhi skta , aur yaadeN chuphaa nhi skta... Vo lmhe , vo raaateN jo tere saath thi Ktti . Sochaa Phir kbhi to tum mujhe mill nhi paaogi , Kl se tum kissi se njre nhi chuuraao gi . Soch to rha tha ki teri yaad ke saath reh lu , Pr Rh nhi paayea , ess liye socha Apne Jjbaat Khudkushi Se Phle keh lu.......... Apne Jjbaat Khudkushi se phle keh lu .............  VISHAL SHARMA Ye Aaashiqi bhi Aaankh Meecholi hai mere dosto............ SHARMA |
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Khudkushi se phle :-(VISHAL SHARMA) -
10th February 2010, 10:57 PM
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Uf ye bedard Seaahi (ink) , Uf ye Hwa ke Veelaap, Kisko maalum hai ki ess Veelaap ki Raat hogi ki nhi ? Ik njr tere prde ki trf dekh lu , Dubti aankho me phir dekhne ki taaqat hogi ki nhi ? Abhi roshan hai tere shyan - kaksh ke Deeye ( oil lamp) , neele prde se chlakh rhi haiN prchaaeyia Ab talq ... Ajnabbi baaho me hlke se lchaq rhi hongi , tere mahke huye baalo ki ltaaaye ab talq .... Srd hoti raaat meiN buzh rhi LoN (lamp light) ki trh haath failaaye gin rhe hai smma Maut ke bojhal Saaye . Le jaayegeN vo mujh ko apne saaath , Aur chlaa jaauga Abb ki baar tuzhe binaa Btaaye . Ah ye Veenaaash ki kndra , Ah ye Deeye (oil lamp) ke veelaap , teri bewfaai ke baad Umar meri inhi deewaaro me ktti . Aur seh nhi skta , aur yaadeN chuphaa nhi skta... Vo lmhe , vo raaateN jo tere saath thi Ktti . Sochaa Phir kbhi to tum mujhe mill nhi paaogi , Kl se tum kissi se njre nhi chuuraao gi . Soch to rha tha ki teri yaad ke saath reh lu , Pr Rh nhi paayea , ess liye socha Apne Jjbaat Khudkushi Se Phle keh lu.......... Apne Jjbaat Khudkushi se phle keh lu ............. VISHAL SHARMA Ye Aaashiqi bhi Aaankh Meecholi hai mere dosto............ SHARMA |
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10th February 2010, 11:14 PM
hello..............
kaise hai aap ? I m well.... maine ek new Kuch likha hai...... pls Read kijiye ga...... byy byyy.... Ye Aaashiqi bhi Aaankh Meecholi hai mere dosto............ SHARMA |
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11th February 2010, 09:22 AM
Aadaab o tasleemaat !
moHteram janab Vikram saHb , appki koshish peRH ker beHad acha laga , sabhi sher apni jaga per umdaa haiN . yaqeen maaniye in nageenoN maiN se koi aik Haasil ghazal nikaalna beHad mushkil lag raha hai , likhte rahieN opper waale se duaa hai keh app ki Qalam ko taqat bakhsieN aur appki sooch ko firoGh daiN ... Mujeeb chup rahoN to guneh gaar hoN |
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12th February 2010, 01:06 PM
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Uss Rizk Se Tau Maut Bhali Jis Rizk Se Aatee Ho Tere Parwaaz MeiN Kotaahi.... vikramjethi@gmail.com |
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13th February 2010, 05:14 PM
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13th February 2010, 05:46 PM
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maiN ekdum badhiya hooN aur umm'eed karta hooN ki aap bhi achhe se honge..... aapki naye koshish padhi hai maine....maiN yeh kehna chahta hooN ki maine aapko jo links diye the mujhe bilkul nahi lagta ki aapne unhe follow kiya hoga....aap kuch bhi likh sakte haiN, kaisa bhi likh sakte haiN koi rok nahi kisi par...lekin agar aap chahte haiN ki aap ke likhe ko dusare padheN aur pasand kareN to aapko abhi bahut mehnat ki zaroorat hai...aapki kavita ka na to koi matlab hai, na koi ehsaasoN ki byaani hai aur roman script meiN to gazab ki problem hai.....bhai mehnat to karni hi padegi.....aur haaN ek baat aur.....shayari ka dusara naam tehzeeb ya tameez bhi hai....bina tehzeeb ke koi kitna bhi achha likhe lekin achha kavi, poet ya shayar nahi ban sakta.....aapne apne thread par jo bhi likha hai senior members ke liye wo behad galat hai....aap is baat ko kisi bhi tarha justify nahi kar sakte.....aap chaheN to yeh likhne par mujhe bhi bhala bura keh sakte haiN....lekin dost sachai to yeh hi hai.....mujhe achha laga tha aapka profile padh kar....lekin mujhe waisa Kuch abhi tak to nazar nahi aaya.....mujhe laga tha ki aap waqai meiN ek art ko seekhne ke liye aaye haiN.....agar aisa hai to ek rae doonga.....in faltu baatoN ko chhod shayari ke mayne seekhiye, achhe shayaroN ko padhiye, dekhiye wo Kya kehte haiN, kyu kehte haiN aur kis andaaz meiN kehte haiN....tabhi kuch baat banegi.....aur kisi bhi cheez meiN jaldbaazi karne se nuksaan hi hota hai....dheere dheere sab seekha ja sakta hai.....meri dua aapke saath hai....aur umm'eed hai ki aap aainda apni tameez aur tehzeeb ki had meiN reh kar hi kisi se baat karenge....baaki saheb marzi to aap hi ki hai.... Khuda hafiz...... Vikram Uss Rizk Se Tau Maut Bhali Jis Rizk Se Aatee Ho Tere Parwaaz MeiN Kotaahi.... vikramjethi@gmail.com |
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14th February 2010, 01:16 PM
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daad ke liye manmoon hooN, bahut bahut shukriya aapka..... Uss Rizk Se Tau Maut Bhali Jis Rizk Se Aatee Ho Tere Parwaaz MeiN Kotaahi.... vikramjethi@gmail.com |
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14th February 2010, 01:24 PM
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janab kaise mijaaz haiN aapke....kahaN gayab rahe itne din.... bazm ko benoor mat kiya kijiye....aate raha kareN.....achha lagta hai.... tareef ke liye aapka tahe dil se shukrguzaar hooN...bahut bahut shukriya janaab.... duaoN ke saath ijaazat... vikram... Uss Rizk Se Tau Maut Bhali Jis Rizk Se Aatee Ho Tere Parwaaz MeiN Kotaahi.... vikramjethi@gmail.com |
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