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Love ~~Kis tarah likhu~~ - 30th June 2003, 05:48 PM
Milte nahi alfaaz kis tarah likhu
Gam aaj bhi hai aas paas kis tarah likhu

Kalpana ke badlo mai chahti hoo oodna
Par par nahi hai mere paas kis tarah likhu

Rahta tha ban ke dharkan voh shaks jiss dil main
Voh dil nahi hai mere paas kis tarah likhu

Jiski wafa ke charche karti thee dino raat
Uss se nahi wafa ki aas kis tarah likhu

Voh aaya ban ke baadal barsa nahi magar
Hoton mai mere ooski pyaas kis tarah likhu

Milte nahi alfaaz kis tarah likhu
Gam aaj bhi hai aas paas kis tarah likhu...

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HI - 1st July 2003, 09:43 AM
JIS TARAH SABHI LIKHTE HAIN US TARAH LIKHO
YOU MOTI
WHA PAR KAM KHAANA
AURO KE LIYE BHI KUCH CHOOD DENA OK
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nice written - 1st July 2003, 11:35 AM
Rimjhim ji

bahoot achchhi gazal likhi hai aapne. mujhe pasand aayi.ek bebasi si bani huie hai aapki gazal mein. esi tarah likhati rahiye aur gungunaati rahiye.



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Oye - 1st July 2003, 06:52 PM
Mohit main moti nahi hoo samjhe bataya to tha weight 45 kg ab agar India mai isse bhi moti kahte ho to i don't know .
hana hana don't woryr kam khaoongi main, samjhe. I will mail you soon. ok.
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Hi - 1st July 2003, 06:53 PM
Shukriyaa akant ji tareef ka...

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bahot ache - 1st July 2003, 07:34 PM
Hi rimzim bahot kutch likh diya. bahot ache.

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Hi - 1st July 2003, 07:52 PM
Mita ji,

Shukriyaa tareef ke liye :-).

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HI - 1st July 2003, 08:31 PM
RIMJHIM TUMNE APNA WEIGHT 46 KG BTAAYA THA
1 KG KAM KAISE HO GAYA
ACCIDENT KI VJAH SE YA ELSE......
   
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HI - 1st July 2003, 08:39 PM
RIMJHIM TUMAHRI MAIL KA PADAL AA RAHI HAI
ABHI TAK POHNCHI NAHI
   
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2nd July 2003, 10:31 AM
hi rimjhim

bahut pyara likha hai


i really appriciate the way you use the simple words in the beautiful rythm


expecting more from you


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4th July 2003, 03:30 AM
hi rim kasi ho bahut hi pyari gazal likhi hai dil ko shu gayi ismain bahut drad chupa lagata hai ok chalti hoon baad main milte hain ase hi likhte rehna
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Hi - 8th July 2003, 07:53 PM
Hi rishiji,

Thanx for appreciating my poem, waise kuch koshish ki likhne ki, i am glad that u liked it, bahaut khushi hui .

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Hi punnu ji,

shukriyaa tarefe ke liye, aapko pasand ayai huem khushi hui .

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9th July 2003, 02:09 AM
hi madam itni dino baad reply kiya where are u now a days
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9th July 2003, 01:03 PM
hi
aap itna acha likh kar kehti hai kaise likhon,
yeh bhi tarif-e-kabil hai
u have really written very gracefully

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Re: ~~Kis tarah likhu~~ - 9th July 2003, 06:49 PM
hi rimjhim ji
dil ko choone wali gazal likhi hai aapne.bahoot khoob
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Thanx - 9th July 2003, 08:33 PM
Punnu ji,
Huma pni counsin ki wedding mai gaye hue the bas kal rata ko hi flight aayi hai to ab hum is site par aa gaye hain, aap sabke comments pare to bahaut acacha laga. Aise hi likhte rahiye .

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Shukriyaa surbhi ji,

Aapne tareef itni kardi ki samajh nahi aa raha hai ki thankyou kaise kahoon, shukriyaa ek baar phir se .

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Shukriyaa manoj ji,

Waise aap naye hai kya iss site par pehle apako kabhi nahi dekha. Shukriyaa tareef ka, thanks for apprecaitng my poem .

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hi - 10th July 2003, 01:17 PM
hi rimjhim,
aapne bahut sahi likha hai.. jo gahraayee aapki gazhal(almost) mein hai.. usko bus feel kiya ja sakta hai..

achcha likhti hain
likhti rahiyega

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Hi - 10th July 2003, 09:06 PM
Prem ji,

Shukriyaa aapki taree ka. Aapko hamari likhi hui gazhal pasand aayi hume bahaut khushi hui. Par aap apne naam ke aage tanha kyon lagate hain, kya hum jaan sakte hain???

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HI - 16th July 2003, 10:20 AM
aaj unhone yeh ek naya dastoor nikaala ki
"Tanha" se woh poochte hain ki woh tanha kyun hai

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16th July 2003, 04:10 PM
Very good!!
Milte nahi alfaaz kis tarah likhu
Gam aaj bhi hai aas paas kis tarah likhu...

Bas likte rahiyega!!
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Hi - 16th July 2003, 04:33 PM
Shukriyaa Roumi ji tarefe ke liye. Agar aap sabka uhin saath raha to beshak hum likhte rahenge :-).

Thanx once again for appreciating this post.

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Thanx Prem ji,

Ek baar phir aap hamare page par aaya, aapne hamare page ko apna keemti waqt diya :-). Theke hai hum nahi puchenge ki aap apne naam ke aage tanha kyon lagte hain, i am sorry if u mind my words.

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17th July 2003, 12:55 PM
hi rimjhim,
yaar itna senti maarne ki jaroorat nahin hai.. apne paas kuch hai to sirf time hai.. aur kuch nahin.. koyee nahin.. isliye abhi to filhaal mera time itna keemati nahin ki aap itna shukriya adaa kare..

aapki yeh rachna sahi mein dil ko chhoone waali hai..
aur likhiyega

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ok - 17th July 2003, 04:56 PM
Theke hai nahi maarti hoo, thanx bhi nahi kahoongi kyonki aap hi ne to kaha ki aapke paas time hi time hai, ok!!!

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17th July 2003, 05:11 PM
Rimjhim ..

Likhne ke mamle me din b Din tum mahir hoti ja rahi ho meri nigaah nahi padi thi isss khubsorat ghazal par Ab sochta huN aksar meri NazreiN achhi chizeiN nahi pahchaan pati haiN .. KHair der aaye durust aaye .. Abhi kah raha huN ki bahut masom ghazal likhi hai ..


Milte nahi alfaaz kis tarah likhu
Gam aaj bhi hai aas paas kis tarah likhu

Kalpana ke badlo mai chahti hoo oodna
Par par nahi hai mere paas kis tarah likhu

Rahta tha ban ke dharkan voh shaks jiss dil main
Voh dil nahi hai mere paas kis tarah likhu

Jiski wafa ke charche karti thee dino raat
Uss se nahi wafa ki aas kis tarah likhu

Voh aaya ban ke baadal barsa nahi magar
Hoton mai mere ooski pyaas kis tarah likhu

Milte nahi alfaaz kis tarah likhu
Gam aaj bhi hai aas paas kis tarah likhu...

Kisi ek ashaar ki baat nahi hai pori ghzal Chahat bhare dil ki dastaaN bayaN kar rahi hai ..

Dua hai meri issi tarah likhti raho .. Kabhi kisi gum ka saya na aayee tum par .. Upar wala tumhe har buri nazar se bachaye rakhe ..

Apna khyaal rakho ..

kuch tujh ko khabar hai ham kya kya
e shorish e dauraaN bhuul gaye ...

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HI - 17th July 2003, 05:24 PM
Khitiz ji aapka reply mil gaya samjhiye abhi jaake meri gazhal poori hui hai. Waise main aapse bahaut naraaz hoo yeh kya bata hui naa koi PM naa koi email, humne to aapko Pm bhi kiya tha...

Bahaut busy ho kya aap.

Waise shukriyaa tarefe ka, bahaut bahaut shukriyaa. Bas hum chahte hain ki jab bhi kuch likhen to oos par aapke comments hamesha pana chahenge :-).

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