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Dil ko uljhan mein daalne wale
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Sad Dil ko uljhan mein daalne wale - 4th September 2002, 05:01 PM

Ahl-e-Mehfil Mera salaam qubool kareiN

Bada hausla karke apni ye nayee koshish aapki nazar kar raha hoon. Ummeed karta hooN ke aap ise tanqeed o tabsire ke qabil samjhenge.
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Dil ko uljhan mein daalne wale
Ye masaaiel haiN taalne wale

Apne dil se mita sakega kya?
Mujhko dil se nikaalne wale

Kya darenge tire sitam se ab
Dil mein zakhmoN ko paalne wale

Dekh dil se nikaal ker nafrat
Dushmani yuuN nikaalne wale

Dil ki daulat bhi kuch jamaa kar le
Seem-o-zar ko sambhalne wale

Aik paigham de khushi ka bhi
Khat mujhe gham ke daalne wale

Har jagah dhoondta hai kyuuN 'Sahir'
Gham ko khushiyoN meiN dhaalne wale


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Thumbs up Bohut Khoob Sahir - 5th September 2002, 11:44 PM

Bhai Sahir

Sabse pehle to aapka bohut shukriya yeh ghazal yahan post karne ke liye. Jaisa ke maine aapse kaha tha ke ye dostoN ki bazm hai yahaaN aane ke liye aapko hosla jamaa karne ki koi zaroorat nahiN padti. Appki ghazal yahaN dekh kar bada achcha laga.

Aapki ghazal mayari aur umda hai. Achche khayal badi khoobsoorti se sheroN mein piroye hue. Chand ashaar ka khaas zikr karoonga jo mujhe mere khayalon ke qareeb lage.


Apne dil se mita sakega kya?
Mujhko dil se nikaalne wale
wah

Kya darenge tire sitam se ab
Dil mein zakhmoN ko paalne wale
bohut khoob kaha

Dekh dil se nikaal ker nafrat
Dushmani yuuN nikaalne wale
KOI DIL SE NAFRAT NIKAAL PHENKE TO DUSMANI KAHAN REH JAYEGI. UMDA.

Dil ki daulat bhi kuch jamaa kar le
Seem-o-zar ko sambhalne wale
aaj ke insaan ko is se kuch dil meiN utaarne ki zaroorat hai.

Aik paigham de khushi ka bhi
Khat mujhe gham ke daalne wale
wah wah


likhte rahiye aur yahaN aate rahiye.

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Thumbs up 6th September 2002, 01:00 AM

adaab sahir ji........ek bahut achchi ghazal likhne par aapko mubarakhbaad kehna chahte hain....praveen ji ne humse aapka zikr kiya tha...kaha k aapke kalaam bahut achche hain lekin bas aap unhe post karne se jijhakte hain......aapka pehle kalaam padhke to hum kahenge ki aap zaroor apni aur ghazlon se hum sab ka parichaiy karvayiyegaa.....achcha baaki baatein alag, baat karte hain aapki is ghazal ke barein mein.....

Dil ko uljhan mein daalne wale
Ye masaaiel haiN taalne wale
....wah matla bahut khoob hain....achchi salaah hain...don't worry be happy!...

Kya darenge tire sitam se ab
Dil mein zakhmoN ko paalne wale
....wah wah....kya baat hain!

Dekh dil se nikaal ker nafrat
Dushmani yuuN nikaalne wale
....khoob...

Dil ki daulat bhi kuch jamaa kar le
Seem-o-zar ko sambhalne wale
....sahi baat hain...wah....

Aik paigham de khushi ka bhi
Khat mujhe gham ke daalne wale
....nice...

Har jagah dhoondta hai kyuuN 'Sahir'
Gham ko khushiyoN meiN dhaalne wale
...very nice....

...aashaa hai ki aapki agli ghazal ka luft hume jald hi milega....tab tak ke liye aapko anamika ka salaam!...k'hafiz....


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woh aaye ghar meiN hamaare KHuda ki kudrat hai
kabhee ham unko, kabhee apane ghar ko dekhte haiN

nazar lage na kaheeN uske dast-o-baazoo ko
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6th September 2002, 02:53 AM

sahir sahab

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bhai sabse pehle to aapka yahaN khair makhdam hai.......duusre aapki ghazal se bohat lutf aNdoz hue......teesre aapse ye guzaarish hai ke aiiNdaa se apne kalaam is bazm meiN be'jhijhak pesh kareiN


ghazal waqa'ii meiN hi badi purasar hai .....mubarakbaad tasleem kijiye......ummiid hai aapke aur kalaam padhne ko mileNgey



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Smile Khushaamadeed! - 6th September 2002, 05:53 PM

Salaam sahir sahab!!!

Aapki ghazal parhi..bahut acchi lagi!!Ye ashaar bahut pasand aaye..

Dil ko uljhan mein daalne wale
Ye masaaiel haiN taalne wale

Apne dil se mita sakega kya?
Mujhko dil se nikaalne wale

Kya darenge tire sitam se ab
Dil mein zakhmoN ko paalne wale

Dekh dil se nikaal ker nafrat
Dushmani yuuN nikaalne wale

Likhtey rahiye!!!

Dua go,
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Re: Bohut Khoob Sahir - 8th September 2002, 01:05 AM

Praveen Sahab

Aapki tareef aur hausla afzaii ka shukriya.
Agar aapne hausla badhya isiliye maiN apni ye kavish yahaN post kar saka.

Aapne ghazal ko pasand kiya aur itni tafseel se uspe apni rae di uska bhi bahut bahut shukriya. Ek baar phir shukriya ke saath.

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Shukriya Anamika Sahiba - 8th September 2002, 01:11 AM

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Aapne jo treef ki aur hausla badhaya uske liye aapka bahut bahut shukriya. Is baare meiN Praveen Sahab ne mujhe kaafi encourage kiya aur guide bhi kiya jiski wajah se apni ghazal maiN yahaN post kar paya. Ummeed karta hoon aage bhi aap aise hi hausla badhyengi.

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Shukriya Janab - 8th September 2002, 01:16 AM

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Apni ghazal par aapke tassuraat paRh kar dil khush ho gaya. Socha nahiN tha maine ke aap is par likhenge. Aapki tareef ka tah-e-dil se shukriya ada karta hooN. Umeed karta hoon aap aage bhi mere liye waqt nikaalte rahenge.
Phir ek baar shukriya ke saath

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Re: Khushaamadeed! - 8th September 2002, 01:22 AM

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Is bazm meiN aapne khushaamdeed kaha uske liye shukriya.

Aur ghazal ko pasand farmaya, us par tareef post ki uske liye bahut bahut shukriya.
Doston ki hosla afzaaii se hi meiN yahan apna kalaam pesh karne ki himmat jutaa paya. Uske baad jis tarah aap sabne hausla afzaii ki hai to chand aur nayee ghazlein pesh karne ki himmat bhi aa gayi hai. umeed hai aap aise hi hausla afzaii karenge.

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aaj pahlii dafaa aap kii ghazal padhney ko milii aur bahut pasand aayii.. chotii bahr meiN aur saadaa zabaan meiN khoob sher kaheiN haiN aapney... aap kii uar ghazaloN kaa bhiii intezaar rahegaa ..

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14th September 2002, 12:02 PM

dear sahir ji,
aapka sher padha..aur bohut achcha laga. bohut achcha likha hai aapne. inspiration mili. isis tarah likhte rahiye...achcha lagta hai.

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9th October 2002, 05:40 AM

sahir ji:

kaise hai? yuun hi yaha se guzar rahe the to aapki ghazal par nazar paDii.

"Apne dil se mita sakega kya?
Mujhko dil se nikaalne wale"

Yeh sher hame behad pasand aaya aur dil ko choo geya is liye bataana zaroori samjha. Maloom hota hai ke likhne waale ne hamari hii kismat chand lafzon mein beyaan kar di.

Aapne pehli baar yaha post karke is mehfil ki raunaq badhaayii......behad khushi huii.

Likhte rahiyega...

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