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22nd December 2003, 05:10 PM
THE WAIT
The moon sitting on its velvet throne
Looks magnificently at its dome
Hey people look there down below
Down there on earth there lives this girl
She has been waiting for her love
Do you listen to her heart beat?
Every beat calling only him
Hoping, that her love would come
‘Been waiting all day and now night
Looking at the road thru the wood
With every trotting sound she would jump
Hoping that this time it would be him
She would rush towards the gate
Hoping that this would be her mate
But then the sound would soon fade away
And so will the innocent smile off her face
She would turn and walk back
Disappointed and very disheartened
Then she would lean over her balcony
Again stare at the road in aspiration
The darkness of the night is torn apart
With the soothing rays of the red sun
The long shadows are passing away
And the hopeful light makes its way
The girl had fallen asleep waiting for him
The birds wake her with their singing
She opens her beautiful eyes and smiles
Then slowly gazes at the morning sky
She walks past the flowers in her garden
The morning dew had brightened them up
The flower blushes with her touch
And lets its fragrance onto her
She then walks to the water fall
Meandering thru the lovely woods
She dips her foot in to the chillness of the river
Feeling cold she shivers and smiles
She sings and dances her way back
Smiling at everything on her way
Everything around her comes to life
Praying that she always smile’s like that
There when she return to her place
She finds someone waiting
She runs and jumps in joy
It is her love, he has come.
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Beautiful. Hope every one's wish comes true. Happy ending! Thanks. Likhte rahiyega aur post bhi karte rahiyega. Take care. God bless you.
*Aapni Parwaaz-e-Takhayyull Hain Zamane Se Juda
Jiss Jagah Koyi Na Pahuncha Wahaan Tak Pahunche
Main Samajhta Huun Harr Dil Mein Khuda Rehta Hain
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23rd December 2003, 10:36 AM
Thanks a lot.
I Being a guy have always thought how does a gal feel about things
So tried to potray that here.
Hope i have done justice to it
thanks fo ur appreciation
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Re: The Wait -
23rd December 2003, 02:18 PM
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Originally posted by Rohin
THE WAIT
The moon sitting on its velvet throne
Looks magnificently at its dome
Hey people look there down below
Down there on earth there lives this girl
She has been waiting for her love
Do you listen to her heart beat?
Every beat calling only him
Hoping, that her love would come
‘Been waiting all day and now night
Looking at the road thru the wood
With every trotting sound she would jump
Hoping that this time it would be him
She would rush towards the gate
Hoping that this would be her mate
But then the sound would soon fade away
And so will the innocent smile off her face
She would turn and walk back
Disappointed and very disheartened
Then she would lean over her balcony
Again stare at the road in aspiration
The darkness of the night is torn apart
With the soothing rays of the red sun
The long shadows are passing away
And the hopeful light makes its way
The girl had fallen asleep waiting for him
The birds wake her with their singing
She opens her beautiful eyes and smiles
Then slowly gazes at the morning sky
She walks past the flowers in her garden
The morning dew had brightened them up
The flower blushes with her touch
And lets its fragrance onto her
She then walks to the water fall
Meandering thru the lovely woods
She dips her foot in to the chillness of the river
Feeling cold she shivers and smiles
She sings and dances her way back
Smiling at everything on her way
Everything around her comes to life
Praying that she always smile’s like that
There when she return to her place
She finds someone waiting
She runs and jumps in joy
It is her love, he has come.
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rohinnnnnn,
behed apnepan se dil maie ooter gayi tumhari rachna......
shukriaa tumhara... ke tumne muje bataya warna maie is achhi rachna se waaqif hone se rah jaati .
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23rd December 2003, 02:23 PM
Apne mera hosla badhaya uska shukriya
Mein tab bus mehsoos karne ki koshish kar raha tha ki ek ladki ke khayal kaise hote honge
Pata nahi apni is koshish mien mein kitna kamiyab hua hoon
Shukriya
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Rohin
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Re: The Wait -
18th March 2005, 10:36 AM
The moon sitting on its velvet throne
Looks magnificently at its dome
Hey people look there down below
Down there on earth there lives this girl
She has been waiting for her love
Do you listen to her heart beat?
Every beat calling only him
Hoping, that her love would come
Beautifulll....!
‘Been waiting all day and now night
Looking at the road thru the wood
With every trotting sound she would jump
Hoping that this time it would be him
She would rush towards the gate
Hoping that this would be her mate
But then the sound would soon fade away
And so will the innocent smile off her face
WoW... Classy Lines!!
She would turn and walk back
Disappointed and very disheartened
Then she would lean over her balcony
Again stare at the road in aspiration
The darkness of the night is torn apart
With the soothing rays of the red sun
The long shadows are passing away
And the hopeful light makes its way
Aaaaaahhh... Simply Beautiful!!
The girl had fallen asleep waiting for him
The birds wake her with their singing
She opens her beautiful eyes and smiles
Then slowly gazes at the morning sky
She walks past the flowers in her garden
The morning dew had brightened them up
The flower blushes with her touch
And lets its fragrance onto her
Lovely!!
She then walks to the water fall
Meandering thru the lovely woods
She dips her foot in to the chillness of the river
Feeling cold she shivers and smiles
She sings and dances her way back
Smiling at everything on her way
Everything around her comes to life
Praying that she always smile’s like that
There when she return to her place
She finds someone waiting
She runs and jumps in joy
It is her love, he has come.
Waaaahhh!!
Rohin
Just cud not stop myslef from replying after reading this...Yaar ur pen has always been flowing so beautifully... Loved the way u wrote all these feelings here.... GR8 Work Dude....
Kab sochaa thha milegaa humsafar "Shweta" jaisaa
Lagta hai is baar "Pulkit", kismat teri bhi rang laayii hai
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hi! rohin -
18th March 2005, 10:52 AM
Rohin...the stoty teller...u write so well rohin...it creates the clear scenes in minds...really i start living ur words....! thx for a life like poem........tc
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18th March 2005, 12:25 PM
this is really too gud rohin...sachhh....as we read this poem..we really strt feeling it automatically...i wonder u r so fine in feeling the feelings...... lovly to c ur creation.... dil kar raha hai aur batau..but sachhi bahut achhi likhi hain aapne ek ladki ki feelings....hope we b getting more of such nice posts frm u...
take care
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18th March 2005, 04:10 PM
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Originally posted by Pulkit_gupta
Beautifulll....!
WoW... Classy Lines!!
Aaaaaahhh... Simply Beautiful!!
Lovely!!
Waaaahhh!!
Rohin
Just cud not stop myslef from replying after reading this...Yaar ur pen has always been flowing so beautifully... Loved the way u wrote all these feelings here.... GR8 Work Dude....
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Hi Pulkit Mere bhai,
Yaar kya kahoon tumhe...
Tumhe to mera har kuch likha pasand aata hai...lol..
But You are too good...
Thanks for all the Wah Wah...
Aur feelings to dil ko chute hi hain...
Thanks
Rohin
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Re: hi! rohin -
18th March 2005, 04:21 PM
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Rohin...the stoty teller...u write so well rohin...it creates the clear scenes in minds...really i start living ur words....! thx for a life like poem........tc
komal
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Wah kya baat hai Komal ji,...
Aaj apne mujhe story teller kaha wah ...
Well I am happy that i was able to transport you to the feelings in my mind as clear as a pictue..
Not as beautiful an artist as u so I try to create one with my words...
Thanks
Rohin
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18th March 2005, 04:54 PM
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this is really too gud rohin...sachhh....as we read this poem..we really strt feeling it automatically...i wonder u r so fine in feeling the feelings...... lovly to c ur creation.... dil kar raha hai aur batau..but sachhi bahut achhi likhi hain aapne ek ladki ki feelings....hope we b getting more of such nice posts frm u...
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Hi Pallavi,
Jab bhi kissi naye shaks ko apne post par dekhta hoon to bahut khushi hoti hai mujhe...
Kyonki lagta hai aaj kissi aur ko bhi mere feelings se wakif kara paya hoon...
Dost yahan par to mere thread par aate hi hain kyunki woh mere aajij hain mujhse pyaar karte hain....ache ho ya na hon mere shabd...woh to humesha mera hosla badhayenge hi.. afterall dost hote kisliye hain ... I am glad to have such wonderful friends...
Isliye aapka yahan aana aur bhi bahut acha laga..
Us par sone pe suhaga ki baat yeh hai ki aap ek ladki hain..
aur yeh meine ek ladki ke feelings par likha tha...
Isliye ek ladki se daad milna aur bhi acha laga..
Thanks
Rohin
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18th March 2005, 06:10 PM
hey Rohin
WOW i mean this is jus amzin, fantstic, fabz, brilliant, thers loads i can say abt this poem, its jus sooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo oooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo good. really u hve done it agen, u always give us the best. u hve ritten so butifully, so magnificently, its jus unbilivable!!!! its jus really really touchin. every line of this poem portrays a girls anxiousness, n her actions jus so well tht i dono wot to say. every word is jus really really wonderful, marvelous,. ur poems r jus incredible, not only this one, but all ur poems r remarkeable n astonishin. n this is not the first time tho, u hve always given us such butiful thots of urs, such touchin n heart felt poems that m jus left witout words. really YOU ARE MY BEST n FAVORITE shayar!!!! keep it up yaar. hats of to u really, hats off to u!!! good luk n best wishes ALWAYS!!! keep givin us ur best always!!!
thanx so much for sharin with us!!! keep ritin. keep smilin!!!
tc
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18th March 2005, 08:18 PM
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hey Rohin
WOW i mean this is jus amzin, fantstic, fabz, brilliant, thers loads i can say abt this poem, its jus sooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo oooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo good. really u hve done it agen, u always give us the best. u hve ritten so butifully, so magnificently, its jus unbilivable!!!! its jus really really touchin. every line of this poem portrays a girls anxiousness, n her actions jus so well tht i dono wot to say. every word is jus really really wonderful, marvelous,. ur poems r jus incredible, not only this one, but all ur poems r remarkeable n astonishin. n this is not the first time tho, u hve always given us such butiful thots of urs, such touchin n heart felt poems that m jus left witout words. really YOU ARE MY BEST n FAVORITE shayar!!!! keep it up yaar. hats of to u really, hats off to u!!! good luk n best wishes ALWAYS!!! keep givin us ur best always!!!
thanx so much for sharin with us!!! keep ritin. keep smilin!!!
tc
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Reema,
Tumhara reply is also superb...
Wah kya baat hai...
I really feel nice jab koi meri itni tareef karta hai...
I feel on Cloud 9.
i am again glad to know again that a gal could relate to it.
thank u so much for coming and reading and replying
Thanks
Rohin
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18th March 2005, 08:27 PM
u deserve it Rohin. KEEP IT UP BUDDY!!!!
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Re: The Wait -
18th March 2005, 08:58 PM
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Originally posted by Rohin
THE WAIT
The moon sitting on its velvet throne
Looks magnificently at its dome
Hey people look there down below
Down there on earth there lives this girl
She has been waiting for her love
Do you listen to her heart beat?
Every beat calling only him
Hoping, that her love would come
‘Been waiting all day and now night
Looking at the road thru the wood
With every trotting sound she would jump
Hoping that this time it would be him
She would rush towards the gate
Hoping that this would be her mate
But then the sound would soon fade away
And so will the innocent smile off her face
She would turn and walk back
Disappointed and very disheartened
Then she would lean over her balcony
Again stare at the road in aspiration
The darkness of the night is torn apart
With the soothing rays of the red sun
The long shadows are passing away
And the hopeful light makes its way
The girl had fallen asleep waiting for him
The birds wake her with their singing
She opens her beautiful eyes and smiles
Then slowly gazes at the morning sky
She walks past the flowers in her garden
The morning dew had brightened them up
The flower blushes with her touch
And lets its fragrance onto her
She then walks to the water fall
Meandering thru the lovely woods
She dips her foot in to the chillness of the river
Feeling cold she shivers and smiles
She sings and dances her way back
Smiling at everything on her way
Everything around her comes to life
Praying that she always smile’s like that
There when she return to her place
She finds someone waiting
She runs and jumps in joy
It is her love, he has come.
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Well brother its sooooooooooooo soooooooooo nice.
nothing to say more reason aur kucch kahake isaki ahmiyat ki tauhin nahi karna chahati.
waise jaate jaate ek baat kahke jaaungee ki-
aap kahi shakespere ki tarah to nahi likhane lage na.
kidding..
with lots of love
ur's sis
Garima
Anant se bhi aage... itni si khwahish hai :)
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18th March 2005, 09:06 PM
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Well brother its sooooooooooooo soooooooooo nice.
nothing to say more reason aur kucch kahake isaki ahmiyat ki tauhin nahi karna chahati.
waise jaate jaate ek baat kahke jaaungee ki-
aap kahi shakespere ki tarah to nahi likhane lage na.
kidding..
with lots of love
ur's sis
Garima
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Hi sis,
Yaar tum kitna bhi kaho...chahe acha ya bura ... tauhin to ho hi nahi sakti...
Nahi re ...lol... mein shakespear nahi hoon....lol
Thanks a lot for liking it
Love from ur bro
Rohin
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19th March 2005, 01:01 AM
Rohin, Excellent work buddy! just amazing as usual. Keep writing and take care!
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Rohin, Excellent work buddy! just amazing as usual. Keep writing and take care!
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Parul,
As usual u never miss my post..
Thanks a lot
Rohin
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Re: The Wait -
19th March 2005, 04:55 AM
wah kya baat hai
hamare tarif kabul kijiye aur yunhi humein inspire karte rahein
fir milenge
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19th March 2005, 12:04 PM
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wah kya baat hai
hamare tarif kabul kijiye aur yunhi humein inspire karte rahein
fir milenge
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Hi Rakesh,
Thanks buddy...
Aap humare se inspire hue...
Wah kya baat hai...
Thanks
Rohin
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20th March 2005, 06:21 PM
Rohinji
kya baat hai!!!
it really touched me
as i always believed u hav also made me feel that--its worth THE WAIT
lovely....
keep writing
sonal
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21st March 2005, 12:47 AM
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Rohinji
kya baat hai!!!
it really touched me
as i always believed u hav also made me feel that--its worth THE WAIT
lovely....
keep writing
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Hi Sonal,
I am glad I could touch your hart.
I also hope I don't keep you waiting in the future.
Thanks
Rohin
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29th September 2007, 03:20 AM
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Originally Posted by Rohin
THE WAIT
The moon sitting on its velvet throne
Looks magnificently at its dome
Hey people look there down below
Down there on earth there lives this girl
She has been waiting for her love
Do you listen to her heart beat?
Every beat calling only him
Hoping, that her love would come
‘Been waiting all day and now night
Looking at the road thru the wood
With every trotting sound she would jump
Hoping that this time it would be him
She would rush towards the gate
Hoping that this would be her mate
But then the sound would soon fade away
And so will the innocent smile off her face
She would turn and walk back
Disappointed and very disheartened
Then she would lean over her balcony
Again stare at the road in aspiration
The darkness of the night is torn apart
With the soothing rays of the red sun
The long shadows are passing away
And the hopeful light makes its way
The girl had fallen asleep waiting for him
The birds wake her with their singing
She opens her beautiful eyes and smiles
Then slowly gazes at the morning sky
She walks past the flowers in her garden
The morning dew had brightened them up
The flower blushes with her touch
And lets its fragrance onto her
She then walks to the water fall
Meandering thru the lovely woods
She dips her foot in to the chillness of the river
Feeling cold she shivers and smiles
She sings and dances her way back
Smiling at everything on her way
Everything around her comes to life
Praying that she always smile’s like that
There when she return to her place
She finds someone waiting
She runs and jumps in joy
It is her love, he has come.
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Rohin sahab
adab arz hei ,
Bazm ki raahon mein aap se pehlee mulaqat maham ki .............
AND MY OH MY
WAT A SPECTECULAR PORTRAYAL OF A WOMAN DREAMS , HER HOPES OF FINDING HER PRINCE CHARMING SOME DAY
WOW
Hats off to u , sir , for being sensetive enough to understand how a woman s heart beats .......How she dreams , how she awaits for her loved one and how precious is that moment when one does c ome across someone on e s been dreaming of all their lives
i really really enjoyed ur post here
Just wondering why u did nt post it in the ENGLISH POETRY SECTION ?
Anywayz , I just joined yesterday so i m not sure wat s rite or wrong , i ve just till now posted 2/3 trivial creations of mine ......
Nevertheless , Ur poetry just pulled at quite afew strings of my heart and the feel is so very carrasing its almost like a dream
Great work ,
Due Respects ,
MahamAzmi
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Rohin sahab
adab arz hei ,
Bazm ki raahon mein aap se pehlee mulaqat maham ki .............
AND MY OH MY
WAT A SPECTECULAR PORTRAYAL OF A WOMAN DREAMS , HER HOPES OF FINDING HER PRINCE CHARMING SOME DAY
WOW
Hats off to u , sir , for being sensetive enough to understand how a woman s heart beats .......How she dreams , how she awaits for her loved one and how precious is that moment when one does c ome across someone on e s been dreaming of all their lives
i really really enjoyed ur post here
Just wondering why u did nt post it in the ENGLISH POETRY SECTION ?
Anywayz , I just joined yesterday so i m not sure wat s rite or wrong , i ve just till now posted 2/3 trivial creations of mine ......
Nevertheless , Ur poetry just pulled at quite afew strings of my heart and the feel is so very carrasing its almost like a dream
Great work ,
Due Respects ,
MahamAzmi
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Hi Mahamazmi ji,
Thanks for showering all the wonderful compliments... yeah you are right it should have been in the english poetry section... but if you look at it ... it is a very old post.. just going through my old posts today... i don't have the chance to move it into the english poetry section...
I was just rewriting a bit of it... but thanks for taking the time of to read an old post of mine...
Warn Regards
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29th September 2007, 03:35 AM
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Hi Mahamazmi ji,
Thanks for showering all the wonderful compliments... yeah you are right it should have been in the english poetry section... but if you look at it ... it is a very old post.. just going through my old posts today... i don't have the chance to move it into the english poetry section...
I was just rewriting a bit of it... but thanks for taking the time of to read an old post of mine...
Warn Regards
Rohin
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Rohin ji ,
Has anyone ever told u the most expensive wines in this world are the ones which re really old
Old this post may be , but its fragrance did touch my heart for sure
I think its worth asking the MODERATORS to move it to the ENGLISH POETRY SECTION so that others can get a sneakpeak at such a sweet and subtle poem of ur s
See yaa around ,
Due Respects !
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