gira ek moti aankh se aaj phir
juda ek apna dil se aaj phir
rehta hai har waqt patjhar ka mausam
na jaane aayi kyon bahar aaj phir
I KNOW IT'S NOT THAT GUD...BUT I DO NOT KNOW URDU..ALTHOUGH I LOVE SHAYRI AND ALSO A REGULAR VISITOR OF SHAYRI.COM...ACTUALLY,THIS SHER WAS COMPOSED WHEN I REMEMBERED SOME1 VERY CLOSE TO MY HEART..
THANKX 4 READING THIS!
BUBYE
"sanam" chahe zindagi se bas itna
aik mutthi main kaid kar loon,
yeh aasman hai jitna!"
thankx suresh,anupama and chand ji,thank u all 4 reading this aand commenting on this.i am really very happy.
as suresh,now i do not want that person to be with me
and chand,i am a grt fan of urs.thankx.
anupama ji...bahut shukriya aapka ki aapne yeh padha
bye frnds...
ruchika...a true friend
"sanam" chahe zindagi se bas itna
aik mutthi main kaid kar loon,
yeh aasman hai jitna!"
gira ek moti aankh se aaj phir
juda ek apna dil se aaj phir
rehta hai har waqt patjhar ka mausam
na jaane aayi kyon bahar aaj phir
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its good one... thode se words change kerke dekhte hain.......
gira ek moti aankh se iss kadar
huaa ye dil"beqraar" aaj phir
meri jist me thee patjhar ki shirkat
uski yaad lekar aayi bahaar aaj phir"
well.. waise jo tumne likha wo bhee kaafi accha thaa.
you know my first poetry was...
kal bhee mai yahee kehta thaa,or aaj bhee mera yahi nara hai
ye tera nahi ye mera nahi, ye bharat desh humara hai,
you will definatly improve because you got the whole life waiting for you ..but be enthusiastic and bleave me.. because you can understand depth of poetrys in such a young age.. tumhare ander bhee koi na koi shayar jaroor chupa baitha hai.. just nourish your art and i will be there to tell you how to do it..
keep on writeing
izzajat
karan.q
Fainsle Qayamat taq multavee ho gaye
Sach kahe na gaye to shayri ho gaye
vaise,thankx for replying karan
par pata hai,kisi ki shayri,chahe woh acchi ho ya buri,badal kar dekhne ka sochna bhi nahi chahiye!koi baat nahin,par phir kabhi mat karna,plz !
ruchi-a true friend
"sanam" chahe zindagi se bas itna
aik mutthi main kaid kar loon,
yeh aasman hai jitna!"