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26th May 2006, 03:21 AM
Aadab,
kuch 4 line soozi hai.. aap ko sunaa raha hoon. Jo chaahu main wo keh na paau jo naa chaahu wo kehta hoon na jaane main uske saath gumsum saa kyun rehta hoon. jo aankh dikhaaye muzko usko aank dikhane waala main na jaane aksar uske saath maasoom sa kyun rehta hoon. Plz critique. Shukriya.. Apurva |
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26th May 2006, 06:18 PM
salam , good . u wrote nice feeling here in the form of verses---
i must say--- na apny maan main baat rakhoo-- kuch apny maan ki baat sunoo--- keep writing Aiza khan |
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26th May 2006, 07:25 PM
thank u aiza ji
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27th May 2006, 01:31 AM
Apurva ji,
chan lines mein aapne bahut kuch keh diya....wonderful...i really liked this...its short, simple, but says wht the heart feels...nice take care keep writing _Warda_ »~:¤.·º`·.»WARDA«.·´º·.¤:~« *(¸.·'´(¸.·'´*¤*`'·.¸)`'·.¸)* I'm a wanderer...on the roads of life, marveling at the different plants and flowers on the way....some hurt, yet some love... ~*~Ek Nanny Si Jaan...Chotta Sa Bacha...Thas Me!~*~ |
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27th May 2006, 10:12 AM
salam, its my pleasure qqplus!
u wrote nice here so i appreciated---- keep writing--- best wishes aiza khan |
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18th March 2007, 05:29 PM
warda ji,
reply dene me kamaal ki deri ho gayi hai par fir bhi kehna chahunga ke shukriya.. aap ki saraahna hi meri umang hai. Copyright @ Infinity, Ziyaad. http://apurvaoka.blogspot.com http://houndingtheworld.blogspot.com |
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28th March 2007, 05:54 PM
kya likha hai aapne .......parsansha to karni hi padegi
keep it up...aise hi 4 lines or sunne ke intzar main |
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28th March 2007, 08:54 PM
jee aap ka teh-e-dil se shukriya akansha.
agar aap ko mera ye sher pasand aaya ho to aap mere likhe aur post padh sakti ho is site pe. umeeed hai ke apa ko pasand aayega. Copyright @ Infinity, Ziyaad. http://apurvaoka.blogspot.com http://houndingtheworld.blogspot.com |
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