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18th October 2006, 10:33 AM
aadaab yaaraan-e-mehfil
ek mukhtsar si Ghazal mehfil ki nazar kar raha huuN mula'iiza kijiye : jab Gham-e-yaaraaN tabiyat par karam farmaaye hai aaNsuuyoN ka kaafilaa daaman bahaa le jaaye hai badh chuka hai ab Gham-e-dauraaN se ta'lluq is qadar ro'iiye na ek din to jee bohat ghabraaye hai zulm voh dhaaye haiN mujh par ziNdagii ne dosto maut bhi mujhko gale'y milne se ab qatraaye hai baadal-e-deeda-e-tar* ki puuchiye na kya kaheiN jab barasne par aa jaaye to barastaa jaaye hai baadal-e-deeda-e-tar = bheegi aaNkhoN ka baadal viiraani-e-lamhaat* meiN unse bichadne ka *sababb dil ko samjhaate haiN hum aur dil hameN samjhaaye hai viiraani-e-lamhaat = khaalipan , sababb = reason, kaaran ab chalo "maikash", tumhaare saamne dekho, *kazaa ban ke dulhan surkh joRey meiN khadii sharmaaye hai kazaa = maut apni ta'suuraat se zaruur nawaazeiN shukriya maikash is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai maikash ............................... |
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18th October 2006, 11:03 AM
badh chuka hai ab Gham-e-dauraaN se ta'lluq is qadar
ro'iiye na ek din to jee bohat ghabraaye hai zulm voh dhaaye haiN mujh par ziNdagii ne dosto ab gale milne se mujhko maut bhi qatraaye hai janaab sandhu saab ....appki gazal ki kaise tareef karu ...lafaz bewafa huye jate hai,sab yahi kehte haI ki hum me wo taseer nahi jo hum aftaab ko diya dikha sake.....yeh do share to bass puchiye mat....kai daffa parh chukka hoon....nazar ki or rouh ki tisnagi barti hee ja rahi hai.....bhut umda likhte ho app....khuda appki kalam ko or taqat atta kare.....rab rakha......raj..... ab mujhe bewafa kahiye ya bawafa kahiye...(Raj) |
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18th October 2006, 11:03 AM
Maikash Sahib...
Aaj arse baad yahan aana hua...aur aapki ghazal padh kar jo lutf mila...use bayaan karna mushqil hai...iss kalaam ko tau dil thaam ke hi padhna padhega...yeh jo aapne aansuon ke kaafile ka zikr kiya hai...aur phir usme daaman ke beh jaane ki tasveer kheinchi hai...wo nazzron ko ek ajeeb sa dard, phir sukoon deti si nazar aayee... badh chuka hai ab Gham-e-dauraaN se ta'lluq is qadar ro'iiye na ek din to jee bohat ghabraaye hai ab iss sher kee tau kya tareef ho...bus dil ke qareeb, bahut qareeb aakar ruk jaata hai...jaise zehen mein jo aah uthati hai...wo gale se neeche hi nahin utarti...shayad meri uutpataang baatein aapko bewajah lag rahi hon...magar sach tau yeh hai...ki jaise mere hi ehsaason ko kisi ne ek khuubsurat kalaam ke zariye pesh kar diya ho...bahut bahut shukriya janaab...yoonhi iss bazm ko nawaazte rahiye... gayi ruton ka sulagataa sa intezaar bhii ho mere khuloos kaa andaaz ye bhii sachhaa hai rakhuun na rabt magar dostii shumaar bhii ho --Sayyidaa Fatimaa Hasan |
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18th October 2006, 11:34 AM
baadal-e-deeda-e-tar* ki puuchiye na kya kaheiN jab barasne par aa jaaye to barastaa jaaye hai viiraani-e-lamhaat* meiN unse bichadne ka *sababb dil ko samjhaate haiN hum aur dil hameN samjhaaye hai ab chalo "maikash" tumhaare saamne dekho *kazaa ban ke dulhan surkh joRey meiN khadii sharmaaye hai Kayamat ho gayi ...... jahan mein din bhar gunjhta rahenge ye teen sher.... Subhan Allah!!!!!!!!!! |
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18th October 2006, 12:17 PM
badh chuka hai ab Gham-e-dauraaN se ta'lluq is qadar
ro'iiye na ek din to jee bohat ghabraaye hai WAH...!! BAHOOT SUNDER..."DARD" PAR "WAH"...!!! zulm voh dhaaye haiN mujh par ziNdagii ne dosto ab gale milne se mujhko maut bhi qatraaye hai baadal-e-deeda-e-tar* ki puuchiye na kya kaheiN jab barasne par aa jaaye to barastaa jaaye hai BAHOOT KHOOD SIR..!! ab chalo "maikash" tumhaare saamne dekho *kazaa ban ke dulhan surkh joRey meiN khadii sharmaaye hai UFF....!....KYA BAAT HAI...!!! MAIKASH BHAI SAHEB NAMASHKAR aapko padhna hamesha hi seene mein tufaan macha jata hai...!! padhne wala dil kisi katre ki tarah kho jata hai aapki daria-e-gazal ki rawani mein..aap ek manjhe hue san_tarash hai jo apni kalam ki chenni se jazbaaton ke pathar ko taraash kar khubsurat gazal ka roop dete hai...!! meri mubaaraqbaad aur daad aapke kadmon mein haazir hai...!! -MANOJ karte hai jo "kureel" se gila karte rahein. |
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18th October 2006, 12:28 PM
dost maikash ji
yaar aapki ye gazal ne dard bhara var kiya is dil pe sach me bahot hi behtarin se aasaar ke sathaapne is gazal ko dil se pesh kiya hai aapko is gazal ke liye tahe dil se main daad deta hu bas aap uhi likhte jaye aapki peshkas se is mehfil ki raunak aur badh jati hai k khus rahiye mere dost jai shree krishna aapka dost dhaval |
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18th October 2006, 03:21 PM
wah sir ji bahot khoob.....dard ko kya sundar lafzon se navaza hai........bahot khuub.......
viiraani-e-lamhaat* meiN unse bichadne ka *sababb dil ko samjhaate haiN hum aur dil hameN samjhaaye hai ab chalo "maikash" tumhaare saamne dekho *kazaa ban ke dulhan surkh joRey meiN khadii sharmaaye hai ye do sher bahot pyare hai...........bahot pasand aye ye sher.............dard to saaf jhalkta hai apke kalaam me..........kuch aur nahi kahungi.....bass meri daad kabuull kar lijiyega. nahi ki to..........hmmmmmm grazie aapki dost pooja  ===========Deepika=========== Pyaar Hai Yaa sazaa ayi mere Dil bataa Toot'ta Kyu.N naHi.N Dard Kaa Silsilaa
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18th October 2006, 03:37 PM
jab Gham-e-yaaraaN tabiyat par karam farmaaye hai
aaNsuuyoN ka kaafilaa daaman bahaa le jaaye hai ***aksar anshoo hamein gum se nizat dilate hai.dil halka ho jata hai.***  badh chuka hai ab Gham-e-dauraaN se ta'lluq is qadar ro'iiye na ek din to jee bohat ghabraaye hai ****wah kya baat hai, bahut khub**** zulm voh dhaaye haiN mujh par ziNdagii ne dosto ab gale milne se mujhko maut bhi qatraaye hai ***apne bahut hi dil ko chone wali baat kah di yahn.maut ka intzaar ????*** baadal-e-deeda-e-tar* ki puuchiye na kya kaheiN jab barasne par aa jaaye to barastaa jaaye hai ***badal barsata hai tabhi to ek sunhari kiran milti hai dekhni ko.***  viiraani-e-lamhaat* meiN unse bichadne ka *sababb dil ko samjhaate haiN hum aur dil hameN samjhaaye hai ***ye samjhna samjhana kabhi khatam nahi hota hai janaw.****  ab chalo "maikash" tumhaare saamne dekho *kazaa ban ke dulhan surkh joRey meiN khadii sharmaaye hai ***ab ye baat to hamein abhi nahi lagi apki. sher acha hai but apka agar dil se nikla sher hai to apke dil ki khawahish ko badal do. ham dost hai yahn sab jine ke liye.**** bahut khub likha hai apne again. yuhi achi gazal hamein padate rahiye. sakhi शब्दों में पिरोना है , जिससे वो हमारी यादों में महकते रहे |
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23rd October 2006, 09:29 AM
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aapne jo ash'aar pasaNd farmaaye uske liye bohat shukriya, ummiid hai aap aage bhi aise hi hausla badhaate raheNge rab raakha maikash is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai maikash ............................... |
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23rd October 2006, 09:37 AM
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aadaab aur namaste paras jee aapne jis aNdaaz se Ghazal ki pazi'raii ki hai, mujhe behadd sukuun milaa ke mehnat zaaya na gayii, bohat shukriya aapke tabsire ke jawaab meiN ek she'r haazir hai : aalam-e-badhavaasi meiN jaane kya kar gaye hote gar na hote kaGhaz-o-qalam to hum log mar gaye hote lijiye aapki ba'daulat ek aur she'r ho gaya, koshish karuuNga Ghazal ho jaaye aapka tah-e-dil se shukurguzaar huuN aati rahaa kareiN rab raakha maikash is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai maikash ............................... |
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23rd October 2006, 09:39 AM
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chaliye miyaaN hamari tukbaNdii aapke kisi kaam to aayi  shukriya maikash is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai maikash ............................... |
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26th October 2006, 06:14 AM
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Manoj saahab, namaste....bhai aapne jis aNdaaz meiN Ghazal ki paziiraii ki hai mujhe "shukriya" jaise lafz istemaal karte hue badii sharmiNdagii ho rahi hai.......aapki muravvat karz hai mujh par, khaadim ka vohi mashoor-e-zamaana "shukriya" tp kam-az-kam Tikaa hi lijiye maikash is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai maikash ............................... |
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26th October 2006, 06:22 AM
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aapki daad sar-maaThe miyaaN....bohat shukriya aapke lafz "raunak" se mujhe apna ek she'r yaad aaya, mula'iiza kijiye : voh gaya to saath saari raunakeiN bhi le gayaa ab to maiN huuN aur hai meri Ghazal ki talKhiyaaN mashkoor-o-mamnoon huuN miyaaN aapka maikash is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai maikash ............................... |
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26th October 2006, 06:26 AM
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aapki daad qabuul hai mohtarma, na lkarne ka to sawaal hi nahiiN hai !! aapne jo do ash'aar khusuusan pasaNd farmaaye uske liye mera shukriya qabuul farmaaiye maikash is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai maikash ............................... |
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26th October 2006, 09:22 AM
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maikash ji namaskar...! kaya kahu aapne to dil ki baat kah di................! badh chuka hai ab Gham-e-dauraaN se ta'lluq is qadar ro'iiye na ek din to jee bohat ghabraaye hai puri rachna kabiley tareef hai, par yeh share dil ko chu gaya........! viiraani-e-lamhaat* meiN unse bichadne ka *sababb dil ko samjhaate haiN hum aur dil hameN samjhaaye hai bahut khoob, yu hi likhtey rahiye. aapki dost .....Sunita Thakur..... यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया ....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए... 
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11th November 2006, 01:55 PM
MaikaSh saahaab,
SSA Bohat khuubsuurat Ghazal kahii hai aap ne.. aap ki Ghazal to puuri sajaawat ke saath apna jalwa dikha rahi hai.. Har Sher itne dilkaSh bayaaN kiye haiN aap ne, kii zabaan se sirf daad hi daad nikal rahi hai.. Har Sher meiN saadgii ka Khuubsuurat raNg ke saath gehre Khayaalaat ko khuub bayaaN kiya hai. Quote:
Bohat Khoob! Quote:
waah! kya dilkash Andaaz e bayaaN hai... Quote:
YeH Sher bhi bohat khoob rahe.. Har Sher dil par asar kar raha hai aur ek Khushi mehsoos ho rahi hai paRh kar... Quote:
YeH SHer ka pahla misra meiN ravaani ke aitbaar se kuchhh atkan si mehsoos ho rahi hai(dekho kazaa ), Aap bhi ek baar Ghaur keejiyega, ho sakta hai kii mujhe hi aisa lag raha ho.. Magar Sher ka Khayaal Khuub hai.. ek nihaayat hi dilkaSh Ghazal pe ess naacheez kii mubaarak-baad qubool keejiyegaa.. yuuN hi liKhate raheN... Mayank |
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