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दिल में कुछ और मगर मुद्*दा-ए-गुफ्तार बदल जाए -
21st November 2009, 07:21 AM
दिल में कुछ और मगर मुद्दा-ए-गुफ्तार बदल जाए
वो हो करीब मेरे तो ज़ुबान-ए-बेअदब फिसल जाए ए दिल-ए-शातिर बता तू की क्या पेच है ज़रा जो हर ख्याल आख़िर उसके ख्याल में बदल जाए है कुछ तो अलग अब तामीर-ए-शहर-ए-सनम आज हर गली से उस गली का रास्ता निकल जाए उन्हें इतना भी अब तुम याद ना करो 'मायूस' कहीं हिचकी आते आते उनका दम ना निकल जाए आग का दरिया है 'जिगर' पर ये कहाँ था मालूम सोज़-ए-गम-ए-उलफत से इशरत-ए-दुनिया पिघल जाए सोज़-heat, warmth dil men kuch aur magar mudda-e-guftaar badal jaaye vo ho kareeb mere to zubaan-e-beadab fisal jaaye e dil-e-shaatir bataa tu ki kyaa pech hai jaraa jo har khyaal aakhir uske khyaal men badal jaaye hai kuch to alag ab taameer-e-shahar-e-sanam aaj har galee se us galee kaa rastaa nikal jaaye unhen itnaa bhee ab tum yaad na karo 'mayoos' kahin hichkee aate aaten unka dam na nikal jaaye aag ka dariyaa hai 'jigar' par ye kahaan thaa maaloom soz-e-gam-e-ulfat se ishrat-e-duniyaa pighal jaaye this is a redo of one of my old ones (those were the days when i was terrible  )किसी में शाम न मिली तो किसी में सहर नहीं |
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21st November 2009, 07:30 AM
Mayoos Ji...Adaab !
Acha likha hai aapne......humesha ki tarha...! Yeh aakhir ke do sher mujhe bahut pasand aaye... उन्हें इतना भी अब तुम याद ना करो 'मायूस' कहीं हिचकी आते आते उनका दम ना निकल जाए आग का दरिया है 'जिगर' पर यह न था मालूम सोज़-ए-गम-ए-उलफत से इशरत-ए-दुनिया पिघल जाए dil se daad....hazir hai... likhte rahiye... khush rahiye... duaaon ke saath...  YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ... Fareb Kaa ChaDhtaa Bazaar Dekh Insaaf Se Bastii Khaalii Ho Rahii Hai ... ---Naresh Mehra---- |
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21st November 2009, 10:59 AM
Thanks Naresh, once again for reading this.
the last sher should have been like this, i read it again and found the mistake आग का दरिया है 'जिगर' पर ये कहाँ था मालूम सोज़-ए-गम-ए-उलफत में इशरत-ए-दुनिया पिघल जाए किसी में शाम न मिली तो किसी में सहर नहीं |
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21st November 2009, 11:19 AM
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mere khayal se agar aise kar de toh aur theek lagega... Aag ka dariya hai "jigar" ko kahan maalum tha soz-e-gam-e-ulfat mai ishrat-e-duniya pighal jaaye baaki aap dekh li jiyega.... YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ... Fareb Kaa ChaDhtaa Bazaar Dekh Insaaf Se Bastii Khaalii Ho Rahii Hai ... ---Naresh Mehra---- |
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21st November 2009, 05:16 PM
Mayoos saheb AadaaB..........
Kya baat hai janab lagata hai Ishq ke rang mein aap bhi rang rahe hai bahut khoob kaha aapne aur yakinan kai logoN ki zubaan aake matle mein jaise kaha hai waise hi ho jati hai.......... Very nice and true feelings shared......... keep it Up........ 
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21st November 2009, 07:29 PM
आग का दरिया है 'जिगर' पर ये कहाँ था मालूम
सोज़-ए-गम-ए-उलफत से इशरत-ए-दुनिया पिघल जाए awasome apke liye kuch arz hai Mat dekh koi shakhs gunegar kitna hai, yeh dekh tere sath wafadar kitna hai, yeh mat soch usay kuch logo se nafrat hai, yeh dekh usay tujh se payar kitna hai Naulekahe par tere khoon ki boond hai, Motiyo ki jagah par jada kaun hai, Jiski khatir daga chandini se kare, Puch suraj ki woh dilruba kaun hai? |
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21st November 2009, 08:50 PM
mayoosji,
accha laga phad kar....aapki gazle as usual....bahut hi suljhi hui hoti hai...phad ke lagta hai...kisi mukammal kavi ne likha hai....hume bhi sikhne ko milta hai.... dhanyavad itni khubsurti ke liye Aandhiya Gam Ki Chalegi To Sawar Jaoonga Me Mai To Dariya Hu Samoondar Me Utar Jaaonga Me Mujhe Suli Pe Chadane Ki Jaroorat Kya Hai Logo Mere Haato Se Kalam Cheen Lo Yuhi Mar Jaoonga Me (When i received You in my heart everything changed for me) |
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21st November 2009, 09:09 PM
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Jigar ko lagegaa men kuch sikhaa rahaa hun unhen किसी में शाम न मिली तो किसी में सहर नहीं |
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21st November 2009, 09:11 PM
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thanks Silent tears ................................. किसी में शाम न मिली तो किसी में सहर नहीं |
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21st November 2009, 09:13 PM
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Puraanee thee, usee ko durust kiyaa thaa yahan. jab likhnaa shuru kiyaa tha (kuch 8 mahine pahle) to ghatiyaa likhtaa thaa, ab thodaa bahut aataa hai to un ghatiyaa cheezon ko theek kar rahaa hun. thanks khwahish. किसी में शाम न मिली तो किसी में सहर नहीं |
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21st November 2009, 09:14 PM
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Thanks Amit, this is a very big compliment. I appreciate you taking out time and reading my stuff, and happy that my stuff is not that disappointing. किसी में शाम न मिली तो किसी में सहर नहीं |
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22nd November 2009, 02:03 PM
very nice mayoos ji, second sher bahut accha h.....
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23rd November 2009, 10:25 PM
Boht Khoob,,
Lekin aap to dard pe hi likhte ho na........ To ishq mein kese????????????? tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di! kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad") |
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23rd November 2009, 10:29 PM
wahhhhhhh....kya khayaal hai....outstanding.............keep it up...
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23rd November 2009, 11:38 PM
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Thanks Shipra ........................ किसी में शाम न मिली तो किसी में सहर नहीं |
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23rd November 2009, 11:40 PM
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Hassan, Thanks, Kuch maheene pehle likhee thee, usiko theek thaak karke yahan fir patak diyaa Aise to main sharaab pe bhi like letaa hoon magar peetaa nahin किसी में शाम न मिली तो किसी में सहर नहीं |
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23rd November 2009, 11:42 PM
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Thanks Lamha, puraanee ghatiyaa see likhee huee ko theek kar rahaa thaa, kahin khyaal hi theek na ho gayen ho .................................किसी में शाम न मिली तो किसी में सहर नहीं |
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