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chand se shikayat -
9th February 2003, 02:00 AM
mujh se bhi zayada khush-naseeb hai too
aye chand uske ghar ke kitni kareeb hai too
mai hota to teri jagah din mai bhi na soota
sara sara din shayad uski chat par hoota
pagal hai, dewana hai ,bada ajeeb hai too
aye chand uske ghar ke kitni kareeb hai too
itna bata de mujhko gar to mera saathi hai
mujhe dekhne kya who khidki mai aati hai
jaltaa hoon mai tujhse, mera rakeeb hai too
aye chand uske ghar ke kitni kareeb hai too
Zeba likhti rahegi......
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afsoos -
10th February 2003, 08:36 AM
shayad kisi ko yeh geet pasand nahi aaya....
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Nice one -
10th February 2003, 03:44 PM
zebaji,
Aapki ye post parhi or kaafi pasand aai, dekhiye na kabhi kabhi kitni achhi posts kitni der se parh paate haiN hum, aapne lafzoN ka istemaal bhi bahut achha kiya hai.
But please aap nirash(hopeless) na hoN agar kisi post par reply na bhi mile, kyoN ki ye bhi badi baat hai ke aap achha likhte haiN or log use parhte haiN, is.se aapki kaabliyat par koi fark nahi padta.
Likhte rahiye ga.
Tumaahare hi iraade haiN
Jo ik din aasmaan bhi jhuka deiNge
YooN hi chalte raho ey dil
Ye hausle manzil tak pahuNcha deiNge
Regards
Chaand
Sachh bolne ka hausla to, hum bhi rakhte haiN lekin
Anjaam sochkar, aksar khaamosh hi reh jaate haiN.
- Chaand
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10th February 2003, 03:45 PM
jaltaa hoon mai tujhse, mera rakeeb hai too
aye chand uske ghar ke kitni kareeb hai too
Hai Zeba !!
Achcha to likha hai.....bas muze hi der ho gai.......ooops...
paplu khush hua.
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10th February 2003, 04:28 PM
bahaut khoob zebaji,
bada aacha likkha hai apne.
jaltaa hoon mai tujhse, mera rakeeb hai too
aye chand uske ghar ke kitni kareeb hai too
bada pyaara likkha hai apne. sahi kaha hai waise apne. chand sach mein kitna khushnaseeb hota hai woh hamare chahne wale ke kitna kareeb hota hai.jinke deedar ko hamari ankhen tarasti hain use chand har roz dekhta hai.
har koi itna acchi kismat lekar kahan aata hai duniya mein. aise hi likhti rahiyega.
"Roz Kii Taraah Aaj Bhii Taare
Subha Kii Gard MeiN Naa Kho JaayeiN
Aa ! Tere Gham MeiN Jaagtii AankheiN
Kam Se Kam Aik Raat So JaayeiN."
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hi -
10th February 2003, 05:45 PM
wah wah kiya baat hain zeba ji humne to isko dun bi bana diya hain kitna acha gheet hain yeh kasamse bhut pasnd aayia iska to har lafz acha tha. i rally liked these lines
mai hota to teri jagah din mai bhi na soota
sara sara din shayad uski chat par hoota
kuch add kar rahi hoon
chaand jab nikalata hain to apni dun main nikhalat hain
yeh chaand har ik ke ghar main jaankta hian
ise to shaayd apni cxhakoor ka intazaar hai
jaane vo kis ghar main use nazar aa jai
aaga chaand milaane ka kaam karta to hum
har rooz uske ghar ka haal janane ke liye chaand se zaroor milte
once again bhut hi acah likha hain aapne main ne late reply kiya because i havnt been on the site properly for a long time nor did i read any ones poems
take care
bye
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shukriya -
11th February 2003, 08:10 AM
romana ji,farhana ji,paplupat ji,chaand ji aur sanjoo ji,
Tahe dil se aap sab logon ki tareef ka shukriya.mai 2 din se is site par nahi aayi thi.Isiliyeh reply mai der ho gayi.thanks a lot aap logon ne meri gazal padhi aur husla afzai ki.
Zeba
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13th February 2003, 02:59 AM
waah, bahot hi khoob likha hai aapne zeba ji!!
maiN aapse maafi chahta huuN, magar maiN is thread meiN bahot kam aata huuN =\
chalo chhoDiye..
mujhe yeh sher sabse acha lagaa --
jaltaa hoon mai tujhse, mera rakeeb hai too
aye chand uske ghar ke kitni kareeb hai too
-- yaar, aapki soch bahot pasand aayi! behtreeN tareeqe se aapne lafzoN meiN khoobiyat bhari hai.. bahot khoob!
likhte rahiye,
aman
"je tu akhiiyaaN de saamne naii rehnaa,
te bibba saada dil moD de..!"
kya karooN? aisa hi hooN maiN..
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thank you -
14th February 2003, 08:11 AM
Thanks aman sahab,
aap ne yeh gazal padhi itna hi bohot hai.tareef ka bohot bohot shukriya.
Zeba
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dard hai ............. -
16th February 2003, 12:09 PM
wah kya baat kahi hai tumne
mere dil kibaat kahi hai tumne
zara tum se miloon to ye poochoon
mere dil ki kitaab kahan padi tumne
chand ko kosney se kya hasil
ghar unsey door kiyoon lya tumne
shikva beja hai tumhara ZEBA
yaar ko ghar nahi dil mein basayaa jata hai.
chaand ko bhi tum se hai ye gila
uskey mehboob ko dil mein basaya tumne
KAISI LAGI YE GHAZA JO KI TUMHAREY NAAM HAI .
A FRIEND
SAQIB
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wah wah -
16th February 2003, 09:19 PM
wah sadiq sahab,
kya khoob jawab diya aap ne .baid bazi mai maza aa gaya.khash meri har gazal ko un hi jawab milte rahe.
Zeba.
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chand achha laga -
17th February 2003, 06:12 PM
Payre shayro
aaj hi maine janm liya aaj hi main mer gaya hun
kisko kahani sunaun kisko bahana bataun
dosto tumhare chand ne dil pagal ker diya hai
friend sanjoo,wafa......etc ko dekhkar achha laga
padker apne chand ki yad aa gayi
....
Zeba ji aap achha likhti hai ya likhte ho khuda jane ....but padker achha laga....
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thanks -
17th February 2003, 11:49 PM
sushilk17 ji,
pehle to aap ki tareef ka shukriya.meri nazar me shayar wahi jo sab ki nazar se dekhe.chahe who aurat ho ya aadmi, amir ya gareeb,practical admi ya romantic .ya phir chota baccha.warna shayri ki limitation badh jati hai. aurhum aage nahi sonch sakte.To mai koshish karti hoon ki sab ke jazbaat mehsoos karoon.
Zeba.
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3rd February 2010, 12:49 PM
Quote:
Originally Posted by Zeba
mujh se bhi zayada khush-naseeb hai too
aye chand uske ghar ke kitni kareeb hai too
mai hota to teri jagah din mai bhi na soota
sara sara din shayad uski chat par hoota
pagal hai, dewana hai ,bada ajeeb hai too
aye chand uske ghar ke kitni kareeb hai too
itna bata de mujhko gar to mera saathi hai
mujhe dekhne kya who khidki mai aati hai
jaltaa hoon mai tujhse, mera rakeeb hai too
aye chand uske ghar ke kitni kareeb hai too
Zeba likhti rahegi......
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Zeba jii........bahut saallo.n baad es khoobsurat poetry par nazar gaye to review diye bina raha nahi gaya, par aap ab na jane kahaN haiN, aap jahaN bhi haiN aapko meri taraf se daad hazir hai, aapne bahut acche ahsaas hum sabke saath share kiye haiN, waqt guzar jata hai par ahsaas shayad nahi badalte
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4th February 2010, 06:42 PM
Beautiful Work Zeba jee...............
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Par tujhe bevafa bhi kehna achcha nahi lagta...
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