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Paagal si hai Kavita !! - 30th January 2006, 11:58 PM

Nishabd stabdh
si hai meri Kavita.
...jaane kyun pareshaan si hai meri Kavita !!

Kabhi sach kabhi jhoot
kabhi apni kabhi paraayee
...ek swapn si hai meri Kavita !!

Door kahin ehsaas ki
bheeshan si varsha mein
...sookhta registaan si hai meri Kavita !!

Na patth na parhaav
bas khaayiyaan hee khaayiyaan
...patth bhramit pathik si hai meri Kavita !!

Simti hui sshmi hui
apna jism khoti
...ek behti nadi si hai meri Kavita !!

urdhkar door kahin
kshitij aakaash mein
...aawaara baadal si hai meri Kavita !!

Na rukti na tthertee
is shoonya se uss shoonya
...bhatakti firtee si hai meri Kavita !!

Kehta apne shabdon ko
nisankhoch nirbhaytaa se
...chauraahe ke paagal si hai meri Kavita !!


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31st January 2006, 12:08 AM

mere vipin,

tumhe padha... .. meri poorani kavita yaad aa gayi. kabhi bataaungi...

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Aapne mujhe parha tow bhaut khushi hui.

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31st January 2006, 10:21 AM

kayi rango ka mel
kayi ehsaaso ka khel
...zindagi si hai aapki kavita


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31st January 2006, 11:15 AM

Vipin,
tume padna ab kya kahu, bas ek ehsaas hai is zameen mei jeene ka. jeise visaal sagaron mei koi setu bana ho paar pane ke liye.
Tum, tumari kavitain, tumari rachnain hamesa zindagi ko likte rahen, yahi kamna meri or mere dil ki hei.

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vipin ji...

tume para to bin reply diye jaane ka man nahi ho paya..

ek-ek shabd dil ko chhoota hua sa laga...
aur aise taraashi hui lagi aapki kavita ki bas moh-bhang nahi ho pa raha...aur aap ke shabdo ki shamsheer kafi teekhi hoti ja rahi hai...tahe dil se daad kabool kare...ok bye..t/c.
   
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31st January 2006, 01:53 PM

Garima,
Tumhne parha isse, mujhe bahaut bahaut accha laga.

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Kaanch
Tumhari raye mere bahaut kaam aati hai aur shabdon ka naya roop tumhare lafzon se bhi seekh leta hoon.

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Gam Saahab,
Aapne mujhe gaur se parha tow yeh meri khusnaseebi hai.

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1st February 2006, 02:52 AM

ek diye ki tarah
ujwal aur roshni se bhari
ek rehbar si hain aapki kavitaa..

vipin ji,
aap bahut hi inspiring aur diversd subject pe likhte hain and we can only stand and appreciate..
keep posting .........



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jo aag lagaaii thii tum ne us ko to bujhaayaa ashko.n ne
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1st February 2006, 11:45 PM

Deep_in_ur_hear saahab,
Aapne meri koshish ko parha aur saraahya tow bahaut khushi hui. Koshish karunga ki kabhi accha likh sakun.
Aapka dhantavaad karta hoon

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Re: Paagal si hai Kavita !! - 2nd February 2006, 06:40 AM

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Nishabd stabdh
si hai meri Kavita.
...jaane kyun pareshaan si hai meri Kavita !!

Kabhi sach kabhi jhoot
kabhi apni kabhi paraayee
...ek swapn si hai meri Kavita !!

Door kahin ehsaas ki
bheeshan si varsha mein
...sookhta registaan si hai meri Kavita !!

Na patth na parhaav
bas khaayiyaan hee khaayiyaan
...patth bhramit pathik si hai meri Kavita !!

Simti hui sshmi hui
apna jism khoti
...ek behti nadi si hai meri Kavita !!

urdhkar door kahin
kshitij aakaash mein
...aawaara baadal si hai meri Kavita !!

Na rukti na tthertee
is shoonya se uss shoonya
...bhatakti firtee si hai meri Kavita !!

Kehta apne shabdon ko
nisankhoch nirbhaytaa se
...chauraahe ke paagal si hai meri Kavita !!
vipin ji,
bhaut achha likha hai aapko padhkar hamesha hi achha lagta hai, alag sa topic aur bilkul nirala andaj
aise hi likhte rahiye
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2nd February 2006, 12:30 PM

Vipin bhaai,

Bahut hi khoobsurat likha hai aapne...Ek khulaapan hai is kavita me... jo ke mujhe kaafi accha laga...Likhte rahiye yun hi... khayaal rakhiyega...!


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Shrdh Ji
Bahaut khushi hui jaankar ki aapne iss topic ko pasand kiya, dhanyavaad.

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Pulkit Ji,
Yeh meri khusnaseebi hai ki aapne is khuleypan ko parha aur isse saraaha. Aapka bahaut bahaut dhanyavaad.

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Namaskar Vipin Ji

Aaj kayi dinon baad ek different style of writing dekha bahut acha laga padhkar.......

bahut khoobsurat hay Aapki Kavita
Ankekon kavitaon se alag hay Aapki Kavita
Kabhi khamosh kabhi bahut kuch kehti hay yeh kavita
Ek alag pechaan chod rahi hay aapki kavita

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Namaskar Vipin Ji

Aaj kayi dinon baad ek different style of writing dekha bahut acha laga padhkar.......

bahut khoobsurat hay Aapki Kavita
Ankekon kavitaon se alag hay Aapki Kavita
Kabhi khamosh kabhi bahut kuch kehti hay yeh kavita
Ek alag pechaan chod rahi hay aapki kavita

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Aur jin oonchey shabdon se aapne is kavita ko aanka aur likha uske liye dhanyavaad kehna galat hoga. Kyonki dhanyavaad shaayad bahaut chota sa shabd hai kritagya prakat karne ke liye.
   
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4th February 2006, 06:47 PM

pranam bhaiya,

waise kya kahoon bas yahi kahunga ki bas aisi hi hai kavita.aur kaafi sundar hai aapki ye kavita.likhte rahiye yunhi.


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Re: Paagal si hai Kavita !! - 9th February 2006, 03:30 PM

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Nishabd stabdh
si hai meri Kavita.
...jaane kyun pareshaan si hai meri Kavita !!

Kabhi sach kabhi jhoot
kabhi apni kabhi paraayee
...ek swapn si hai meri Kavita !!

Door kahin ehsaas ki
bheeshan si varsha mein
...sookhta registaan si hai meri Kavita !!

Na patth na parhaav
bas khaayiyaan hee khaayiyaan
...patth bhramit pathik si hai meri Kavita !!

Simti hui sshmi hui
apna jism khoti
...ek behti nadi si hai meri Kavita !!

urdhkar door kahin
kshitij aakaash mein
...aawaara baadal si hai meri Kavita !!

Na rukti na tthertee
is shoonya se uss shoonya
...bhatakti firtee si hai meri Kavita !!

Kehta apne shabdon ko
nisankhoch nirbhaytaa se
...chauraahe ke paagal si hai meri Kavita !!
Simti hui sshmi hui, apna jism khoti.
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Kaanch,

Tumhe ek baat bataana chahunga main ki............
Tumhne isse pehle parh liya tha aur pratikriya bhi dee thi, tumhara message page# 1 mein bhi hai.
Khair mujhe bahaut khushi hui ki tumhne jane-anjane hee sahi isse ek baar aur parha. khushi hui.
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Vipin jee:

namaste!

kaise haiN aap? aik arsaa beet gayaa aapko aur aapki rachanaa ko bazm meiN deKhe huye.. aaj achaanak se aapki yeh rachanaa nazar aa gayii.n! aapki koShiSh ko paDh ke hameShaa mere dil ko sukooN miltaa haii.. ees baar bhee yahee huaa.. saadagee bhare ehsaaso.n ne dil jeet liyaa... !

dil se daad... KhuSh rahe.n... apnaa Khayaal raKhe.n

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Nishabd stabdh
si hai meri Kavita.
...jaane kyun pareshaan si hai meri Kavita !!

Kabhi sach kabhi jhoot
kabhi apni kabhi paraayee
...ek swapn si hai meri Kavita !!

Door kahin ehsaas ki
bheeshan si varsha mein
...sookhta registaan si hai meri Kavita !!

Na patth na parhaav
bas khaayiyaan hee khaayiyaan
...patth bhramit pathik si hai meri Kavita !!

Simti hui sshmi hui
apna jism khoti
...ek behti nadi si hai meri Kavita !!

urdhkar door kahin
kshitij aakaash mein
...aawaara baadal si hai meri Kavita !!

Na rukti na tthertee
is shoonya se uss shoonya
...bhatakti firtee si hai meri Kavita !!

Kehta apne shabdon ko
nisankhoch nirbhaytaa se
...chauraahe ke paagal si hai meri Kavita !!


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sardi mein halki dhoop jaisi,
bujte diye meiN teil jaisi,
SDC ko rangeeN banaye jo,
aisi khoobsurat hai aapki kavita

Vipin ji bahuttttt deri se padi aapki kavita...muaafi chahti hu...aap mere pasandida shayroN meiN se haiN, accha lagta hai aapko padna

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Namaskaar Sunita ji
aapne mere is prayas ko parha aur in panktiyon per apne vichaar rakhey, Yeh dekhkar khusi Hui.

mera dhanyavaad sweekar karein.
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