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Huii Sabse Paraayi
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"Kitni acchi hogi uski buraaiyaaN" -
16th July 2009, 02:34 PM
haaye logoN kii karam-farmaaiyaaN
tohmateN, badnaamiyaaN, rusvaaiyaaN
-Kaif Bhopali jee
Ghazal yuN hai...............
Kitni acchi hogi uski buraaiyaaN
dil dukhaana jiski hai achaaiyaaN
dosti ko kis tarha samjhey ga woh
jis ne seekhi hai faqat makkaariyaaN
apne gareebaa ko chaak pehley kar
phir too dusro'n ko dey ruswaaiyaaN
kya teri fitrat mai shamil hai yehi
nafrateiN dhokadhai chaalakiyaaN
ab jala seeney mai ulfat ka "DIYA"
chordey taareekiyaaN gehraaiyaaN
Mohabbat ke baad mohabbat mumkin hai faraz.
Magar toot ke chahna sirf ek baar hota hai
Goodbye SDC
Diya
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16th July 2009, 04:09 PM
Bahut Achche Idya ji...
i liked it very much...
Apna Khyal rakhiye...
Mohabbat ki raahon mein chalna sambhal ke
Yahan jo bhi aaya...gaya haath mal ke..!
Log kehte hain Sher kehta hun .
Apne Zhakhmon se khelta hoon main!!!
Albela Sajan
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The Lost Poet
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bahut accha -
18th July 2009, 06:18 AM
Diya Ji, bahut hi khubsurat likha hai apne, is gazhal ke andaaz ne dil ko choo liye, behad khubsurat.............yunhi likhte rahiye..
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Originally Posted by Diya_Jale
haaye logoN kii karam-farmaaiyaaN
tohmateN, badnaamiyaaN, rusvaaiyaaN
-Kaif Bhopali jee
Ghazal yuN hai...............
Kitni acchi hogi uski buraaiyaaN
dil dukhaana jiski hai achaaiyaaN
dosti ko kis tarha samjhey ga woh
jis ne seekhi hai faqat makkaariyaaN
apne gareebaa ko chaak pehley kar
phir too dusro'n ko dey ruswaaiyaaN
kya teri fitrat mai shamil hai yehi
nafrateiN dhokadhai chaalakiyaaN
ab jala seeney mai ulfat ka "DIYA"
chordey taareekiyaaN gehraaiyaaN
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Nalin
Uski Har "Uff" pe hum apni jaan lutate rahe,
Uski Shaqsiyat ko karke buland hum khudko mitate rahe,
Raahe-e-mohobbat me hamne kuch yun paya sila wafa ka,
woh dete rahe zakhm pe zakhm aur ham muskurate rahe
Please Honor me and my creative writing by visitng my website @ www.nalin-mehra.blogspot.com
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18th July 2009, 07:07 AM
Pyaari Diya ...
kaise ho tum?
ghazal toh aapki mah sha allah ... beautiful
bas mere dil ke ehsaason ko roop milgaya ho jaise...
ek baat kehna chhati thi tumse Diya..
aapka naam aur mera naam kuch milta sa hain ...
Diya means rohsanii ... deep means same I think so ... so we share same name kind of...
ok sweetie keep writing ...
take care
milti hu aapki aglii ghazal per..
aapki
mandeep
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18th July 2009, 09:28 AM
[quote=Diya_Jale;360426]haaye logoN kii karam-farmaaiyaaN
tohmateN, badnaamiyaaN, rusvaaiyaaN
-Kaif Bhopali jeeGhazal yuN hai...............
Kitni acchi hogi uski buraaiyaaN
dil dukhaana jiski hai achaaiyaaN
dosti ko kis tarha samjhey ga woh
jis ne seekhi hai faqat makkaariyaaN
apne gareebaa ko chaak pehley kar
phir too dusro'n ko dey ruswaaiyaaN
kya teri fitrat mai shamil hai yehi
nafrateiN dhokadhai chaalakiyaaN
ab jala seeney mai ulfat ka "DIYA"
chordey taareekiyaaN gehraaiyaaN
nice creation DIYA JI..
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Huii Sabse Paraayi
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20th July 2009, 08:14 PM
Quote:
Originally Posted by Albela Sajan
Bahut Achche Idya ji...
i liked it very much...
Apna Khyal rakhiye...
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sukriya Albela jee,
youN hi saath dete rahiye
khus rahiye
Diya
Mohabbat ke baad mohabbat mumkin hai faraz.
Magar toot ke chahna sirf ek baar hota hai
Goodbye SDC
Diya
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20th July 2009, 08:16 PM
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Originally Posted by nalinmehra
Diya Ji, bahut hi khubsurat likha hai apne, is gazhal ke andaaz ne dil ko choo liye, behad khubsurat.............yunhi likhte rahiye..
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Nalin jee,
sukriya ...aapko humari ghazal pasand aayi hume khusi hui ...apna khayal rakhna ...waqt mile to milte rahna
aapki dost
Diya
Mohabbat ke baad mohabbat mumkin hai faraz.
Magar toot ke chahna sirf ek baar hota hai
Goodbye SDC
Diya
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20th July 2009, 08:51 PM
Diya ji...........bahut khub rahi aapki yeh Ghazal........sabhi sher ache rahe..........
Yeh mujhe jiyada pasand aaye...
dosti ko kis tarha samjhey ga woh
jis ne seekhi hai faqat makkaariyaaN
apne gareebaa ko chaak pehley kar
phir too dusro'n ko dey ruswaaiyaaN
khush rahiye......aise hi likhte rahiye.........bazm mai aate rahiye...
YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN
Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ...
Fareb Kaa ChaDhtaa Bazaar Dekh
Insaaf Se Bastii Khaalii Ho Rahii Hai ...
---Naresh Mehra----
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22nd July 2009, 05:02 PM
Quote:
Originally Posted by Diya_Jale
haaye logoN kii karam-farmaaiyaaN
tohmateN, badnaamiyaaN, rusvaaiyaaN
-Kaif Bhopali jeeGhazal yuN hai...............
Kitni acchi hogi uski buraaiyaaN
dil dukhaana jiski hai achaaiyaaN
dosti ko kis tarha samjhey ga woh
jis ne seekhi hai faqat makkaariyaaN
apne gareebaa ko chaak pehley kar
phir too dusro'n ko dey ruswaaiyaaN
kya teri fitrat mai shamil hai yehi
nafrateiN dhokadhai chaalakiyaaN
ab jala seeney mai ulfat ka "DIYA"
chordey taareekiyaaN gehraaiyaaN
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diya kya gazal likhi hai tumne yaar bahut acha laga
aur tumara ye share yaar bahut bahut acha hai
ise padhke muje bhi mera koi dost yaad aa gaya yaar
Kitni acchi hogi uski buraaiyaaN
dil dukhaana jiski hai achaaiyaaN
dosti ko kis tarha samjhey ga woh
jis ne seekhi hai faqat makkaariyaaN
AankheN khuleeN to jaag uTheeN hasrateN tamaam Uss ko bhi kho diyaa jissay paya thaa khwaab mein
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24th July 2009, 08:21 AM
Quote:
Originally Posted by Diya_Jale
haaye logoN kii karam-farmaaiyaaN
tohmateN, badnaamiyaaN, rusvaaiyaaN
-Kaif Bhopali jee
Ghazal yuN hai...............
Kitni acchi hogi uski buraaiyaaN
dil dukhaana jiski hai achaaiyaaN
dosti ko kis tarha samjhey ga woh
jis ne seekhi hai faqat makkaariyaaN
apne gareebaa ko chaak pehley kar
phir too dusro'n ko dey ruswaaiyaaN
kya teri fitrat mai shamil hai yehi
nafrateiN dhokadhai chaalakiyaaN
ab jala seeney mai ulfat ka "DIYA"
chordey taareekiyaaN gehraaiyaaN
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waah waah...
or kuch kehne ki waise to jarurat nhi....
u r great diya jiii
this is for u...
chhod de DIYA to gila karna unse
jinki nas nas me basi hain bewfaaiyaan
khush rahiye...
aapka dost
vicky
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25th July 2009, 05:37 PM
Mani Di,
aapko meri ghazal pasand aayi mujhe bahot khusi hui
aapki naam aur mera naam ma meaning milta hai yeh to maine socha hi nahi tha
magar sach kahoon is naam ke saath saath jalan bhi bahot bardast karna padta hai
khud ko jala ke dusrke ko roshni dete dete kabhi kabhi apni ehesaas hi dum tor deti hai
magar kya karein ab hume isi ke saath jeena hai
apna khayal rakhna
aapki sis
Diya
Mohabbat ke baad mohabbat mumkin hai faraz.
Magar toot ke chahna sirf ek baar hota hai
Goodbye SDC
Diya
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25th July 2009, 05:38 PM
[quote=ABABBU;360503]
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Originally Posted by Diya_Jale
haaye logoN kii karam-farmaaiyaaN
tohmateN, badnaamiyaaN, rusvaaiyaaN
-Kaif Bhopali jeeGhazal yuN hai...............
Kitni acchi hogi uski buraaiyaaN
dil dukhaana jiski hai achaaiyaaN
dosti ko kis tarha samjhey ga woh
jis ne seekhi hai faqat makkaariyaaN
apne gareebaa ko chaak pehley kar
phir too dusro'n ko dey ruswaaiyaaN
kya teri fitrat mai shamil hai yehi
nafrateiN dhokadhai chaalakiyaaN
ab jala seeney mai ulfat ka "DIYA"
chordey taareekiyaaN gehraaiyaaN
nice creation DIYA JI..
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sukriya jee,
youn hi saath detey rahiyega
DuaoN ke saath
Diya
Mohabbat ke baad mohabbat mumkin hai faraz.
Magar toot ke chahna sirf ek baar hota hai
Goodbye SDC
Diya
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27th July 2009, 07:44 PM
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Originally Posted by naresh_mehra110
Diya ji...........bahut khub rahi aapki yeh Ghazal........sabhi sher ache rahe.......... Yeh mujhe jiyada pasand aaye... dosti ko kis tarha samjhey ga woh jis ne seekhi hai faqat makkaariyaaN apne gareebaa ko chaak pehley kar phir too dusro'n ko dey ruswaaiyaaN khush rahiye......aise hi likhte rahiye.........bazm mai aate rahiye...
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Sukriya naresh jee,
aapko meri ghazal pasand aayi...mano mehtan safal hui
apna khayal rakhiyega
Diya
Mohabbat ke baad mohabbat mumkin hai faraz.
Magar toot ke chahna sirf ek baar hota hai
Goodbye SDC
Diya
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27th July 2009, 07:55 PM
diya jee:
Ghazal ka title dekha to, socha ki Ghazal paDhnii chaahiye.... kyun yeh is qaafiye ke gair-muraddif Ghazal mujeh behad pasand hai.. chaliye, aap ki Ghazal par 2 kauDiki raa'ey deta chalta huu.n..
haaye logoN kii karam-farmaaiyaaN
tohmateN, badnaamiyaaN, rusvaaiyaaN
-Kaif Bhopali jee
khuubsuurat zameen chuni hai aap ne Ghazal kahne ke liye.. kaif bhopali saahab kii yeh Ghazal mujhe behad pasand hai...
Kitni acchi hogi uski buraaiyaaN
dil dukhaana jiski hai achaaiyaaN
waise, tanz achchha hai.. par chu.n ki aap behr par likhne ki koshish karti hai.n to, matle ka pahle misra khaariz-e-behr hai... ispar dhyaan dene ki zaruurat hai..
dosti ko kis tarha samjhey ga woh
jis ne seekhi hai faqat makkaariyaaN
yahaa.n qaafiya aap ne Ghalat baa.nDha hai, matle ke lihaaz se qaafiyea, achchhaaiyaa.n, buraaiyaa.n, ruswaaiyaa.n, tanhaaiyaa.n, wagehra waghera ho sakta hai, par makkariyaa.n nahii.n.
apne gareebaa ko chaak pehley kar
phir too dusro'n ko dey ruswaaiyaaN
yahaa.n sher ke dono misre behr me.n nahii.n hai.. phir ruswaaiyaa.n dena bhii thoda sahii nahii.n lag rahaa hai... dekh leejiyegaa
kya teri fitrat mai shamil hai yehi
nafrateiN dhokadhai chaalakiyaaN
yahaa.n bhii qaafiya Theek nahii.n hai,
ab jala seeney mai ulfat ka "DIYA"
chordey taareekiyaaN gehraaiyaaN
pahli misra achchha hai, par duusra us ka saath nahii.n de paa raha hai..... koshish phir se keejiye...
diya jee, yeh meri faqat 2 kauDi ki raa'ey thii, jise maine iimaandaari ke saath diya hai.. par chu.n ki meri yeh zaati raa'ey hai, aap is se ittefaaq rakkhe aisa zaruuri nahii.n hai.. kahii.n koii baat burii lagi ho to mazrat chaahu.ngaa...
koshish zaari rakhiye...
mayank
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