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jindagi -
2nd February 2005, 06:03 PM
Dear viewers,
waise to mujhe poem likhna nahi aata fir bhi maine ek kosis ki hai ye meri pahali kosis hai. pls aap sab apne apne comments jaroor de taaki mai fir se ek aur kosis karoo. Aiye jindagi to kahi tasvir to nahi Waqt ke haatho ki lakir to nahi Kahi waqt tumjhko mujhse chura na le jaaye Aisi kahi meri takdir to nahi Aiye jindagi to kahi tasvir to nahi Mujhe jarroat hai tere sahaare ki Kahi too mujhe de jaaye daga Aisi kahi teri soch to nahi Mujhe u hi akela chhod jaaye Kahi ye tera armaan to nahi Aiye jindagi kahi too tasvir to nahi Ye sach hai ki mai kucch bhi nahi Tere bina yah kucch to nahi lekin Ye bhi to hai ki mai ,mai hoo teri gulaam to nahi Aiye jindagi to kahi tasvir to nahi mai jaroor jaanana chahoongee ki meri kosis kaisi hai so pls meri galatiyo ke taraf jaroor bataana tabhi to use bana paoongee garima |
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Re: jindagi -
2nd February 2005, 06:40 PM
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garima, jindgi ka koi bhi rukh ho chahae... has ke tu jii le, jina isi ka naam hai tumhari koshish bahut hi achhi rahi hai. humesha likhte rahna meena |
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2nd February 2005, 07:20 PM
aapki reply padha achha laga ,
waise to jindagi jeene ka naam hai chahe koi bhi muskil ho hasane kaa naam hai aapne theek kaha koi bhi rukh ho has ke hi jeena chahiye aur aisa hi hoga. mujhe aapne hausala diya aage likhne ka bahoot bahoot shukriya. |
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2nd February 2005, 08:34 PM
tu kya sikhaayegi usye jeene ka andaaz zindagi
jisne jaan liya hai teraa har raaz zindagi Zindgi ko apne maan mutabik chalana apne hi hath main hai. Aapki Koshish achhi hai. Keep it up |
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2nd February 2005, 08:42 PM
grimaji
aapne abhut kuch kha hai in lines main zingi ko define kerna vaise to bahut mushkil hota hai kyunki zindagi ke bahut roop hai mager apne jis roop ko darshaya bahut accha lga bahut hi acchi peom thi aapne apni koshish ko accha anjam diya hum apse aisi bahut sari poems ki asha rakhte hai |
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3rd February 2005, 12:53 PM
Hi Garima Ji,
Aapne toh bohot hi acchha likha hai. Jab alfaaz dil se nikle ho to woh dusre dilo par bhi gehra asar kar jaate hai aur yehi aapke kalaam se bhi hua hai. Bohot khoob. Bas uhi likhte rahey. Salim If there are no tears in the eyes, there will be no rainbow in the soul Happiness is a butterfly, which, when pursued, is always just beyond your grasp, but which, if you sit down quietly, may alight upon you. We come to love not by finding a perfect person but by learning to see an imperfect person perfectly |
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3rd February 2005, 02:51 PM
maine achha likha hai ya nahi ye to mai nahi jaanti lekin haa ek baat hai ki aap sab milkar use achha jaroor bana denge sayad yehi khaas baat hai jo mai yeha aakar kuchh likhane ki himmat kar gayi hoo.
Asha hai ki ye sneh milta rahega isi asha ke saath agale padaw tak ke liye ijaajat maangati hoo. with love light and care garima |
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3rd February 2005, 05:37 PM
Hi garima!
I knew you are a great writer. And as I told you before, you could make a great poet of your self....dream...set a goal in life...you can do that. Aaj agar aapki koshish itni khoobsurat hai, to kal aapki umda kalam zaroor jannat hogi. Is nacheez ki duae hamesha aapke saath hai... Khuda ne chaha to har dua ki asar hazaar guni hogi. Love, nacheez. |
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2nd February 2006, 03:09 PM
Garv,
Bahaut accha kaha hai tumhne, isi tarah likhti raho aur hamare saath baant-tey raho. "Aiye jindagi kahi too tasvir to nahi"........kamaal ki pankti hai Vipin 
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yehi hai jindagi |
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yehi hai jindagi -
3rd February 2006, 10:46 AM
Garima ji
Aapne kavita to bahoot hi achi likhi hai Jindagi to jinda dili ka name hai chao yeh haske jiyo ya roke jina to padega hi na Duniya me aye hai to jeena hi padega. Lekin ek bat sach hai ki jindagi hans ke jiyo, masti me jiye Aap ek kalakar hai jindagi ki tasveer ko kaise banana yeh to aap par hi nirbhar karta hai Keep it up and lets enjoy life as it is n_joy>............. |
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