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1st November 2004, 01:44 PM
lo ji phir aa gaye kuch alag se khayal le kar....kal sunday tha aur dinn bhar ghar mai baithe thai...so miyaa naveed kii phir se madad lee aur ek kalaam puraa huaa...ap sab kii tavajjo chahungaa.....dost ka kehnaa hai ye kalaam puraa utarta hai shayri kii takniikiyon mai.......khair ap sab kii nazaar ye kalaam.....haan par ye khayal mere hai inn par amal karna aur na karnaa ap par hai...
 muddato mout ne bhi tarsaaya hame.. ..... |
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1st November 2004, 09:46 PM
sanjoo
yar kiya kahon.... aaj kal lafz or sochon ne tum se aik aisa rishta bana rakha hay k mehfil c lagi rehti hogi tumhare khiyalon main...i m sure.. or yakin karo bohat acha likha hay parh kar bohat khushi hui.... apna khiyla rkahna.. khan |
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1st November 2004, 11:31 PM
sanjoo..
meri or se bharpoor daad kabul karo...naveed sahib se aapki dosti kya jamaal kar rahi hai...dekho tau...kitna badhiya kalaam mehfil kee nazar kiya hai baadlon ke peeche bhi chaand hota hai kyon na aisaa chand nazar hum karein bahut achhe dard ko sehlaana aasaan nahin har waqt khud par 'sanju' yun jabar hum karein waah! excellent! paras gayi ruton ka sulagataa sa intezaar bhii ho mere khuloos kaa andaaz ye bhii sachhaa hai rakhuun na rabt magar dostii shumaar bhii ho --Sayyidaa Fatimaa Hasan |
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2nd November 2004, 02:10 PM
thnx..moon and....paras....mujhe pata thaa ap dono ko mera kalaam sach mai acha lage gaa....sorry paras......mai jald jawab deta hu....mujhe yaad hai apna kahaa...
aur haan naveed aur merii pic ap sab k bich laa raha hu...kyu kii kuch silaa yuu mila jaye tao kya harjh hai......sanju! muddato mout ne bhi tarsaaya hame.. ..... |
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2nd November 2004, 02:30 PM
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2nd November 2004, 05:48 PM
Sanjoo yooNto tumse mil hi chuka hooN......Phir bhi
aaj tumse eise milke bhi achchha laga...jeisa sochta tha shaayad kuchh eise hi nazar aate ho tum...ab ye mat poochhna ke 'tum kon ho keise pehchana'  Or rahi baat tumhaari rachna ki....to meri taraf se Naveed or tumhe ....donoN ko hi is khoobsoorat si composition ke liye mubarakbaad. Naveed Saahab tak bhi hamaara salaam pahuNche.... Anjaam sochkar, aksar khaamosh hi reh jaate haiN. - Chaand |
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3rd November 2004, 07:59 AM
hiiiiiiiiiiii!!! suprise!!
ha ha ha tumhari sab complain baad mein sun lungi...!! so sorrryyyyyyyy....i've been really buzy....!!! anywayz how r you??!! i'm buzy...with college..got exams coming up in all my classes...but about your shayri... i'm so proud of you!!  !! mein to tumhara naam roshan kisi din karungi...parrr filhal...tune mera naam roshan kar diya..!! kya likha hai...wah wah wah!! this is not you usually writing..its different yett....i can tell u wrote it...!! anywayz i'm gnna go back to studying...i talk to you later and you take care!~ luv, tulsika!~ P.S. yes your friend naveed also deserves some credit..good job man..!! keep it up guyz... 
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Re: ek Guzarish Thodi sii be-wafaii kii…… -
3rd November 2004, 12:24 PM
HI SANJU BHAI
kaise ho aap .???umeed karta hoon pardesh mein bhi desh jaisa sukoon aur pyar aap ko mil raha hoga...bahoot behtreen gazal arz ki hai aapne.....har sher laajawab hai..daad kubool kijiye...naved bhai aap bhi... take care -MANOJ karte hai jo "kureel" se gila karte rahein. |
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3rd November 2004, 04:16 PM
Sanjoo,
Waht a beautiful post!! really so good... Daad kubool karna meri... this one is special.... I just loved these lines... Chalte Chalte rishte thhak bhi jaate hain, kucch nayi saansein inme asar hum karein Baadalon ke peecche bhi chaand hota hia, kyun na aisa chaand nazar hum karein... Dooo keep writing such beautiful stuff, tc Lagta hai is baar "Pulkit", kismat teri bhi rang laayii hai |
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5th November 2004, 09:17 PM
are wah sanju............man gaye tumhe.........bahut hi badhiya likha hain........itna jyada udne ki zaroorat nahin hain......thodi si credit to apke dost navedjee ko bhi jani chahiye......
Chalte Chalte rishte thhak bhi jaate hain, kucch nayi saansein inme asar hum karein.. 2 good... aur sorry bhi tumhara dil dukhane ke liye...i didnt mean it....tumne jaisa socha aisa koi matlab nahin tha mera...lekin tum therre pagal..jyada hi dimag kaam karta hain tumhara...bye... urs frnd. mausam Jaane kya samjhi main useN Faasla nazar aaya....Kuch kadmon ke saath se |
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6th November 2004, 06:54 PM
SaNJoo SaHaB,
PaDh KaR JuBaaN PaR SirF EK Hi LaFz AaYa AuRe Wo Hai "KaYaMaT" DaaD KaBuL KaReN. Du`Aaoon Ke SaaTh IZaaZaT ChaHunGi. NiShaa BaS ITNa To BaTaa Do Ki Kya Thi KhaTaa HuMaaRii. ______________________________ PyaR ITNa KaRo Ki PyaR Ko SaH SaKein BiChaD Bhi JaaIen aGaR Hum To JiNDa RaH SaKein NiShaa |
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7th November 2004, 06:47 PM
hi sanjoo
hw r u hws life, and r u settling in by d looks of it u r. neway i think ur new frnd is having a good affect on u and ur thinking. its a great poem i luv it, i think every stanza in this poem was vickd so make sure u keep on writing good poems like dat yeah take care of ur self keep on writing bye |
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Re: ek Guzarish Thodi sii be-wafaii kii…… -
27th November 2004, 02:47 PM
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Jindagi se to khair shikvaa tha, muddato mout ne bhi tarsaaya hame.. " ye sanj ne apne sing mein likha tha to muat ne bhi naa jaane kyun uski baat maan li aur use tarsaana chodke apne aagosh mein le liya. unki rachna nishandeh bhut achgi hai lekin ab to bas rachnaye hi bnachi hai yaado ke saath. sakhi शब्दों में पिरोना है , जिससे वो हमारी यादों में महकते रहे |
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