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Sad "Yaad Aaye Bahut" - 23rd August 2008, 11:00 AM

Namaskaar dosto

phir se bazm mein hazir hoon apne ahsaas lekar....kuch udhasi ke palo.n mein kagaz par likhe ahsaas aap sabke saath share kar rahi hoon.



"Yaad Aaye Bahut"

“toot kar jo hum bikhrey to gabraye bahut,
teri bahho.n ke sahaarey yaad aaye bahut,

hatheli par rakh ashq, jo tumne choom liya,
hua afsos! Ab tak yeh moti ganvaye bahut,

mushkil mein kyu koi haath na thaam saka,
kahne ko to dost humne bhi banaye bahut,

jane kaya tha uski udhaas si aanko.n mein,
woh jab bhi yaad aaye hain, rulaaye bahut,

umr-e-jawani apni kyuN tanha hi beet gaye,
yeh khalish abhi tak hai dil dukhaye bahut,

mazhabi junoon mein, sarhad bana daalii,
Phir apne faisley pe haiN pachtaye bahut,

kis kis ko batauN apnii udhaasi ka sabab,
ki “Sunita” ko ek pardesi yaad aaye bahut.

(22.08.2008)


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Namaskaar dosto

phir se bazm mein hazir hoon apne ahsaas lekar....kuch udhasi ke palo.n mein kagaz par likhe ahsaas aap sabke saath share kar rahi hoon.



"Yaad Aaye Bahut"

“toot kar jo hum bikhrey to gabraye bahut,
teri bahho.n ke sahaarey yaad aaye bahut,

hatheli par rakh ashq, jo tumne choom liya,
hua afsos! Ab tak yeh moti ganvaye bahut,

muskil mein kyu koi haath na thaam saka,
kahne ko to dost humne bhi banaye bahut,

jane kaya tha uski udhaas si aanko.n mein,
woh jab bhi yaad aaye hain, rulaaye bahut,

umr-e-jawani apni kyuN tanha hi beet gaye,
yeh khalish abhi tak hai dil dukhaye bahut,

mazhabi junoon mein, sarhad bana daalii,
Phir apne faisley pe haiN pachtaye bahut,

kis kis ko batauN apnii udhaasi ka sabab,
ki “Sunita” ko ek pardesi yaad aaye bahut.

(22.08.2008)


wah...sunita di....aag laga di mehfil me....daad kubool kijiyega
   
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23rd August 2008, 11:08 AM

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Namaskaar dosto

phir se bazm mein hazir hoon apne ahsaas lekar....kuch udhasi ke palo.n mein kagaz par likhe ahsaas aap sabke saath share kar rahi hoon.



"Yaad Aaye Bahut"

“toot kar jo hum bikhrey to gabraye bahut,
teri bahho.n ke sahaarey yaad aaye bahut,

hatheli par rakh ashq, jo tumne choom liya,
hua afsos! Ab tak yeh moti ganvaye bahut,

muskil mein kyu koi haath na thaam saka,
kahne ko to dost humne bhi banaye bahut,

jane kaya tha uski udhaas si aanko.n mein,
woh jab bhi yaad aaye hain, rulaaye bahut,

umr-e-jawani apni kyuN tanha hi beet gaye,
yeh khalish abhi tak hai dil dukhaye bahut,

mazhabi junoon mein, sarhad bana daalii,
Phir apne faisley pe haiN pachtaye bahut,

kis kis ko batauN apnii udhaasi ka sabab,
ki “Sunita” ko ek pardesi yaad aaye bahut.

(22.08.2008)

hello didi

aaj ek bahut hi shandar gazal likhi hai aapne
sach poochiye to jitni gazal maine padii hai uname se ye mujhe behad pasand aayii... poori ki poori gazal behad pasand aayii
gazal ke har ek sher per daad.....

shukriyaa

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23rd August 2008, 11:13 AM

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Pranaam!!

bazm meiN aapki taazaah Ghazal naZ'r aaii .. aapne apne dil ke ehsaasoN ke saath pooraa iNsaaf kiyaa haii.. lafzoN kaa bhee ba-Khuubee istemaal kyaa haii... Ghazal kaa mat'laa aur maq'taa mujhe sab se zeyaadaah pasaNd aayaa.. dil par gehraa asar kar gaii aapki yeh Ghazal... duaa hay Khudaa aapki KhaahiSh bahot jald poorii kareN.. YuuNhi bazm ki raunaq afzA'ii karte raheN aage bhee.. daad.. !

KhuSh raheN... apnaa Khayaal raKheN

duaaoN ke saath ijaazat

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Aadaab sunita ji Bahut kamaal likha hai aapne dil khush ho gaya kafi waqt baad koi itna accha kalaam padne ko mila unhi likhti rahiye..........Khuda Hafiz


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Namaskaar dosto

phir se bazm mein hazir hoon apne ahsaas lekar....kuch udhasi ke palo.n mein kagaz par likhe ahsaas aap sabke saath share kar rahi hoon.


"Yaad Aaye Bahut"

“toot kar jo hum bikhrey to gabraye bahut,
teri bahho.n ke sahaarey yaad aaye bahut,

hatheli par rakh ashq, jo tumne choom liya,
hua afsos! Ab tak yeh moti ganvaye bahut,

muskil mein kyu koi haath na thaam saka,
kahne ko to dost humne bhi banaye bahut,

jane kaya tha uski udhaas si aanko.n mein,
woh jab bhi yaad aaye hain, rulaaye bahut,

umr-e-jawani apni kyuN tanha hi beet gaye,
yeh khalish abhi tak hai dil dukhaye bahut,

mazhabi junoon mein, sarhad bana daalii,
Phir apne faisley pe haiN pachtaye bahut,

kis kis ko batauN apnii udhaasi ka sabab,
ki “Sunita” ko ek pardesi yaad aaye bahut.

(22.08.2008)


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Dunia ke sitam ki koi perwah nahi mujhko,
wo kyoun mujhpe ungliya uthaye ja rahe hain.
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23rd August 2008, 06:49 PM

wah meri dukhi atma.....kya ghazal likhi hain...............badhiya hain

“toot kar jo hum bikhrey to gabraye bahut,
teri bahho.n ke sahaarey yaad aaye bahut,

hmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm....


hatheli par rakh ashq, jo tumne choom liya,
hua afsos! Ab tak yeh moti ganvaye bahut,

nice nice.....

muskil mein kyu koi haath na thaam saka,
kahne ko to dost humne bhi banaye bahut,

sahin hain di........

jane kaya tha uski udhaas si aanko.n mein,
woh jab bhi yaad aaye hain, rulaaye bahut,

hai di ..kya baat hain....

umr-e-jawani apni kyuN tanha hi beet gaye,
yeh khalish abhi tak hai dil dukhaye bahut,



mazhabi junoon mein, sarhad bana daalii,
Phir apne faisley pe haiN pachtaye bahut,

bahut khub di..............

kis kis ko batauN apnii udhaasi ka sabab,
ki “Sunita” ko ek pardesi yaad aaye bahut.

bahut pasand aaya di apka yeh kalam.............daad....aise hi likhte rahe...........


apki...
mausam


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Jaane kya samjhi main useN

Faasla nazar aaya....Kuch kadmon ke saath se

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24th August 2008, 08:11 AM

Hello Sunita ji
kaise ho?

aapne ne Bahut hi khooooooooob and bahut hi pyara likha hai


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25th August 2008, 11:19 AM

sunita jee !

bahut khoob kaha aapne !

har ashaar apne aap meiN ek daastaN chupaye hue hai !

ghazal vakeyi daad ki haQdaar hai !

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Namaskaar dosto

phir se bazm mein hazir hoon apne ahsaas lekar....kuch udhasi ke palo.n mein kagaz par likhe ahsaas aap sabke saath share kar rahi hoon.



"Yaad Aaye Bahut"

“toot kar jo hum bikhrey to gabraye bahut,
teri bahho.n ke sahaarey yaad aaye bahut,

hatheli par rakh ashq, jo tumne choom liya,
hua afsos! Ab tak yeh moti ganvaye bahut,

muskil mein kyu koi haath na thaam saka,
kahne ko to dost humne bhi banaye bahut,

jane kaya tha uski udhaas si aanko.n mein,
woh jab bhi yaad aaye hain, rulaaye bahut,

umr-e-jawani apni kyuN tanha hi beet gaye,
yeh khalish abhi tak hai dil dukhaye bahut,

mazhabi junoon mein, sarhad bana daalii,
Phir apne faisley pe haiN pachtaye bahut,

kis kis ko batauN apnii udhaasi ka sabab,
ki “Sunita” ko ek pardesi yaad aaye bahut.

(22.08.2008)
Bahat khoob Didi.......bahot zyada pasand aayi yeh nagme aapke.....


jane kaya tha uski udhaas si aanko.n mein,
woh jab bhi yaad aaye hain, rulaaye bahut

yeh to aapne dil ki baat humare yahan likh diye hain.......

Didi ur too good..........


Jab apna haal kisi se chhupana padta hai
Hon zakhm dil mein magar muskurana padta hai..nm



Mohabbat ke baad mohabbat mumkin hai faraz.
Magar toot ke chahna sirf ek baar hota hai


Goodbye SDC

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27th August 2008, 11:14 AM

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Namaskaar dosto

phir se bazm mein hazir hoon apne ahsaas lekar....kuch udhasi ke palo.n mein kagaz par likhe ahsaas aap sabke saath share kar rahi hoon.


"Yaad Aaye Bahut"

“toot kar jo hum bikhrey to gabraye bahut,
teri bahho.n ke sahaarey yaad aaye bahut,

hatheli par rakh ashq, jo tumne choom liya,
hua afsos! Ab tak yeh moti ganvaye bahut,

muskil mein kyu koi haath na thaam saka,
kahne ko to dost humne bhi banaye bahut,

jane kaya tha uski udhaas si aanko.n mein,
woh jab bhi yaad aaye hain, rulaaye bahut,

umr-e-jawani apni kyuN tanha hi beet gaye,
yeh khalish abhi tak hai dil dukhaye bahut,

mazhabi junoon mein, sarhad bana daalii,
Phir apne faisley pe haiN pachtaye bahut,

kis kis ko batauN apnii udhaasi ka sabab,
ki “Sunita” ko ek pardesi yaad aaye bahut.

(22.08.2008)
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wah...sunita di....aag laga di mehfil me....daad kubool kijiyega
raj bhai....bahut badkau compliment hai

aapne pada aur pasand kiya....shukriya


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bhut khub - 31st August 2008, 12:41 PM

sunita ji namaskaar....bhut dino baad aiya mehfil mein magar bhut khushi huyii aapki gazal se ru b ru ho kar, kyaa andaaz hai har khyaal pukhta or purkashish hai....likhi rahiye....Raj..


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aaj ek bahut hi shandar gazal likhi hai aapne
sach poochiye to jitni gazal maine padii hai uname se ye mujhe behad pasand aayii... poori ki poori gazal behad pasand aayii
gazal ke har ek sher per daad.....

shukriyaa

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kush rahiye
aapki didi


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23rd September 2008, 10:46 AM

sunita jee:

aap ne to bohat khuub likha hai.. kyaa baat hai kamaal hai! aap to bohat dil-farb likhti hai.n.. ehsaas ko aap ne achchhi taah se lafzo.n me.n piroya hai, is liye mere jaanib se daad haazir hai! yuu.n hi likhati rahe.n.. mujhe yeh sher behad pasand aaye...

hatheli par rakh ashq, jo tumne choom liya,
hua afsos! Ab tak yeh moti ganvaye bahut,

muskil mein kyu koi haath na thaam saka,
kahne ko to dost humne bhi banaye bahut,

jane kaya tha uski udhaas si aanko.n mein,
woh jab bhi yaad aaye hain, rulaaye bahut,

umr-e-jawani apni kyuN tanha hi beet gaye,
yeh khalish abhi tak hai dil dukhaye bahut,




buraa jo dekhan mai.n Chalaa, buraa naa milyaa koye
jo mann Khojaa apnaa to mujh se buraa naa koye


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sunita ji

apke sayari bahuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuut hi achi lagi ziska m sabado m bayan hi nahi kar sakta

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toot kar jo hum bikhrey to gabraye bahut,
teri bahho.n ke sahaarey yaad aaye bahut,

hatheli par rakh ashq, jo tumne choom liya,
hua afsos! Ab tak yeh moti ganvaye bahut

Waaahhhh... bahut hi umda aaghaaz hai.... Doosra sher dil ko chhoo gaya...


muskil mein kyu koi haath na thaam saka,
kahne ko to dost humne bhi banaye bahut,

jane kaya tha uski udhaas si aanko.n mein,
woh jab bhi yaad aaye hain, rulaaye bahut,

Bahut khooob... behad khoobsurat bayaani...


umr-e-jawani apni kyuN tanha hi beet gaye,
yeh khalish abhi tak hai dil dukhaye bahut,

mazhabi junoon mein, sarhad bana daalii,
Phir apne faisley pe haiN pachtaye bahut,

Behad khoobsurat...



kis kis ko batauN apnii udhaasi ka sabab,
ki “Sunita” ko ek pardesi yaad aaye bahut

Waahh...Kya baat kahi hai...

Hi Didi,

Kaisi hain aap? ummeed hain acche se hongi...

Aapki yeh ghzal dil ko bahut kareeb se chhoo ke gayi hai... Sach maaniye har sher bhut hi khoobsurat laga... Ravaani bhi khoobsurat hai, expressions bhi kamaal ke hain... dil khush ho gaya yeh ghazal padhkar...

Meri dil se dheron daad kubool kijiyega... bass yun hi likhti rahiye...


Kab sochaa thha milegaa humsafar "Shweta" jaisaa
Lagta hai is baar "Pulkit", kismat teri bhi rang laayii hai
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DEAR
PULKIT

WAHAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA KYA LIKHA H DIL KO BAHUT ACHA LAGA...................

THANKSSSSSSSSSSSS A LOTSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSS


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sunita ji apne ye bahut bahut bahut hi achcha likha hai kisi aik sher ko achcha nahi kah sakta sabhi aik se badkar aik hai par ye aik sher to gajab hi hai ki
mazhabi junoon mein, sarhad bana daalii,
Phir apne faisley pe haiN pachtaye bahut,


bahut hi umda,pls share karte rahe,khush rahe,sukriya


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Namaskaar dosto

phir se bazm mein hazir hoon apne ahsaas lekar....kuch udhasi ke palo.n mein kagaz par likhe ahsaas aap sabke saath share kar rahi hoon.


"Yaad Aaye Bahut"

“toot kar jo hum bikhrey to gabraye bahut,
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hatheli par rakh ashq, jo tumne choom liya,
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muskil mein kyu koi haath na thaam saka,
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jane kaya tha uski udhaas si aanko.n mein,
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mazhabi junoon mein, sarhad bana daalii,
Phir apne faisley pe haiN pachtaye bahut,

kis kis ko batauN apnii udhaasi ka sabab,
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bahut khoobsurat ehsaas hain di....


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Pranaam!!

bazm meiN aapki taazaah Ghazal naZ'r aaii .. aapne apne dil ke ehsaasoN ke saath pooraa iNsaaf kiyaa haii.. lafzoN kaa bhee ba-Khuubee istemaal kyaa haii... Ghazal kaa mat'laa aur maq'taa mujhe sab se zeyaadaah pasaNd aayaa.. dil par gehraa asar kar gaii aapki yeh Ghazal... duaa hay Khudaa aapki KhaahiSh bahot jald poorii kareN.. YuuNhi bazm ki raunaq afzA'ii karte raheN aage bhee.. daad.. !

KhuSh raheN... apnaa Khayaal raKheN

duaaoN ke saath ijaazat

aapka chhoTu

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shukriya mere chottu.....hamesha saath dene ke liye

tumhari sister


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Aadaab sunita ji Bahut kamaal likha hai aapne dil khush ho gaya kafi waqt baad koi itna accha kalaam padne ko mila unhi likhti rahiye..........Khuda Hafiz
shukriya khashif jee....aapko hamari shayri acchi lagi, aapke lafzo.n se hume tasali hue ki humne sahi likha hai....yoon hi padtey rahiyega.

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wah meri dukhi atma.....kya ghazal likhi hain...............badhiya hain

“toot kar jo hum bikhrey to gabraye bahut,
teri bahho.n ke sahaarey yaad aaye bahut,

hmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm....


hatheli par rakh ashq, jo tumne choom liya,
hua afsos! Ab tak yeh moti ganvaye bahut,

nice nice.....

muskil mein kyu koi haath na thaam saka,
kahne ko to dost humne bhi banaye bahut,

sahin hain di........

jane kaya tha uski udhaas si aanko.n mein,
woh jab bhi yaad aaye hain, rulaaye bahut,

hai di ..kya baat hain....

umr-e-jawani apni kyuN tanha hi beet gaye,
yeh khalish abhi tak hai dil dukhaye bahut,



mazhabi junoon mein, sarhad bana daalii,
Phir apne faisley pe haiN pachtaye bahut,

bahut khub di..............

kis kis ko batauN apnii udhaasi ka sabab,
ki “Sunita” ko ek pardesi yaad aaye bahut.

bahut pasand aaya di apka yeh kalam.............daad....aise hi likhte rahe...........


apki...
mausam


mujhe tera review bhi bahut pasand aaya......sarahne ke liye dil se shukriya....yoon hi meri adna si koshishy padte rahna.

tumhari diii


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Adaab !!!

kaafi waqt ke bad lauta hoN SDC per . jab yahaN se gya to aisa laga tha jese ab kabhi likh hi nahi paaoN ga lakin app jese shaa'iroN ko peRhene ke baad jese khoon meN wohi josh doRne lagta hai , appki ghazal behad behad behad achi lagi umeed hai app se bahut kuch aur bhi seekhne ko mile ga ,


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4th October 2008, 09:11 AM

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Bahut khoob ... no words to decribe how well u have written..
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kaise ho?

aapne ne Bahut hi khooooooooob and bahut hi pyara likha hai
Heer ji bahut bahut shukriya aapne hume pada aur saraha....aap dard thread par bahut kun aati, phir bhi aapne yahaN aakar mujhe pada...bahut accha laga.

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sunita jee !

bahut khoob kaha aapne !

har ashaar apne aap meiN ek daastaN chupaye hue hai !

ghazal vakeyi daad ki haQdaar hai !

tareef Qabool ki jaye !
Shitiz ji aapki daad humey dil se kabool hai....yeh shayri bas aap jaise dosto.n ki vajaha se yahaN tak aa pahuNchi hai, SDC se sab kuch seekha hai aur usi ke naam kar rahe haiN.


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Bahat khoob Didi.......bahot zyada pasand aayi yeh nagme aapke.....


jane kaya tha uski udhaas si aanko.n mein,
woh jab bhi yaad aaye hain, rulaaye bahut

yeh to aapne dil ki baat humare yahan likh diye hain.......

Didi ur too good..........


Jab apna haal kisi se chhupana padta hai
Hon zakhm dil mein magar muskurana padta hai..nm


Thanks diya............tumne mujhe pada aur kuch ek sher pasand bhi kiye...yoon hi saath banaye rakhna.

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5th October 2008, 10:38 PM

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Sat sree akaal,

Wah ji wah..as mausam di said...dukhi aatma..kya likh diya...i m damn sure...jab gazal likhi tab aapki jiju se baat hui hogi..or fir aap phone rakhne ke baad roi...or ye gazal likhi...ale meli pyaali chi panjaabi kudi...aise thhode udaas hote hain.......chalo smile....like this

Pata hai..maine na abhi kidnap movie dekhi..khatam hone ke baad socha sdc pe silent hoke jaau...kisiko pata nahi chalega..lekin aapki gazal padhi to khud ko rok nahi saki online aane se...damn...mujhe login karna hi padaa aapko replay dene ke liye...nevermind...

Di its supab...mind blowing gazal...really yaar aapne likha pahale to yakeen hi nahi hua...lekin fir baad me yakeen aa hi gaya...sacch kahu to kuch kuch apni jaisi lagi ye gazal...sacch me insaan kabhi kabhi jisse bahot pyaar karta hai usi se hi door ho jaata hai...well i wish ke aapko jaldi se vo mile jo aapko chaahiye...u know something...main aajkal god ko manne lagi hu..i mean maanti to thhi..god se fight thha..vo finish kar diya..aapke liye pray jo kani thhi isi liye.....shuuuuu!!! kisiko batana nahi...its secrat ok......

abhi bye...

or haa..jaate jaate thhodi si daad lelijiye meri or se...

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Namaskaar dosto

phir se bazm mein hazir hoon apne ahsaas lekar....kuch udhasi ke palo.n mein kagaz par likhe ahsaas aap sabke saath share kar rahi hoon.



"Yaad Aaye Bahut"

“toot kar jo hum bikhrey to gabraye bahut,
teri bahho.n ke sahaarey yaad aaye bahut,

hatheli par rakh ashq, jo tumne choom liya,
hua afsos! Ab tak yeh moti ganvaye bahut,

muskil mein kyu koi haath na thaam saka,
kahne ko to dost humne bhi banaye bahut,

jane kaya tha uski udhaas si aanko.n mein,
woh jab bhi yaad aaye hain, rulaaye bahut,

umr-e-jawani apni kyuN tanha hi beet gaye,
yeh khalish abhi tak hai dil dukhaye bahut,

mazhabi junoon mein, sarhad bana daalii,
Phir apne faisley pe haiN pachtaye bahut,

kis kis ko batauN apnii udhaasi ka sabab,
ki “Sunita” ko ek pardesi yaad aaye bahut.

(22.08.2008)
wowww didi herat hai ke is se pehle aapki ye ghazal dikhi nahi mujhe bohattttt acha likha hai sab ashaar pasand aye didi yunhi likhte rahiye


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Namaskaar dosto

phir se bazm mein hazir hoon apne ahsaas lekar....kuch udhasi ke palo.n mein kagaz par likhe ahsaas aap sabke saath share kar rahi hoon.



"Yaad Aaye Bahut"

“toot kar jo hum bikhrey to gabraye bahut,
teri bahho.n ke sahaarey yaad aaye bahut,

hatheli par rakh ashq, jo tumne choom liya,
hua afsos! Ab tak yeh moti ganvaye bahut,

muskil mein kyu koi haath na thaam saka,
kahne ko to dost humne bhi banaye bahut,

jane kaya tha uski udhaas si aanko.n mein,
woh jab bhi yaad aaye hain, rulaaye bahut,

umr-e-jawani apni kyuN tanha hi beet gaye,
yeh khalish abhi tak hai dil dukhaye bahut,

mazhabi junoon mein, sarhad bana daalii,
Phir apne faisley pe haiN pachtaye bahut,

kis kis ko batauN apnii udhaasi ka sabab,
ki “Sunita” ko ek pardesi yaad aaye bahut.

(22.08.2008)
A really heart touching ghazal by u "sunita jee", congratulation 4 a beautiful peace of work;

keep it up...............................
It is wonderful experience to read ur poetry after such a long time........

i just wanna say
hats off to ur thought of mind, piece of work and off course creativity.

regards
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Bahut Khoob di!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1



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Namaskar Sunita G.

In shabdon ke peechhe ki udaasi ko main bahut achhi tarah se samajh sakta hun.
Khuda se guzaarish rahegi ke yeh judaai ke baadal jald hi hat jayein aur milan ka aasman aapke sahmne ho.

Mashroof rehne ki wajah se reply karne mein deri ke liye muaafi chahta hun..

Aapke ehsaas bahut achhe lage.

Khush Rahiye
namaskaar jasdeep jee.....aapne apni masrofiyat se kuch pal meri shayri padne ke liye nikaaley, bahut bahut shukriya....yoon hi aate rahiyega.

kush rahiye
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sunita ji namaskaar....bhut dino baad aiya mehfil mein magar bhut khushi huyii aapki gazal se ru b ru ho kar, kyaa andaaz hai har khyaal pukhta or purkashish hai....likhi rahiye....Raj..
namaskaar rajveer jee.....bahut accha laga aapko mahfil mein dekh kar...jane aap kahaN busy rahte haiN aaj-kal, SDC ke liye ab waqt hi nahi hai aapke paas, par kabhi kabhi aa jaya kijiye, SDC ko aap jaise shayro.n ki bahut jaroorat hai.....aapne meri poetry padne ke liye waqt nikala....hume behad kushi hai es baat ki....pls mahfil mein aate raha kijiye.


god bless u
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sunita jee:

aap ne to bohat khuub likha hai.. kyaa baat hai kamaal hai! aap to bohat dil-farb likhti hai.n.. ehsaas ko aap ne achchhi taah se lafzo.n me.n piroya hai, is liye mere jaanib se daad haazir hai! yuu.n hi likhati rahe.n.. mujhe yeh sher behad pasand aaye...

hatheli par rakh ashq, jo tumne choom liya,
hua afsos! Ab tak yeh moti ganvaye bahut,

muskil mein kyu koi haath na thaam saka,
kahne ko to dost humne bhi banaye bahut,

jane kaya tha uski udhaas si aanko.n mein,
woh jab bhi yaad aaye hain, rulaaye bahut,

umr-e-jawani apni kyuN tanha hi beet gaye,
yeh khalish abhi tak hai dil dukhaye bahut,



hmmmmmm...........mayank ji aap aur meri gazal par kaya baat hai....ek baar to yakeen hi nahi hua ki yeh aap hi ka review hai.....kyuNki aapko arse baad apni gazal par dekha hai....aapne mujhe pada mere ahsaas pasand kiye.....bahut accha laga mujhe, esi tarah aage bhi aapka saath chahiye....dil se shukriya.

god bless u


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