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13th February 2012, 10:11 AM
DostoN,
chand alfaaz the zehan mein jab yeh likhne baithaa tha anjaaN tha ki ek kahaani aapke rubaroo ho jaayeGii. is nazm/ghazal/sher to nah paaunga bas kuch khayaalat hai jo aapke samaksh rakh raha hoon aur iltejaa hai ki ise shayri ke daayre mein rakhkar mat toliyeGaa aab yeh deewar-o-dar khaali nazar aata hai kyuN yeh Ghar mujhe khaali nazar aata hai baat nazariye ki hi hoti hai aksar lekin is umr mein aadha bhara gilaas bhi chalak jaata hai suniye zara aaj shaam ko ghar jaldi aana Miyaa'N ji bole kis khushi mein begum farmaana Bahut din huye hai bacchoN se baat kiye hue maa wale dil ko Qanaat* kiye hue *Qanaat = Satisfy maine aaj apne haathon se kheer banaayi hai mithaa thoda tez hai aur mamtaa bhi milaayi hai has kar woh bole aacha chalo jaldi hi aa jaaunGaa aur agar bach jaaye to thodi kheer mein bhi khaaunGaa shaam huyi aur bade bete ko jab line thi lagaayi 'maa meeting mein hoon' ek dabi aawaaz di sunaayi aaj der ho jaayeGii der raat tak kaam karunGaa aap so jaao mein subah wapas phone karunGaa aankh se behte paani se jab kheer nam ho gayi baap ki kheer khaane ki hasrat bhi kam ho gayi itne mein suudh aayi ki chote bete ko phone lagaate hai chaliye dekhte hai chote miyaan kya farmaate hai pitaaji has ke jab bole bete aaj tumhari maa ne kheer banayi hai are 'daddy' aabhi bahut mushkil se neend aayi hai maa ko kehnaa mere hisse ka bhi khaa le aur dil nahi maanta to bade bhaiyaa ko hi bhog lagaa le chalo isi bahaane se humari bachhon se baat ho gayi khinn bhav mein haste huye bole raat ho gayi chalo khaana khaale aur fir so jaate hai buddha buddhi apna dukhdaa ro jaate hai kaash ki unko ilm hota hai ki hum kitne akele hai duniyadari mein jo hai uljhen inhi haathon mein khele hai aankh khuli to subah huyi thi, uff yeh swapan to toota ek kheer ke katore ne mera chain tha loota chaliye ji uth kar tayaar ho jaaiye hum jaa rahe hai bete agar tum nahi aa sakte to hum aa rahe hai aab is umr mein yun aakele na raha jaata hai kabhi hota hai aadha bhara gilaas bhi chalak jaata hai Qasid ___________________________________________ नाम-ए-वफ़ा की जफ़ा बताएं क्या है ज़हन में क्या बोल जाएँ रफ़्तार-ए-दिल अब थम सी गयी है 'क़ासिद' पर अब है टिकी निगाहें |
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13th February 2012, 03:10 PM
mast saheb achhe khayaalat haiN...
meri jaanib se daad qubuul kijiyega....  Uss Rizk Se Tau Maut Bhali Jis Rizk Se Aatee Ho Tere Parwaaz MeiN Kotaahi.... vikramjethi@gmail.com |
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28th September 2012, 10:32 AM
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aapka apnaa Qasid ___________________________________________ नाम-ए-वफ़ा की जफ़ा बताएं क्या है ज़हन में क्या बोल जाएँ रफ़्तार-ए-दिल अब थम सी गयी है 'क़ासिद' पर अब है टिकी निगाहें |
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26th December 2012, 07:00 PM
Bohat khoobsurat khayaal haiN.....touching.............
Zainy PalkoN ki baand ko tod ke daaman pe aa gira Ek aaNsu mere zabt ki tauheen kar gaya... Nm |
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27th December 2012, 09:03 AM
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Shukriya ek baar fir dabi si muskaan ke saath aankh chalak aayi ise padh kar... aapka apnaa Qasid ___________________________________________ नाम-ए-वफ़ा की जफ़ा बताएं क्या है ज़हन में क्या बोल जाएँ रफ़्तार-ए-दिल अब थम सी गयी है 'क़ासिद' पर अब है टिकी निगाहें |
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27th December 2012, 10:18 AM
Anu bhaii:
namaste! bahot hi khushii huii bazm mein aapko deKh kar... aur ees koShiSh ke baare mein kyaa kahuun .. har ik lafz dil ko Chhu gaye... ehsaas dil mein Ghar kar gayaa... daad!! Khush rahiye... apnaa Khayaal raKhen duaaon ke saath ijaazat aapka ~Dhaval |
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27th December 2012, 12:35 PM
Bahut khuuuuuubbbbbbbb..............................
zaari apnaa safar rakhtaa huN !! ===========================  sharma.rajeev701@gmail.com https://www.facebook.com/rajeevsharmaraj111 http://www.rajeevsharmaraj.blogspot.com/ |
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27th December 2012, 02:12 PM
bohat hi khoob bade bhai .. aapko itne dinbaad dekha sab yaadeN taaza ho gayi ...
aate rahiye Kunaal Hai 'sifar' bhi reyazi ka hissa.. Shayrii bhi hisaab ki hogi.. |
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9th December 2013, 03:07 PM
Thanks Rajeev..
Kunal..kaha ho bhai aaj kal..ek saal hue is mehfil mein aana nahi ho paa raha..aaj tumhare reply dekha aur kuch puraani yadein fir taaza ho gayi.. Khayaal rakhnaa -aapna apnaa Qasid ___________________________________________ नाम-ए-वफ़ा की जफ़ा बताएं क्या है ज़हन में क्या बोल जाएँ रफ़्तार-ए-दिल अब थम सी गयी है 'क़ासिद' पर अब है टिकी निगाहें |
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21st June 2014, 08:50 PM
Anuji apki ye creation padhke mujhe baghbaan movie ki yaad agai, aapne jis tarahse budhe maa baap ki apne bachchon keliye mohabbat unka akelapan ek kheer ko base banakr ye jo kavita pesh ki hai kaabile tareef hai, ye ek aisi asadharan si sadharan kavita hai ki koi padhe to ye sochega mai bhi likh sakta hun lekin jab hath me kalam hogi to lafz nahin milenge, bahot khoob Anuji apki har ek rachna ekse badhkar ek hoti hai.
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21st June 2014, 10:11 PM
Aaj main dil khol ke kahnaa chahta hoon ke..
Mast ne mujhe mast kar diyaa yaqeen maaniye dost aapki is koshish ne meri aankhon me paani laa diyaa.... yoon lagaa aap ne is kavitaa ko mere liye likhaa hai.. mere chehere ke saamne mere mom dad ki suurat utar aayee aur wahi ehsaa maine unke liye feel kiye jo aapne yahan express kiye... doosrii bat agar aap yakeen manenge to maine aapki ye ghazal apni family members ko sunaai aur sab pal ko sannate me kho gaye.... ek pal ko sabki aankhen namm ho gayeen.... claps for you bro.. beyond everything, beyond all technicalities and boundaries and whatever .... aapki aisi hi rachnaaon ka hame aage bhi intzaar rahega... likihte rahen.. Shaad..... |
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23rd June 2014, 02:55 PM
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Is baat se sukoon hota hai ki dil se nikle jazbaat kisi aur ke dil ko hu-ba-hu chuu paate hai...aapko nacheez ke alfaaz pasand aaye mamnooN hoon... aage bhi yunhi saath dete rahiYeGaa... aapka apna Qasid ___________________________________________ नाम-ए-वफ़ा की जफ़ा बताएं क्या है ज़हन में क्या बोल जाएँ रफ़्तार-ए-दिल अब थम सी गयी है 'क़ासिद' पर अब है टिकी निगाहें |
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23rd June 2014, 04:49 PM
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Alfaaz ki kami mehsoos kar raha hoon aapka likha padhne ke baad..Mein bhi shayad ise jab padhta hoon aakhen nam ho jaati hai..par yeh jaankar aur bhi aacha laga ki aap mere likhe se relate kar paaye.. aapki daad aur saath ka to hameshaa hi talabgaar raha hooN.. Jyaada kuch kehna munasiib nahi..bas thoda bhavuk ho raha hoon Apna khayaal rakhiYeGaa.. aapka apnaa Qasid ___________________________________________ नाम-ए-वफ़ा की जफ़ा बताएं क्या है ज़हन में क्या बोल जाएँ रफ़्तार-ए-दिल अब थम सी गयी है 'क़ासिद' पर अब है टिकी निगाहें |
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23rd June 2014, 07:03 PM
Waaahhh Mast sahab. Aapki ye nayi tahreeq to ghazab dha rahi hai. Aapne khayaaloN ko disha di hai wo to bade bade shayar bhi nahi de paaye.
Aap yooN hi likhte rahiye aur mahfil ko raushan rakhiye. Reps++++ for this beautiful creation Namaskar _____________________________________
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30th June 2014, 11:11 PM
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Aapki zarranawaazi hai janaab...humhari taraf se ek khayaal ko kalamband karne ki koshish thi..behad aacha laga ki aapko pasand aaYi.. Aapke daad aur saath ka shukriyaa hai aapka apnaa Qasid ___________________________________________ नाम-ए-वफ़ा की जफ़ा बताएं क्या है ज़हन में क्या बोल जाएँ रफ़्तार-ए-दिल अब थम सी गयी है 'क़ासिद' पर अब है टिकी निगाहें |
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1st July 2014, 09:56 PM
"aadhaa bhara glass bhi chhalak jaataa".......THERE ARE SIMPLY NO WORDS TO DESCRIBE THIS OUTSTANDING CREATION !!
dil bhar aaye aur aankh nam ho jaaye to daad bhi theek se naheen di jaatee .... waise is rachna ka maqaam har daad aur tehseen se kaheen aage hai phir bhi aap ka is saamaajik kadwe sach ko itne marmsparshi roop mein saamne laane ke liye dhanyavaad karta hoon mast ji aur dheron duaein aap ko deta hoon !!! mera maqaam sada manziloN se door raha |
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25th November 2014, 09:55 PM
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Umeed hai aage bhi yeh marasiim musalsal barqaraar rahe... Dua go Qasid ___________________________________________ नाम-ए-वफ़ा की जफ़ा बताएं क्या है ज़हन में क्या बोल जाएँ रफ़्तार-ए-दिल अब थम सी गयी है 'क़ासिद' पर अब है टिकी निगाहें |
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26th November 2014, 09:54 AM
superb creation................emotional kar diya Mast bhai.
.....Sunita Thakur..... यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया ....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए... 
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26th November 2014, 06:26 PM
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Qasid ___________________________________________ नाम-ए-वफ़ा की जफ़ा बताएं क्या है ज़हन में क्या बोल जाएँ रफ़्तार-ए-दिल अब थम सी गयी है 'क़ासिद' पर अब है टिकी निगाहें |
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27th November 2014, 08:04 PM
Kitni mamta.mayi per marmik kahani ka chitran kiya aapne ...Mast bhai
Vake meiN ab lagta hai ki budape mein log kitne tanha aur bebas ho jaate haiN , per yehi zinagi hai mere dost , katni tau paregi,,, hus ke guzaro ya ro ke guaro , Safar Zindagi ka bitana parega.. sanjay sehgak khone Pane ki daur mein yun uljha hai har bashar , Isee kashmeqash mein kat raha Zindagee ka safar. |
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27th November 2014, 08:28 PM
Mast ji
Kitni gehri rachna hay.Zindagi ki bhaag daur mein sach kaha aapne aadha bhara glass bhi chalak jata hay.Hats off to you for a touching poetry with shades of truth and love of our parents. Regards |
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29th November 2014, 09:11 AM
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aapke saath aur daad ka behad shukriYaa... Qasid ___________________________________________ नाम-ए-वफ़ा की जफ़ा बताएं क्या है ज़हन में क्या बोल जाएँ रफ़्तार-ए-दिल अब थम सी गयी है 'क़ासिद' पर अब है टिकी निगाहें |
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10th May 2015, 09:27 AM
Maa par likhi sabse sanvedansheel rachna.
Mother's day par phir padne ka dil kiya. Sarika |
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10th May 2015, 10:23 AM
Wah MAST SAHAB wah,, Bade Dinon k baad hame Time mila SDC me aankeliye aur aate hi aapke in ahsaasonn ne Dilko hila k rakh diya,, Wah kahne ka man nahi karta kyun k aah nikalti hae,,, Dill se daad khubl karein
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10th May 2015, 03:02 PM
Bohat khoob kuch sachhe ehsaas se bhari yeh nazm Ye nazm dil or dimaag chu gayi aakhein Nam kar gayi salam pesh hai daad to sab denge hi
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10th May 2015, 11:38 PM
Mast jii..aaj ek alag andaaz dikhayi diya mast ka...mamta aur karuna se bhari aapki kavita ko padkar aankhein nam ho gayiiin....zyada kuch na kah paungii...
bas khush rahein....aur likhte rahein... अर्ज मेरी एे खुदा क्या सुन सकेगा तू कभी आसमां को बस इसी इक आस में तकते रहे madhu.. |
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11th May 2015, 11:22 PM
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Qasid ___________________________________________ नाम-ए-वफ़ा की जफ़ा बताएं क्या है ज़हन में क्या बोल जाएँ रफ़्तार-ए-दिल अब थम सी गयी है 'क़ासिद' पर अब है टिकी निगाहें |
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Qasid ___________________________________________ नाम-ए-वफ़ा की जफ़ा बताएं क्या है ज़हन में क्या बोल जाएँ रफ़्तार-ए-दिल अब थम सी गयी है 'क़ासिद' पर अब है टिकी निगाहें |
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Qasid ___________________________________________ नाम-ए-वफ़ा की जफ़ा बताएं क्या है ज़हन में क्या बोल जाएँ रफ़्तार-ए-दिल अब थम सी गयी है 'क़ासिद' पर अब है टिकी निगाहें |
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Sach kahiye to yeh kalaam sirf us waqt panpaa tha ki kuch meetha khaane ka dil ho raha tha aur ghar mein kuch nahi tha...khayaal aaya ki maa hoti to kehti ruk mein kheer bana deti hooN...Bas kuch likhna shuru kiya aur rachnaa aapki nazar huyi.. Saath ka shukriyaa Qasid ___________________________________________ नाम-ए-वफ़ा की जफ़ा बताएं क्या है ज़हन में क्या बोल जाएँ रफ़्तार-ए-दिल अब थम सी गयी है 'क़ासिद' पर अब है टिकी निगाहें |
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15th May 2015, 11:19 AM
Bohot samvedansheel, sach-much mother's day ka tohfa.
Anu ji, hats off. **************** Qaul thae ke 'Sagar' milengae kal magar Taareeki musalsal hai, savera nahii hota |
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15th May 2015, 12:38 PM
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Qasid ___________________________________________ नाम-ए-वफ़ा की जफ़ा बताएं क्या है ज़हन में क्या बोल जाएँ रफ़्तार-ए-दिल अब थम सी गयी है 'क़ासिद' पर अब है टिकी निगाहें |
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