yadoon ki gali

Zeba · 07:52 AM

Is raah ki ek gali,hamare ghar ko aati hai....
jo guzro kabhi ,to aana idhar, tumhari yaad satati hai...

aankhon ko ham ne masroof kiya tumhare hi khaboon mai,

khayal tumhara aate hi neend udjaati hai....
jo guzro kabhi ,to aana idhar, tumhari yaad satati hai...

jayoon kahaan ab mai is dil ko lekar

mehfil mai dil lagta nahi,tanhai rulati hai
jo guzro kabhi ,to aana idhar, tumhari yaad satati hai...

Sharaabi · 15th January 2003, 03:15 AM

This would be indeed classified as a ghazal, excluding the beher(s).
I like the style in which you've adopted, acha hai..
Phir se kahuuN ga ki khoob likha hai

Likhte rahiye,
Aman

Zeba · **jo hukam aap ka -** 16th January 2003, 03:49 AM

zara yeh bhi batane ki zehmat karenge ke beher kya hota hai.

Sharaabi · 16th January 2003, 04:56 AM

Zaroor zaroor..

The english word of beher is 'meter', but there are a lot of beher(s) to be studied, which takes time/patience, but I will try to explain something else..

I'm sure you've heard of "Sa Re Ga Ma Pa Da Ni Sa," which are the tunes the singers practice with..? Isi taraH 'beher' bhi aise hi kuch hai..

Hmm, better explained would be to count your syllables, so that in each line(s), the syllables come out near the same (so the rhythm matches)

maiN aapko beh'roN ke baare meiN nahiiN bataa sakta lekin, jo abhi bataaya hai.. woh bahot kaam aaye ga..

Umeed hai ki is.se aapne kuch seekha hai, gar aapko pehle nahiiN pata tha

Likhte rahiye,
Aman

pyaasa · **excellent -** 16th January 2003, 01:32 PM

ZEBA JI ,

bahut achhi ghazal likhi hai aapne . keep it up.

Aapki agli post ka intezaar rahega

khayal tumhara aate hi neend udjaati hai....
jo guzro kabhi ,to aana idhar, tumhari yaad satati hai

kya baat hai really nice

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Zeba · **sa re ga ma pa dha ni sa -** 17th January 2003, 05:10 AM

sharabi ji
mijhe sa re ga ma padha nisa,sa ni dha pa ma ga re sa,nahi beher ke bare mai bataiyeh,PLEASE EXPLAIN ME CORRECTLY.
aur mujhe patience zyada nahi ,almost 8 saal se koi ustad nahi mila mujhe.

mehfil bhi jayegi jab yeh raat gayegi
kya meri har gazal mere saath jayegi....
adaab arz hai...

Zeba · **shukran -** 17th January 2003, 05:15 AM

shukriya payasa ji,

aap bhi bohot ghoob likte hai kya kahne

der se goonjte hain sannate
jaise hum ko pukarta hai koi
un nigahoon ke khanjar hai be nishaan
hum mar ke bhi nahi marte jab maarta hai koi

kya khayal hai aap ka.....

Sharaabi · 17th January 2003, 05:20 AM

I have explained correctly, but in order to understand correctly, you must read correctly..
maine aapko "Sa Re Ga Ma Pa" ke baare meiN nahiiN bataaya, lekin yeh bataaya tha ki jis taraH gayak koshish karta hai to "Sa Re Ga Ma Pa" ka isthimaal karta hai.. is hi taraH beh'roN ka isthimaal shayar karta hai..
maine aapko yeh bhi kaha tha ki bahot si beh'reN haiN, aur samjhaaii nahiiN jaati.. khud paDni paDti haiN

Ek cheez jo maine sikhaayee thi, us cheez pe aapne shayad ghaur nahiiN kiya.. mera likha hua dobara paDiye ga, agar waqt ho to

Aman

Zeba · **sharabi ji -** 17th January 2003, 06:47 AM

ok I understand this ,thanks for explaining me.
{Hmm, better explained would be to count your syllables, so that in each line(s), the syllables come out near the same (so the rhythm matches)}

zeba

Zeba · 01:39 AM

hello sanju ji,

har gali ka koi na koi mod zaroor aata hai sanjoo ji ,rah dekhte rehna chahiye.

paplupopat · 03:21 PM

beher...........we call it "tuk-bandi" in simple hindi (slang).

paplupopat · **behar -** 18th January 2003, 03:06 PM

we call it tuk-bandi in simple hindi (slang).

Zeba · 01:33 AM

ok got it one more name for beher " tuk -bandi" i'll remember it.
thaks paplupopat

Zeba · **please tell me -** 22nd January 2003, 04:18 AM

can any one ginve me a good website address to learn about beher.

Thanks
Zeba