Ghazal: Tum aao to sahii (ek Rumaani Ghazal)

Mayank · 09:57 AM

yaaraan-e-mehfil:

aadaab arz hai:- aik Ghazal pesh hai .. (jo ki 2 kaafiye par meri pahli Ghazal hai.. )jis ki farmaaish aap me.n se to kisi ne bhi nahee.n kii, par apni hii farmaaish par pesh kar rahaa huu.n ..

to dosto.n, agar ise dheeme dheeme gungunaa kar pyaar ke saath padhe.n to kyaa baat ho!

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cheer kar dil ko dikhaa de.nge tum aao to sahii
gile-shikawe bhii miTaa le.nge tum aao to sahii

ham amaavas me.n bhii duniyaa ko dikhaa de.n ge chaa.nd
chhat pe ham, tum ko sajaa de.nge tum aao to sahii

ham ne waadaa yeh kiyaa kuchh na chhupaaye.nge kabhii
tum ko aaiinaa banaa le.nge tum aao to sahii

dil to kyaa cheez hai yeh jaan bhee haazir hai sanam
apnee hastii bhii miTaa de.nge tum aao to sahii

haath maa.ngaa hai to ham thaam ke bhee rakkhe.nge
ham-safar tum ko banaa le.nge tum aao to sahii

maa.ngate kyu.n ho charaagar se Gham-e-dil ki davaa
hum tumhe.n Gham ki dawaa de.nge tum aao to sahii

*chaaragar: physician

be-asar apnii-muhabbat ko na samjho, :Ghaafil:!
aag paanii me.n lagaa de.nge tum aao to sahii

-Mayank © 5feb'09

kasak · 11:00 PM

maine toh pehle hi kaha tha ki kamaal ka radiif hai sahab ..
mazaa aa gaya ...ab itna bulaane pe bhi yaar na aaye toh laanat hai mohabbat pe

chaliye ...mashq jaari rakhiye ....ye kavish bhi khoob rahi ...!

dua go,
KasaK

Purvi · 08:36 PM

Kya khoob Rahi Ghazal Mayankji......

Yahan kuch arz karti hoon.......

Hamne jahaan kahin bhi dekha,ek tum ko hee dekha
Aaj tuj se Jahan dekhenge , tum aao to sahi..............

Yunhi likhte rahiye.......Duwao ke saath

acharya_mj · **Excellet Work Dear Friend Mayank -** 7th February 2009, 11:25 PM

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Originally Posted by Mayank

yaaraan-e-mehfil:

aadaab arz hai:- aik Ghazal pesh hai .. (jo ki 2 kaafiye par meri pahli Ghazal hai.. )jis ki farmaaish aap me.n se to kisi ne bhi nahee.n kii, par apni hii farmaaish par pesh kar rahaa huu.n ..

to dosto.n, agar ise dheeme dheeme gungunaa kar pyaar ke saath padhe.n to kyaa baat ho!

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cheer kar dil ko dikhaa de.nge tum aao to sahii
gile-shikawe bhii miTaa le.nge tum aao to sahii

ham ne yeh waadaa kiyaa raaz bataaye.nge sabhii
aaiinaa tum ko banaa le.nge tum aao to sahii

ek muddat se hai.n pyaase tire deedaar ke ham
pyaas nazaro.n ki bujhaa le.nge tum aao to sahii

ham amaavas me.n bhii duniyaa ko dikhaa de.n ge chaa.nd
tum ko ham chhat pe sajaa de.nge tum aao to sahii

dil to kyaa cheez hai yeh jaan bhee haazir hai sanam
ham to khud ko bhii miTaa de.nge tum aao to sahii

dar-ba-dar phiratii ho beemaar-e-muhabbat ki tarah
dard hogaa to davaa de.nge tum aao to sahii!

be-asar apnii-muhabbat ko na samjho, :Ghaafil:
aag paanii me.n lagaa de.nge tum aao to sahii

-Mayank © 5feb'09

DEAR FRIEND MAYANK, I HAVE CAME HERE AFTER LONG TIME, AND FIRSTLY I STUKED @ YOUR GHAZAL, CONGRATULATION FOR CREATING SUCH MARVELOUS ,WONDERFULL AND BEAUTIFUL PIECE OF POETRY. MAY GOD BLESS U WITH CREATIVITY AND HATS OFF TO UR WORK.

KEEP WRITING
BEST WISHES AND REGARDS

MANU

redtears_ocean · 8th February 2009, 12:37 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Mayank

yaaraan-e-mehfil:

aadaab arz hai:- aik Ghazal pesh hai .. (jo ki 2 kaafiye par meri pahli Ghazal hai.. )jis ki farmaaish aap me.n se to kisi ne bhi nahee.n kii, par apni hii farmaaish par pesh kar rahaa huu.n ..

to dosto.n, agar ise dheeme dheeme gungunaa kar pyaar ke saath padhe.n to kyaa baat ho!

**************************************

cheer kar dil ko dikhaa de.nge tum aao to sahii
gile-shikawe bhii miTaa le.nge tum aao to sahii

ham ne yeh waadaa kiyaa raaz bataaye.nge sabhii
aaiinaa tum ko banaa le.nge tum aao to sahii

ek muddat se hai.n pyaase tire deedaar ke ham
pyaas nazaro.n ki bujhaa le.nge tum aao to sahii

ham amaavas me.n bhii duniyaa ko dikhaa de.n ge chaa.nd
tum ko ham chhat pe sajaa de.nge tum aao to sahii

dil to kyaa cheez hai yeh jaan bhee haazir hai sanam
ham to khud ko bhii miTaa de.nge tum aao to sahii

dar-ba-dar phiratii ho beemaar-e-muhabbat ki tarah
dard hogaa to davaa de.nge tum aao to sahii!

be-asar apnii-muhabbat ko na samjho, :Ghaafil:
aag paanii me.n lagaa de.nge tum aao to sahii

-Mayank © 5feb'09

bohat khoob mayank sahab i liked it very much
bohat ki khoobsoorat khayaal....!

Mayank · 9th February 2009, 03:34 PM

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maine toh pehle hi kaha tha ki kamaal ka radiif hai sahab ..

kasak saahiba!

aap ne jis Dhang se meri is kavvish ko saraaha hai, mai.n us ke liye aap ka be-had shukr-guzaar huu.n . vaazeh hai ki Ghazal aap ko khuub bhaii hai is ke liye aap ka shukriyah!

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mazaa aa gaya ...ab itna bulaane pe bhi yaar na aaye toh laanat hai mohabbat pe

ab dekhiye, bulaana hamaara kaam tha

ham ne bulaa liya, ab koii aaye na aaye rab jaane! par sab se pahle aap aa'ii yeh hamaare liye waqa'ii faqr aur khushii ki baat hai.........

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chaliye ...mashq jaari rakhiye ....ye kavish bhi khoob rahi ...!

dua go,
KasaK

mashq to albatta zaari rahegaa, gar aap aihbaab-e-sukhan yuu.n hi daad luTaate rahe.n

Mayank

Ek Ehsaas · 9th February 2009, 07:50 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Mayank

yaaraan-e-mehfil:

aadaab arz hai:- aik Ghazal pesh hai .. (jo ki 2 kaafiye par meri pahli Ghazal hai.. )jis ki farmaaish aap me.n se to kisi ne bhi nahee.n kii, par apni hii farmaaish par pesh kar rahaa huu.n ..

to dosto.n, agar ise dheeme dheeme gungunaa kar pyaar ke saath padhe.n to kyaa baat ho!

**************************************

cheer kar dil ko dikhaa de.nge tum aao to sahii
gile-shikawe bhii miTaa le.nge tum aao to sahii

ham ne waadaa yeh kiyaa kuchh na chhupaaye.nge kabhii
aaiinaa tum ko banaa le.nge tum aao to sahii

ham amaavas me.n bhii duniyaa ko dikhaa de.n ge chaa.nd
tum ko ham chhat pe sajaa de.nge tum aao to sahii

haath maa.ngaa hai to ham thaam ke bhee rakkhe.nge
ham-safar tum ko banaa le.nge tum aao to sahii

dil to kyaa cheez hai yeh jaan bhee haazir hai sanam
ham to khud ko bhii miTaa de.nge tum aao to sahii

dar-ba-dar phiratii ho beemaar-e-muhabbat ki tarah
dard hogaa to davaa de.nge tum aao to sahii!

be-asar apnii-muhabbat ko na samjho, :Ghaafil:
aag paanii me.n lagaa de.nge tum aao to sahii

-Mayank © 5feb'09

The revised version is a lot better than the older one.. (My personal thought) but haan daad deni hogi. Itne simple se thought par bhi itni khoobsurat gazal likh daali hai bade bhai. maza aa gaya padhkar.

ek sher khaas achha laga...

ham amaavas me.n bhii duniyaa ko dikhaa de.n ge chaa.nd
tum ko ham chhat pe sajaa de.nge tum aao to sahii

Is thought par mera bhi kuch likhne ka mann kar raha hai. Likhunga zaroor... aur aapse share bhi karunga. Bas yu samajhiye Aapke Ehsaaso ko samarpit hoga woh..... Aur vaada karta hu ki poori koshish karunga khoobsurat likhu taaki aapke itne sundar Alfaazon aur Ehsaason ki tauheen na ho. Umeed hai aapki ijazat milegi....

zainy · 07:21 PM

Mayank ji aadaab arz hai,

Do din se soch rahi thi ki aapki ghazal per kuch comment karun,per aapki ghazal ishq aur dard ke sections me idhar se udhar jhul rahi thi,to maine socha kahin tik jaye phir review dungi...waise accha kiya aapne ultimately ishq me rok diya..ab ishq per kuch likha ho to ishq me hi post karna chahiye, aysa mera apna khayaal hai..ab chalte hai aapki ghazal ki taraf...

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Originally Posted by Mayank

yaaraan-e-mehfil:

aadaab arz hai:- aik Ghazal pesh hai .. (jo ki 2 kaafiye par meri pahli Ghazal hai.. )jis ki farmaaish aap me.n se to kisi ne bhi nahee.n kii, par apni hii farmaaish par pesh kar rahaa huu.n ..

to dosto.n, agar ise dheeme dheeme gungunaa kar pyaar ke saath padhe.n to kyaa baat ho!

iski koshish ki per aaya nahi,

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cheer kar dil ko dikhaa de.nge tum aao to sahii
gile-shikawe bhii miTaa le.nge tum aao to sahii

isme dil cheerne ki kya zarurat hai, khol kar dikha deta,
wapis jodne ke surgery ke paise bach jaate aapke...

ham ne waadaa yeh kiyaa kuchh na chhupaaye.nge kabhii
aaiinaa tum ko banaa le.nge tum aao to sahii

ham amaavas me.n bhii duniyaa ko dikhaa de.n ge chaa.nd
tum ko ham chhat pe sajaa de.nge tum aao to sahii

chhat per sajaa denge??chaand ko to aasaman per sajaya jaata hai shayed ,aasmaan tak aapka hath nahi pahunchta hoga..

haath maa.ngaa hai to ham thaam ke bhee rakkhe.nge
ham-safar tum ko banaa le.nge tum aao to sahii

dil to kyaa cheez hai yeh jaan bhee haazir hai sanam
ham to khud ko bhii miTaa de.nge tum aao to sahii

maa.ngate kyu.n ho charaagar se Gham-e-dil ki davaa
hum tumhe.n Gham ki dawaa de.nge tum aao to sahii

dard mando ko dawa dena kab se shuru kar diya aapne, zara hamare liye bhi bacha ke rakhiyega..

be-asar apnii-muhabbat ko na samjho, :Ghaafil:
aag paanii me.n lagaa de.nge tum aao to sahii

-Mayank © 5feb'09

waise dont mind...zara shararat ka mood tha to yeh sab likh diya....waise sach poochu to aapki ghazal hai bade kamaal ki...ek bahut hi khoobsurat koshish keh sakte hain....koshish jaari rakhiyega mera matlab hai..(isi tarah acchi acchi ghazalein likhne ki)..
pls dont mind and dont reply...

zainy

mann_chand · 11th February 2009, 08:42 AM

Hi Mayank Ji

Aapko bahut dino baad padhna naseeb hua ... aapki ghazal hamesha umda rahi hai ... pyaar mein yeh b zaroori hai ..aacha kiya aapne kisi ko pukara .... nahi ko kisi ko kaise pata chalta

... May all ur wishes come true

...
yu hi behtareen ghazal nazar karte rahe...hume intezaare rahega

take care...

Dhaval · 13th February 2009, 10:36 AM

mayaNk bhaiyaa:

namaste!!

kyaa baat haii!!

duaa haii mehnat raNg laayeN

aapki yeh pyaar bharii Ghazal bahot Khuub rahee!!

daad!!

KhuSh raheN... apnaa Khayaal raKheN

duaaoN ke saath ijaazat

aapka

~ Dhaval

Diya_Jale · 13th February 2009, 04:14 PM

Mayank ji,
kya baat hai Romantic ghazal...hmmm
Valentine spl ...............

dil to kyaa cheez hai yeh jaan bhee haazir hai sanam
apnee hastii bhii miTaa de.nge tum aao to sahii

is sher keliye rep++++++++++++++++++..

aise hi Romantic ghazal likha kijiye ........mahfil ko pyar ki ehesaas se sajate rahiye

Diya

N@zneen · 16th February 2009, 02:55 PM

Hi Mayank,

Bht hi romantic ghazal likhi hai aapne...........ths is the first time i've read something written by u n m impressed........will b looking fwd 4 some more of ur ghazals.....keep it up.

Mayank · 17th February 2009, 09:47 PM

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Kya khoob Rahi Ghazal Mayankji......

Jee Ghazal jee, yahaa.n kis ki taareef ho rahii hai

hamaari ya khud apni , I mean 'Ghazal' kii

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Yahan kuch arz karti hoon.......

irshaad!!

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Hamne jahaan kahin bhi dekha,ek tum ko hee dekha
Aaj tuj se Jahan dekhenge , tum aao to sahi..............

waah waah! waah waah!

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Yunhi likhte rahiye.......Duwao ke saath

beshak ham likhte rahe.nge, go,aap jaise chaahne waale hame paDhte rahe.n...

duaao.n , Ghazal ki pasadeegii ke liye tah-e-dil se shukriyah...

yuu.n hi aage bhi paDhti rahe.n

Mayank

sunita thakur · 17th February 2009, 09:49 PM

in short.............................superb

Mayank · 17th February 2009, 09:57 PM

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Originally Posted by acharya_mj

DEAR FRIEND MAYANK, I HAVE CAME HERE AFTER LONG TIME, AND FIRSTLY I STUKED @ YOUR GHAZAL, CONGRATULATION FOR CREATING SUCH MARVELOUS ,WONDERFULL AND BEAUTIFUL PIECE OF POETRY. MAY GOD BLESS U WITH CREATIVITY AND HATS OFF TO UR WORK.

KEEP WRITING
BEST WISHES AND REGARDS

MANU

Dear Manu,

kahaa.n Gaayab ho tum? aaya karo yahaa.n bhii......

dost, Ghazal tumhe pasand aaii jaan kar behad khushi huii.... mai.n chaahata huu.n ki tum bhi Ghazale.n pahle jaise likah karo aur site par regular aao.

apna khayaal rakkho...

Mayank

Mayank · 19th February 2009, 10:43 AM

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Originally Posted by redtears_ocean

bohat khoob mayank sahab i liked it very much
bohat ki khoobsoorat khayaal....!

bohat bohat shukriyah saahab, aap ki husn-e-nazar hai aur kuchh nahii.n

yuu.n hi aage bhi aate rahe.n........

Mayank

Mayank · 19th February 2009, 10:52 AM

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The revised version is a lot better than the older one.. (My personal thought) but haan daad deni hogi. Itne simple se thought par bhi itni khoobsurat gazal likh daali hai bade bhai. maza aa gaya padhkar.

hmm.. Amit bhai, zeyadah mehnat Ghazal likhane me.n nahii hai, lekin us ko khayaalo.n ko duurust rakhane me.n hai. isiliye Ghazal par jahaa.n kamii nazar aati hai, mai.n usay duur karna munaasiib samjhta huu.n. aur yeh sirf baar baar paDhne se ho sakta hai..

Ghazal pasand aaii, jaan kar khushi huii...

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ek sher khaas achha laga...

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ham amaavas me.n bhii duniyaa ko dikhaa de.n ge chaa.nd tum ko ham chhat pe sajaa de.nge tum aao to sahii

is sher ki pasandeegi ke liye , khaas taur se shukriyah!

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Is thought par mera bhi kuch likhne ka mann kar raha hai. Likhunga zaroor... aur aapse share bhi karunga. Bas yu samajhiye Aapke Ehsaaso ko samarpit hoga woh..... Aur vaada karta hu ki poori koshish karunga khoobsurat likhu taaki aapke itne sundar Alfaazon aur Ehsaason ki tauheen na ho. Umeed hai aapki ijazat milegi....

zaruur likho Amit bhaii, mere khayaal par koii kuchh likhe woh meri izzat aur himmat afzaaii hi hogii

yeh to baDappan hai aap ka jo aap saadgii ke saath mujhe is baat ka ijaazat maa.ng raahe hai.n ...

puuri puuri ijaazat hai...

aap ki koshish kaamyaab koshish ho, yeh subh-kaamnaaye.n hai..

likhte raho..

Mayank

Ek Ehsaas · 20th February 2009, 03:06 PM

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Originally Posted by Mayank

hmm.. Amit bhai, zeyadah mehnat Ghazal likhane me.n nahii hai, lekin us ko khayaalo.n ko duurust rakhane me.n hai. isiliye Ghazal par jahaa.n kamii nazar aati hai, mai.n usay duur karna munaasiib samjhta huu.n. aur yeh sirf baar baar paDhne se ho sakta hai..

Ghazal pasand aaii, jaan kar khushi huii...

is sher ki pasandeegi ke liye , khaas taur se shukriyah!

zaruur likho Amit bhaii, mere khayaal par koii kuchh likhe woh meri izzat aur himmat afzaaii hi hogii

yeh to baDappan hai aap ka jo aap saadgii ke saath mujhe is baat ka ijaazat maa.ng raahe hai.n ...

puuri puuri ijaazat hai...

aap ki koshish kaamyaab koshish ho, yeh subh-kaamnaaye.n hai..

likhte raho..

Mayank

Ab Chaand ke baare mein likhna hi padega na bhai. Ek Chaand mere paas bhi jo hai.......

dineshdharvi · 25th February 2009, 05:21 PM

mayank bhai superb

apka ye sher bahut acha hai

ham amaavas me.n bhii duniyaa ko dikhaa de.n ge chaa.nd
chhat pe ham, tum ko sajaa de.nge tum aao to sahii

Mayank · 25th February 2009, 05:30 PM

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Originally Posted by mann_chand

Hi Mayank Ji

Aapko bahut dino baad padhna naseeb hua ... aapki ghazal hamesha umda rahi hai ... pyaar mein yeh b zaroori hai ..aacha kiya aapne kisi ko pukara .... nahi ko kisi ko kaise pata chalta

... May all ur wishes come true

...
yu hi behtareen ghazal nazar karte rahe...hume intezaare rahega

take care...

mandeep jee,

hello,

shaayad aap pahli baar ham ne hamaare kisii post par aaii hai.n, aap ko dekh kar khushi huii..

aap ne Ghazal pasand farmaaya is ke liye tah-e-dil se shukriyah! aap jaise dosto.n ka saath raha to ham aise hi likhte rahe.nge.. aap bhi mehfil me.n aati rahe.n aur kuchh na kuchh likhti rahe.n, achchha lagta hai.....

ek baar phir se shukriyah!

Mayank

noor_noor · 26th February 2009, 04:09 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Mayank

yaaraan-e-mehfil:

aadaab arz hai:- aik Ghazal pesh hai .. (jo ki 2 kaafiye par meri pahli Ghazal hai.. )jis ki farmaaish aap me.n se to kisi ne bhi nahee.n kii, par apni hii farmaaish par pesh kar rahaa huu.n ..

to dosto.n, agar ise dheeme dheeme gungunaa kar pyaar ke saath padhe.n to kyaa baat ho!

**************************************

cheer kar dil ko dikhaa de.nge tum aao to sahii
gile-shikawe bhii miTaa le.nge tum aao to sahii

ham amaavas me.n bhii duniyaa ko dikhaa de.n ge chaa.nd
chhat pe ham, tum ko sajaa de.nge tum aao to sahii

ham ne waadaa yeh kiyaa kuchh na chhupaaye.nge kabhii
tum ko aaiinaa banaa le.nge tum aao to sahii

dil to kyaa cheez hai yeh jaan bhee haazir hai sanam
apnee hastii bhii miTaa de.nge tum aao to sahii

haath maa.ngaa hai to ham thaam ke bhee rakkhe.nge
ham-safar tum ko banaa le.nge tum aao to sahii

maa.ngate kyu.n ho charaagar se Gham-e-dil ki davaa
hum tumhe.n Gham ki dawaa de.nge tum aao to sahii

*chaaragar: physician

be-asar apnii-muhabbat ko na samjho, :Ghaafil:!
aag paanii me.n lagaa de.nge tum aao to sahii

-Mayank © 5feb'09

bhut khoob mayank ji.............saare ke saare shair bhut hi achy hain khaas tour par ye shair bhut khoob hai..

ham ne waadaa yeh kiyaa kuchh na chhupaaye.nge kabhii
tum ko aaiinaa banaa le.nge tum aao to sahii

Mayank · 3rd March 2009, 11:09 AM

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Originally Posted by dhavalrami4you

mayaNk bhaiyaa:

namaste!!

kyaa baat haii!!

duaa haii mehnat raNg laayeN

aapki yeh pyaar bharii Ghazal bahot Khuub rahee!!

daad!!

KhuSh raheN... apnaa Khayaal raKheN

duaaoN ke saath ijaazat

aapka

~ Dhaval

dhaval bhaaii,

jai shri krishna

Ghazal pasand farmaane ke liye ke liye tah-e-dil se shukriyah, ummeed hai ki aage bhi yuu.n hi hausila aur izat afzaaii karte rahe.nge..

Mayank

Mayank · 13th March 2009, 06:56 PM

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Originally Posted by Diya_Jale

Mayank ji,
kya baat hai Romantic ghazal...hmmm
Valentine spl ...............

dil to kyaa cheez hai yeh jaan bhee haazir hai sanam
apnee hastii bhii miTaa de.nge tum aao to sahii

is sher keliye rep++++++++++++++++++..

aise hi Romantic ghazal likha kijiye ........mahfil ko pyar ki ehesaas se sajate rahiye

Diya

shukriyah diya

Ghazal valentine's special to nahii.n, lekin ittefaaq ki baat thi ki Ghazal Romaani hai aur valentines day ke aas paas likhi gaii thi to valentine's day special kaha jaa sakta hai....

aap ko Ghazal achchhi lagii, jaan kar behad khushii huiii....... shukiyah reps ke liye bhii.

Mayank

Harash Mahajan · 16th March 2009, 11:21 PM

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Originally Posted by Mayank

yaaraan-e-mehfil:

aadaab arz hai:- aik Ghazal pesh hai .. (jo ki 2 kaafiye par meri pahli Ghazal hai.. )jis ki farmaaish aap me.n se to kisi ne bhi nahee.n kii, par apni hii farmaaish par pesh kar rahaa huu.n ..

to dosto.n, agar ise dheeme dheeme gungunaa kar pyaar ke saath padhe.n to kyaa baat ho!

**************************************

cheer kar dil ko dikhaa de.nge tum aao to sahii
gile-shikawe bhii miTaa le.nge tum aao to sahii

ham amaavas me.n bhii duniyaa ko dikhaa de.n ge chaa.nd
chhat pe ham, tum ko sajaa de.nge tum aao to sahii

ham ne waadaa yeh kiyaa kuchh na chhupaaye.nge kabhii
tum ko aaiinaa banaa le.nge tum aao to sahii

dil to kyaa cheez hai yeh jaan bhee haazir hai sanam
apnee hastii bhii miTaa de.nge tum aao to sahii

haath maa.ngaa hai to ham thaam ke bhee rakkhe.nge
ham-safar tum ko banaa le.nge tum aao to sahii

maa.ngate kyu.n ho charaagar se Gham-e-dil ki davaa
hum tumhe.n Gham ki dawaa de.nge tum aao to sahii

*chaaragar: physician

be-asar apnii-muhabbat ko na samjho, :Ghaafil:!
aag paanii me.n lagaa de.nge tum aao to sahii

-Mayank © 5feb'09

MayaNk sahab adaab....yaraan-e-mehfil meiN aaj kaafi arse baad ana hua..our aate hi aapka kalaam aakhoN ke aage se Guzra..yaqeen maaniye tabiat khush ho gayii...aapkii iss dil paziir Ghazal ke tamaam ashar bahuur hi oomda kahe gaye haiN...merii jaanib se dhairoN daad qubool farmaayeiN dost....

Ek instant ahsaas....do ashar meiN aapke kalaam ko smarpit dost...

Dil-e-aarzoo ko dewaana bana deNge tum aao toh sahi
Zakhm-e-dil muskaan meiN uljha deNge tum aao toh sahi

Mana ke khayii hai chot tumne jawaaN hote -hote ai dost
Un likheiN khatoN ko dewaan bana deNge tum aao toh sahi

Harash

munfairy · **wah kya baat hai -** 17th March 2009, 06:56 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Mayank

yaaraan-e-mehfil:

aadaab arz hai:- aik Ghazal pesh hai .. (jo ki 2 kaafiye par meri pahli Ghazal hai.. )jis ki farmaaish aap me.n se to kisi ne bhi nahee.n kii, par apni hii farmaaish par pesh kar rahaa huu.n ..

to dosto.n, agar ise dheeme dheeme gungunaa kar pyaar ke saath padhe.n to kyaa baat ho!

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cheer kar dil ko dikhaa de.nge tum aao to sahii
gile-shikawe bhii miTaa le.nge tum aao to sahii

ham amaavas me.n bhii duniyaa ko dikhaa de.n ge chaa.nd
chhat pe ham, tum ko sajaa de.nge tum aao to sahii

ham ne waadaa yeh kiyaa kuchh na chhupaaye.nge kabhii
tum ko aaiinaa banaa le.nge tum aao to sahii

dil to kyaa cheez hai yeh jaan bhee haazir hai sanam
apnee hastii bhii miTaa de.nge tum aao to sahii

haath maa.ngaa hai to ham thaam ke bhee rakkhe.nge
ham-safar tum ko banaa le.nge tum aao to sahii

maa.ngate kyu.n ho charaagar se Gham-e-dil ki davaa
hum tumhe.n Gham ki dawaa de.nge tum aao to sahii

*chaaragar: physician

be-asar apnii-muhabbat ko na samjho, :Ghaafil:!
aag paanii me.n lagaa de.nge tum aao to sahii

-Mayank © 5feb'09

Aadab mayank ji,
kaise hai aap?

Masha allah kitni khubsurat ghazal pesh ki hai aapne,
aaj kayi dino baad apne parivaar me hazir hui hun,
or yakin maniye aapki ghazal padhkar dili khushi mayassar hui hain,
ALLAH APKO AUR TARAKKI DE,AAMIN

KHUSH RAHIYE
APNA KHAYAL RAKHIYE
ALLAH HAFIZ

Mayank · 19th March 2009, 11:01 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by N@zneen

Hi Mayank,

Bht hi romantic ghazal likhi hai aapne...........ths is the first time i've read something written by u n m impressed........will b looking fwd 4 some more of ur ghazals.....keep it up.

Nazneen jee:

Romantic Poetry, mai.n kabhi kabhaar Ghalti se likh leta huu.n, lekin zeyadahtar sad poetry hi likhaa karta huu.n.

aap ko hamaarii yeh koshish pasand aaii, jaan kar behad khushii huii..... yuu.n hi aage bhi paDhte rahe.n.. khaaksaar ki pazeraaii ke liye behad shukriyah!

-Mayank

Mayank · 19th March 2009, 11:03 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by sunita virender

in short.............................superb

Sunita jee:

namaste:

Ghazal ki pasandeegi ke liye tah-e-dil se shukriyah! yuu.n hi aage bhi hausila afzaaii karti rahe.n....

-Mayank

Mayank · 22nd March 2009, 05:44 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by dineshdharvi

mayank bhai superb

apka ye sher bahut acha hai

ham amaavas me.n bhii duniyaa ko dikhaa de.n ge chaa.nd
chhat pe ham, tum ko sajaa de.nge tum aao to sahii

dinesh bhaii,

Ghazal ki aur khaas kar ke is sher ki pasandeegi ke liye aap ka bohat bohat shukriyah!

yuu.n hi apni raa'ey dete rahe.n

-mayank

Mayank · 25th March 2009, 05:04 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by noor_noor

bhut khoob mayank ji.............saare ke saare shair bhut hi achy hain khaas tour par ye shair bhut khoob hai..

ham ne waadaa yeh kiyaa kuchh na chhupaaye.nge kabhii
tum ko aaiinaa banaa le.nge tum aao to sahii

asalm saahab,

GHazal ki pasandeegi ke liye aap ka shukr-guzaar huu.n

koshish rahegii ki aage bhi bhetar likh kar aap sab ke saamne pesh kar sakuu.n....

daad aur hausila afzaaii aur khaaskar ke chune huye sher ki pasandeegi ke ke liye shukriyah

-Mayank

Mayank · 29th March 2009, 08:28 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Harash Mahajan

MayaNk sahab adaab....yaraan-e-mehfil meiN aaj kaafi arse baad ana hua..our aate hi aapka kalaam aakhoN ke aage se Guzra..yaqeen maaniye tabiat khush ho gayii...aapkii iss dil paziir Ghazal ke tamaam ashar bahuur hi oomda kahe gaye haiN...merii jaanib se dhairoN daad qubool farmaayeiN dost....

Ek instant ahsaas....do ashar meiN aapke kalaam ko smarpit dost...

Dil-e-aarzoo ko dewaana bana deNge tum aao toh sahi
Zakhm-e-dil muskaan meiN uljha deNge tum aao toh sahi

Mana ke khayii hai chot tumne jawaaN hote -hote ai dost
Un likheiN khatoN ko dewaan bana deNge tum aao toh sahi

Harash

Harash jee:

mai.n Ghazal ki pasandeegi ke liye aap ka behad aabhaari huu.n.. aap jaise shaayar ko Ghazal pasand aaii yeh ek khushii kii baat hai.. aap khud ek achche shayar hai.n to aap ki pasandeegi bhii khaas maaene rakhti hai....

aap ke daad ke liye tah-e-dil se shukr-guzaar huu.n..

aap ke instant ehsaas bhi achche lage

bazm me.n aate rahe.n

-Mayank

Mayank · 29th March 2009, 08:32 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by munfairy

Aadab mayank ji,
kaise hai aap?

Masha allah kitni khubsurat ghazal pesh ki hai aapne,
aaj kayi dino baad apne parivaar me hazir hui hun,
or yakin maniye aapki ghazal padhkar dili khushi mayassar hui hain,
ALLAH APKO AUR TARAKKI DE,AAMIN

KHUSH RAHIYE
APNA KHAYAL RAKHIYE
ALLAH HAFIZ

sony jee:

aadaab!

kaisi hai.n aap, bohat dino ke baad aap ko yahaa.n par dekhaa, dekh kar khushii huii. ummeed hai sab khairiyat hogee..

ap ko Ghazla pasand aaii, jaan kar behad khushii huiii.. aap ki is hausila aur izzat afzaaii ke liye main aap ka tah-e-dil se shukr-guzaar huu.n... yuu.n hii mehfil me.n aate rahe.n.....apna khayaal rakhiyegaa....

khuda-haafiz

-Mayank