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mere dil pe,dastaq deta hai,koi baar baar... -
28th February 2002, 02:47 AM
Salaam DostoN!Aaj bahut din baad phir kuch likha hai aur aap logoN ke saath share kar rahi hoon isi umeed pe ki hamesha ki tarah apni ray se nawazenge!
mere dil pe,dastaq deta hai,koi baar baar
mere jazbaatoN ko,jhanjhoRta hai,koi baar baar
jitna mai door jaana chaahti hoon
utna hi paas,bulaata hai,koi baar baar
raaton mein merii yaadoN mein aa aakar
merii neendein,churaata hai,koi baar baar
kaan khade ho jaate hain zara si aahat par
aisa lagta hai,mujhko pukaarta hai,koi baar baar
raah chalte chalte kadam thahar jaate hain
Wallah!har shai mein,nazar aata hai,koi baar baar
aata rahta hai mere khayaloN mein bin bulaaye
rah rah kar,mere ehsaas ko,jagata hai,koi baar baar
mustaqbil mein bhala kaise rakhooN kadam
jab maazi ki yaad,dilaata hai,koi baar baar
haye ree! kismat ki maari 'Shumaila' ko
aaj phir,apnaa banana chaahta hai,koi baar baar !!!
Aapki ray ki muntazir...
K'hafiz,
shumaila
kabhi kisi ko muqammal jahan nahi milta
kahiiN zameeN to kahiiN aasmaN nahi milta!!
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hi -
5th March 2002, 11:19 AM
aadaab shumailaji,
aaaj fir aapki ghazal hame pasand aayi...bahot hi accha likha hai aapne....likhti rahiyega....
jitna mai door jaana chaahti hoon
utna hi paas,bulaata hai,koi baar baar
raaton mein merii yaadoN mein aa aakar
merii neendein,churaata hai,koi baar baar .......
bahot hi khoobsurat andaaaz mai likha hai.....
khuda hafiz...take care
Yeh Gham Nahi ke Andhere Se Sulah Ki Maine
Malal Yeh Hai Ke ab Subh Ki Talb Bhi Nahi
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5th March 2002, 01:40 PM
Wah!!!!
Bahot fine likha hai, Beti- Khush Raho!!
raah chalte chalte kadam thahar jaate hain
Wallah!har shai mein,nazar aata hai,koi baar baar
aata rahta hai mere khayaloN mein bin bulaaye
rah rah kar,mere ehsaas ko,jagata hai,koi baar baar
Umeed hai aap hameha likhti rahengi.
Rajan
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Hi tanhadil.. -
6th March 2002, 02:00 AM
Kaise haiN?Aapne aaj bhi hamari ghazal pasand farmaayi..shukriya!!
bahut hausla afzaai hoti hai merii...har baar sochti hoon ki ab nahi likhungi lekin lagta aap logoN ki duaayeiN hain jo phir kuch na kuch likh leti hoon
Thanx again,
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kabhi kisi ko muqammal jahan nahi milta
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Adaab Rajanji!! -
6th March 2002, 02:04 AM
kaise hain aap?Aap hamesha merii hausla afzaii karne aa jaate hain jiske liye mai aapki bahut shukrguzar hoon!!
Aapki duaa rahi to inshallah likhti rahungi...
Shukriya.......
shumaila
kabhi kisi ko muqammal jahan nahi milta
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7th March 2002, 01:18 AM
bohat hi accha laga
especially yeh waali line...
mustaqbil mein bhala kaise rakhooN kadam
jab maazi ki yaad,dilaata hai,koi baar baar ...
likhti raheyga
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Shukriya... -
7th March 2002, 01:37 AM
Thanx maryam for liking my ghazal aur mujhe bhi apna wahin sher sabse zyaada pasand hai!!
Bye,
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kabhi kisi ko muqammal jahan nahi milta
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bahut khoob! -
13th May 2002, 10:58 PM
adaab shumaila ji - humari tareef kubool kijiye - bahut achcha likha hain aapne - khaaskar hume yeh sher pasand aaye -
mere dil pe,dastaq deta hai,koi baar baar
mere jazbaatoN ko,jhanjhoRta hai,koi baar baar
jitna mai door jaana chaahti hoon
utna hi paas,bulaata hai,koi baar baar
haye ree! kismat ki maari 'Shumaila' ko
aaj phir,apnaa banana chaahta hai,koi baar baar !!!
- hume yeh aapki ghazal itni achchi lagi ki ab to aapki baaki ghazal par ghour farmaane ka bhi mann aa gaya hain - likhte rahiyega!
zindagI jab bhI terI bazm mein LAtI hai hamein
ye zamIn chAnd se behatar nazar AtI hai hamein
surkh phUlon se MAHEK uThatI hain dil kI rAhen
din Dhale yUN terI AvAz bulAtI hai hamein
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taeray Gham ki KhuShbu say jism-o-jaaN MAHEK uTThay
saaNs ki havaa jab bhi Choo kay maeray lab guzri
aek saath reh kay bhi, door hi rahay ham bhi
dhoop aur Chaa'ooN ki dosti ajab guzri
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Thanx again!! -
14th May 2002, 05:49 PM
Ek baar phir teh-e-dil se shukriya kabool farmayeiN Mahek!!:-)
Regards,
shumaila
kabhi kisi ko muqammal jahan nahi milta
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salam shumaila ji ... -
25th May 2002, 07:42 PM
salam shumaila ji ....
aapka be had shukriya ke aapne meri ghazal ( muhabbat or doree ) pasand farmaee .......
or mazirat chata hon ke jawab der se de raha hon ........
aapki ghazal pari .........behad pasand i ...... aap buhut peyare andaz men sochti hen .......kabi kabi buhut gehraee men chali jati hen .............aapne kaha :
mustaqbil men bhala kese rakkhon qadam
jab mazi ki yad dilata he koi ......... bar bar
or phir is se peh le .........aapki peyri shaksiyyat kisi ko majboor kar ti he ...chunanche ...aap kehti hen :
jitna men door jana .................... chahti hon
otna he pas bulata he koi ............... bar bar
aata rehta he mere khayalon men bin bulaae
reh reh ke mere ehsaan ko jatata he bar bar
or aakhri bet to kamal ka he ......:
haae re qismat ki mari ........... ( shumaila ) ko
aaj phir apna banana chahta he koi .. bar bar
aapki sit par bi aapke kuch ashaar pare .....buhut ache lage ...ab men aap doston se sikha karonga ..........
meri duaen aapke sath hen .....
sagar kashmiri
azal ke mast heN rakhte heN ham fitrat he mastana
hamiN khum heN hamiN saghar hamiN maikash hamiN saqi
( majzoob )
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w'salam Sagar!!! -
26th May 2002, 05:13 PM
Sab se pehle aapko khushamadeed kehna chahti hooN is shayri ki duniya meiN
Jis khuloos aur khule dil se aapne meri ghazal ki taareef ki hai...uske liye dil se shukriya kabool farmaayeiN Yakeen maane hume bilkul likhna wikhna nahi aata hai....bas haal hi meiN shuru kiya hai likhna aur kuch tukbandi kar lete haiN...lekin jab logoN ko ye hi koshish pasand aati hai to bahut hausla baDhta hai aur phir kuch naya likhne ko jee chahta hai!!
Shukriya ek baar phir!!
Adaab,
Shumaila
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kahiiN zameeN to kahiiN aasmaN nahi milta!!
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1st June 2002, 06:58 PM
dear shumaila ji
aapki shayari mujhe bahut pasand aaye.
mein bhi kuch urg karna chahti hun.
aisa nahin hai par aisa na ho kahin
usne mujhe dekhkar dekha na ho kahin
kadmon ki chaap der se aati hai kaan main
koi mere khyloon mein phirta na ho kahin
ye kon zhaank raha hai gali ki oat se
batti bujha ke dekh savera na ho kahin.........
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Thanx!! -
5th June 2002, 04:50 PM
Thanx a lot anjali for liking my ghazal!!Aapne bhi bahut accha likha hai..parhke wah nikalti hai Why don't u also trying writing ghazals..I'm sure bahut accha likh sakti ho
aisa nahin hai par aisa na ho kahin
usne mujhe dekhkar dekha na ho kahin
kadmon ki chaap der se aati hai kaan main
koi mere khyloon mein phirta na ho kahin
ye kon zhaank raha hai gali ki oat se
batti bujha ke dekh savera na ho kahin.........
Wah Wah!!
Bye,
Shumaila
kabhi kisi ko muqammal jahan nahi milta
kahiiN zameeN to kahiiN aasmaN nahi milta!!
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too good -
20th July 2002, 03:14 AM
hey realy nice i must say lagta hi beign a girl really u have wrtien it from the core of ur heart .keep it up
jab dil totey ga to faryad karoge ..... jab hum na hongey to yad karoge.
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Re: beautifully written! -
20th July 2002, 05:44 PM
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Originally posted by Sakhee
hi shumaila ji,
nice ghazal! bahut pasand aayi!!
wah wah!! bahut khoob!!
Take care!
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Thanx a lot sakhee!!
Aapse pehli dafa baat ho rahi hai....I want to welcome u to shayri.com
ye to thori purani ghazal thi....maine kuch nayi ghazals bhi post ki haiN..waqt mile to paRh lijiyega!!!
Shukriya
Shumaila
kabhi kisi ko muqammal jahan nahi milta
kahiiN zameeN to kahiiN aasmaN nahi milta!!
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Re: too good -
20th July 2002, 06:00 PM
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Originally posted by dreamzhigh
hey realy nice i must say lagta hi beign a girl really u have wrtien it from the core of ur heart .keep it up
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Thanx a lot for ur beautiful words..It really encourages me to write more and more!!
Thanx...do keep visiting!!
Bye,
SHumaila
kabhi kisi ko muqammal jahan nahi milta
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bahot khoob..... -
25th September 2003, 08:24 PM
bahot accha lagaa aapki ghazal padhke..
shayri ke rules aur kuch gair shaayraanaa words ko agar nazar andaaz kiyaa jaaye to ... jo khayaal aapne pesh kiye hain... hame bahot apne se lage. aaj arse baad bazm me aaya aur puraane doston ki ghazlein dekhne lagaa to .. aapki ye ghazal bahot acchi lagi.. khaas kar.. ye lines.
raah chalte chalte kadam thahar jaate hain
Wallah!har shai mein,nazar aata hai,koi baar baar
aata rahta hai mere khayaloN mein bin bulaaye
rah rah kar,mere ehsaas ko,jagata hai,koi baar baar
mustaqbil mein bhala kaise rakhooN kadam
jab maazi ki yaad,dilaata hai,koi baar baar
bahot khoob khayal hai..
jab khayal apne se hon.. zindagi ki kuch haqiqat se mel khaate hon to... woh sher dil ko chhoo jaate hain
ummeed hai.. ki aapko hum yaad honge. bahot dino baad aaye hain isliye. jyada waqt to nahi hai.. fir bhi kuch sher yahin aapke hawaale kiye jaa rahe hain.
na fizaa me namii hai naa aasmaaN me taare
ye kiski shaksiyat .... gumnaam ho gayi.
ye pyaasi laher aakhir kidhar jaati hai
saahil ko chhoo ke aksar jo laut jaati hai.
tera jor mujhse jyadaa is dil pe chal gaya.
dekho khuda ke saamne kaise badal gaya.
ek aakhiri..
khushi ki ik lau tak nahii... har taraf andheraa-e-gham hai
dil jaloN.....dil jalaaO..... ke raushnii kam hai.
muaaf kijiyegaa.. hamare sab sher ik aapko hi sunaaye jaa rahe hain.. waqt kam hai.
izaazat chaahta hun
khush rahiyegaa
rab rakha
yours.
rahULi
ek sher aur likh lun... azal hote hote
ek umr ho gayi hai... ghazal hote hote
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Thanx a lot... -
26th September 2003, 12:40 AM
Arey wah Rahul jee aap...maine khud arse se yahan aana choRh diya hai lekin aaj jab mujhe inbox mein message aaya ke some1 has replied to my post.. i was shocked ke kisne meri itni purani ghazal pe comments diye hain then I saw u...very nice to see u after such a long time...ye kaafi puraana kalaam hai mera FEb 2002 ka...jab mujhe ghazal beher mein likhni nahi aati thi..ab to ghazal kaafi hadh tak beher mein likhne lagi hoon Technical ghalti ke bawajood aapne mere kalaam ko pasand farmaaya uske liye main aapki mamnoon hoon ke waqiai ye maine dil se likhi thi ghazal.
Aapke liye apni haal ki ghazloN mein se ek ghazal post kar rhai hoon new thread mein...dekhiyega zaroor!!
Duaoon mein yada rkahiyega,
Shumaila
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27th September 2003, 05:03 AM
Wah, bohot khub likhha hein aapne. Keya ahsaash hein.
Ha koi toh zaroor hote hein jo aise hi bulate rahte hein!!
Sukriya. Likhte rahiyega. Aapna khayal rakhiyega.
Khuda Hafiz.
Shimul.
Kuch aise toh nehi?
Koi nehi hein fhir bhi awaz arahi hein
shayed meri mohabbat mujhko bula rahi hein?
*Aapni Parwaaz-e-Takhayyull Hain Zamane Se Juda
Jiss Jagah Koyi Na Pahuncha Wahaan Tak Pahunche
Main Samajhta Huun Harr Dil Mein Khuda Rehta Hain
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28th September 2003, 03:15 PM
Shummu ???? Hum yahaan bhi mill gaye
Too good ! i loved it!
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30th September 2003, 05:01 PM
Thanx a lot Shimul and Ritu
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