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15th August 2005, 09:54 PM
1st Sher
Roz Dastak mere dil par aakar ek ladki de jaati hai
Khushbu se saanson ki mera tan-man mehkaati hai
--Pulkit
2nd Sher
Dooba rahta hai dil mera bas oonhi ke khayalon mai
Dharkane meri ab sirf oosi ka naam liye jaati hain
--Palak
3rd Sher
Kar di hai naam uske maine apni zindagaani
Cehre par khushi ab bas uski yaad hi laati hai
-- Priya
4th Sher
Jaan chali jaati hai unse 1 din na miloon to,
aankhen unki 1 jhalak paane ko taras jaati hai,
--Kasak
5th Sher
Band palakon mein sataati hai bhali suurat uski
Kholuun tau, *lams-e-nazuuki uski, sitam dhaati hai
--paras
*delicate sense of touch
nayi ruton mein wo kuchh aur qareeb aaye
gayi ruton ka sulagataa sa intezaar bhii ho
mere khuloos kaa andaaz ye bhii sachhaa hai
rakhuun na rabt magar dostii shumaar bhii ho
--Sayyidaa Fatimaa Hasan
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18th August 2005, 06:58 AM
1st Sher
Roz Dastak mere dil par aakar ek ladki de jaati hai
Khushbu se saanson ki mera tan-man mehkaati hai
--Pulkit
2nd Sher
Dooba rahta hai dil mera bas oonhi ke khayalon mai
Dharkane meri ab sirf oosi ka naam liye jaati hain
--Palak
3rd Sher
Kar di hai naam uske maine apni zindagaani
Cehre par khushi ab bas uski yaad hi laati hai
-- Priya
4th Sher
Jaan chali jaati hai unse 1 din na miloon to,
aankhen unki 1 jhalak paane ko taras jaati hai,
--Kasak
5th Sher
Band palakon mein sataati hai bhali suurat uski
Kholuun tau, *lams-e-nazuuki uski, sitam dhaati hai
--paras
6th Sher
aksar aati hain hichkiyaan mujhe shab-o-roz
mehboob kya tumhein meri yaad sataati hai
--Parul
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18th August 2005, 06:37 PM
1st Sher
Roz Dastak mere dil par aakar ek ladki de jaati hai
Khushbu se saanson ki mera tan-man mehkaati hai
--Pulkit
2nd Sher
Dooba rahta hai dil mera bas oonhi ke khayalon mai
Dharkane meri ab sirf oosi ka naam liye jaati hain
--Palak
3rd Sher
Kar di hai naam uske maine apni zindagaani
Cehre par khushi ab bas uski yaad hi laati hai
-- Priya
4th Sher
Jaan chali jaati hai unse 1 din na miloon to,
aankhen unki 1 jhalak paane ko taras jaati hai,
--Kasak
5th Sher
Band palakon mein sataati hai bhali suurat uski
Kholuun tau, *lams-e-nazuuki uski, sitam dhaati hai
--paras
6th Sher
aksar aati hain hichkiyaan mujhe shab-o-roz
mehboob kya tumhein meri yaad sataati hai
--Parul
7th Sher
khuda ne bhi unhe fursat se hi banaya hoga,
unki har ek ada mere dil me ghar kar jati hai
~A tease in heart~
Judaa huye haiN bahut log, ek tum bhii sahii,
Ab itnii sii baat pe kyaa zindagii haraam kareiN ..
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7th September 2005, 09:46 AM
Bahut din huye yeh ghazal seventh sher pe ataki huyi thee...socha isse poora kar hee dein...apni haesiyat ke mutabiq thoda sa theek bhi kiya hai...dekhiye sabke saath se kaisee haseen ghazal bani hai...
roz dastak mere dil pe ik ladki de jaati hai
khushbuu se apni mera tan man mehkaati hai
--Pulkit
khoyi si rehti hoon oonhi ke khayalon mai
Dharkan bhi meri unka naam liye jaati hai
--Palak
Kar doon uske naam main apni zindgaani
Chehre pe khushi uski yaadon sang aati hai
-- Priya
Jaan aati hai jaati hai uske hi intezzaar mein
nazar bhi unki jhalak paane ko taras jaati hai,
--Kasak
Band palakon mein sataati hai bhali suurat uski
Kholuun tau lams-e-nazuuki uski sitam dhaati hai
--paras
aksar aati hain hichkiyaan mujhe shab-o-roz
mehboob kya tumhein meri yaad sataati hai
--Parul
khuda ne unhe fursat mein banaya hoga
unki har ik adaa mere dil mein bas jaati hai
--kasak
surmayi ghataayein hon ki meheki hawaayein
zeenat inki meri jaana se kam nazar aati hai
--paras
chaliye ek nayi ghazal kaa agaazh kiya jaaye...open invitation to anyone who wants to post the 1st sher...
nayi ruton mein wo kuchh aur qareeb aaye
gayi ruton ka sulagataa sa intezaar bhii ho
mere khuloos kaa andaaz ye bhii sachhaa hai
rakhuun na rabt magar dostii shumaar bhii ho
--Sayyidaa Fatimaa Hasan
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7th September 2005, 10:07 AM
hello paras di,
how are u? well jab se isse thread ko padhna shuru kiya hai i always wished to learn sumthing out of. thx so much for starting this thread. today wud love to give a try. hope i wud be able to follow the rules but do guide me how to make it even more beautiful. always waiting ahead for ur lovely suggestions. take care n may god bless u with his finnest glitters.
ulfat ke naam par humne,dhokhe sabhi se khaye hai
wafa rahe karte phir bhi magar,hum bewafa kehlaye hai!
mera aashiyaan tha wahan jahan toofanon ka theekana tha,
ek naadan dil tha aur ek bedard zamana tha!
na jaane kyu ussi pal mil gaya ek dard naya,
jab kisi roz mere labon ka muskurana tha!
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Kutch bayani ho ehsaason ki…..
Kutch kahani ho jasbaaton ki….
Ek paaq bazm jahan ho sirf pyar…..
Dhoondte hain koi aisa manzar yaar….
Karein ek dooje se har koi lagaav….
Koi kare shikayat koi de sujaav
Naazim kare hifaazat-e-pyar…
Dhoondte hain koi aisa manzar yaar….
Buzurgoon ki kahawaat hai…
Fal-e-intezaar meetha hai….
Kehte hain Jas- Nal- Aman….
Thoda sa, bus thoda sa intezaar….
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7th September 2005, 12:34 PM
hey paras di......
chaliye achcha hua.....bahut time ho gaya tha aur main bhi majboor thi....phir se 1 or sher add nahi kar sakti thi......thanx....
luv ya,
KasaK.....
~A tease in heart~
Judaa huye haiN bahut log, ek tum bhii sahii,
Ab itnii sii baat pe kyaa zindagii haraam kareiN ..
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7th September 2005, 12:57 PM
Bazm ko aadab....
Chaliye is baar aagaz hum karte hai... dekhte hai ye karwaN kahan pahunchta hai... shayad topic thoda mushkil rahe
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KagaZi tukdoN par mohbbat ki nilaami hoti hai...
Saza-e-ishq ashiqoN ko dunia se inami hoti hai...
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Kunal
KunaaL (Sifar).........
Hai 'sifar' bhi reyazi ka hissa..
Shayrii bhi hisaab ki hogi..
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7th September 2005, 08:16 PM
Priye Kunnu...
Tumne shayad dekha nahin...ki Ruhani ne pehla sher kaha hai...so iss baar matla ussi ki taraf se hoga...
ruhani main tumhara sher kuch yoon likh rahi hoon...
1st sher
ulfat ke naam pe dhokhe sabhi se khaye hain
karte rahe wafa phir bhi bewafa kehlaye hain
--ruhani
2nd sher
diya thaa pyaar unhone hamein kishton mein
sanam aansoun se suud wasoolne aaye hain
--paras
nayi ruton mein wo kuchh aur qareeb aaye
gayi ruton ka sulagataa sa intezaar bhii ho
mere khuloos kaa andaaz ye bhii sachhaa hai
rakhuun na rabt magar dostii shumaar bhii ho
--Sayyidaa Fatimaa Hasan
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7th September 2005, 08:20 PM
1st sher
ulfat ke naam pe dhokhe sabhi se khaye hain
karte rahe wafa phir bhi bewafa kehlaye hain
--ruhani
2nd sher
diya thaa pyaar unhone hamein kishton mein
sanam aansoun se suud wasoolne aaye hain
--paras
3rd sher
Gaye the hum dar par Mehbooba ki phool lekar
badle mein hum uske Kaante bator le aaye hain
--Rohin
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7th September 2005, 08:31 PM
is baar maine sacha ki main bhi mehfil me shamil ho jata hoon,
1st sher
ulfat ke naam pe dhokhe sabhi se khaye hain
karte rahe wafa phir bhi bewafa kehlaye hain
--ruhani
2nd sher
diya thaa pyaar unhone hamein kishton mein
sanam aansoun se suud wasoolne aaye hain
--paras
3rd sher
Gaye the hum dar par Mehbooba ki phool lekar
badle mein hum uske Kaante bator le aaye hain
--Rohin
4th sher
humne to sirf pyar hi dene ki koshish ki thi unhe,
to aakhir kyun humne unse sirf dard paaye hain.
--Lucky
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7th September 2005, 08:45 PM
1st sher
ulfat ke naam pe dhokhe sabhi se khaye hain
karte rahe wafa phir bhi bewafa kehlaye hain
--ruhani
2nd sher
diya thaa pyaar unhone hamein kishton mein
sanam aansoun se suud wasoolne aaye hain
--paras
3rd sher
Gaye the hum dar par Mehbooba ki phool lekar
badle mein hum uske Kaante bator le aaye hain
--Rohin
4th sher
humne to sirf pyar hi dene ki koshish ki thi unhe,
to aakhir kyun humne unse sirf dard paaye hain.
--Lucky
5th sher
hassi jo mukh par hai mere,yeh to sirf dikhava hain
"jas" ne apne jeewan mei,gam hi gam uthaye hain!
--ruhani
mera aashiyaan tha wahan jahan toofanon ka theekana tha,
ek naadan dil tha aur ek bedard zamana tha!
na jaane kyu ussi pal mil gaya ek dard naya,
jab kisi roz mere labon ka muskurana tha!
*****************************
Kutch bayani ho ehsaason ki…..
Kutch kahani ho jasbaaton ki….
Ek paaq bazm jahan ho sirf pyar…..
Dhoondte hain koi aisa manzar yaar….
Karein ek dooje se har koi lagaav….
Koi kare shikayat koi de sujaav
Naazim kare hifaazat-e-pyar…
Dhoondte hain koi aisa manzar yaar….
Buzurgoon ki kahawaat hai…
Fal-e-intezaar meetha hai….
Kehte hain Jas- Nal- Aman….
Thoda sa, bus thoda sa intezaar….
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8th September 2005, 08:22 PM
1st sher
ulfat ke naam pe dhokhe sabhi se khaye hain
karte rahe wafa phir bhi bewafa kehlaye hain
--ruhani
2nd sher
diya thaa pyaar unhone hamein kishton mein
sanam aansoun se suud wasoolne aaye hain
--paras
3rd sher
Gaye the hum dar par Mehbooba ki phool lekar
badle mein hum uske Kaante bator le aaye hain
--Rohin
4th sher
humne to sirf pyar hi dene ki koshish ki thi unhe,
to aakhir kyun humne unse sirf dard paaye hain.
--Lucky
5th sher
hassi jo mukh par hai mere,yeh to sirf dikhava hain
"jas" ne apne jeewan mei,gam hi gam uthaye hain!
--ruhani
6th Sher
Taqdeer ka dosh na tha na koi mera dosh tha
ZinDagi ko phir kyun Kaheen chhor aaye hain
--Parul
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8th September 2005, 09:24 PM
Moderator sahiba aur meri Gudoo di,,..
galti pe muafi ki ilteza hai .... par ek darkhuast aapse .. agli mehfil mere pending sher se hi aagaz kareN... khair baki aappe hai.... chaliye apna karam karte chalte hai.. kuchhe ko badhate hue ....
1st sher
ulfat ke naam pe dhokhe sabhi se khaye hain
karte rahe wafa phir bhi bewafa kehlaye hain
--ruhani
2nd sher
diya thaa pyaar unhone hamein kishton mein
sanam aansoun se suud wasoolne aaye hain
--paras
3rd sher
Gaye the hum dar par Mehbooba ki phool lekar
badle mein hum uske Kaante bator le aaye hain
--Rohin
4th sher
humne to sirf pyar hi dene ki koshish ki thi unhe,
to aakhir kyun humne unse sirf dard paaye hain.
--Lucky
5th sher
hassi jo mukh par hai mere,yeh to sirf dikhava hain
"jas" ne apne jeewan mei,gam hi gam uthaye hain!
--ruhani
6th Sher
Taqdeer ka dosh na tha na koi mera dosh tha
ZinDagi ko phir kyun Kaheen chhor aaye hain
--Parul
7th Sher
Apni jindgi ki azeebiyat to dekh sangdil jamanEy...
Tapte aaftab*ke agosh tale,adhere din bitaye hai... *sooraj
--kunal
KunaaL (Sifar).........
Hai 'sifar' bhi reyazi ka hissa..
Shayrii bhi hisaab ki hogi..
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21st September 2005, 10:27 AM
Muafi ka talagbaar hoon......kutch tabdiliyaan ki hain.....is ghazal mein.....tanz-o-tanqeed jaroor kijiyega.....
1st sher
ulfat ke naam pe dhokhe sabhi se khaye hain
karte rahe wafa phir bhi bewafa kehlaye hain
--ruhani
2nd sher
diya thaa pyaar unhone hamein kishton mein
sanam aansoun se suud wasoolne aaye hain
--paras
3rd sher
pahunche the dar pe Sanam ke bahar-e-gul liye
silaah ye ki kaante-e-zindagi bator laaye hain
--Rohin
4th sher
koshishein to yahi rahi ki pyar milta rahe use
aakhir kyun humne us.Se sirf dard hi paaye hain
--Lucky
5th sher
muskaan labon pe hai jo, sirf ek dikhava hai
"jas" ne jeewan mein bus gam hi uthaye hain
--ruhani
6th Sher
na dosh taqdeer ka tha, na koi humara hi
ZinDagi ko phir kyun Kaheen chor aaye hain
--Parul
7th Sher
Apni jindgi ki azeebiyat to dekh sangdil jamanEy
Tapte aaftab*ke agosh tale,adhere din bitaye hain
--kunal
aaftab=sooraj
Agle kalaam ka Agaaz....Kunal ke diye hue matle se.....
1st Sher
KagaZi tukdoN par mohbbat ki nilaami hoti hai...
Saza-e-ishq ashiqoN ko dunia se inami hoti hai...
---Kunal
2nd Sher
gam uthaaye koi, kisi ki khushioon ki khaatir.....
yahi to jazbaa-e-mohabaat ki ravaani hoti hai....
---Aman_rahi
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*·.¸Paigaam -e- Aman¸.·*
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inhan ankhaaon vicho kadi, tere hanju vaghe si.....
aaj ki hoye, jehda ^AMAN^ da lahoo vagda ae......
AMAN RAHI
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21st September 2005, 07:35 PM
1st Sher
KagaZi tukdoN par mohbbat ki nilaami hoti hai
Saza-e-ishq ashiqoN ko dunia se inami hoti hai
--Kunal
2nd Sher
gam uthaaye koi, kisi ki khushioon ki khaatir
yahi to jazbaa-e-mohabaat ki ravaani hoti hai
--Aman_rahi
3rd Sher
mil jaaye sab usko jo chale zamane ke sang
chahat mein daulat-o-shohrat bemani hoti hai
--paras
nayi ruton mein wo kuchh aur qareeb aaye
gayi ruton ka sulagataa sa intezaar bhii ho
mere khuloos kaa andaaz ye bhii sachhaa hai
rakhuun na rabt magar dostii shumaar bhii ho
--Sayyidaa Fatimaa Hasan
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22nd September 2005, 10:20 AM
1st Sher
KagaZi tukdoN par mohbbat ki nilaami hoti hai
Saza-e-ishq ashiqoN ko dunia se inami hoti hai
--Kunal
2nd Sher
gam uthaaye koi, kisi ki khushioon ki khaatir
yahi to jazbaa-e-mohabaat ki ravaani hoti hai
--Aman_rahi
3rd Sher
mil jaaye sab usko jo chale zamane ke sang
chahat mein daulat-o-shohrat bemani hoti hai
--paras
4th Sher
yeh zaroori to nahi ki khushiyan hi ho zindagi mei
kabhi kabhi gamon mein bhi zindagi nibaani hoti hai
--ruhani
mera aashiyaan tha wahan jahan toofanon ka theekana tha,
ek naadan dil tha aur ek bedard zamana tha!
na jaane kyu ussi pal mil gaya ek dard naya,
jab kisi roz mere labon ka muskurana tha!
*****************************
Kutch bayani ho ehsaason ki…..
Kutch kahani ho jasbaaton ki….
Ek paaq bazm jahan ho sirf pyar…..
Dhoondte hain koi aisa manzar yaar….
Karein ek dooje se har koi lagaav….
Koi kare shikayat koi de sujaav
Naazim kare hifaazat-e-pyar…
Dhoondte hain koi aisa manzar yaar….
Buzurgoon ki kahawaat hai…
Fal-e-intezaar meetha hai….
Kehte hain Jas- Nal- Aman….
Thoda sa, bus thoda sa intezaar….
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22nd September 2005, 07:14 PM
Muhabbat ki keemat woh nadaan kya samjhen bhala,
Nazar may jinki sirf daulat sayaani hoti hai !
.....Devki
"Maine dekha ik nagma raah pay chalte huye,
Maine dekha ik gazal ko raat bhar jalte huye,
Maine dekhi ik rubai khud pay itrati hui,
Ikk nanha sher dill ki goad may palte huye !!
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23rd October 2005, 07:15 AM
1st Sher
KagaZi tukdoN par mohbbat ki nilaami hoti hai
Saza-e-ishq ashiqoN ko dunia se inami hoti hai
--Kunal
2nd Sher
gam uthaaye koi, kisi ki khushioon ki khaatir
yahi to jazbaa-e-mohabaat ki ravaani hoti hai
--Aman_rahi
3rd Sher
mil jaaye sab usko jo chale zamane ke sang
chahat mein daulat-o-shohrat bemani hoti hai
--paras
4th Sher
yeh zaroori to nahi ki khushiyan hi ho zindagi mei
kabhi kabhi gamon mein bhi zindagi nibaani hoti hai
--ruhani
5th sher
Muhabbat ki keemat woh nadaan kya samjhen bhala,
Nazar may jinki sirf daulat sayaani hoti hai !
-- Devika
6th sher
Yeh Jaan kar, kitna mushkil hai milna un dono ka
Samundar ki Lehrein, Sahil ki deewani hoti hai
-- Rohin
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23rd October 2005, 08:02 AM
Yeh Jaan kar, kitna mushkil hai milna un dono ka
Samundar ki Lehrein, Sahil ki deewani hoti hai
-- Rohin
Pyar amar hota hai, koyi mile na mile,
Haar ke baad jeet milegi jarur, Yehi zindagani hoti hai
--Priya
DOnt loose hope! thats all that we have!
Akhihaan milaake chan'na paavi na Judayi Vey .......
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Jisnu Lagey, ohi'yo jaane, Kaun Jaane peer parayi!
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23rd October 2005, 09:45 AM
1st Sher
KagaZi tukdoN par mohbbat ki nilaami hoti hai
Saza-e-ishq ashiqoN ko dunia se inami hoti hai
--Kunal
2nd Sher
gam uthaaye koi, kisi ki khushioon ki khaatir
yahi to jazbaa-e-mohabaat ki ravaani hoti hai
--Aman_rahi
3rd Sher
mil jaaye sab usko jo chale zamane ke sang
chahat mein daulat-o-shohrat bemani hoti hai
--paras
4th Sher
zaroori to nahi ki khushiyan hi hon zindagi mei
kabhi to gamon mein bhi zindagi nibaani hoti hai
--ruhani
5th sher
Muhabbat ki qeemat woh nadaan kya samjhen,
Nazar mein jinki bus daulat sayaani hoti hai !
-- Devika
6th sher
Yeh Jaan kar, kitna mushkil hai milna un dono ka
Samundar ki Lehrein, Sahil ki deewani hoti hai
-- Rohin
7th sher
Pyar amar hota hai, koyi mile na mile,
Haar ke baad jeet milegi, Yehi zindagani hoti hai
-Priya
Behad khoob doston...is nazm ko overall n rythmatically edit kiya hai thoda...
Pehle rohin phir priya ke sher ko dhayaan mein rakhte yeh
8th n final sher
Dillagi dekhiye kitni suhaani hoti hai
Apni Zillaat kabhi khud ki zubaani hoti hai
-mast
Moderator sahiba next nazm ki intezaar mein
-aapka apnaa
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23rd October 2005, 12:20 PM
1st sher-
chand ki chandni mei sitaron ki raat mei yaad kuch aane laga hai
mohabbat ka afsaana beeta woh zamana tarpane kuch laga hai!
----ruhani
mera aashiyaan tha wahan jahan toofanon ka theekana tha,
ek naadan dil tha aur ek bedard zamana tha!
na jaane kyu ussi pal mil gaya ek dard naya,
jab kisi roz mere labon ka muskurana tha!
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Kutch bayani ho ehsaason ki…..
Kutch kahani ho jasbaaton ki….
Ek paaq bazm jahan ho sirf pyar…..
Dhoondte hain koi aisa manzar yaar….
Karein ek dooje se har koi lagaav….
Koi kare shikayat koi de sujaav
Naazim kare hifaazat-e-pyar…
Dhoondte hain koi aisa manzar yaar….
Buzurgoon ki kahawaat hai…
Fal-e-intezaar meetha hai….
Kehte hain Jas- Nal- Aman….
Thoda sa, bus thoda sa intezaar….
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26th October 2005, 11:17 AM
dear paras di,
thx for giving me the pm. even i knew i was wrong here n garima to pointed me the same tht i m missing many things, but di u cud have started with a new sher n i wud have continued. never ever think tht i will feel. i m a learner n i m cuming here to learn. neways let me again start with a new one
1st sher-
zindagi ka lutfz kya hai zaara mar ke dekho
be-karari ka maza kya hai ishq kar ke dekho!
roshani
plz note if still m not able to go according to technical point of view a request to all to help me out.
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26th October 2005, 08:17 PM
1st sher-
zindagi ka lutfz kya hai zaara mar ke dekho
be-karari ka maza kya hai ishq kar ke dekho!
--roshani
2nd Sher-
Kehte hai log patthar dil humhe magar
Kabhi to koi humse wafaa kar ke dekho!
--Parul
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27th October 2005, 11:32 AM
1st sher-
zindagi ka lutfz kya hai zaara mar ke dekho
be-karari ka maza kya hai ishq kar ke dekho!
--roshani
2nd Sher-
Kehte hai log patthar dil humhe magar
Kabhi to koi humse wafaa kar ke dekho!
---Parul
3rd Sher
Aap aate rahe jab dil mein sehar hoti thi,
kabhi iss dil se sar-e-shaam guzar ke dekho.
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27th October 2005, 06:29 PM
1st sher-
zindagi ka lutfz kya hai zaara mar ke dekho
be-karari ka maza kya hai ishq kar ke dekho!
--roshani
2nd Sher-
Kehte hai log patthar dil humhe magar
Kabhi to koi humse wafaa kar ke dekho!
---Parul
3rd Sher
Aap aate rahe jab dil mein sehar hoti thi,
kabhi iss dil se sar-e-shaam guzar ke dekho.
4th sher
aapne yuhi hamein pyaar kiya thukraayaa
kabhi to meri wafaao ko thahar kar dekho
sakhi
कुछ ऐसे पल जिनको संजोना है ,
शब्दों में पिरोना है , जिससे वो हमारी यादों में महकते रहे
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27th October 2005, 07:46 PM
1st sher-
zindagi ka lutf kya hai zara mar ke dekho
be-qarari ka maza kya hai ishq kar ke dekho!
--roshani
2nd Sher-
Kehte hai log patthar dil humhe magar
Kabhi to aap humse wafaa kar ke dekho!
--Parul
3rd Sher
Aap aate rahe jab dil mein sehar hoti thi,
kabhi iss dil se sar-e-shaam guzar ke dekho.
--talib
4th sher
aapne yuhi hamein pyaar kiya thukra diya
kabhi to meri wafaao mein thahar ke dekho
--sakhi
5th sher
hum ke hain tera bhuula hua vaada sanam
apni tashnagi ko meri ruuh mein utar ke dekho
--paras
nayi ruton mein wo kuchh aur qareeb aaye
gayi ruton ka sulagataa sa intezaar bhii ho
mere khuloos kaa andaaz ye bhii sachhaa hai
rakhuun na rabt magar dostii shumaar bhii ho
--Sayyidaa Fatimaa Hasan
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27th October 2005, 08:02 PM
1st sher-
zindagi ka lutf kya hai zara mar ke dekho
be-qarari ka maza kya hai ishq kar ke dekho!
--roshani
2nd Sher-
Kehte hai log patthar dil humhe magar
Kabhi to aap humse wafaa kar ke dekho!
--Parul
3rd Sher
Aap aate rahe jab dil mein sehar hoti thi,
kabhi iss dil se sar-e-shaam guzar ke dekho.
--talib
4th sher
aapne yuhi hamein pyaar kiya thukra diya
kabhi to meri wafaao mein thahar ke dekho
--sakhi
5th sher
hum ke hain tera bhuula hua vaada sanam
apni tashnagi ko meri ruuh mein utar ke dekho
--paras
6th sher
Jaanta hoon abhi mera vaada lagta hai ek dhoka
Ho sake to mere pyaar pe bharosa kar ke dekho
-- Rohin
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27th October 2005, 08:52 PM
1st sher-
zindagi ka lutf kya hai zara mar ke dekho
be-qarari ka maza kya hai ishq kar ke dekho!
--roshani
2nd Sher-
Kehte hai log patthar dil humhe magar
Kabhi to aap humse wafaa kar ke dekho!
--Parul
3rd Sher
Aap aate rahe jab dil mein sehar hoti thi,
kabhi iss dil se sar-e-shaam guzar ke dekho.
--talib
4th sher
aapne yuhi hamein pyaar kiya thukra diya
kabhi to meri wafaao mein thahar ke dekho
--sakhi
5th sher
hum ke hain tera bhuula hua vaada sanam
apni tashnagi ko meri ruuh mein utar ke dekho
--paras
6th sher
Jaanta hoon abhi mera vaada lagta hai ek dhoka
Ho sake to mere pyaar pe bharosa kar ke dekho
-- Rohin
7th sher
yu hi nahi bante ashk, zariya gamo.n ka
jard padi aankho.n me, ye dard bhar ke dekho!
pallavi
Pallavi...
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Your attitude towards life decides Life's attitude towards you...
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27th October 2005, 09:21 PM
1st sher-
zindagi ka lutf kya hai zara mar ke dekho
be-qarari ka maza kya hai ishq kar ke dekho!
--roshani
2nd Sher-
Kehte hai log patthar dil humhe magar
Kabhi to aap humse wafaa kar ke dekho!
--Parul
3rd Sher
Aap aate rahe jab dil mein sehar hoti thi,
kabhi iss dil se sar-e-shaam guzar ke dekho.
--talib
4th sher
aapne yuhi hamein pyaar kiya thukra diya
kabhi to meri wafaao mein thahar ke dekho
--sakhi
5th sher
hum ke hain tera bhuula hua vaada sanam
apni tashnagi ko meri ruuh mein utar ke dekho
--paras
6th sher
Jaanta hoon abhi mera vaada lagta hai ek dhoka
Ho sake to mere pyaar pe bharosa kar ke dekho
-- Rohin
7th sher
yu hi nahi bante ashk, zariya gamo.n ka
jard padi aankho.n me, ye dard bhar ke dekho!
pallavi
8th sher
samajhate nahi tum “Garima” is pyaar ki
ek baar hi sahi dil me utar kar ke dekho
heheh last sher.. hope sabko achhi lage..
Anant se bhi aage... itni si khwahish hai :)
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27th October 2005, 09:23 PM
Wait... ab bus please thoda pause marna... please do not start a new ghazal.. Mast bahi wanted to start the next one... so please wait....
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29th October 2005, 09:07 AM
lo ruk gaye.....ab Anu bhai ko bulaoooooo........
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*·.¸Paigaam -e- Aman¸.·*
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inhan ankhaaon vicho kadi, tere hanju vaghe si.....
aaj ki hoye, jehda ^AMAN^ da lahoo vagda ae......
AMAN RAHI
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29th October 2005, 09:32 AM
Lo lagta hai woh bhul gaye... isse kehte hai na... haath ko aaya muhh na laga... koi bhi kar lo shuru....lol
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29th October 2005, 04:33 PM
bhaiya.....
pakka kar doon na shuru......
baad me sab mujhe maarna mat pleeez.........
1st sher
Tere darwaaze pe dastak ki sadaa hooN mere yaar,
thaam le mujhe kabse maiN tanhaa hooN mere yaar......
koi galti ho to bataa dijiyega....
kuch changes karne ho to bhi kar dijiyega...
shukriya,
KasaK.......
~A tease in heart~
Judaa huye haiN bahut log, ek tum bhii sahii,
Ab itnii sii baat pe kyaa zindagii haraam kareiN ..
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30th October 2005, 01:35 AM
1st sher
Tere darwaaze pe dastak ki sadaa hooN mere yaar,
thaam le mujhe kabse maiN tanhaa hooN mere yaar.....
- kasak
2nd sher
gairon se raabta rakhkar bhi wo rahenge gair hi....
jise tuune khud se juda kiya,wo apna hoon mere yaar
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30th October 2005, 02:09 AM
gairon se raabta rakhkar bhi wo rahenge gair hi....
jise tuune khud se juda kiya,wo apna hoon mere yaar
3rd sher
roshni bikherta chala gaya main safar e hayat per
jalaa hai umrbhar jo wo umeed ka diya hoon mere yaar
deep (one who has to give light has to endure burning)
marane kii duaaye.n kyuu.N maa.Nguu.N jiine kii tamaannaa kaun kare
ye duniyaa ho yaa vo duniyaa ab Khvaahish-e-duniyaa kaun kare
jo aag lagaaii thii tum ne us ko to bujhaayaa ashko.n ne
jo ashko.n ke bha.Dakaaii hai us aag ko Tha.nDaa kaun kare
jab kashtii saabit-o-saalib thii, saahil kii tamannaa kisako thii
ab aisii shikastaa kashtii me.n saahil kii tamannaa kaun kare
duniyaa ne hame.n chho.Daa ai dil, ham chho.D na de kyo.n duniyaa ko
duniyaa ko samajh kar baiThe hai.n ab duniyaa duniyaa kaun kare
-Moen Ahsan Jazbi
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30th October 2005, 11:55 AM
4th sher
nayanon me jise sajaya tha bahut umeedon se saath,
jise tune khud tod diya,tera wo sapna hoon mere yaar.
---------------GHAYAL
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30th October 2005, 12:18 PM
1st sher
Tere darwaaze pe dastak ki sadaa hooN mere yaar,
thaam le mujhe kabse maiN tanhaa hooN mere yaar......
---KasaK
2nd sher
gairon se raabta rakhkar bhi wo rahenge gair hi....
jise tuune khud se juda kiya,wo apna hoon mere yaar
---unki jaan
3rd sher
roshni bikherta chala gaya main safar e hayat per
jalaa hai umrbhar jo wo umeed ka diya hoon mere yaar
---deep
4th sher
nayanon me jise sajaya tha bahut umeedon se saath,
jise tune khud tod diya,tera wo sapna hoon mere yaar.
---ghayal_shayar
5th sher
tere liye hi jaane gunahgaar maiN kyuN nikli,
yuN to sabhi ke liye maiN khudaa hooN mere yaar.....
---KasaK
thanx....
~A tease in heart~
Judaa huye haiN bahut log, ek tum bhii sahii,
Ab itnii sii baat pe kyaa zindagii haraam kareiN ..
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30th October 2005, 12:25 PM
1st sher
Tere darwaaze pe dastak ki sadaa hooN mere yaar,
thaam le mujhe kabse maiN tanhaa hooN mere yaar......
---KasaK
2nd sher
gairon se raabta rakhkar bhi wo rahenge gair hi....
jise tuune khud se juda kiya,wo apna hoon mere yaar
---unki jaan
3rd sher
roshni bikherta chala gaya main safar e hayat per
jalaa hai umrbhar jo wo umeed ka diya hoon mere yaar
---deep
4th sher
nayanon me jise sajaya tha bahut umeedon se saath,
jise tune khud tod diya,tera wo sapna hoon mere yaar.
---ghayal_shayar
5th sher
tere liye hi jaane gunahgaar maiN kyuN nikli,
yuN to sabhi ke liye maiN khudaa hooN mere yaar.....
---KasaK
6th sher
kya karoon main bhi har koi nahi hoon eh humdam,
aakhir main bhi to sabse judaa hoon mere yaar.
-------GHAYAL
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30th October 2005, 06:48 PM
1st sher
Tere darwaaze pe dastak ki sadaa hooN mere yaar,
thaam le mujhe kabse maiN tanhaa hooN mere yaar......
---KasaK
2nd sher
gairon se raabta rakhkar bhi wo rahenge gair hi....
jise tuune khud se juda kiya,wo apna hoon mere yaar
---unki jaan
3rd sher
roshni bikherta chala gaya main safar e hayat per
jalaa hai umrbhar jo wo umeed ka diya hoon mere yaar
---deep
4th sher
nayanon me jise sajaya tha bahut umeedon se saath,
jise tune khud tod diya,tera wo sapna hoon mere yaar.
---ghayal_shayar
5th sher
tere liye hi jaane gunahgaar maiN kyuN nikli,
yuN to sabhi ke liye maiN khudaa hooN mere yaar.....
---KasaK
6th sher
kya karoon main bhi har koi nahi hoon eh humdam,
aakhir main bhi to sabse judaa hoon mere yaar.
-------GHAYAL
Bahut khoobsurat doston
Pehle to maafi sabse paras, rohin bhai aman bhai...mujh nacheez ki wajah se kuch der tak aapko mehfil ko tham kar rakhna padaa..aasha hai sab apna samajh seene se laga lenge...
Bahut khoobsurat nazm bani hai..Shuruwaat kasak ji behad khoobsurat ... subah savera darwaaze par halki os se nikla ek chehra...sundarmay..aur isi tarannum ko bahut baareki se baaki sab ne nibhaa kar aage badhaaya hai..aisa hi kuch soch kar anth kar raha hoon mein is nazm hai...
lupt andhero se wapas us yug mein jaha se woh aaya tha
7th n Final sher
zindagi se jo chala aur zindagi par tham gaya
aisi hi kisi *dahar ka **Paasabaan hoon mere yaar
*period
**watchman
Qasid
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नाम-ए-वफ़ा की जफ़ा बताएं
क्या है ज़हन में क्या बोल जाएँ
रफ़्तार-ए-दिल अब थम सी गयी है
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30th October 2005, 07:16 PM
zindagi se jo chala aur zindagi par tham gaya
aisi hi kisi *dahar ka **Paasabaan hoon mere yaar
Hmm doston maafi ek baat yaha kaafiye ke saath dokha kar diya maine...ek aur koshish
zindagi se jo chala aur zindagi par tham gaya
Ansune se ek *dahar ki mein sadaa hoon mere yaar
-aapka apnaa
Qasid
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नाम-ए-वफ़ा की जफ़ा बताएं
क्या है ज़हन में क्या बोल जाएँ
रफ़्तार-ए-दिल अब थम सी गयी है
'क़ासिद' पर अब है टिकी निगाहें
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