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18th August 2009, 11:09 AM
A ripped off Dream !
On the fresh granary floor,
Near the beautiful lake shore ,
my being carelessly stroll.
gazing at the faraway sky,
watching the birds fly,
drowsed wid the aroma of flowers,
my senses tingle by scattered showers,,
I find myself drowning in the timeless hours.
under the shy sun beneath the lush green tree ,
I close my eye ,Setting my soul free,
Travelling beyond reality,on a romantic spree,
And there my loved one ! I see thee......
U stand there waiting to embrace me,
my heart skips a beat as I rush to thee,
arms wide open and a twinkle in the eye,
All hurdles widout fear i pass by,
i reach u , i try and touch u ,feel u ........
but in vain..............
Reality hits me hard as I feel the stabbing pain
push itself wid force in every open wound and vein
My fantasy flight comes to a sudden halt
As my dream rips apart wid a jolt
black clouds of destiny frown down
As helpless tears pour down
I wipe them off carelessly
drag my self from under the tree ruthlessly
and walk off from the lake shore
Ready to face the real life s hard core !
ye dil soye hoay jazbon ka hei aisa mehal jis mein
kisii jazbe ka ab mumkin nahi bedaar ho jana
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eik lamha e visaal tha vaapis na aaska
vo waqt ki micaal tha vaapis na aasaka
mujh ko mere vajud se jo kar gaya judaa
kaisa vo baakamal tha vaapis na asaka
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18th August 2009, 04:30 PM
Quote:
Originally Posted by MahamAzmi
A ripped off Dream !
On the fresh granary floor,
Near the beautiful lake shore ,
my being carelessly stroll.
gazing at the faraway sky,
watching the birds fly,
drowsed wid the aroma of flowers,
my senses tingle by scattered showers,,
I find myself drowning in the timeless hours.
under the shy sun beneath the lush green tree ,
I close my eye ,Setting my soul free,
Travelling beyond reality,on a romantic spree,
And there my loved one ! I see thee......
U stand there waiting to embrace me,
my heart skips a beat as I rush to thee,
arms wide open and a twinkle in the eye,
All hurdles widout fear i pass by,
i reach u , i try and touch u ,feel u ........
but in vain..............
Reality hits me hard as I feel the stabbing pain
push itself wid force in every open wound and vein
My fantasy flight comes to a sudden halt
As my dream rips apart wid a jolt
black clouds of destiny frown down
As helpless tears pour down
I wipe them off carelessly
drag my self from under the tree ruthlessly
and walk off from the lake shore
Ready to face the real life s hard core !
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'I wipe them off carelessly'
what an innocent line...................
and how contrary romantic........
well said
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24th August 2009, 05:08 PM
Thanx hazaroun gulistan.........
ye dil soye hoay jazbon ka hei aisa mehal jis mein
kisii jazbe ka ab mumkin nahi bedaar ho jana
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eik lamha e visaal tha vaapis na aaska
vo waqt ki micaal tha vaapis na aasaka
mujh ko mere vajud se jo kar gaya judaa
kaisa vo baakamal tha vaapis na asaka
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3rd January 2010, 11:42 AM
just wanted to share it wid more friends here ....
ye dil soye hoay jazbon ka hei aisa mehal jis mein
kisii jazbe ka ab mumkin nahi bedaar ho jana
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eik lamha e visaal tha vaapis na aaska
vo waqt ki micaal tha vaapis na aasaka
mujh ko mere vajud se jo kar gaya judaa
kaisa vo baakamal tha vaapis na asaka
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5th January 2010, 12:20 AM
classical...and in the old school mold
very well written maham....feely and touching
if its ur own ...i suggest...humbly... that it be underlined so...
great ...cheers
Not self but God and others
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5th January 2010, 07:39 AM
IF ITS MY OWN?!!!!
wat do u mean by that sir,
i do n t post other people s poetry under my name !!!
This is my creation and i m proud of it no matter how trivial it is !!!
Thanx for the acknowledgement!
Due Respects!!
ye dil soye hoay jazbon ka hei aisa mehal jis mein
kisii jazbe ka ab mumkin nahi bedaar ho jana
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eik lamha e visaal tha vaapis na aaska
vo waqt ki micaal tha vaapis na aasaka
mujh ko mere vajud se jo kar gaya judaa
kaisa vo baakamal tha vaapis na asaka
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6th January 2010, 12:50 AM
congrats ...like i sed
its superb
very nice...
cheers
Not self but God and others
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25th January 2010, 04:29 PM
Thanx hazaroun gulistan sir!
My pleasure!
ye dil soye hoay jazbon ka hei aisa mehal jis mein
kisii jazbe ka ab mumkin nahi bedaar ho jana
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eik lamha e visaal tha vaapis na aaska
vo waqt ki micaal tha vaapis na aasaka
mujh ko mere vajud se jo kar gaya judaa
kaisa vo baakamal tha vaapis na asaka
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22nd February 2010, 11:51 AM
Quote:
Originally Posted by MahamAzmi
A ripped off Dream !
On the fresh granary floor,
Near the beautiful lake shore ,
my being carelessly stroll.
gazing at the faraway sky,
watching the birds fly,
drowsed wid the aroma of flowers,
my senses tingle by scattered showers,,
I find myself drowning in the timeless hours.
under the shy sun beneath the lush green tree ,
I close my eye ,Setting my soul free,
Travelling beyond reality,on a romantic spree,
And there my loved one ! I see thee......
U stand there waiting to embrace me,
my heart skips a beat as I rush to thee,
arms wide open and a twinkle in the eye,
All hurdles widout fear i pass by,
i reach u , i try and touch u ,feel u ........
but in vain..............
Reality hits me hard as I feel the stabbing pain
push itself wid force in every open wound and vein
My fantasy flight comes to a sudden halt
As my dream rips apart wid a jolt
black clouds of destiny frown down
As helpless tears pour down
I wipe them off carelessly
drag my self from under the tree ruthlessly
and walk off from the lake shore
Ready to face the real life s hard core !
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Aahh Maaham,
It is amazingly expresed... I could feel the happiness, the intensity, the pain... It is like a journey in quest of dreams and then to realization...Loved it!
I find myself drowning in the timeless hours.
under the shy sun beneath the lush green tree ,
I close my eye ,Setting my soul free,
Travelling beyond reality,on a romantic spree,
And there my loved one ! I see thee......
This stanza is just amazingly expressed...I just can't help from reading it again and again...
Meri dil se daad kubool kijiye ek behad khoobsurat expression ke liye...Keep writing and keep sharing with us... take care 
Kab sochaa thha milegaa humsafar "Shweta" jaisaa
Lagta hai is baar "Pulkit", kismat teri bhi rang laayii hai
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17th March 2010, 12:13 AM
I luv ur comments c uz u can read beyond words n that s wat poetry s all about
Thanx hazaroun gulistan for making my trivial creation special by signing it
ye dil soye hoay jazbon ka hei aisa mehal jis mein
kisii jazbe ka ab mumkin nahi bedaar ho jana
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eik lamha e visaal tha vaapis na aaska
vo waqt ki micaal tha vaapis na aasaka
mujh ko mere vajud se jo kar gaya judaa
kaisa vo baakamal tha vaapis na asaka
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24th March 2010, 03:20 PM
nice lines buddy...........
keep posting.............
Enthusiasm can be like a fire that needs an occasional poke with a stick.
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31st May 2010, 08:24 AM
Thanx for the encouragement ,
Due Respects,
ye dil soye hoay jazbon ka hei aisa mehal jis mein
kisii jazbe ka ab mumkin nahi bedaar ho jana
_____________________________________
eik lamha e visaal tha vaapis na aaska
vo waqt ki micaal tha vaapis na aasaka
mujh ko mere vajud se jo kar gaya judaa
kaisa vo baakamal tha vaapis na asaka
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