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18th August 2010, 06:10 PM
Aaj Ek Insaan Dekha.. Barish Me Bheegta Huwa.. APNE Bacho Ko Sambhalta Huwa.... Kabhi Yaha To Kabhi Waha Dauta Huwa... Usi Pe Kuch Likh raha Hoon... Ek Gareeb Insaan Ki Bhavnaayein Shayad Main Nahi Samajh Sakta Phir bhi.. Ek Koshish Ki..
Jindgi Ko Sitam Main Kehta Hoon..
Majbooriyon Me Bhi Khush Rehta Hoon..
Chand Boondon Se Pet Bhar Leta Hoon..
Main Gareeb Ka Beta Hoon..
Thandi Me Thithoor Leta Hoon..
Basaaat Me Bheeg Leta Hoon..
Garmi Paav Jalaati Hai ..
Pathron Pe Main So Leta Hoon...
Main Gareeb Ka Beta Hoon.
Kabhi Sabji To Kabhi Kuch Naa Mile..
Namak Roti Pe Main Jee Leta Hoon.
Zakhm Chahe Jaisa Bhi Ho..
Thodi Haldi Main Lagaa Leta Hoon...
Main Gareeb Ka Beta Hoon..
Ek Kameez Ek Patloon..
Roz Bina Saboon Me Dhota Hoon
Badi Dukaano Ki Ronak Dekh...
Aksar Khush Me Ho Leta Hoon...
Main Gareeb Ka Beta Hoon..
Gam Bhi Bohat Hai.. Dard Bhi Hai..
Dil Me Sab Dabaa Leta Hoon..
Kabhi Akele To Kabhi Sabke Samne..
Akhon Se Angocha Bhigo Leta Hoon..
Main Gareeb Ka Beta Hoon..
Khush Hoon Main Jaisa Bhi Hoon Me..
Kisise Shikva Nahi Karta Hoon..
Main Jaisa Hoon Waise Koi Na Ho..
Roz Yahi Duwa Karta Hoon..
Main Gareeb Ka Beta Hoon...
Main Gareeb Ka Beta Hoon...
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18th August 2010, 06:25 PM
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Aaj Ek Insaan Dekha.. Barish Me Bheegta Huwa.. APNE Bacho Ko Sambhalta Huwa.... Kabhi Yaha To Kabhi Waha Dauta Huwa... Usi Pe Kuch Likh raha Hoon... Ek Gareeb Insaan Ki Bhavnaayein Shayad Main Nahi Samajh Sakta Phir bhi.. Ek Koshish Ki..
Jindgi Ko Sitam Main Kehta Hoon..
Majbooriyon Me Bhi Khush Rehta Hoon..
Chand Boondon Se Pet Bhar Leta Hoon..
Main Gareeb Ka Beta Hoon..
Thandi Me Thithoor Leta Hoon..
Basaaat Me Bheeg Leta Hoon..
Garmi Paav Jalaati Hai ..
Pathron Pe Main So Leta Hoon...
Main Gareeb Ka Beta Hoon.
Kabhi Sabji To Kabhi Kuch Naa Mile..
Namak Roti Pe Main Jee Leta Hoon.
Zakhm Chahe Jaisa Bhi Ho..
Thodi Haldi Main Lagaa Leta Hoon...
Main Gareeb Ka Beta Hoon..
Ek Kameez Ek Patloon..
Roz Bina Saboon Me Dhota Hoon
Badi Dukaano Ki Ronak Dekh...
Aksar Khush Me Ho Leta Hoon...
Main Gareeb Ka Beta Hoon..
Gam Bhi Bohat Hai.. Dard Bhi Hai..
Dil Me Sab Dabaa Leta Hoon..
Kabhi Akele To Kabhi Sabke Samne..
Akhon Se Angocha Bhigo Leta Hoon..
Main Gareeb Ka Beta Hoon..
Khush Hoon Main Jaisa Bhi Hoon Me..
Kisise Shikva Nahi Karta Hoon..
Main Jaisa Hoon Waise Koi Na Ho..
Roz Yahi Duwa Karta Hoon..
Main Gareeb Ka Beta Hoon...
Main Gareeb Ka Beta Hoon...
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well done
very nice indeed
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18th August 2010, 07:20 PM
Aadi,
another superb creation indeed..... keep it up buddy... khush raho ...yuhi likhte raho....
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"LAMHA"
mujhko acchaa nahiiN lagtaa ko’ii hamnaam teraa ,
ko’ii tujhsaa ho to phir naam bhii tujhsaa rakhe....
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18th August 2010, 07:25 PM
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Kabhi Sabji To Kabhi Kuch Naa Mile..
Namak Roti Pe Main Jee Leta Hoon.
Zakhm Chahe Jaisa Bhi Ho..
Thodi Haldi Main Lagaa Leta Hoon...
Main Gareeb Ka Beta Hoon..
Ek Kameez Ek Patloon..
Roz Bina Saboon Me Dhota Hoon
Badi Dukaano Ki Ronak Dekh...
Aksar Khush Me Ho Leta Hoon...
Main Gareeb Ka Beta Hoon..
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ye jo do aashaar hai .. apne aap main ek kamaal hai ... bohat diloN ke kareeb aa gaye ho aap apne in aashaaroN ke sath .. ye ehsaas aise hi nahi aate .. uspar se jo baat main highlight ki .. wo aapne to yuN hi likh dee .. par meri aaNkhoN maiN to tasweer bana gayi .. khuda apko khush rakhe ..
Mubarakbaad ke sath
Kunaal
KunaaL (Sifar).........
Hai 'sifar' bhi reyazi ka hissa..
Shayrii bhi hisaab ki hogi..
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18th August 2010, 08:31 PM
Ek Kameez Ek Patloon..
Roz Bina Saboon Me Dhota Hoon
Badi Dukaano Ki Ronak Dekh...
Aksar Khush Me Ho Leta Hoon...
Very Impressive ... Very touching ... ! Nice Creation ... !
YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN
Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ...
Fareb Kaa ChaDhtaa Bazaar Dekh
Insaaf Se Bastii Khaalii Ho Rahii Hai ...
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18th August 2010, 08:52 PM
superb...................really nice creation.
god bless u
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.....Sunita Thakur.....
यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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18th August 2010, 09:24 PM
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Aaj Ek Insaan Dekha.. Barish Me Bheegta Huwa.. APNE Bacho Ko Sambhalta Huwa.... Kabhi Yaha To Kabhi Waha Dauta Huwa... Usi Pe Kuch Likh raha Hoon... Ek Gareeb Insaan Ki Bhavnaayein Shayad Main Nahi Samajh Sakta Phir bhi.. Ek Koshish Ki..
Jindgi Ko Sitam Main Kehta Hoon..
Majbooriyon Me Bhi Khush Rehta Hoon..
Chand Boondon Se Pet Bhar Leta Hoon..
Main Gareeb Ka Beta Hoon..
Thandi Me Thithoor Leta Hoon..
Basaaat Me Bheeg Leta Hoon..
Garmi Paav Jalaati Hai ..
Pathron Pe Main So Leta Hoon...
Main Gareeb Ka Beta Hoon.
Kabhi Sabji To Kabhi Kuch Naa Mile..
Namak Roti Pe Main Jee Leta Hoon.
Zakhm Chahe Jaisa Bhi Ho..
Thodi Haldi Main Lagaa Leta Hoon...
Main Gareeb Ka Beta Hoon..
Ek Kameez Ek Patloon..
Roz Bina Saboon Me Dhota Hoon
Badi Dukaano Ki Ronak Dekh...
Aksar Khush Me Ho Leta Hoon...
Main Gareeb Ka Beta Hoon..
Gam Bhi Bohat Hai.. Dard Bhi Hai..
Dil Me Sab Dabaa Leta Hoon..
Kabhi Akele To Kabhi Sabke Samne..
Akhon Se Angocha Bhigo Leta Hoon..
Main Gareeb Ka Beta Hoon..
Khush Hoon Main Jaisa Bhi Hoon Me..
Kisise Shikva Nahi Karta Hoon..
Main Jaisa Hoon Waise Koi Na Ho..
Roz Yahi Duwa Karta Hoon..
Main Gareeb Ka Beta Hoon...
Main Gareeb Ka Beta Hoon...
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aashique saheb,
bahut achha likha hai aapne...aapke alfaazoN ne puri nazm ko ek aaine ke roop meiN dhaal diya...achha laga padh kar aur ye alfaaz hi haiN jinhone dard aNdar tak utha diya....
ek achhe qalaam par meri janib se daad qubuul farmaayeN...
'E Taahire Laahuti!!!
Uss Rizk Se Tau Maut Bhali
Jis Rizk Se Aatee Ho
Tere Parwaaz MeiN Kotaahi....
vikramjethi@gmail.com
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18th August 2010, 09:26 PM
Ek Kameez Ek Patloon..
Roz Bina Saboon Me Dhota Hoon
Badi Dukaano Ki Ronak Dekh...
Aksar Khush Me Ho Leta Hoon...
Main Gareeb Ka Beta Hoon..
nazam pe sarsari nazar dali.......phir thoda aage padha........fir...........padhta hi gaya.......jab poori nazam padh chuka to laptop ki sacreen dhundhla gai thi.....ankho'n ke kor bheeg chuke the........aapko dil se salaam and reps...
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19th August 2010, 11:59 AM
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well done
very nice indeed
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Thanks Janumanu Ji
Thanks a Ton
For Appreciation
Shukriyaa.. Janaab
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19th August 2010, 12:02 PM
Ab Thanks Bolu Yaa No Thanks Bolu.. .
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19th August 2010, 12:04 PM
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ye jo do aashaar hai .. apne aap main ek kamaal hai ... bohat diloN ke kareeb aa gaye ho aap apne in aashaaroN ke sath .. ye ehsaas aise hi nahi aate .. uspar se jo baat main highlight ki .. wo aapne to yuN hi likh dee .. par meri aaNkhoN maiN to tasweer bana gayi .. khuda apko khush rakhe ..
Mubarakbaad ke sath
Kunaal
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Shukriyaa Kunaal Bhai..
Thanks
For Appreciation ... KUCH WAISi hi tasveer meri Aakhon me Bhi Thi..
Jaan Ke Accha Laga Ke Aapko Bhi Woh dikhi..
Thanks Again..
Khush Rahiye
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19th August 2010, 12:05 PM
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Ek Kameez Ek Patloon..
Roz Bina Saboon Me Dhota Hoon
Badi Dukaano Ki Ronak Dekh...
Aksar Khush Me Ho Leta Hoon...
Very Impressive ... Very touching ... ! Nice Creation ... !
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Shukriyaa Naresh Bhai..
Bohat Bohat Shukriyaa
Padne aur Sarhane Ke liye..
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19th August 2010, 12:07 PM
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aashique saheb,
bahut achha likha hai aapne...aapke alfaazoN ne puri nazm ko ek aaine ke roop meiN dhaal diya...achha laga padh kar aur ye alfaaz hi haiN jinhone dard aNdar tak utha diya....
ek achhe qalaam par meri janib se daad qubuul farmaayeN...
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Originally Posted by parveen komal
Ek Kameez Ek Patloon..
Roz Bina Saboon Me Dhota Hoon
Badi Dukaano Ki Ronak Dekh...
Aksar Khush Me Ho Leta Hoon...
Main Gareeb Ka Beta Hoon..
nazam pe sarsari nazar dali.......phir thoda aage padha........fir...........padhta hi gaya.......jab poori nazam padh chuka to laptop ki sacreen dhundhla gai thi.....ankho'n ke kor bheeg chuke the........aapko dil se salaam and reps...
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Shukriyaa Parveen Aur Vikram Ji..
Aapki Duwao Ka Asar Shayad.. Jo Kalam Se Shabd Sahi Nikal Rahe Hai
Thanks Dost
Take CAre
and Keep SMiling ..
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20th August 2010, 04:20 PM
no words to say................ masha allha.......
every word, every line--- just awesom......
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23rd August 2010, 01:04 PM
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no words to say................ masha allha.......
every word, every line--- just awesom......
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shukriyaa sadiq bhai.. thanks for reading appreciation
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23rd August 2010, 07:29 PM
ur welcom ji,,,,,,,,,,
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Aaj kuch purana pad ke accha laga
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24th March 2016, 06:28 AM
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Aaj Ek Insaan Dekha.. Barish Me Bheegta Huwa.. APNE Bacho Ko Sambhalta Huwa.... Kabhi Yaha To Kabhi Waha Dauta Huwa... Usi Pe Kuch Likh raha Hoon... Ek Gareeb Insaan Ki Bhavnaayein Shayad Main Nahi Samajh Sakta Phir bhi.. Ek Koshish Ki..
Jindgi Ko Sitam Main Kehta Hoon..
Majbooriyon Me Bhi Khush Rehta Hoon..
Chand Boondon Se Pet Bhar Leta Hoon..
Main Gareeb Ka Beta Hoon..
Thandi Me Thithoor Leta Hoon..
Basaaat Me Bheeg Leta Hoon..
Garmi Paav Jalaati Hai ..
Pathron Pe Main So Leta Hoon...
Main Gareeb Ka Beta Hoon.
Kabhi Sabji To Kabhi Kuch Naa Mile..
Namak Roti Pe Main Jee Leta Hoon.
Zakhm Chahe Jaisa Bhi Ho..
Thodi Haldi Main Lagaa Leta Hoon...
Main Gareeb Ka Beta Hoon..
Ek Kameez Ek Patloon..
Roz Bina Saboon Me Dhota Hoon
Badi Dukaano Ki Ronak Dekh...
Aksar Khush Me Ho Leta Hoon...
Main Gareeb Ka Beta Hoon..
Gam Bhi Bohat Hai.. Dard Bhi Hai..
Dil Me Sab Dabaa Leta Hoon..
Kabhi Akele To Kabhi Sabke Samne..
Akhon Se Angocha Bhigo Leta Hoon..
Main Gareeb Ka Beta Hoon..
Khush Hoon Main Jaisa Bhi Hoon Me..
Kisise Shikva Nahi Karta Hoon..
Main Jaisa Hoon Waise Koi Na Ho..
Roz Yahi Duwa Karta Hoon..
Main Gareeb Ka Beta Hoon...
Main Gareeb Ka Beta Hoon...
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superbb feelings.... mind blowing....... and hats off for such a deep observation ......
you wrote very well and thanks for taking this a front........ likhte rahiye... khush rahiye
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24th March 2016, 06:49 AM
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Aaj Ek Insaan Dekha.. Barish Me Bheegta Huwa.. APNE Bacho Ko Sambhalta Huwa.... Kabhi Yaha To Kabhi Waha Dauta Huwa... Usi Pe Kuch Likh raha Hoon... Ek Gareeb Insaan Ki Bhavnaayein Shayad Main Nahi Samajh Sakta Phir bhi.. Ek Koshish Ki..
Jindgi Ko Sitam Main Kehta Hoon..
Majbooriyon Me Bhi Khush Rehta Hoon..
Chand Boondon Se Pet Bhar Leta Hoon..
Main Gareeb Ka Beta Hoon..
Thandi Me Thithoor Leta Hoon..
Basaaat Me Bheeg Leta Hoon..
Garmi Paav Jalaati Hai ..
Pathron Pe Main So Leta Hoon...
Main Gareeb Ka Beta Hoon.
Kabhi Sabji To Kabhi Kuch Naa Mile..
Namak Roti Pe Main Jee Leta Hoon.
Zakhm Chahe Jaisa Bhi Ho..
Thodi Haldi Main Lagaa Leta Hoon...
Main Gareeb Ka Beta Hoon..
Ek Kameez Ek Patloon..
Roz Bina Saboon Me Dhota Hoon
Badi Dukaano Ki Ronak Dekh...
Aksar Khush Me Ho Leta Hoon...
Main Gareeb Ka Beta Hoon..
Gam Bhi Bohat Hai.. Dard Bhi Hai..
Dil Me Sab Dabaa Leta Hoon..
Kabhi Akele To Kabhi Sabke Samne..
Akhon Se Angocha Bhigo Leta Hoon..
Main Gareeb Ka Beta Hoon..
Khush Hoon Main Jaisa Bhi Hoon Me..
Kisise Shikva Nahi Karta Hoon..
Main Jaisa Hoon Waise Koi Na Ho..
Roz Yahi Duwa Karta Hoon..
Main Gareeb Ka Beta Hoon...
Main Gareeb Ka Beta Hoon...
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Kisi doosre ke dard ko mahsoos karna aur uspe likhna asaan nahi ashiq ji...aapne ek gareeb ke ehsaas bahut khoobi se samne rakhe hain...kalaam dil pe asar karta hai....
Bahut khoob......
Likhte rahiye......
अर्ज मेरी एे खुदा क्या सुन सकेगा तू कभी
आसमां को बस इसी इक आस में तकते रहे
madhu..
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31st March 2016, 11:21 AM
kyaa baat hai dil ko chhuti hyui rachnaa .....................bahut hi achhi lagi .............
eshwar kabhi bhi kisi ko gareeb naa banaaye.............
laazwaabbb sabhdoN me kahi gyi ek sachhaai
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9th August 2016, 12:39 PM
shukriyaa Sameer ji, Madhu Ji aur Rajeev Ji ... Padne aur Sarhane ke liye Shukriya
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