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Hum bhi yaaro kamal ke nikley -
14th March 2003, 12:34 PM
Ahl -e -mehfil ko aadab arz kartaa huuN
Is taveel ghair haazirii ke liye muazrat chahta huuN. Aur maiN bayaN nahiN kar sakta ke kis qadar betaab tha kuch likhne aur usey yahaN pesh karne ke liye. Lekin advertising se juda huuN aur cricket WC ki wajah sey in dinoN kaam kii masruufiyaat bohat ziada rahii haiN. Phir bhi iss bazm meiN kya-kaya naya hua hai uski khabar mainey zaruur rakhi hai. Aur har naye kalaam se lutf-andoz hota raha hooN. Masruuf zindagi se jo kuchh mauqa mila to aik ghazal ke ye chand ashaar tehriir kiye haiN jinheN maiN aap sab kii rae ke liye pesh kar raha huuN. Tau arz karta huuN… ---------------------------------------------------------- GHAZAL Dil ko dhokey meiN daal ke nikley Hum bhi yaaro kamaal ke nikley Kya khabar thii wohi bhula degaa Jiski yaadeN sambhaal ke nikley Wo dasengey ye jaan kar bhi unheN AastiinoN meiN paal ke nikley Hijr sey bhi kathin na jaaney kyuuN Merey lamhey visaal ke nikley Har jagah raahzan haiN raahoN meiN Koii kya-kya sambhaal ke nikley Dost ban ke sada diye dhokey Merey dushman kamal ke nikley Koii batlaaye kis tarah dil sey Koii maazii nikaal ke nikley Uskey armaan sab ke sab aakhir Mujhko dil se nikaal ke nikley Fikr daulat ki kar raha tha jahaN Hum mohabbat sambhaal ke nikley Muntazir Praveen Saxena manziloN ne sun liya toh aur woh badh jaayeNgi |
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adaab -
14th March 2003, 03:36 PM
adaab
praveen ji,gazal to aapne kaafi achchi likhi he,lekin aapki ye lines bohot achchi lageen- raah me hi manzilon ka zikr mat chedo praveen, manzilon ne sun liya to aur woh badh jaayengi, bohot khoob!!! |
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Bahut achhe sahab |
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Bahut achhe sahab -
14th March 2003, 03:48 PM
Pravin Saxena Sahab, YooN to aapki posts jyada nahi parhi par ab suchta hooN sab Parhni padeiNgi, wakai bahut achha likha hai aapne.a
Aapki ye Ghazal bahut pasand aai, khas taur par ye antra. Fikr daulat ki kar raha tha jahaN Hum mohabbat sambhaal ke nikley Regards Chaand Anjaam sochkar, aksar khaamosh hi reh jaate haiN. - Chaand |
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Hi -
15th March 2003, 10:21 AM
prasaxena sahaab waah behatreen,,, bade dinoo bad kuch achha padhne ko milaa...khudahafiz...Swapnn
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22nd March 2003, 11:50 PM
saxena saahab,
aadaab arz hai! janaab, aapki ghazaloN ki kamii mehsoos hone laggii thi, magar aaj aapne umda ghazal dikhaa kar dil ki haalat khush kar di. meri aukaat nahiiN hai bhai, magar paDte paDte ek nUks dikhaa..
gustaakhi maaf ki jiye. sach meiN saxena saahab, aaj bahot dinoN ke baad gehr'ii ghazal paDne ka mauka mila hai! taareef, ohr mubaarakbaad qabuul ki jiye.. aman "je tu akhiiyaaN de saamne naii rehnaa, te bibba saada dil moD de..!" kya karooN? aisa hi hooN maiN.. |
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Re: adaab -
7th April 2003, 03:51 PM
Mumtaaz saheb
aapko ghazal pasand aayi bohat shukria. ummeed hai aage bhi aap apni rae se nawazte raheNge. Praveen Saxena manziloN ne sun liya toh aur woh badh jaayeNgi |
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Re: Bahut achhe sahab -
7th April 2003, 03:53 PM
Chaand Sahab
Aapko ghazal pasand aayi hamari mehnat wasool ho gayee. Aapki daad ka bohat shukria. Jawab dene maiN deri hui isske liye muafii chahte huuN. Praveen Saxena manziloN ne sun liya toh aur woh badh jaayeNgi |
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Re: Shukria -
7th April 2003, 03:56 PM
Swapneel ji
Derii se jawaab dene ke liye muafii chahta huuN. Aapne ghazal pasand kii. Badi hasla afzaii huii. Aapka behad shukria. Ummeeed hai aage bhii aapka saath milega. Praveen Saxena manziloN ne sun liya toh aur woh badh jaayeNgi |
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Shukria Sharabi Saheb -
7th April 2003, 04:02 PM
Janab Aman Shab
Sabse pehle to muafii chahtaa huuN ke jawab dene meiN der kii. Kaam meiN burii tarah phansa tha. Aur waise bhi aajkal aap kam hi nazar aate haiN kya baat hai? Ummeed hai sab kuch Khariyat se hi hoga. Aapko ghazal pasand aayii jaan kar bada hausla mila. meri aukaat nahiiN hai bhai, magar paDte paDte ek nUks dikhaa..
jao baat aap keh rahe haiN uss se misra behar se Khrij ho jaata hai. Aap bila jhijhak apni rae likheN ismeiN gustaKhii jaisi koii baat nahiN. Khul kar likheN achcha lagega. Bohat shukria ke saath Praveen manziloN ne sun liya toh aur woh badh jaayeNgi |
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10th April 2003, 05:47 AM
Adaab Praveen Saheb,
Khoob, bahut hi khoob. Sabse aachi lines hamein yeh lagee: "Fikr daulat ki kar raha tha jahaN Hum mohabbat sambhaal ke nikley" Lekin saheb aapne abhi tak se hamari request poori nahi kee. Intezaar mei Seemakshi "Jitni shiddat se tarastee, hoon mai uske liye Uutni shiddat se tho, unse mujhe chaha bhi na tha" |
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waah huzoor waah |
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waah huzoor waah -
16th April 2003, 03:16 PM
bahot khoob saxena saahab bahot khoob
aapki ghazal ki kya taareef karu... sab ke sab sher kamaal ke nikle..... bahot khoob... dil khush kar diya aapne.. likhte rahiye.. aapki ghazlein kam dikhaayi padti hain aajkal.. rabrakhaa ek umr ho gayi hai... ghazal hote hote |
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Shukria -
24th April 2003, 05:29 PM
Seema ji
Aapki daad ka shukria. Hausla badha hai. Aage bhi nigah-e-karam rakhiyega. Shukria Praveen manziloN ne sun liya toh aur woh badh jaayeNgi |
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Re: waah huzoor waah -
24th April 2003, 05:33 PM
Janab Trivedi Sahab
Jawaab meiN deri ke liye muafii chahta huuN. Pehle rozgaar phir ashaar... bus yahi haal hai zindagi ka. Bus issi wajah se ziada yahaN nahiN aa pa raha huuN. Aapne bade anokhey andaaz meiN daad di hai. Tah-e-dil se shukria. Aise hi nazr-e-inayat rakhiyega. shukria Praveen manziloN ne sun liya toh aur woh badh jaayeNgi |
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bahut khoob guruji! |
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bahut khoob guruji! -
24th April 2003, 08:34 PM
adaab-o-tasleem guruji........bade dino baad aapke naam-o-nishaan is mehfil ko sajaaye huwe mila.......vaise to humari nazar aapki is ghazl par bahut pehle hi padhi thi..........aaj vapis padhi aur pehle se bhi jyada luft huwa......khair abhi to hum is tareef ke saath aapko aasaani se jaane dete hain.....kabhi fursat mein aapki khabar lenge!
 ............tab tak ke liye aapko humara salaam....anamika... |
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Re: bahut khoob guruji! -
27th April 2003, 12:38 AM
Adaab Anamikaji
Bade shauq se hamari Khabar liijiye huzoor. Lekin pehle kuch apni to Khabar diijiye. Aap to haiN ke aajkal kahiN nazar hi nahiN aatiN. Na hi shaayad kuch likh rahi haiN. Bechare guruji shishya ki rachna ke intezaar meiN haiN aur intezaar hai ke puura hone ka naam hi nahiN le raha. Ghazal pasand farmane ka shukria. Aapko lutf aaya hamarii koshish kaamyaab hui. Ab aap bhi to kuch naya yahaN post kiijiye. Intezaar rahega. Aap se guzarish hai ke kabhi to online mil jaya kiijiye. Agar aapko disturbance hoga to keh diijiyega. Kam-az-kam dua salaam to ho jayega. Khair hameiN intezaar hai us waqt ka jab aapko fursat hogi aur aapse mulaqat hogi. Ummeed hai aapki sehat theek hogi. Parmatma aapko tandurust rakhe. InhiN duaoN ke saath. Praveen manziloN ne sun liya toh aur woh badh jaayeNgi |
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Re: Hum bhi yaaro kamal ke nikley -
1st March 2005, 02:32 PM
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mere big busy dost, is gajal ki pahchaan kis tarh hui yah baatu...... do din pahlay ki baat hai... bedil ne phone par yah gajal soonayi... aur muje kaha ki maa, aap jaroor padhna praveen ji ki yah gajal........ aur aaj padhi.......... tumhari gajal ki kya taarif karu? jo bhi kahungi kam padega.... tumhari dost meena |
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2nd March 2005, 12:14 PM
saxena saahab,
NICE KEEP WRITTING Durakht ke paymane pe chilman E husn ka furkat se sharmana Durakht ke paymane pe chilman E husn ka furkat se sharmana... Ye line samajh me aaye to mujhe zaroor batana |
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21st July 2005, 12:08 PM
Praveen Bhai....
kya khoob gazal pesh ki hai aapne......dard aur wafa ki shiddat..... is nacheez ki daad kabool kijiye.... aapka apna.... **(*·.¸(`·.¸ ¸.·´)¸.·*)** *·.¸Paigaam -e- Aman¸.·* **(¸.·´(¸.·* *·.¸)`·.¸)** ~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~* inhan ankhaaon vicho kadi, tere hanju vaghe si..... aaj ki hoye, jehda ^AMAN^ da lahoo vagda ae...... AMAN RAHI |
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