Gum nahi bhulta

[Äï§hä]

gum nahi bhulta bhoolaane se
num huii aankh mukuraane se

aaj wo ajnabi se lagte hain
jaanti hoon jinhe zamane se

doston ki parakh nahi kerna
maan toote ga aazmane se

jab se apno se chot khaaii hai
koii shikwaa nahi zamane se

zindagi ki haqeeqaton ki qasam
dil ki baatein hain bus fasaane se ...

[Sharaabi]

Achi baat hai..
Achi ghazal hai..
You've written this in a short beh'r, could either say in-between short/medium beh'r.
Sach meiN achi taraH jazbaat pesh kiya haiN, lekin aap matla bhool gaye?
Aur dusre sher meiN, aapne 'mukraane' likha hai, usko teekH kar lena jab bhi waqt mile

Likhte rahiye,
Aman