Ghazal: 'Laash'

Sharaabi · **Ghazal: 'Laash' -** 14th April 2003, 04:35 PM

pesh hai..

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uske kadmoN meiN jeeta tha ohr ant wahiiN hoga
aaj laash ko sajaane waala shyad yahiiN hoga

jeevan ka sahaara jab chhoD kar chala gaya..
to mera chale jaana bhi ab sahii hoga

darr mat badnaamii se, bas baith jaa mehfil meiN!
..ghazal meiN tere naam ka zikr nahiiN hoga

dil jalaane waala hi 'aman' ko jalaaye ga,
dhuuNd lo mere yaar ko, aas paas kahiiN hoga
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Aman ©

Afshan · 14th April 2003, 04:40 PM

Wah!..

Aman ji, ab apki shayri tareef hum kya karein? jo kuchh kahenge, kum hi hoga.. bas, apki ghazal padr kar kushi hoti hai.. thoda dard bhi.. dil mein ehsaas jagaane ke liye shukria!

paplupopat · 14th April 2003, 07:57 PM

i like it aman

darr mat badnaamii se, bas baith jaa mehfil meiN!
..ghazal meiN tere naam ka zikr nahiiN hoga

kuch muze bhi yaad aaya...

tu baDnaam na ho jaye ye soch kar jeeta hoon,

varna teri choakhat pe marane ka irada roj hota hai.

sabko salaam .

paplu.

Zeba · 14th April 2003, 07:59 PM

wah wah wah amanji,
is gazal ki har line mujhe pasand aayi hai,mai kis line ki zyada tareef karoon samajhme nahi aata.

zeba

dil_e_sikast · 14th April 2003, 08:04 PM

dil jalaane waala hi 'aman' ko jalaaye ga,
dhuuNd lo mere yaar ko, aas paas kahiiN hoga

wohi dard, wohi laash aur wohi maut.... aapke har nagme me dard hota hai, aur khusi hoti hai tab jab maut ki baat aapki ghazal me saamil na ho. magar aisa bahot kam hota hai. aapke liye to bas itna kehna hai..
chahe badal jaye duniya
chahe badal jaye halaat
na badlenge kabhi 'aman'
na badlenge unke khayalat

then after, u have really written from deep of ur heart. its good in all manner.
sanam

Sharaabi · 15th April 2003, 02:25 AM

Banno ji
mujhe is baat ki khushi hui ki mere dard ne kisi ko khush kar diya

waqt, ohr taareef ke bahot bahot shukriya!

Paplu saahab
sach kaha hai aapne yaar! na uski badnaamii seh sakte haiN, ohr na uski bewafaaii..
behad khush hua ki aapko mera lehk pasand aaya; dhanyavaad!

Zeba ji
taareef ki zaroorat nahiiN zeba ji, bas aapne isse paDa, aur waqt lagaa kar kuch lafz baaNTe, yehi bahot hai =)
maiN aapka shukr-guzaar huuN..

Meri sanam
maut ke bina meri pareshaani, mera dard, ohr mere jeevan ka ant nahiiN ho sakta, is liye maut hi sabse pyaari hai.
waise yaar, aapne mere dil ki baat kehe di.. maiN bhi logoN ko yehi kehna chahta huuN, ki jab tak shareer meiN yehi 'aatma' hai, tab tak maiN nahiiN badal sakta.
ghazal pasand farmaane ka behad shukriyaH!

aap sabne waqt lagaa kar hausla baDhaaya, is baat ka ehsaan yaad rakhuuN ga.

thanks once more,
aman

shayri12345 · **hi -** 15th April 2003, 05:16 AM

hi aman dard khoob pesh kiya hai aapne....mujhe jalane wala bhi yahi kahi hoga..aww..aur darr mat ghazal me tere naam ka jikar nahi hoga....
kya kahu har shabd kam hai...gehrayi hai aapke vicharo mein....bahut jyada

Priya

Sharaabi · 15th April 2003, 05:51 AM

Priya ji
agar is meiN gehraaii hai, to khush huuN is baat se ki aapko gehraaii ka ehsaas hua..
hazaaroN shabdoN ki zaroorat nahiiN, sirf ek hi kaafi hai =)

waqt, taareef, ohr hausla baDhaane ka laakh laakh shukriya!

aman

Bhige Palken · **Re: Ghazal: 'Laash' -** 15th April 2003, 11:02 AM

Dear AMAN JI

BAHUT HI ACCHA LIKA HAI AAP NE
KHAS KER KYE AAP KA AAKHRI MISRA TO DILL KO CHOO GAYA HAI.

dil jalaane waala hi 'aman' ko jalaaye ga,
dhuuNd lo mere yaar ko, aas paas kahiiN hoga

AAP KI BARABRI TO MAIN NAHEN KER SEKTA HUN PER AAP KI SHHAN MAIN EK SHAYR ARZ KERTA HUN JO KI MARE PAPA KA LIKHA HAI;

"jala hai jesm jahan dill bhi jal gaya hoga"
"kuryedte ho kyun ab raakh justuju kaya hai"

aap ka....kaderdan

ghayalparwana · 15th April 2003, 11:41 AM

uske kadmoN meiN jeeta tha ohr ant wahiiN hoga
aaj laash ko sajaane waala shyad yahiiN hoga

dil jalaane waala hi 'aman' ko jalaaye ga,
dhuuNd lo mere yaar ko, aas paas kahiiN hoga

Wah! Aman sahab,kya Likha hai aapne!!

Sach,woh maut bhi kitni haseen hogi jo apne bewafa yaar ke pehloo me aaye..Dil jalaane waala hi 'aman' ko jalayega..Wah!dil hila diya aapki is line ne..

Behtreen ghazal pash karne ka shukriya..
Varinder

salman shaikh · **Adaab Janab -** 15th April 2003, 01:46 PM

Salam?
Kaise mijaaz hai. Janab bahut khoob likha hai apne mashallah se agey bhi apse yehi umeed hai...

kudha hafiz.........

EK ANJAAN SA DOST

SALMAN SHAIKH

akant · 15th April 2003, 03:44 PM

Priy Aman bhai,

aapki likhi har ghazal ka entjaar rahata hai. mujhe bahoot pasand aayi aapki yah ghazal. eskii har line kabile tarif hai.

dhanyavaad kubool kareN.

Akant...

mein_aur_tanhai · 15th April 2003, 04:17 PM

namaste amanji.... .

aaree.. sirkar..maaf kijyega... ke mein bahut der baad..apki tareef kar raha hun ... per yar... sach kahu too apne.. dillon ke taar hila diye..... apke.. gazal ki har line kya humein har alfaaz pasand aya .. .aur... joo dard tha .. usse humara maan bhar aya ....

umeed karta hun app agge bhi aise hi likhte rahnege..

bye take care

Ankit Anand · **hello -** 28th May 2004, 04:21 PM

Aman ji,

aapki likhi ghazal bas mil gayi toi padh liya raha nahi gaya reply dene se..to likh diya.. aap kaise hain aur kaha hain aaj kal? God aapko salamat rakhe...

ANKIT

akant · **hi -** 22nd June 2005, 05:07 PM

only akant...

sunita thakur · 30th July 2008, 04:44 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Sharaabi

pesh hai..

---
uske kadmoN meiN jeeta tha ohr ant wahiiN hoga
aaj laash ko sajaane waala shyad yahiiN hoga

jeevan ka sahaara jab chhoD kar chala gaya..
to mera chale jaana bhi ab sahii hoga

darr mat badnaamii se, bas baith jaa mehfil meiN!
..ghazal meiN tere naam ka zikr nahiiN hoga

dil jalaane waala hi 'aman' ko jalaaye ga,
dhuuNd lo mere yaar ko, aas paas kahiiN hoga
---
Aman ©

...........kai baar in future hone wali baat phele hi jubaaN par aa jati hai