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Daud...??? -
29th October 2009, 12:19 AM
Bhage ga Khud se kahaN? KahaN jayega? Yeh raasta tujhe, Kheench yahiN le aayega... Chhoot saka na iss chakkar se koi Tu bhi na bach payega Roop badal badal ke Tu wapis yahiN pe aayega... Nahi bas meiN tere Aana jaana kahiN AandhiyoN me khushk patte sa Tez hawa ke sang beh jayega... Sang lehroN ke tairne meiN Tujhe aata nahi Maza Uncha u'dne ki Khwahish meiN Fanaah yahiN ho jayega... Maya ke pher meiN Tu Gangu se bhoj hua Aaj bata iss kafan meiN Tu jeb kahaN se layega.... Uss Rizk Se Tau Maut Bhali Jis Rizk Se Aatee Ho Tere Parwaaz MeiN Kotaahi.... vikramjethi@gmail.com |
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29th October 2009, 01:03 AM
Hats off to you....excellent...extremely hard hitting...hume jo pasand aayi vo kuch is tarha aapne likhi:
Maya ke pher meiN Tu Gangu se bhoj hua Aaj bata iss kafan meiN Tu jeb kahaN se layega.... bahut khoob!!!! jo aapke dil se awaj nikli hai...vo hamre dil tak pahuchi hai... THIS POEM IS A REALITY CHECK FOR ALL OF US!! Aandhiya Gam Ki Chalegi To Sawar Jaoonga Me Mai To Dariya Hu Samoondar Me Utar Jaaonga Me Mujhe Suli Pe Chadane Ki Jaroorat Kya Hai Logo Mere Haato Se Kalam Cheen Lo Yuhi Mar Jaoonga Me (When i received You in my heart everything changed for me) |
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29th October 2009, 02:27 PM
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Thanks a lot for appreciating my work. Aapne jo zranawaazi ki hai uska bahut bahut ehtraam karta hu…. Agar main vo keh paya hu jo main kehna chahta tha to mujhe iss baat ki khushi hai…. Shukriya, Vikram Jethi Uss Rizk Se Tau Maut Bhali Jis Rizk Se Aatee Ho Tere Parwaaz MeiN Kotaahi.... vikramjethi@gmail.com |
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daud originally posted by vikramjethi |
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daud originally posted by vikramjethi -
29th October 2009, 09:27 PM
extremely beautiful.......LAJWAAB
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30th October 2009, 01:02 AM
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Keep guiding me through your valuable comments Vikram Jethi Uss Rizk Se Tau Maut Bhali Jis Rizk Se Aatee Ho Tere Parwaaz MeiN Kotaahi.... vikramjethi@gmail.com |
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30th October 2009, 01:11 AM
Bhai!!!
'JI" ka beshumar istimal panapti dosti ke liye behad hi hanikarak hi!!! aisi gusthakhi phir na kare..... Gangu teli ko.....Bhoj-giri na dhikayiye......aapke hi shabdo me Aaj bata iss kafan meiN Tu jeb kahaN se layega.... Nice Try bring some more Take Gud Care A-mit Aandhiya Gam Ki Chalegi To Sawar Jaoonga Me Mai To Dariya Hu Samoondar Me Utar Jaaonga Me Mujhe Suli Pe Chadane Ki Jaroorat Kya Hai Logo Mere Haato Se Kalam Cheen Lo Yuhi Mar Jaoonga Me (When i received You in my heart everything changed for me) |
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30th October 2009, 04:32 PM
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I really liked the way you suggested to oust formality from our conversation. I too believe in such relations.... While reading your message some lines stated to dribble in my mind to come out into an open space and I thought what better place can be there than sdc...... Iss liye ye pankatiyaN khaas aapki nazar:- Woh kehte haiN ke, 'Jee' na kaho Bin 'Jee' ke hi hmaare tum jigar meiN raho Kehna chahte ho Kya? Zara Khul ke ye izhaar karo...... Ye na dard-e-jigar hai na hai khta-e-khaal Jab karni ho yaari kisi se to 'Jee' lagao aur dil se dua bemisaal karo Kehna unka hai ke 'Jee' ek takkaluff hai Apna kehna hai, ke.... 'Jee' lage na lage, yaari magar bemisaal karo Na hai har insaaN iss layak ke 'Jee' lage 'Jee' laga ke tum uss Rab! ke hunar ka zara ehtraam karo Lut jaate haiN Taj-o-ta_Khat iss, 'Jee' ke jamaal se Hai ye 'Jee' kaisi bala soch-soch ye, na apni jaan be-haal karo Shukr uss khuda ka ke jisne bana insaan hme karam se navaza 'Jee' lage na lage, koi baat nahi....... aae ho duniya me insaan ban ke, to phir bas pyaar karo Baat chhoti hai, kehni magar zaroori hai 'Jee' tumhare liye na hai koi majboori...... Kaise bhi karo magar karo hmse tum koi baat karo Uss Rizk Se Tau Maut Bhali Jis Rizk Se Aatee Ho Tere Parwaaz MeiN Kotaahi.... vikramjethi@gmail.com |
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31st October 2009, 02:53 PM
bahut khoob....shayar saab.....
Bemisaal...... Amit Aandhiya Gam Ki Chalegi To Sawar Jaoonga Me Mai To Dariya Hu Samoondar Me Utar Jaaonga Me Mujhe Suli Pe Chadane Ki Jaroorat Kya Hai Logo Mere Haato Se Kalam Cheen Lo Yuhi Mar Jaoonga Me (When i received You in my heart everything changed for me) |
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