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Ek Ghazal -
23rd June 2014, 04:30 PM
Azziz dosto
Ek shadeed ehsaas-e-dard ne chand sawaalat se rubaruu kar diya… ke zindagi meiN aakhir jo hum dhoondte haiN kya sahii jagah dhoondte haiN? Aur jahaaN dhoondte haiN kya wahan wo milta hai jiski muraad hai? Inhi sawaalat se ye ashaar vajood meiN aa gaye. Muaamla dard ka hai to socha Dard ka ruKh kiya jaaye. HaalaNke ye mere fikr-o-suKhan se kuchh juda haiN, magar phir bhi.
Ek Ghazal
BayaNbaN mei kyuN kar makaN dhoondta hai
KyuN patthar meiN dil aur jaaN dhoondta hai
Zindagi hai tuli aazmane ko har pal
Mujhe ab harik imtehaaN dhoondta hai
Huva kya hai aakhir ye soch aur samjh ko
Tu nahaq butoN mein zabaaN dhoondta hai
JahaN haiN faqat zaKhm hi dene waale
Tu KhushiyoN ko kyuNkar wahaN dhoondta hai
Kahe kyuN na aaKhir zamana deewaana
Jo khandar mein apna jahaaN dhoondta hai
Bachi hai faqat raakh hi ab wahan par
Utha thha kahaN se dhuNvaN dhoondta hai
Khaaksaar
Praveen Saxena
raah meiN hi manziloN ka zikr mat chedo Praveen
manziloN ne sun liya toh aur woh badh jaayeNgi
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23rd June 2014, 09:47 PM
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Originally Posted by prasaxena
Azziz dosto
Ek shadeed ehsaas-e-dard ne chand sawaalat se rubaruu kar diya… ke zindagi meiN aakhir jo hum dhoondte haiN kya sahii jagah dhoondte haiN? Aur jahaaN dhoondte haiN kya wahan wo milta hai jiski muraad hai? Inhi sawaalat se ye ashaar vajood meiN aa gaye. Muaamla dard ka hai to socha Dard ka ruKh kiya jaaye. HaalaNke ye mere fikr-o-suKhan se kuchh juda haiN, magar phir bhi.
Ek Ghazal
BayaNbaN mei kyuN kar makaN dhoondta hai
KyuN patthar meiN dil aur jaaN dhoondta hai
Zindagi hai tuli aazmane ko har pal
Mujhe ab harik imtehaaN dhoondta hai
Huva kya hai aakhir ye soch aur samjh ko
Tu nahaq butoN mein zabaaN dhoondta hai
JahaN haiN faqat zaKhm hi dene waale
Tu KhushiyoN ko kyuNkar wahaN dhoondta hai
Kahe kyuN na aaKhir zamana deewaana
Jo khandar mein apna jahaaN dhoondta hai
Bachi hai to bas raakh, nahiN koi shola
Utha thha kahaN se dhuNvaN dhoondta hai
Khaaksaar
Praveen Saxena
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waahhhhhh kyaa baat hai Praveen bhaisaab.... bahot hi acchii peshkash hai aapki... muddat ke baad aapko SDC me padhna bahot accha lagaa.... aate rahen, bazm ko sajaate rahen... shukriyaa
Shaad....
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MaiN Our Meri Tanhaayii
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23rd June 2014, 09:54 PM
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Originally Posted by prasaxena
Azziz dosto
Ek shadeed ehsaas-e-dard ne chand sawaalat se rubaruu kar diya… ke zindagi meiN aakhir jo hum dhoondte haiN kya sahii jagah dhoondte haiN? Aur jahaaN dhoondte haiN kya wahan wo milta hai jiski muraad hai? Inhi sawaalat se ye ashaar vajood meiN aa gaye. Muaamla dard ka hai to socha Dard ka ruKh kiya jaaye. HaalaNke ye mere fikr-o-suKhan se kuchh juda haiN, magar phir bhi.
Ek Ghazal
BayaNbaN mei kyuN kar makaN dhoondta hai
KyuN patthar meiN dil aur jaaN dhoondta hai
Zindagi hai tuli aazmane ko har pal
Mujhe ab harik imtehaaN dhoondta hai
Huva kya hai aakhir ye soch aur samjh ko
Tu nahaq butoN mein zabaaN dhoondta hai
JahaN haiN faqat zaKhm hi dene waale
Tu KhushiyoN ko kyuNkar wahaN dhoondta hai
Kahe kyuN na aaKhir zamana deewaana
Jo khandar mein apna jahaaN dhoondta hai
Bachi hai to bas raakh, nahiN koi shola
Utha thha kahaN se dhuNvaN dhoondta hai
Khaaksaar
Praveen Saxena
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Praveen Saxena ji...bahoot hi khoobsoorat intekhaab se nawaza hai aapne is mehfil ko...bahut sii daad...qabool farmaaiyegaa
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24th June 2014, 11:50 AM
JahaN haiN faqat zaKhm hi dene waale
Tu KhushiyoN ko kyuNkar wahaN dhoondta hai
Kahe kyuN na aaKhir zamana deewaana
Jo khandar mein apna jahaaN dhoondta hai
Wah wah. ..bohat khoob praveen ji.
Zainy
PalkoN ki baand ko tod ke daaman pe aa gira
Ek aaNsu mere zabt ki tauheen kar gaya...
Nm
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26th June 2014, 10:17 PM
Praveen ji
A very touching poetry.Sachayi ke anokhe rang se saji ek nayaab kavita.
Regards
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1st July 2014, 03:22 PM
Shaad sahab, Harsh Sahab, Zainyji, aur Sukanyaji
Aap sabki pazeeraii ka bohat shukria. Appki daad bohat ma'ani rakhti hai.
Bohat shukria ke saath
Praveen
raah meiN hi manziloN ka zikr mat chedo Praveen
manziloN ne sun liya toh aur woh badh jaayeNgi
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5th July 2014, 06:27 PM
Ek achi kaawish ke liyN aapki khidmat mai daad hazir hai qubool farmaaiye tamaam aashaar bhut khoob rahe
aslam
zindagi ke haseen lamhe ka
Khoobsurat sa intekhaab ho tum
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24th July 2015, 10:00 PM
Janab aslam noor sahab
Jawaab mein iss taakhiir ka liye ma'azrat chahta huuN.
Aapne ghazal pasand farmayee, isska bohat shukria.
Praveen
raah meiN hi manziloN ka zikr mat chedo Praveen
manziloN ne sun liya toh aur woh badh jaayeNgi
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24th July 2015, 10:17 PM
Wah wah Praveen ji....
Kya khoob jaadu chala hai kalam ka apki...
Sab sher ek se badkar ek.
Yunhi likhte rahiye aur hum sab se share karte rahiye.
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24th July 2015, 10:32 PM
Waaah....umda ashaar...bahut khoob ghazal huyi hai praveen ji...daad kubool karein .
अर्ज मेरी एे खुदा क्या सुन सकेगा तू कभी
आसमां को बस इसी इक आस में तकते रहे
madhu..
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24th July 2015, 11:31 PM
Namaste Pravin ji,
Jaane yeh khoobsurat nagina mujhse kahaan chhupa reh gaya. Har ek sher mukammal laga mujhe. Meri dil se daad kubool kijiye. Apna khayal rakhiye.
Kab sochaa thha milegaa humsafar "Shweta" jaisaa
Lagta hai is baar "Pulkit", kismat teri bhi rang laayii hai
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Shukria -
2nd August 2015, 09:47 PM
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Originally Posted by masti
Wah wah Praveen ji....
Kya khoob jaadu chala hai kalam ka apki...
Sab sher ek se badkar ek.
Yunhi likhte rahiye aur hum sab se share karte rahiye.
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Masti ji
Gazal par aur hausla afzaai ka bohat shukria.
Praveen
raah meiN hi manziloN ka zikr mat chedo Praveen
manziloN ne sun liya toh aur woh badh jaayeNgi
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Shukria -
2nd August 2015, 09:48 PM
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Namaste Pravin ji,
Jaane yeh khoobsurat nagina mujhse kahaan chhupa reh gaya. Har ek sher mukammal laga mujhe. Meri dil se daad kubool kijiye. Apna khayal rakhiye.
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Pulkit Bhai
Chaliye der se hi sahi ye kalaam aapki nazar se to guzra. Aapki daad mil gayi, koshish wasool ho gayi. Daad ke liye tah-e-dil se shukria ada karta huuN.
Praveen
raah meiN hi manziloN ka zikr mat chedo Praveen
manziloN ne sun liya toh aur woh badh jaayeNgi
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3rd August 2015, 01:39 PM
wah Praveen bhai bahut khoob likha h aapne
likhte rahen
duaon ke saath
Aapka Apna Ishk
'इश्क' के बदले इश्क चाहना तिजारत है
इज़हार किससे करें महबूब तो दिल में है
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Suhkria -
6th August 2015, 10:33 PM
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wah Praveen bhai bahut khoob likha h aapne
likhte rahen
duaon ke saath
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Ishk Sahab
Aaapki daad ka bohat shukria.
Mukhlis
Praveen
raah meiN hi manziloN ka zikr mat chedo Praveen
manziloN ne sun liya toh aur woh badh jaayeNgi
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"Taish meN hai Taish"
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8th August 2015, 06:17 PM
janaab Praveen saahib tak khaaksaar ka salaam pahunche. Ik umda bayaangi pe dili daad qubool farmaayeN... Khaas taur se is misre ne to dil hi khush kar diya...
"Mujhe ab harik imtehaaN dhoondta hai"
bas yuNhi mefil roshan karte rahiye...
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shukria -
9th September 2015, 08:19 PM
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janaab Praveen saahib tak khaaksaar ka salaam pahunche. Ik umda bayaangi pe dili daad qubool farmaayeN... Khaas taur se is misre ne to dil hi khush kar diya...
"Mujhe ab harik imtehaaN dhoondta hai"
bas yuNhi mefil roshan karte rahiye...
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Janab Taish Sahab
Aapki daad per jawaab meiN deri ke liye muafi chahta hooN. Ghazal ki paziirai ka bohat shukria. Aapke bhi naye kalaam ka intezaar hai.
Khaaksaar
Praveen
raah meiN hi manziloN ka zikr mat chedo Praveen
manziloN ne sun liya toh aur woh badh jaayeNgi
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12th September 2015, 11:06 AM
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Zindagi hai tuli aazmane ko har pal
Mujhe ab harik imtehaaN dhoondta hai
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Aaj ye na padhta to gunaah ho jaata.. arre waah waah waah waah .. qamaal ka sher bayaani sab aala .. aapko salaam..
Par haan second last sher repeative lagta hai .. aur aakhiri sher ko aur ghisa jaa sakta tha .. aap dekhiyega ..
Sifar
KunaaL (Sifar).........
Hai 'sifar' bhi reyazi ka hissa..
Shayrii bhi hisaab ki hogi..
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12th September 2015, 11:09 AM
waah saxena ji, bahot hi kaamyaam ghazal hui hai. yeh sher khaas taur se pasand aaya. daad hi daad.
Zindagi hai tuli aazmane ko har pal
Mujhe ab harik imtehaaN dhoondta hai
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gore ghareeban hai ye 'bismil', kyun tu naashaad nazar aata hai?
musht-e-khaak hai basi yahan, bata kahan fuwaad nazar aata hai?
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shukria -
12th September 2015, 10:23 PM
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Aaj ye na padhta to gunaah ho jaata.. arre waah waah waah waah .. qamaal ka sher bayaani sab aala .. aapko salaam..
Par haan second last sher repeative lagta hai .. aur aakhiri sher ko aur ghisa jaa sakta tha .. aap dekhiyega ..
Sifar
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Kunal Bhai
Bhai bohat shukria daad ka. Aajkal SDC par active dih rahe ho achcha lag rha hai. Purane din yaad aa jaate haiN. Aapki baatoN par ghour karuN ga.
Bohat shukria
Praveen
raah meiN hi manziloN ka zikr mat chedo Praveen
manziloN ne sun liya toh aur woh badh jaayeNgi
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12th September 2015, 10:24 PM
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waah saxena ji, bahot hi kaamyaam ghazal hui hai. yeh sher khaas taur se pasand aaya. daad hi daad.
Zindagi hai tuli aazmane ko har pal
Mujhe ab harik imtehaaN dhoondta hai
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Janab Bismil Sahab
Ghazal ko waqt dene aur aur musbat raae se nawaazne ka bohat shukria.
Praveen
raah meiN hi manziloN ka zikr mat chedo Praveen
manziloN ne sun liya toh aur woh badh jaayeNgi
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14th September 2015, 03:47 PM
Saxena saHb ko nacheez ka adaab..
jenab bohot alaa darje ka kalaam hua hai. dil se daad-o-mubarakbaad qubool farmaayeiN.
Regards
Sagar Aashna
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