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~*~ Ehsaas ~*~ - 3rd September 2006, 11:25 AM
hello friends ,Try to write something short and simple,hope u all like it

" The credit of this ghazal goes to my 2 friends Parul and Mayank who inspire me to write some thing simple and short , thanks to both of them"



Door ho kar bhi tumhe paas rakhte hai
Tere hone ka jo ham Ehsaas rakhte hai

Bin tere yaaadoN mai jiya karte hai
Har shaam ham ab udaas rakhte hai

Tujhe ilm hi nahi meri mahobbat ka
Har chahere mai teri pyaas rakhte hai

Vo rakeeb hai mera yakin hai mujhko
Fir bhi dostoN mai use khaas rakhte hai

Waqt ki meharbaniyoN se hai waaquif
HaadsoN ko apne aaspass rakhte hai

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3rd September 2006, 11:34 AM
hello dost kaise ho aap?


aapne jo likha hai uske bare me main aapsse kya kahu bas itna hi kahuga k dost dil me bas gaya aapka likha hua

bahot hi badhiya lkikha hai aapne

aur khas kar ke ye line mujhe bahot hi pasand aayi

Tujhe ilm hi nahi meri mahobbat ka
Har chahere mai teri pyaas rakhte hai


aapka dost dhaval

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3rd September 2006, 01:58 PM
Vo rakeeb hai mera yakin hai mujhko
Fir bhi dostoN mai use khaas rakhte hai

Waqt ki meharbaniyoN se hai waaquif
HaadsoN ko apne aaspass rakhte hai


waaaah manu ji,bahut khoob.bahut acha likha aapne,yeh do ashaar to behad pasand aaye.likhte rahiye yunhin.

yun bin bulaaye milne chala aata hai,
gham ko mujh se yeh unsiyat kaisi??

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hi - 3rd September 2006, 04:41 PM
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hi - 4th September 2006, 12:02 AM
dhaval thanx yaar 4 coming

tame aavya mane bahu saaru laagyu
keep coming dear

basically credit of this poetry goes to my two frieinds "Mayank" and "Parul"whose name i have forgotten to mention, they suggested and inspire me to write something simple and short and i accepted their suggetion
,and created this ghazal after long thinking

i m happy that u like d same

keep coming dear

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Re: ~*~ Ehsaas ~*~ - 4th September 2006, 09:02 AM
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hello friends ,Try to write something short and simple,hope u all like it

" The credit of this ghazal goes to my 2 friends Parul and Mayank who inspire me to write some thing simple and short , thanks to both of them"



Door ho kar bhi tumhe paas rakhte hai
Tere hone ka jo ham Ehsaas rakhte hai

Bin tere yaaadoN mai jiya karte hai
Har shaam ham ab udaas rakhte hai

Tujhe ilm hi nahi meri mahobbat ka
Har chahere mai teri pyaas rakhte hai

Vo rakeeb hai mera yakin hai mujhko
Fir bhi dostoN mai use khaas rakhte hai

Waqt ki meharbaniyoN se hai waaquif
HaadsoN ko apne aaspass rakhte hai
very nice manu ji

aapka likha ek ek word dil ko choo lene wala hai
bahut hi pyara likha hai aapne
keep writing
dil se daad kabool karo

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hi - 4th September 2006, 10:58 AM
akelijaan ji aap ka bahut bahut shukriyaa,jo aap ne mujhe samay nikaal kar padhaa aur pasand kiyaa

aise hi aate rahiyega
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hi - 4th September 2006, 11:10 AM
Door ho kar bhi tumhe paas rakhte hai
Tere hone ka jo ham Ehsaas rakhte hai

wah janab manu ji kaya aagaaz hai bhut pyara....

Bin tere yaaadoN mai jiya karte hai
Har shaam ham ab udaas rakhte hai

Tujhe ilm hi nahi meri mahobbat ka
Har chahere mai teri pyaas rakhte hai

bhut khub alfaaz nahi hai mere paas......

Vo rakeeb hai mera yakin hai mujhko
Fir bhi dostoN mai use khaas rakhte hai

Waqt ki meharbaniyoN se hai waaquif
HaadsoN ko apne aaspass rakhte hai

yeh dono share to dil main bass gaye.....

manu ji appki har rachna bhut umda hoti hai or mujhe appki ki post ka bari besabri se intzaar rehta hai appko parhkar dil ko sakoon milta hai.....yu hee aate rahitye or apna khyaal rakhiye......raj......

un se kar liya kinara unki khushi ki khatir
ab mujhe bewafa kahiye ya bawafa kahiye...(Raj)
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Re: ~*~ Ehsaas ~*~ - 4th September 2006, 01:00 PM
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hello friends ,Try to write something short and simple,hope u all like it

" The credit of this ghazal goes to my 2 friends Parul and Mayank who inspire me to write some thing simple and short , thanks to both of them"



Door ho kar bhi tumhe paas rakhte hai
Tere hone ka jo ham Ehsaas rakhte hai

Bin tere yaaadoN mai jiya karte hai
Har shaam ham ab udaas rakhte hai

Tujhe ilm hi nahi meri mahobbat ka
Har chahere mai teri pyaas rakhte hai

Vo rakeeb hai mera yakin hai mujhko
Fir bhi dostoN mai use khaas rakhte hai

Waqt ki meharbaniyoN se hai waaquif
HaadsoN ko apne aaspass rakhte hai
[color=royal blue]Manu,

kam LafzoN meiN liKhane kee koShiSh hai, Jis meiN tumHaari mehnat bhee nazar aa rahi hai.. dhire dhire likhte rahoge to GhaltiyaaN bhee kam hone lagegii.. raadiif meiN aib hai...

Aaap ne raadiif istemaal kiya hai "raKhate hai" ab yeh batao kee 'Rakhate' ke baad 'Hai' kaise istemaal hoga.. "rakhate haiN" hota hai.. usi tarah jaise ham kahte haiN "aap haiN" aise to nahee kahte na kee 'aap hai" Ok? aur Rakhate haiN, ess raadif ko nibhaana itna aasaan nahee haiN.. Phir bhee koShish kee hai yeH bohat baRi baat hai.. mere taraf se daad-mubaarak baad qubool karo.. .

liKhate raho..

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5th September 2006, 04:02 AM
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bahot khoob. ab yeh shayri kuch samjh me aati hai. achha laga tumhe parh ke aur iss se bhi achha likhna. meri daad kubul karna, aur shubh-kaamna tumhare saath hi hai. take care!
   
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6th September 2006, 01:14 AM
Manu,
Bahut khubsurat ghazal likhi hain aapne.....Beher ko chota rakhne ki koshish rang laayi hainn..
My fav sher
Vo rakeeb hai mera yakin hai mujhko
Fir bhi dostoN mai use khaas rakhte hai


Keep posting.
Bye.


marane kii duaaye.n kyuu.N maa.Nguu.N jiine kii tamaannaa kaun kare
ye duniyaa ho yaa vo duniyaa ab Khvaahish-e-duniyaa kaun kare


jo aag lagaaii thii tum ne us ko to bujhaayaa ashko.n ne
jo ashko.n ke bha.Dakaaii hai us aag ko Tha.nDaa kaun kare


jab kashtii saabit-o-saalib thii, saahil kii tamannaa kisako thii
ab aisii shikastaa kashtii me.n saahil kii tamannaa kaun kare


duniyaa ne hame.n chho.Daa ai dil, ham chho.D na de kyo.n duniyaa ko
duniyaa ko samajh kar baiThe hai.n ab duniyaa duniyaa kaun kare



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Re: ~*~ Ehsaas ~*~ - 6th September 2006, 10:09 AM
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hello friends ,Try to write something short and simple,hope u all like it

" The credit of this ghazal goes to my 2 friends Parul and Mayank who inspire me to write some thing simple and short , thanks to both of them"



Door ho kar bhi tumhe paas rakhte hai
Tere hone ka jo ham Ehsaas rakhte hai

Bin tere yaaadoN mai jiya karte hai
Har shaam ham ab udaas rakhte hai

Tujhe ilm hi nahi meri mahobbat ka
Har chahere mai teri pyaas rakhte hai

Vo rakeeb hai mera yakin hai mujhko
Fir bhi dostoN mai use khaas rakhte hai

Waqt ki meharbaniyoN se hai waaquif
HaadsoN ko apne aaspass rakhte hai
manu ji namaskar

bahut accha lagga appko padkar, har share dil dil ko chu gaya.

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.....Sunita Thakur.....

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hi - 6th September 2006, 05:54 PM
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Re: Re: ~*~ Ehsaas ~*~ - 7th September 2006, 02:05 PM
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very nice manu ji

aapka likha ek ek word dil ko choo lene wala hai
bahut hi pyara likha hai aapne
keep writing
dil se daad kabool karo

dilip

Dilip ji aap jaise dost hai tab tak likhane ka hossala miltaa rahegaa,aap ko mera likha hua pasand aya ye jan kar behad hi khushi hui, i m thankful 2 u for words of appreciation,yunhi aate rahoge dost yahi ummid hai tumse

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Door ho kar bhi tumhe paas rakhte hai
Tere hone ka jo ham Ehsaas rakhte hai

wah janab manu ji kaya aagaaz hai bhut pyara....

Bin tere yaaadoN mai jiya karte hai
Har shaam ham ab udaas rakhte hai

Tujhe ilm hi nahi meri mahobbat ka
Har chahere mai teri pyaas rakhte hai

bhut khub alfaaz nahi hai mere paas......

Vo rakeeb hai mera yakin hai mujhko
Fir bhi dostoN mai use khaas rakhte hai

Waqt ki meharbaniyoN se hai waaquif
HaadsoN ko apne aaspass rakhte hai

yeh dono share to dil main bass gaye.....

manu ji appki har rachna bhut umda hoti hai or mujhe appki ki post ka bari besabri se intzaar rehta hai appko parhkar dil ko sakoon milta hai.....yu hee aate rahitye or apna khyaal rakhiye......raj......
raaj ji ye to aap ka badappan hai jo ap mere jaise adnaa shayar ko padhana pasand karate hai,agar mujhe padh kar ap ko shukoon miltaa hai to ye mere liye khushi ki baat hogi ,chalo kisi ke kuchh to kaam aaya mai,

jald hi aap ke intzaar khatma hoga
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Re: Re: ~*~ Ehsaas ~*~ - 7th September 2006, 02:18 PM
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kam LafzoN meiN liKhane kee koShiSh hai, Jis meiN tumHaari mehnat bhee nazar aa rahi hai.. dhire dhire likhte rahoge to GhaltiyaaN bhee kam hone lagegii.. raadiif meiN aib hai...

Aaap ne raadiif istemaal kiya hai "raKhate hai" ab yeh batao kee 'Rakhate' ke baad 'Hai' kaise istemaal hoga.. "rakhate haiN" hota hai.. usi tarah jaise ham kahte haiN "aap haiN" aise to nahee kahte na kee 'aap hai" Ok? aur Rakhate haiN, ess raadif ko nibhaana itna aasaan nahee haiN.. Phir bhee koShish kee hai yeH bohat baRi baat hai.. mere taraf se daad-mubaarak baad qubool karo.. .

liKhate raho..

-Mayank[/color]



dear Mayank janaab aap ko kafii dino baad meri post par dekh kar fakr hotaa hai aur khushi bhi, sab aap ka hi shikhaya hai janaab, aap ne is mai jo sujhaav diya hai us par bhi mai gaur karoonga,vaise yaha kuchh comment karnaa aap ki shaaN mai gustaakhi hogi behtar hai online miley tab guftagoo kare, ummid hai aap aise hi shikhaate rahoge ham jaise dostoN ko.

koi bhool hui ho to maaufii chahta hoon
apna khayaal rakhiyega
aur ho sake to is naachiz ki post par aate rahiyega
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manu,

bahot khoob. ab yeh shayri kuch samjh me aati hai. achha laga tumhe parh ke aur iss se bhi achha likhna. meri daad kubul karna, aur shubh-kaamna tumhare saath hi hai. take care!


dear parul ,what to say i have written this becos of u as u suggested to write something that people can easily understand and grasp, ur suggetion lift me up.

and thanx a lot for ur best wishes that is always with me that i know very well. becos i know a true friend is always besides me,with me.

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8th September 2006, 01:54 PM
Door ho kar bhi tumhe paas rakhte hai
Tere hone ka jo ham Ehsaas rakhte hai

Hello Manu

Achii lage tumhare yeh rachna...waise ek baat kahun the red font colour that u use in most of the poetries...I don't like that red font...please don't mind just a suggestion...this poetry had a font colour other than red...that's good...now coming to the poetry....the first sher is the best....aur ek baat aur kahungi...jab hum jyada sochtey hain koi bhi poetry likhney ke liye that whether it is fine or not we don't give our 100%..iss liye let the thoughts fly with words....and I am sure u will give ur 100% next time...

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Tere hone ka jo ham Ehsaas rakhte hai

Hello Manu

Achii lage tumhare yeh rachna...waise ek baat kahun the red font colour that u use in most of the poetries...I don't like that red font...please don't mind just a suggestion...this poetry had a font colour other than red...that's good...now coming to the poetry....the first sher is the best....aur ek baat aur kahungi...jab hum jyada sochtey hain koi bhi poetry likhney ke liye that whether it is fine or not we don't give our 100%..iss liye let the thoughts fly with words....and I am sure u will give ur 100% next time...

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mai aap ki suggetion ki kdra kartaa hu,aur mujhe bhi red color jyada pasan nahi hai,par aise hi likh deta hu kuchh sujhta nahi to

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hi - 15th September 2006, 12:16 AM
hi akeli jaan ji aap ka bahut bahut shukriya mujhe padhane ke liye aur pasand karne ke liye ,yunhi aati rahiyega

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Re: ~*~ Ehsaas ~*~ - 18th September 2006, 03:41 PM
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hello friends ,Try to write something short and simple,hope u all like it

" The credit of this ghazal goes to my 2 friends Parul and Mayank who inspire me to write some thing simple and short , thanks to both of them"



Door ho kar bhi tumhe paas rakhte hai
Tere hone ka jo ham Ehsaas rakhte hai

Bin tere yaaadoN mai jiya karte hai
Har shaam ham ab udaas rakhte hai

Tujhe ilm hi nahi meri mahobbat ka
Har chahere mai teri pyaas rakhte hai

Vo rakeeb hai mera yakin hai mujhko
Fir bhi dostoN mai use khaas rakhte hai

Waqt ki meharbaniyoN se hai waaquif
HaadsoN ko apne aaspass rakhte hai

namaste maanu jii.... kese hain aap.....kaafi waqt baad aapko reply kar rahi hun,,, humesha ki tarah is baar bhi bahut accha likha hai aapne.....

"Tujhe ilm hi nahi meri mahobbat ka
Har chahere mai teri pyaas rakhte hai"

ye lines bahut pyari lagi.....

aese hi likhte rahiyega........

bye n take care.............



Is se pehle ki dilo me nafrat jaage,
aao ek shaam mohabbat me bita di jaaye....

Karke kuch 'ISHQ' ki baatein,
Is shaam ki masti badha di jaye.......!!!!


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wah! bahgut khoob! Manu

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hi - 26th September 2006, 12:35 PM
thanx ishikaa ji kaisi hai aap
itne din baad aayi aur aap ne yaad rakh kar mujhe padhaa ye mere liye bahut hi khushi ki baat hai, yunhi aati rahiyega,apna khayaal rakhiyega, shukriyaa aap ka

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hi manu
kafi din bad apko padhne ka moka mila

apki puri ghazal bahut hi shandar aur dil ko lubha lene wali he
iska her ek sher apne apmain mukammal he

bahut khoooooooooooooob
Door ho kar bhi tumhe paas rakhte hai
Tere hone ka jo ham Ehsaas rakhte hai

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Bin tere yaaadoN mai jiya karte hai
Har shaam ham ab udaas rakhte hai

i mean really AMAIZING,ZABARDAST
Tujhe ilm hi nahi meri mahobbat ka
Har chahere mai teri pyaas rakhte hai

bravoo i will try too
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HaadsoN ko apne aaspass rakhte hai

manu bahut khoobsurat peshkash he apki padh kar man khush ho gaya thanx for wondrful creation

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hi - 30th September 2006, 01:25 AM
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hi - 2nd October 2006, 09:18 AM
hi rubi how are u?
u come after a long time and u still remember me and read me also praise me dats so sweet of u, i m really very much thankful to u for ur words of praise and appreciation ,

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"Tujhe ilm hi nahi meri mahobbat ka
Har chahere mai teri pyaas rakhte hai

Vo rakeeb hai mera yakin hai mujhko
Fir bhi dostoN mai use khaas rakhte hai"

bahut hi badhiya likha hai aapne.

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Har chahere mai teri pyaas rakhte hai

Vo rakeeb hai mera yakin hai mujhko
Fir bhi dostoN mai use khaas rakhte hai"

bahut hi badhiya likha hai aapne.

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hello friends ,Try to write something short and simple,hope u all like it

" The credit of this ghazal goes to my 2 friends Parul and Mayank who inspire me to write some thing simple and short , thanks to both of them"



Door ho kar bhi tumhe paas rakhte hai
Tere hone ka jo ham Ehsaas rakhte hai

Bin tere yaaadoN mai jiya karte hai
Har shaam ham ab udaas rakhte hai

Tujhe ilm hi nahi meri mahobbat ka
Har chahere mai teri pyaas rakhte hai

Vo rakeeb hai mera yakin hai mujhko
Fir bhi dostoN mai use khaas rakhte hai

Waqt ki meharbaniyoN se hai waaquif
HaadsoN ko apne aaspass rakhte hai

wah manu mere dost bahut hi achha ehsaas likha hai mujhe bahut hi pasand aaya bas aage bhi aise hi likhte rahena


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hello friends ,Try to write something short and simple,hope u all like it

" The credit of this ghazal goes to my 2 friends Parul and Mayank who inspire me to write some thing simple and short , thanks to both of them"



Door ho kar bhi tumhe paas rakhte hai
Tere hone ka jo ham Ehsaas rakhte hai

Bin tere yaaadoN mai jiya karte hai
Har shaam ham ab udaas rakhte hai

Tujhe ilm hi nahi meri mahobbat ka
Har chahere mai teri pyaas rakhte hai

Vo rakeeb hai mera yakin hai mujhko
Fir bhi dostoN mai use khaas rakhte hai

Waqt ki meharbaniyoN se hai waaquif
HaadsoN ko apne aaspass rakhte hai


Tujhe ilm hi nahi meri mahobbat ka
Har chahere mai teri pyaas rakhte hain

Waqt ki meharbaniyoN se hai waaqif
HaadsoN ko apne aaspass rakhte hain



wah wah manu ji bohat khoob uper wale ashaar bohat ache lage yunhi likhte rahiye khush rahiye

Waqt ke jisam ki kharash hoon main
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hello friends ,Try to write something short and simple,hope u all like it

" The credit of this ghazal goes to my 2 friends Parul and Mayank who inspire me to write some thing simple and short , thanks to both of them"



Door ho kar bhi tumhe paas rakhte hai
Tere hone ka jo ham Ehsaas rakhte hai

Bin tere yaaadoN mai jiya karte hai
Har shaam ham ab udaas rakhte hai

Tujhe ilm hi nahi meri mahobbat ka
Har chahere mai teri pyaas rakhte hai

Vo rakeeb hai mera yakin hai mujhko
Fir bhi dostoN mai use khaas rakhte hai

Waqt ki meharbaniyoN se hai waaquif
HaadsoN ko apne aaspass rakhte hai
salaam Manu ji Aap ka to har kalaam dil ko chu leta hai yeh hi unhi mein se ek nagina hai jiska asar gehra raha mujhpe aur yeh padha to padhta hi raha bhai ese hi likhtey rahiye khush rahiye meri daad aapke kalaam ke liye

"Do Pal Ruka Khushio.n ka Karwan"


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hello friends ,Try to write something short and simple,hope u all like it

" The credit of this ghazal goes to my 2 friends Parul and Mayank who inspire me to write some thing simple and short , thanks to both of them"



Door ho kar bhi tumhe paas rakhte hai
Tere hone ka jo ham Ehsaas rakhte hai

Bin tere yaaadoN mai jiya karte hai
Har shaam ham ab udaas rakhte hai

Tujhe ilm hi nahi meri mahobbat ka
Har chahere mai teri pyaas rakhte hai

Vo rakeeb hai mera yakin hai mujhko
Fir bhi dostoN mai use khaas rakhte hai

Waqt ki meharbaniyoN se hai waaquif
HaadsoN ko apne aaspass rakhte hai
Waah bahut khoob ghazal huyi hai...acharya_mj ji..
Achha laga apko padhna..

Aage bhi aapke kalam ka intzaar rahega..

Aate raha kijiye...

Takecare.
Madhu.


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