bachpan

[Rashmi sharma]

Eh kavita main Tilak JI nu dedicate kardi haan kyonki ohna de kehan te hi mai bachpan de donno roop pesh karan dii koshish kitti hai shayad bhawan vich baih ke kuj jiyada hi lamba ho gya hai. Gustakhi muaf karana ji.


Main kithon mod liawan
Oh bachpan de pal saare
Jad vehde de vich sounde
Te raati gin de taare.
Jad waqat shaam daa hunda
Assi ja kothe te chad de
Kathian krke akhwaran
Ohnu gol roll vich bann de
Phir chounk ch si ohnu sutde
Te luk-2 ohnu takde
Koi kheton aundi swani* *aurat
Ohnu aakh vcha ke chuk di
Mallak jehe phir usnu
Sir tokkre* de vich dhardi *sir te rarkhya tokkra

Kuj agge kadam vdhaundi
Phir edher udher si takkdi
Us chukke hoey gathde nu
Oh tokkre vichon kad di
Oh jiun-2 us nu khole
Kagaj te kagaj nikklan
Assi jor-2 di hassde
Oh sannu gaalan kad di
Oh phir agahan* nu vadhdi *aagge*
Assi ohio kagaj chukk de
Te phir mashakat karde
Jad miinh* da paani khad da *varish

Kagaj di kishti bnounde
Farji insaan bathounde
phir usnu disha dikhaunde
kade band gate* de hethon *school da gate
tidh bhaar aander lang jande
rukhan diyan khodan* vichon *khuddan
totee de bachche kad liaunde
potte* vich daane dikhde *pait
assi aakhan vich muskaunde
phir badi hifajat de naa
ohnu othe hi rakh aunde
ajj kithe gaye oh din ne ?
ajj bachpan oho jiha naa
naa maasi ,chachi, bhooa
hun kathian ho ke baithan
har rishta aunti vich samaya
milbartan oho jiha naa
naa koii kise ghar jaanda
naa koii kise daa khanda
har ikk rasoi nu hun
hai barger pizza mehkanda
mere punjab de ballade* *baalak

naa gabharu uchche lambe
naa khedan khido khundi**
naa khedan peel palange**
naa khedan kali pili deeti**
naa khedan lookan mitti**
naa khedan itt spittan**
naa khedan dhupp te chawan**



**punjab vichkhedian jaan wallian kuj khedan

eh khedan udd pudd gayian
jiun din chade pichon parchawan
har vele computer te bahinde
waqat gavounde saara
ja oh rehan mobile nu chimbde
ja har dam chadya paara
naa oh ghar ton bahar nikklan
na ghar waale nikklan dende
hun bharosa tutt giya hai
band darwajean piche rehnde
naa koi dhee bhain hun saanji
na koi kise di raakhi
aapna hi aapne nu khaawe
bass mauka ikk thiawe
main kithon mod liawan
oh bachpan de pal saare…..

[tilakji]

Dhanwaad rashmi ji bahut bahut jko tusi mereu arz nu kabool keeta. sachmuch bahut sonha likhdey oN. Shabdaawli da vi original istemaal kardey oN. kinnaa asaan banaa ke likhdey oN. Eh nazm sirf bachpan nahi hai eh ik sammassyaa wall ishaaraa vi hai, jo aj kal saanu nazar nahi aa rahi. PuraniaaN oh khedaan zyaadaatar aoutdoor hoyeyaa kardiaaN san. (both male and female). Hun te gall indoor toN vi sikud ke sirf 2 feet de gherey wich computer tak seemit reh gayi hai. Kis tarah hovegaa bachiaaN di physical fitness da vikaas??? Kis tarah milegi ohnaa nu mushkilaan naal ladan di takat. Dunia ohnaa waastey sirf school, ghar, mom dad atey computer wich hi simat ke reh gayi hai. Maasi, chaachi, bhuaa, taayi, maama..... sabh kitey door door tak vi nahi ohna di vocabloury wich. tusi apni koshish jaari rakho.... shayad saadi neend khull jayey....

[D33P]

wow..vdia likhia ji...sach likhia...chnga likhia...
par thoda ja dhyaan hor deo...means words nu thoda ja hor proper arrange kro..thoda time la k jive kise vishe te thesis likhna hove...main aap ta mehnat nai krda :P bt j tsi kr skdeo ta jroor krio ji...u write well..and keep it up...

[Rashmi sharma]

Originally Posted by tilakji

Dhanwaad rashmi ji bahut bahut jko tusi mereu arz nu kabool keeta. sachmuch bahut sonha likhdey oN. Shabdaawli da vi original istemaal kardey oN. kinnaa asaan banaa ke likhdey oN. Eh nazm sirf bachpan nahi hai eh ik sammassyaa wall ishaaraa vi hai, jo aj kal saanu nazar nahi aa rahi. PuraniaaN oh khedaan zyaadaatar aoutdoor hoyeyaa kardiaaN san. (both male and female). Hun te gall indoor toN vi sikud ke sirf 2 feet de gherey wich computer tak seemit reh gayi hai. Kis tarah hovegaa bachiaaN di physical fitness da vikaas??? Kis tarah milegi ohnaa nu mushkilaan naal ladan di takat. Dunia ohnaa waastey sirf school, ghar, mom dad atey computer wich hi simat ke reh gayi hai. Maasi, chaachi, bhuaa, taayi, maama..... sabh kitey door door tak vi nahi ohna di vocabloury wich. tusi apni koshish jaari rakho.... shayad saadi neend khull jayey....

dhanwaad tilk ji, tusi mainu ehna maan bakshiya. kai baar inj hunda hai ki kehn waala kujh hor kehna chahunda hai par samjan waala is nu kuj hor hi samaj lenda hai is lai ek baar phir to dhanwaad kardi haan ki mera message pahuchoun vich tusi hor bhi madad kitti hai.

[Rashmi sharma]

Originally Posted by D33P

wow..vdia likhia ji...sach likhia...chnga likhia...
par thoda ja dhyaan hor deo...means words nu thoda ja hor proper arrange kro..thoda time la k jive kise vishe te thesis likhna hove...main aap ta mehnat nai krda :P bt j tsi kr skdeo ta jroor krio ji...u write well..and keep it up...

dhanwaad Deep ji, tuhanu mera likhia changa lagya.sach jano ta main is field vich bilkul hi anjaan han thorha bahut ehsasan nu sametan di koshish kardi haan jo shayad virse vich miliya hai.is lai tuhadi salah sir-marhe ji

[Preet Dil Di]

SSA Rashmi ji.....bahtu hi vadhia likhia hai tusiN...eddan hi likhde rehna...

[Rashmi sharma]

Originally Posted by Preet Dil Di

SSA Rashmi ji.....bahtu hi vadhia likhia hai tusiN...eddan hi likhde rehna...

shukria preet ji .......khush raho ji .

[parveen komal]

Aya hai mujhe phir yaad vo jalim gujra jamana bachpan ka

Rashmi ji , mai apne purane dino mei lout gya.

Din jo pakheru hote pinzre mei mai rakh leta,
Palta unko jatan se moti ke dane deta,
Seene se rahta lagaae,
yaad na jaae beete dino ki.
thanks for all.

[Rashmi sharma]

Originally Posted by parveen komal

Aya hai mujhe phir yaad vo jalim gujra jamana bachpan ka

Rashmi ji , mai apne purane dino mei lout gya.

Din jo pakheru hote pinzre mei mai rakh leta,
Palta unko jatan se moti ke dane deta,
Seene se rahta lagaae,
yaad na jaae beete dino ki.
thanks for all.

shukria big b, kai baar ye bachpan yad aana bhi jaroori hota hai.jindgi ki bhag daurh me yehi sunahre pal to nai tajgi dete hain

[sunita thakur]

kaash waqt kuj peeche ho jaave taan maiN apna bachpan ek baar pher jii laiNdi, Rahsmi jii.....bahut kuj yaad aaya tuhadi ek nazm padke, bachpan di ek ek khed te bachpan de saathi.....kaashhhhhhhhhhh

[parveen komal]

kyu'n marde ho yaaro jazbata'n nu kured ke,
har ikk houka hun taa'n bass jaan kadd lainda hai.
vele langh gae ne dosta vele langh gae,
khyala'n de jugnu da pichha karde asi hambh gae.

[Rashmi sharma]

Originally Posted by sunita virender

kaash waqt kuj peeche ho jaave taan maiN apna bachpan ek baar pher jii laiNdi, Rahsmi jii.....bahut kuj yaad aaya tuhadi ek nazm padke, bachpan di ek ek khed te bachpan de saathi.....kaashhhhhhhhhhh

shukria sunita li chalo kuj palan lai hi sahi tuhanu apne bachpan de din yaad ta aaye ik baar fir ton shukria ji khush raho tuhadi dost

[Rashmi sharma]

Originally Posted by parveen komal

kyu'n marde ho yaaro jazbata'n nu kured ke,
har ikk houka hun taa'n bass jaan kadd lainda hai.
vele langh gae ne dosta vele langh gae,
khyala'n de jugnu da pichha karde asi hambh gae.

bahut hi sunder man ko chhuu gai ye lines khush raho,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,

[Rashmi sharma]

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