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8th June 2003, 10:21 PM
Pyare DostooN ..
Aap logo ne ghajle bahut suni hongi ! Aaj main koshish kar raha huN apni prarthna ko ghajal ka roop dene ki ... dekhiye kis had tak safal hota huN ...... ChaluN gar raah bad ki to mujhe thokar laga dena Kare magroor mujhko us bulandi se gira dena Mere Malik main huN insaan tumne hi banaya hai Kabhi duniya jo thukraye gale bhi tum laga lena Main to vo huN na jisne jindgi me aaj tak sikha Sabak Aie Zindgi ab tu mujhe aisa sikha dena Main apni galtiyooN ko bhool kar bhi bhool na pauN Meri har bhool par ab tu mujhe aisi saza dena ... Main utna pauN ki khud ko bhula duN Ye nahi chahat Kaam aa jauN aurooN ke Vo dil mera bana dena Hazaar tauhmatooN par bhi jubaaN se na karu shikva Ho rusvayi ki jisme tu mujhe vo ilm na dena . . . . GirebaaN me agar main gair ke bhi bhool se dekhuN Mere malik tu pahle aaina mujhko dikha dena . . . Hai bas itni si uraz ye karam mujhpe ataa karna Kabhi jo main badal jauN " KSHITIZ " vapas bana dena .. |
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9th June 2003, 03:35 PM
Kshitiz, yakeen maano.. tumhari ye ghazal paR kar behad khushi hui!
Tum me likhne ka hunar bharpoor hai.. Is ghazal me ek nayapan hai.. taza si hai ye.. Lafzon ka behtareen mel kiya hai aapne.. apne aap me kaamil hai ye ghazal.. Prathna ko ghazal ka roop dene me to aap kaamyaab ho gaye ho.. Lekin is puuri ghazal me sabse achhe lage aapke khayaalaat.. Itne nek aur oonchi soch rakhna bohat mushkil hota hai..aaj ek naye makaam par pohanch gaye ho aap.. Hume khushi hi ki hume yahan aap jaisa ek dost mila!  Itni khubsoorat aur behtareen ghazal likhne par humari mubaraqbaad qubool kijiyega!.. Khuda se humari dua hai ki Kshitiz Kshitiz hi rahe.. |
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9th June 2003, 04:57 PM
Banno ji ..
Main bayan nahi kar sakta .. Kitni khushi ho rahi hai is ghajal ka 1st reply dekh kar !!! Aap Vakeyi bahut achhi nazar rakhti haiN such kah raha hu banno ji bahut khushi ho rahi hai ki maiN aap ke sath is site par huN .. Aap ye to janti hi hongi ki koi bhi ghajal likhne se pahle ek soch zehan me aati hai .. Mere zehan me kayi dino se aise saval the jinka javab main khud nahi dhoondh pa raha tha unhi uljhanoo me khud ko talashte hue maine ye ghajal likhi .. maine ye socha ki agar dil saaf rahega to koi bhi manjil door nahi aur koi bhi rasta kathin nahi .. to bas jo jo dil me aata gaya bhagvaan se mangte chale gaye .. Aapko mere khyalat achhe lage .. main kya kah sakta huN .. Bas dua karunga khuda se jo jo humne manga vo aapko bina mange hi mil jaye .. aur agar aapki manjil ke ratse me koi takleef ho to ya to usse hata le Ya fir aapko usko hatane ki taaQat de .. AMEEN .. |
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9th June 2003, 05:22 PM
Apne sahi kaha Kshitiz, agar dil saaf ho, soch achhi ho aur himmat buland ho.. to raaste ki koi bhi baadhaa thikti nahi.. Age baRne ka hausla ho, to musaafir to har mushkil paar kar sakta hai..
Apki soch aur ehsaas is ghazal ke har ek lafz se chhalak raha hai.. dil se likhe kalaam me hi aisa asar ho sakta hai... Apna khayal rakho Kshitiz, aur aise hi likhte aur sochte rahiye.. |
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10th June 2003, 12:28 AM
wahhh ..
kshitiz jii kya baat hai kitni acchi ghazal hai ye aap ki sach mein bahut hi pyarii hai aur aap ne jissa ki likha hai ki prarthna hai to sach mein ye prarthna bahut suder hai is ko ghazal bena diya hai ... sach mein dost bahut hi khobsurat hai ye khob likha hai aap ne___ Main to vo huN na jisne jindgi me aaj tak sikha Sabak Aie Zindgi ab tu mujhe aisa sikha dena Main apni galtiyooN ko bhool kar bhi bhool na pauN Meri har bhool par ab tu mujhe aisi saza dena ... bahut khushi ho rahi hai dost wahhhh tareef kam par jayegi ... ye hamari khush naseebi hai ki aap hume apana dost samjhte hai ye hamare liye garva ki baat hai aap ka dost AaP Ka DosT -------------- Amrit |
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10th June 2003, 08:28 PM
Thx banno ji
ye chota sa eng wala thx mere liye dua karne ke liye .. Aap bhi apna khyaal rakhiye aur isi tarah se sath me rahiye .. Take care . |
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10th June 2003, 08:35 PM
Amrit ji
khushnasibi humari ki aap humare dost hain .. Dost bahut khushi hui jan kar ki aapko humari PRARTHNA pasand aayi .. bas isi tarah se dost mahfil me rahiye humare sath .. apna khyaal rakhiye .. |
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10th June 2003, 09:19 PM
pyaare kshitz bhai.
khshitz bhai...bade shaayar aur diggaj shaayar kaise hote he...?? bas aise hi to hote he....aur aapane ye proove kar diya he..ye prarthana ke zariye. is prarthana ke par aur to me kuchh nahi kahunga...kyunki aapane itani bahetarin aur ek-dam pak dil se likhi he..lagata he jaise sidhe aapake dil se aai he.....aur unke jo upar beitha he..unake dil tak pahoch rahi he......wah. kshitiz bhai...bas mein bhi sirf ek pray karata hu uparwaale ko...ki aapako saari khushiya de, aur din b din aapaki kalam me nikhaar de..aur aap shayaro me ek uncha makaam mukammal kare. apana khayal rakhana. |
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10th June 2003, 09:27 PM
kshitiz sahab..... aap ne sach mein bahut hi sunder aur nayab ghazal likhi hai .. mujhe acchi lagi. bhut hi khobsurat hai aap ki ghazal ... aur accha likho abhi aap ko bahut aage jana hai abhi abhi aap ne raah dekhi hai aage chalte jaye ...
************************* jo dard mila hai madine se mila hai allah ka isfan unke ghar se mila hai jisko bhi mila hai mukaddar sse mila hai humko to mukaddar bhi unke ghar sse mile hai |
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13th June 2003, 06:54 PM
shyam bhai .. kaise hain aap ?
Bhai itni tareef kar di aapne hume kuch kahen ke layak hi nahi chora .. Main tahe dil se shukrgujaar huN ki aapne itne dhyaan se meri prarthna padhi .. Ishvar aapko bhi Zindgi ki sari khushiyaaN de , Aapki jo jo khwaisheN ho , poori kare .. Aap khud bahut achha likhte hain isi tarah se likhte rahiye .. AUR .. apna khyaal rakhiye .. |
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13th June 2003, 07:04 PM
madhe sahab ..
bahut bahut shukriya janab .. aapne itna dhyaan laga kar meri prarthna padhi ..aapko achhi lagi meri khushnasibi .. bas isi tarah nazar E karam farmate rahiye .. tareef karne ke liye aur mashvare ke liye bahut bahut shukriya .. Take Care |
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13th June 2003, 11:25 PM
horizonji
tahe dil se maafi mangti hu ki aap ki prathna me late aane ke liye.... u know wat, Jab me school me late hoti thi aur sir punishment ki baat karte to hamesha me koi naya excuse dhund leti thi (aadat se majboor...kya kare  )aur sir bolte, "okay, u may go". magar aaj to excuse bhi nahi mil raha. to aap punish kar hi dijiye... me gardan juka kar accepta kar lungi... now one thing very seriously ki aapki bhavnao ko jankar aap ke liye dil me ijjat aur bhi badh gayee hai. bahot khub combination kiya hai apni feelings aur art ka. uff.... ye dard, aansu aur dhoko ki dastan sun kar, padh kar, soch kar aur likh kar aisa lagta hai ki jaise jindagi me jine ke liye kuchh nahi magar galat hai ye soch kyuki agar jindagi saliko se aur usulo ke sath ji jaye to jine layak hai...aaj bahot achchha lag raha hai aapki post padh kar...i swear.... it is too good. keep writing (and thinking) like this sanam jo ab ye bewaqt hi tuje satane aa gaye logo ne nahi dekha apne girebaan main aur dekho 'sanam' ko aajmane aa gaye -> SaNaM |
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14th June 2003, 01:54 AM
hi kshitiz
how r u? hmain yeh kahte hwe koi mushkil nahin hui k hmare aaj ki is mehfil ko aap ki is dua se kalam ne loot liya hay..kiya kahin ,,or kitna kahin tareef main kuch mallom nahin hota,,magar dard ko dua ki sorat main byan kis tarah kiya jata hay aaj ham ne bhi sekh liya hay,,koshish to karain gain ,,asia to nahin likh sakte magar kuch is jaisa hi likh skain bohat khob jnab,,yeh dua ,,hmain bhi karni hay,,balke shayad ham sab ko karni hay,,aap ne gajab lafzon ko kalam main kaid kiya hay jnab,,ham to dang reh gaye dua k sath dad kabool kijiye ga khan banjara'''' agar mohabbat hay to judai kiyon or judai main mohabbat kasi???? |
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14th June 2003, 04:50 PM
hi kshitiz how r u...kshitiz i like u'r ghazal very much..it's so
great..u'r effort will not be reuned...it will do something for u.. again cograts to u for a great ghazal... hope to get u'r mail soon... khudahfiz... ........... kuch too hi mere dard ka mazmoon samajh le hansta hua chehra to zamane ke liye hai |
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14th June 2003, 07:26 PM
Sanam ji ..
Believe me i m not going to punish u School ki baat aur thi ab halat badal gayeN haiN aap yahaN student nahi haiN AUR main koi teacher nahi huN .. Aur Fir dosto ke samne kya excuse dena saf kah dijiye ki abhi tak Waqt nahi mil paya tha abhi mila to reply kar diya ..  Vaise aap ne meri prarthna ko padhaa aur samjha isse badh kar mere liye kuch nahi ho sakta hai .. magar aapne tareef kuch jyada hi kar di , nacheeez itni tareeef ke kabil nahi hai .. bhagvaan aapki sari kaamnayeN poori kare .. Aur aapne mera naam to pooch liya magar apna nahi bataya agli bar apna nam jaroor bataiyega .. Take Care . |
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14th June 2003, 07:36 PM
Khan Sahab .. kaise hai aap ?
Bhai aap isse bhi achha likh sakte hain believe me .. maine to sirf vo likha jo mere dil me tha ho sakta hai aapki dua isse bhi achhi ho humne jitni samjh thi utna to humne mang liya .. ho sakta hai kuch rah gaya ho vo aap mang lijiye .. bhai tareef ke liye bahut bahut shukriya aap ne meri prarthna ko samjhne ki koshish kari mmujhe bahut khushi hui .. aap dua kijiye .. hum bhi aapke sath dua karenge khuda aapko har tarah ki bala se bachaye aur kabhi kkisi gum ke saye me na dale .. apna khyaal rakhiye .. |
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14th June 2003, 08:09 PM
Damal bhai ..
Thx for ur compliments . I will try to mail u as sosn as possible . Take care |
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15th June 2003, 08:08 AM
Kshitiz bhai,
behad pasand aayii aapkii ghazal! yeh sher khaas-taur pe dil ko bahot dilchasp laggaa: "Mere Malik main huN insaan tumne hi banaya hai Kabhi duniya jo thukraye gale bhi tum laga lena" waaqaye yaar, aapke andaaz meiN kitnii khoobiiyat chuphii hai! paD kar bahot sakoon milaa, par maafii chahtaa huuN kii pehle javaab nahiiN de paayaa. aur, mujhe kehne kii zaroorat to nahiiN hai, par haaN.. ik achchii ghazal likhne meiN aap beshak kaamyaab hue. taariif qabuul kariiye, aman "je tu akhiiyaaN de saamne naii rehnaa, te bibba saada dil moD de..!" kya karooN? aisa hi hooN maiN.. |
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15th June 2003, 07:06 PM
Aman bhai .. Kaise hain aap
Bhai ho kar bhi muafi mangte hain .. bhai jaan dil ko badi takleef hoti hai jab aap aisi bateiN karte hain .. Aap humare sath haiN ye kam baat nahi .. aur bhai upar wale sher jisko aapne dilchasp kaha us par to main yahiN kahna chahunga ki .. Lab par aati hai dua .. Meri tamanna ban kar .. Ye khuda se guzarish thi kyon ki duniya to ek na ek din yakinan thukrayegi hume .. apnaa khyaal rakhiye .. |
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hi -
16th June 2003, 05:13 AM
hi kshtiz ji aapke vichaar bahut hi durust hai
Main to vo huN na jisne jindgi me aaj tak sikha Sabak Aie Zindgi ab tu mujhe aisa sikha dena Main apni galtiyooN ko bhool kar bhi bhool na pauN Meri har bhool par ab tu mujhe aisi saza dena ... Main utna pauN ki khud ko bhula duN Ye nahi chahat Kaam aa jauN aurooN ke Vo dil mera bana dena apke likhne ka koyi jawaab nahi keep writing priya ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Jisnu Lagey, ohi'yo jaane, Kaun Jaane peer parayi! ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ |
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16th June 2003, 12:23 PM
kshitiz bhai,
aapki is prartna ko parr kar hamara bhi sir jhukh gaya..aapke jazbaat bahut pasand aaye..inhi jazbaaton ke liye hi to aapko pasand karta huun main.. Bahut achha likha hai aapne chal waha chal jahan tere jaise aur bhi hai... |
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16th June 2003, 02:46 PM
namaste... sirji..
yar..sach kahu too i m out of words... i don't know what...too say.. but turst.. me.. it..excelent.. .baut khoob..yar...abb.. itne.. log..sab kuch keah gaye. . hai ... sach mein dil see keah raha hun ..bahut khoob.. likha hai ... apne... aise.. hi likhte rahiye.. aur.. mehfil sajate rahiye... bye n.. take care... Zindagi Maut ke pehlu mein soo rai hai... Us bewafa se na pucho meri maut ki wajah... Woh to bus zamane ko dikhane ke liye roo rai hai... |
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16th June 2003, 06:28 PM
priya ji
bahut bahut shukriya .. tareef ke liye aur meri neknami ke liye bhi .. apna khyal rakhiye .. varinder bhai .. aapne meri prarthna me shirkat kari jan kar dil ko bahut khushi hui .. bas isi tarah se saath rahiye .. apna khyaal rakhiye .. tanhayi sahab .. bahut bahut bahut shukriya aapke likhnee ke andaaz e hi hume aapke dil ka andaza ho gaya bhai tareef ke liye tahe dil se shukrguzar huN .. gud bye & take care |
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17th October 2003, 03:12 PM
kshitiz dost,
tumhari prathhna gar roj subah har insaan padhh le yakinan kahi n kahi insaaniyat ko jagaane ki wajah tum hi hogae. |
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17th October 2003, 04:05 PM
Kshitiz
samaz main nahi aata kya kahu? prarthana tumhare rom rom se chalk rahi ho jaise. bahot khub keep it up. |
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25th August 2005, 11:46 AM
Kshitiz bhai
aapse baat hue bohat din beet gaye .. sach yakeen maniye aapko yaad bhi bohat kiya maine.. isi liye aaj aapki is post ko dhundha maine .. kyuNki aaj dil ke halatoN pe sabse sakooniyat marham bas yahi nazar aaya ... padhi pehle bhi kayi dafa thi .. reply aaj kar raha hun ... kareeb do saal pehle post ki gayi ye thread aaj bhi poore jazbaat se bhari hai // sir jhuka ke naman us khuda ko aapka bhai kunal Hai 'sifar' bhi reyazi ka hissa.. Shayrii bhi hisaab ki hogi.. |
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