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mar jayenge hum tanha:( -
21st January 2005, 03:15 PM
Jo chodh ke jaoge raho main tanha
Kehte hai kasam khakar mar jayenge hum tanha Jin raho se gujrethe tum sath humain lekar Un raho pe rakhenge kadam kaise tanha Jana hai jaruri to bas itna bata jao Hum kaise uthayenge duniya ke sitam tanha Hum ek hi dariya ke mazbur kinare hai Us aur hai tum tanha,,is aur hai hum tanha Dhundho to ujale ki ab koi kiran humdum Ganghor andhero mai ghut jaye na dam tanha  teri asar ki jhalak hun main... aaoun nazar chehre se "palu"... teri seerat ki khanak hun mai... |
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21st January 2005, 04:14 PM
Jo chodh ke jaoge raho main tanha
Kehte hai kasam khakar mar jayenge hum tanha Jin raho se gujrethe tum sath humain lekar Un raho pe rakhenge kadam kaise tanha Jana hai jaruri to bas itna bata jao Hum kaise uthayenge duniya ke sitam tanha Hum ek hi dariya ke mazbur kinare hai Us aur hai tum tanha,,is aur hai hum tanha Dhundho to ujale ki ab koi kiran humdum Ganghor andhero mai ghut jaye na dam tanha Pallavi!! Bautiful Nazm buddyy...Really very nice words.. loved them....Aage bhi iase hi likhti rehna  Lagta hai is baar "Pulkit", kismat teri bhi rang laayii hai |
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Nice ....... Very Nice ........ |
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Nice ....... Very Nice ........ -
21st January 2005, 04:26 PM
It's very good Accuallly, mar jayegey "Hum" Tanha. kuch lines likh paya hoon aap ka kallaam ped ker. hope u like it.!
us ehesaas ko apne pas mat ane de aye dost, jo zakhmo ko teri hawa de, mat phela haath us bewafa ke samne, ke woh zakhmo ko tere koi dawa de! ham ne apanaa hii intazaar kiiyaa ab naa maangenge zindagii yaa rab! ye gunaah ham ne ek baar kiiyaa |
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22nd January 2005, 02:05 PM
pulkitji
mujhe aacha laga janke ki aapko doobara se aacha laga mera likha hua aise hi sath dete rahiyega . kuch yaad aaya wo likhrahi hoon dil gaya ,tumne liya hum kya kare jane wali chiz ka gam kya kare apna khyal rakhiyega pulkitji pallavi teri asar ki jhalak hun main... aaoun nazar chehre se "palu"... teri seerat ki khanak hun mai... |
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22nd January 2005, 02:11 PM
hum tumji
aacha laga janke ki aapko pasand aaya aise hi sath dete rahiyega dostI us ehesaas ko apne pas mat ane de aye dost, jo zakhmo ko teri hawa de, mat phela haath us bewafa ke samne, ke woh zakhmo ko tere koi dawa de! yeh aapne bahoot hi aacha likha hai hum bhi likh rahe hai gaur kariyega dost "Ae dost ,usse bewafa kehke ,mere "pyar" ko jalil na karo yahi mera nasib hai,usko kuch na kaho wo hi mera dil hai,usse zakham na kaho hasi gayi zindagi se meri to Kya,usse koi dhokebaaz na kaho" apna dhyan rakhiyega apki dost pallavi teri asar ki jhalak hun main... aaoun nazar chehre se "palu"... teri seerat ki khanak hun mai... |
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Re: mar jayenge hum tanha:( -
22nd January 2005, 02:30 PM
Jo chodh ke jaoge raho main tanha
Kehte hai kasam khakar mar jayenge hum tanha tumse umeed hai ki tum yuN na alfazoN se sataogi... janogi humari bebasi jab ashq aankhoN se bahaogi... Jin raho se gujrethe tum sath humain lekar Un raho pe rakhenge kadam kaise tanha harr pal beete haseeN yadoN ka dariya bahega.. kaise tum tanha khudko un rahoN pe paogi.... Jana hai jaruri to bas itna bata jao Hum kaise uthayenge duniya ke sitam tanha uri na hota to kaise torte khudki sansoN se rishta... sitam-e-jamana barpa humpe,jo na mehsoos kar paogi... Hum ek hi dariya ke mazbur kinare hai Us aur hai tum tanha,,is aur hai hum tanha ye to shayad dastoor hai duniya ka bhichar ke roye... do kinaroN kabhi milte hi nahi, sochte ki kya mila paogi... Dhundho to ujale ki ab koi kiran humdum Ganghor andhero mai ghut jaye na dam tanha ujala tau maut ka faila hai gham-e-sehra maiN door tak mar chuke tumhe nisani bana apni, kaise tum mar paogi... pallavi ... hath ruk hi nahi paye ... tumhare kalaam ko padh ke ... aur likhta chala gaya ... galat way maiN mat lena ,... bohat khub likhne lagi ho tum ... well thodi takniki barikiyoN pe gaur karo to aur accha likh paogi .. halaNki mere reply maiN takniki bohat galtiyaN hai .. jo ki tumhare kalaam ko dekhte likha tha ... apna khayal rakhna aur likhti rehna Hai 'sifar' bhi reyazi ka hissa.. Shayrii bhi hisaab ki hogi.. |
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22nd January 2005, 08:12 PM
kunal...
shukriya aapko hamari kalaam pasand aaya aur isko aur bhi sunder bana diya aapne hath ruk hi nahi paye ... tumhare kalaam ko padh ke kisne kaha hai ki aap apne hath ko roko han bariki se matlab samjhaoge janab well thodi takniki barikiyoN pe gaur karo to aur accha likh paogi .. halaNki mere reply maiN takniki bohat galtiyaN hai .. jo ki tumha han par aapne jo kalaam likha hai uske word kuch kuch mujhe samajh nahin aaye jayad hi typical word use kiye hai matlab prob. ho rahi hai mujhe samajh main nahin abhi paki shayar nahin bani na aacha waise likha aacha hai aur han taknii kya hai abh????/ wo bhi bata dena ho sake to aaj hi bata dena plzzzaur hamesha apna dhyan rakhna ,take care bye pallavi teri asar ki jhalak hun main... aaoun nazar chehre se "palu"... teri seerat ki khanak hun mai... |
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