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9th September 2014, 12:02 AM
"pashemaaN ho ke apne haal par tu roye,
tuje apni ek ek be-waffai jab yaad aaye..!!
-Sunita Virender
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.....Sunita Thakur.....
यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
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9th September 2014, 04:19 AM
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wah wah...bohat khoob. ...................
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Bohat bohat shukriya.................
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9th September 2014, 04:22 AM
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waaaaaaaaaaaaaahhhhhhhhhhhh!!!!!!!!
Ananthji,
dono ashaar behad hi gehre aur inter-related haiN jo har aam insaan se juDe bayaanaat karte haiN.............
dheroN dheroN daad.................
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Bohat bohat shukriya Aadeil sahab .......
Mohabbat ke ye silsile na the
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9th September 2014, 04:26 AM
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beti ke janam pe na ho pashemaaN!
kal yeHi roshan kare gi tera jahaN....
janam : birth
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Waaaaaahhhhhh!!!!! kya baat hai Hassan bhai...ek kidwi sachhai hai ye....dheron daad
Mohabbat ke ye silsile na the
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9th September 2014, 04:27 AM
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ek adnaa si koshish... meri bhii
arey insaan! tu kitnaa hai pashemaan?
kare bad-karm jab bhii, zudd-pashemaan*?
(*repenting too soon)
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pashemaanoN meN uNkaa kya hisaab hai
kare zulm aamii* pe band-e-naqaab** hai
(*commoner, aam aadmii; **hidden, closed behind veil)
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waaaaaahhhhhhhh!!!!! Bohat khoob Aadeil sahab...dheron daad
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9th September 2014, 04:34 AM
Zarraa sahab ,Aadeil sahab aur Hassan bhai aap teeno ka tah-e-dil se shukrguzar hun aap ne baada word based mere last sher par itni acchhii clarifications di aur hum kam ilmi logon ko seekhne ka mauka diya ...thanx a lot
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PashemaaN hu maiN yehi soch soch kar,
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"pashemaaN ho ke apne haal par tu roye,
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WAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!! Bohat khoob Sunita Dii....dheron daad
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9th September 2014, 09:18 AM
karo zindagi apni sar-bulandh* iis tarah se saraa-e-faani** main
k farishte bhi hojaye pashemaan*** aagosh-e-maut main lene se pehle
*glorious
**mortal world
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Mohabbat ke ye silsile na the
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9th September 2014, 09:19 AM
karo zindagi apni sar-bulandh* iis tarah se saraa-e-faani** main
k farishte bhi hojaye pashemaan*** aagosh-e-maut main lene se pehle
*glorious
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9th September 2014, 09:28 AM
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karo zindagi apni sar-bulandh* iis tarah se saraa-e-faani** main
k farishte bhi hojaye pashemaan*** aagosh-e-maut main lene se pehle
*glorious
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wahhhh......aapki urdu par pakad bahut acchi hai
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9th September 2014, 09:30 AM
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waaaaaaaaaaahhhhhhhh!!!! Di,
dilse nikle iis jazbaat pe hamaare dil se dheroN dheroN daad.......
duaaoN ke saath....
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Shukriya Aadeil ji...yeh meri pehli koshish hai es thread par...aap sab to bahut hi acche shayar ho aur aap logo ki urdu bhi kamaal ki hai...mera to housla hi nahi ho rha tha...es thread par kuch post karne ka...!
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यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
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9th September 2014, 09:34 AM
Shukriya Naaz...aap sab ne meri himmat badai hai
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WAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!! Bohat khoob Sunita Dii....dheron daad
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Shukriya Anant ji...aap sab se housla pakar accha lag rha hai..ab aage bhi kuch likhne ki himmat aayegi
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9th September 2014, 10:10 AM
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aadaab !
sab se pehly to ma'zrat keh binaa ijjazat madakhlat ker rahaa hoN kiyoN keh na to mai shayar hoN or naa hi koi adeeb , lughat se lafz dhoondh ker appke saamny pesh ker rahaa hoN ho sakta hai appki koi madad ho jaaey
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generosity; nobleness; goodness, kindness; beneficence; grace, favour; action, deed
karm = amal , faSl , naSeeb , Qismat
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Mujeebsaab,
ye SDC ek baRi si open University hai aur hum sab unke chhatr aur phir ye to sabhii kii classroom hai to aap ka haqq bantaa hai yahaaN aa kar apnii raye denaa .......
hameN to achchhaa lagaa ki aapne iis savaal pe apnii opinion dii aur ye hamaare liye ek aur lafz ko sikhne aur samajhne ka zaryaa banaa
aapne aapke ilm ke zariye behad hi khubsurat tarike se karam aur karm ke maanii sajhaaye haiN....
maine bhii ek lughat se hi iis lafz ko istemaal kiya tha... aur vahaaN usske maanii 'deed' or 'act' diya gayaa tha , vaise maiN yahaaN pe lafz kaaj ka bhii istemaal kar saktaa hooN jisse sher meN koii bhii baRi tabdirii nahiN hogii...
Hassanbhai aur Mujeebsaab,
aap dono kaa bahot bahot shukriya....
aur Mujeebsaab ye pathshalaa jitnii hamaarii hai usse kaii guna aapkii bhii hai, toh maazraat khwaah ho ke hameN sharminda mat kijiye.... hum to chaahte haiN ki iis thread pe zyaadaa se zyaadaa members aate raheN aur iis qadr apne ilm se iise roshan karte raheN......
duaaoN ke saath,
Adil
ख़ुदा परेशां तेरी बला से तेरे सितम से तेरे अधम से
अगर हसीँ होते ज़ुल्म तेरे तू भी तो कुछ शर्मसार होता
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9th September 2014, 10:17 AM
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"pashemaaN ho ke apne haal par tu roye,
tuje apni ek ek be-waffai jab yaad aaye..!!
-Sunita Virender
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waaaaaaaaaaaahhhhhhhhhh!!!
di,
aapne aate hi ek se ek jauhar hameN nazraane ke taur pe pesh kiye....
bahot hi achchhaa lagaa ki aap ne yahaaN sirkat kii......
aur urdu to di hamaari bhii koii khaas nahi hai
bas thoRi bahot zubaani aati hai aur baaki toh lughat zindaabaad
bas yuN hi aati rahiyegaa aur nazraane lekar...
ख़ुदा परेशां तेरी बला से तेरे सितम से तेरे अधम से
अगर हसीँ होते ज़ुल्म तेरे तू भी तो कुछ शर्मसार होता
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9th September 2014, 10:21 AM
lafz karm ko tabdiil karke 'kaaj' kiyaa hai......
raaye kii ummeed rahegiii
arey insaan! tu kitnaa hai pashemaan?
kare bad* kaaj** jab bhii, zudd-pashemaan***?
(*buraa; **kaam; ***repenting too soon)
ख़ुदा परेशां तेरी बला से तेरे सितम से तेरे अधम से
अगर हसीँ होते ज़ुल्म तेरे तू भी तो कुछ शर्मसार होता
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9th September 2014, 10:23 AM
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waaaaaahhhhhhhh!!!!! Bohat khoob Aadeil sahab...dheron daad
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Waaaahhhhhhh! umda sher adil...............
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Ananthji & Naaz,
aap dono kaa bahot bahot shukriya, iis hausla afzaaee ke liye....
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ख़ुदा परेशां तेरी बला से तेरे सितम से तेरे अधम से
अगर हसीँ होते ज़ुल्म तेरे तू भी तो कुछ शर्मसार होता
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9th September 2014, 10:26 AM
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Hassanbhai
daad ke liye phirse shukriya
ab lafz karam ke maanee jahaaN tak maiN samjhaa hooN to wo ehsaan hai jaise rehmo karam karnaa. Aur karm ka matlab hai act or deed. Ye meri Urdu kii kam aqlii bhii ho sakti haiN. Vaise aise masle uTHaate rahiyega taaki hamaare ilm meN muzaafaa hota rahe
aur shaayar dostoN kii raaye kaa bhii intezaar rahega
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aadaab !
sab se pehly to ma'zrat keh binaa ijjazat madakhlat ker rahaa hoN kiyoN keh na to mai shayar hoN or naa hi koi adeeb , lughat se lafz dhoondh ker appke saamny pesh ker rahaa hoN ho sakta hai appki koi madad ho jaaey
karam = sakhawat , bakhshish , naik amal , sharafat
generosity; nobleness; goodness, kindness; beneficence; grace, favour; action, deed
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Mujeebsaab,
ye SDC ek baRi si open University hai aur hum sab unke chhatr aur phir ye to sabhii kii classroom hai to aap ka haqq bantaa hai yahaaN aa kar apnii raye denaa .......
hameN to achchhaa lagaa ki aapne iis savaal pe apnii opinion dii aur ye hamaare liye ek aur lafz ko sikhne aur samajhne ka zaryaa banaa
aapne aapke ilm ke zariye behad hi khubsurat tarike se karam aur karm ke maanii sajhaaye haiN....
maine bhii ek lughat se hi iis lafz ko istemaal kiya tha... aur vahaaN usske maanii 'deed' or 'act' diya gayaa tha , vaise maiN yahaaN pe lafz kaaj ka bhii istemaal kar saktaa hooN jisse sher meN koii bhii baRi tabdirii nahiN hogii...
Hassanbhai aur Mujeebsaab,
aap dono kaa bahot bahot shukriya....
aur Mujeebsaab ye pathshalaa jitnii hamaarii hai usse kaii guna aapkii bhii hai, toh maazraat khwaah ho ke hameN sharminda mat kijiye.... hum to chaahte haiN ki iis thread pe zyaadaa se zyaadaa members aate raheN aur iis qadr apne ilm se iise roshan karte raheN......
duaaoN ke saath,
Adil
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Thankyou Mujeeb bhai... thankyou Adil bhai....
*hSn* : parStaar
tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di!
kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad")
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9th September 2014, 10:26 AM
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karo zindagi apni sar-bulandh* iis tarah se saraa-e-faani** main
k farishte bhi hojaye pashemaan*** aagosh-e-maut main lene se pehle
*glorious
**mortal world
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bahot khub........................................
ख़ुदा परेशां तेरी बला से तेरे सितम से तेरे अधम से
अगर हसीँ होते ज़ुल्म तेरे तू भी तो कुछ शर्मसार होता
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9th September 2014, 10:31 AM
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Waaaaaahhhhhh! umda, ajkal jo female foeticide horaha hai bahot hi dukh ki baat hai betiyaaN to roshnii hoti haiN ghar ki barkat hoti haiN pata nahiN maa baap kaise itne berehem hojate hain duniya meiN aaney ke pehle hi in nanhi kaliyoN ko masal detey haiN bahot khoob sher kaha PS
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Naaz.. tum ne aik bohat hi ghamgheen muDay per baat
shuru ki hai..... mujhe to sun ke hi dukh hota hai, loG pata nahi aisa karte
kese haiN... bas Allah se dua hai ke un nanhi kaliyoN ki hifazat kare (ameen)
and thanks for appreciating my thoughts!
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tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di!
kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad")
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"pashemaaN ho ke apne haal par tu roye,
tuje apni ek ek be-waffai jab yaad aaye..!!
-Sunita Virender
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waaaaah! waaah! Baaji.... 2 misroN meiN aap ne poori
dil ki baat keH di aur waaah.. kis andaaz se aap ne fasaana bayaaN kiya..
waqai qaabil-e-tehseen hai Baajii... be-had umdaaH.. be-had khoob...
Aagay bhi meHfil-e-fusoon-e-alfaaz meiN aap ke jalwoN ka muntazir rahooN ga!
*hSn* : parStaar
tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di!
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9th September 2014, 10:36 AM
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Waaaaaahhhhhh!!!!! kya baat hai Hassan bhai...ek kidwi sachhai hai ye....dheron daad
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Sir bohat bohat shukriyaaH pazeraayi ke liye .... I'm obliged!
*hSn* : parStaar
tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di!
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Zarraa sahab ,Aadeil sahab aur Hassan bhai aap teeno ka tah-e-dil se shukrguzar hun aap ne baada word based mere last sher par itni acchhii clarifications di aur hum kam ilmi logon ko seekhne ka mauka diya ...thanx a lot
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anything for you boss..............! stay blessed.
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tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di!
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karo zindagi apni sar-bulandh* iis tarah se saraa-e-faani** main
k farishte bhi hojaye pashemaan*** aagosh-e-maut main lene se pehle
*glorious
**mortal world
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waaaahhh! Ananth sir.... bohat khoob...
lekin maiN aap ke sher ko iss taraH lonH ga ke bandaH iss taraH zindagi
guzaaray ke saray us ke husn-e-akhlaaq ke taabay hooN!.. aur woH hur
dil azeez ho........ insanooN meiN bhi aur farishtoN meiN bhi... aur
jahaN tak meri kam-aqli hai farishtay pashemaaN nahi hotay.....
socch aacchi hai lekin thodi si alteration honi chaiye.. farishta lafz
istemaal na kareN...... mere hisaab se! aur aagay aap behtar
samjhtay haiN.....
*hSn* : parStaar
tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di!
kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad")
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9th September 2014, 10:45 AM
Ghalibsaab ke ek sher kii buniyaad per niche mera sher....
rahe kyuN mera qaatil bhii pashemaan apnii harkat par
ye khuuN hai behte rehta hai kabhii dil se kabhii sar se
--Adil
ख़ुदा परेशां तेरी बला से तेरे सितम से तेरे अधम से
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*hSn* : parStaar
tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di!
kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad")
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Ghalibsaab ke ek sher kii buniyaad per niche mera sher....
rahe kyuN mera qaatil bhii pashemaan apnii harkat par
ye khuuN hai behte rehta hai kabhii dil se kabhii sar se
--Adil
Darey kyuN mera qaatil kya rakhaa hai uskii gardan par
ye khuuN jo chashm-e-tar se umr-bhar yuN dum-ba-dum nikle
-- Mirza 'Ghalib' saab
ख़ुदा परेशां तेरी बला से तेरे सितम से तेरे अधम से
अगर हसीँ होते ज़ुल्म तेरे तू भी तो कुछ शर्मसार होता
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Ghalibsaab ke ek sher kii buniyaad per niche mera sher....
rahe kyuN mera qaatil bhii pashemaan apnii harkat par
ye khuuN hai behte rehta hai kabhii dil se kabhii sar se
--Adil
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waaaahh! Adil bhai... kia taanay baanay bunay haiN..
Bohat umdaaH... aur ghalib saheb ki tarz pe sher kehna waqai lutf deta hai!
iss meiN koi shak nahi...... dherooN daad is qaabil-e-daad sher ke liye....
*hSn* : parStaar
tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di!
kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad")
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9th September 2014, 10:51 AM
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"pashemaaN ho ke apne haal par tu roye,
tuje apni ek ek be-waffai jab yaad aaye..!!
-Sunita Virender
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karo zindagi apni sar-bulandh* iis tarah se saraa-e-faani** main
k farishte bhi hojaye pashemaan*** aagosh-e-maut main lene se pehle
*glorious
**mortal world
***embarrassed
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Agree with hassan sahab...regarding this sher
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Ghalibsaab ke ek sher kii buniyaad per niche mera sher....
rahe kyuN mera qaatil bhii pashemaan apnii harkat par
ye khuuN hai behte rehta hai kabhii dil se kabhii sar se
--Adil
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wah wah...bohat khoob ..ek se badhker ek sher hain...
Subhan Allah. ..superb
Zainy
PalkoN ki baand ko tod ke daaman pe aa gira
Ek aaNsu mere zabt ki tauheen kar gaya...
Nm
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9th September 2014, 10:52 AM
Ek adna sa sher meri taraf se
Tere darde dil ka sabab ban chuki huuN
Mohabbat pe apni pashemaan huN meiN
Zainy
PalkoN ki baand ko tod ke daaman pe aa gira
Ek aaNsu mere zabt ki tauheen kar gaya...
Nm
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9th September 2014, 10:53 AM
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waaaahhh! Ananth sir.... bohat khoob...
lekin maiN aap ke sher ko iss taraH lonH ga ke bandaH iss taraH zindagi
guzaaray ke saray us ke husn-e-akhlaaq ke taabay hooN!.. aur woH hur
dil azeez ho........ insanooN meiN bhi aur farishtoN meiN bhi... aur
jahaN tak meri kam-aqli hai farishtay pashemaaN nahi hotay.....
socch aacchi hai lekin thodi si alteration honi chaiye.. farishta lafz
istemaal na kareN...... mere hisaab se! aur aagay aap behtar
samjhtay haiN.....
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hmmmmmmmmmmmm.....
ye lafz 'farishte' aur unkaa pashemaan hona mujhe bhii khatak rahaa tha ....
par uspe kuchh aur raaye dene se pehle maiN Ananthji kii baat samajhnaa chaahtaa tha jo wo yahaaN bayaan karnaa chaahte haiN.
chaliye hassanbhai, aapne ab jab mudda uTHaa hi liyaa hai to, Ananthji se pehle iiskii interpretation dekh lete haiN.. shaayad unkii zehn meN kuch aisii baat ho jo hameN na samajh aayee ho ?
Toh Ananthji, aap ko kathgare meN aanaa paRegaa
ख़ुदा परेशां तेरी बला से तेरे सितम से तेरे अधम से
अगर हसीँ होते ज़ुल्म तेरे तू भी तो कुछ शर्मसार होता
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9th September 2014, 10:55 AM
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Ek adna sa sher meri taraf se
Tere darde dil ka sabab ban chuki huuN
Mohabbat pe apni pashemaaN huN meiN
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waaaahhh! Zainy saheba.......
be-had umdaaH khayaal hai .. aur kia khoob adaaigi hai.. dherooN daad!
*hSn* : parStaar
tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di!
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9th September 2014, 11:19 AM
...............
Hassanbhai,
aapka shukriya jo aapko hamaare dono aashaar behad pasand aaye.....
khush rahiye.. aabaad rahiye... aur milte rahiye
Adil
ख़ुदा परेशां तेरी बला से तेरे सितम से तेरे अधम से
अगर हसीँ होते ज़ुल्म तेरे तू भी तो कुछ शर्मसार होता
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9th September 2014, 11:20 AM
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Agree with hassan sahab...regarding this sher
wah wah...bohat khoob ..ek se badhker ek sher hain...
Subhan Allah. ..superb
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aapka behad maskuur-o-mamnoon hooN, Zainysahibaa...
duaaoN ke saath..
Adil
ख़ुदा परेशां तेरी बला से तेरे सितम से तेरे अधम से
अगर हसीँ होते ज़ुल्म तेरे तू भी तो कुछ शर्मसार होता
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9th September 2014, 11:21 AM
shukriyah naaz..
"Main" word extra hi hai per sher ko behr me fit karne ke liye add kiya hai...
kuch aur sochti huun....
Zainy
PalkoN ki baand ko tod ke daaman pe aa gira
Ek aaNsu mere zabt ki tauheen kar gaya...
Nm
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9th September 2014, 11:22 AM
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Ek adna sa sher meri taraf se
Tere darde dil ka sabab ban chuki huuN
Mohabbat pe apni pashemaan huN meiN
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waaah...
bahot khub..............
dheroN dheroN daad iis sher pe.........
ख़ुदा परेशां तेरी बला से तेरे सितम से तेरे अधम से
अगर हसीँ होते ज़ुल्म तेरे तू भी तो कुछ शर्मसार होता
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9th September 2014, 11:23 AM
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waaaahhh! Zainy saheba.......
be-had umdaaH khayaal hai .. aur kia khoob adaaigi hai.. dherooN daad!
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shukriyah hassan saahab.........
Zainy
PalkoN ki baand ko tod ke daaman pe aa gira
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9th September 2014, 11:23 AM
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waaah...
bahot khub..............
dheroN dheroN daad iis sher pe.........
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shukriyah aadeil sahab. ..............
Zainy
PalkoN ki baand ko tod ke daaman pe aa gira
Ek aaNsu mere zabt ki tauheen kar gaya...
Nm
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9th September 2014, 11:24 AM
Naaz,
tumhaari ye baat sahi hai ki 'maiN' lafz nikaal dene se sher aur bhii nikhar jaataa hai, magar ye karne se beher TuT jaatii hai kyuN ki ek baRi taktii kam ho jaati hai .....
ख़ुदा परेशां तेरी बला से तेरे सितम से तेरे अधम से
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9th September 2014, 11:29 AM
ख़ुदा परेशां तेरी बला से तेरे सितम से तेरे अधम से
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9th September 2014, 11:36 AM
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mai koi pashemaani wala kaam nahin karti isliye dimag mein koi sher nahin araha hai :d
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rofl.........................................
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