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Imtehan abhi baaki hai - 24th September 2015, 11:06 PM
Ai khuda aur kitne imtehan abhi bakee hai,
Jeena padega humeiN jab tak jaan bakee hai.

Chah ker bhi ker nahi sakte kinara tujhse ,
Poore kerne haiN kafi armaan abhi baaki hai.

Kaise kerdeiN ruksat is zindagee ko abhi,
Karz utarne haiN kuch ehsaan abhi bakee hai.

Waqt ke hathoN yuN hi chot khate rahe ,
Naseeb ki giraft meiN gireban abhi bakee hai.

Apni uljhano ke bojh tale dab ke reh gaye ,
Kitne adhure mere kaam abhi bakee hai

Hum tau kerte rahe zindagee se samjhauta ,
Ek din aana maut ka ferman abhi bakee hai

Bewajah befazool guzaar di saree zindagee
Sunani tumhe apni daastan abhi baakee hai.


khone Pane ki daur mein yun uljha hai har bashar ,
Isee kashmeqash mein kat raha Zindagee ka safar.
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25th September 2015, 02:11 PM
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Ai khuda aur kitne imtehan abhi bakee hai,
Jeena padega humeiN jab tak jaan bakee hai.

Chah ker bhi ker nahi sakte kinara tujhse ,
Poore kerne haiN kafi armaan abhi baaki hai.

Kaise kerdeiN ruksat is zindagee ko abhi,
Karz utarne haiN kuch ehsaan abhi bakee hai.

Waqt ke hathoN yuN hi chot khate rahe ,
Naseeb ki giraft meiN gireban abhi bakee hai.

Apni uljhano ke bojh tale dab ke reh gaye ,
Kitne adhure mere kaam abhi bakee hai

Hum tau kerte rahe zindagee se samjhauta ,
Ek din aana maut ka ferman abhi bakee hai

Bewajah befazool guzaar di saree zindagee
Sunani tumhe apni daastan abhi baakee hai.
Sanjay ji - Bahut khoob ehsaas hue hai aur aapko mubaarbaad bhi dena chahungaa kyun aapke ehsaason ko nikharte dekha hai maine...har misre par aapki mehnat dikh rahi hai...beharhaal is ghazal ki baat karein to aapka radeef 'abhi baakee hai' thoda stretched lag raha hai agar aap sahi samjhe to ise 'hai bakee' karein to saani mein wazn aayegaa aur sher aur asardaar hoga yeh mera nazariyaa hai, kaafiya bhi ek sher mein thoda durust nahi lag raha hai ek baar dekh le..

Apni uljhano ke bojh tale dab ke reh gaye ,
Kitne adhure mere kaam abhi bakee hai

yaha kaam baaki sheron mein use kiye hue kaafiye se alag hai aap is sher ko aur thoda gaur se dekhe aur marammat karein...

Baaki jaisa ki maine kaha aapki kalam ki rawaangi nikhar rahi hai aur yakeen maaniye behad aachi lagi ye ghazal bas thodi baarekiyon ki kami hai....

Umeed hai aapko meri kahi baat buri nahi lagegi..


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25th September 2015, 02:37 PM
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Ai khuda aur kitne imtehan abhi bakee hai,
Jeena padega humeiN jab tak jaan bakee hai.

Chah ker bhi ker nahi sakte kinara tujhse ,
Poore kerne haiN kafi armaan abhi baaki hai.

Kaise kerdeiN ruksat is zindagee ko abhi,
Karz utarne haiN kuch ehsaan abhi bakee hai.

Waqt ke hathoN yuN hi chot khate rahe ,
Naseeb ki giraft meiN gireban abhi bakee hai.

Apni uljhano ke bojh tale dab ke reh gaye ,
Kitne adhure mere kaam abhi bakee hai

Hum tau kerte rahe zindagee se samjhauta ,
Ek din aana maut ka ferman abhi bakee hai

Bewajah befazool guzaar di saree zindagee
Sunani tumhe apni daastan abhi baakee hai.


wahhhhhh...kya baat hai, bahut khoobsurat ehsaas......dil se daad hazir hai Sanjay ji

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25th September 2015, 04:12 PM
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Ai khuda aur kitne imtehan abhi bakee hai,
Jeena padega humeiN jab tak jaan bakee hai.

Chah ker bhi ker nahi sakte kinara tujhse ,
Poore kerne haiN kafi armaan abhi baaki hai.

Kaise kerdeiN ruksat is zindagee ko abhi,
Karz utarne haiN kuch ehsaan abhi bakee hai.

Waqt ke hathoN yuN hi chot khate rahe ,
Naseeb ki giraft meiN gireban abhi bakee hai.

Apni uljhano ke bojh tale dab ke reh gaye ,
Kitne adhure mere kaam abhi bakee hai

Hum tau kerte rahe zindagee se samjhauta ,
Ek din aana maut ka ferman abhi bakee hai

Bewajah befazool guzaar di saree zindagee
Sunani tumhe apni daastan abhi baakee hai.
namaskaar sanjay ji...

Bahut hee asardaar kalaam pesh kiya hai aapne...har sher pasand aaya mujhe....mast sahab ki baton par bhi zaroor gaur kariyega....
Dher sari daad qubool kijiyega meri taraf se...
Yun hee likhte rahein....aur bhi achcha...

Khush rahiye..


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28th September 2015, 10:45 AM
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Ai khuda aur kitne imtehan abhi bakee hai,
Jeena padega humeiN jab tak jaan bakee hai.

Chah ker bhi ker nahi sakte kinara tujhse ,
Poore kerne haiN kafi armaan abhi baaki hai.

Kaise kerdeiN ruksat is zindagee ko abhi,
Karz utarne haiN kuch ehsaan abhi bakee hai.

Waqt ke hathoN yuN hi chot khate rahe ,
Naseeb ki giraft meiN gireban abhi bakee hai.

Apni uljhano ke bojh tale dab ke reh gaye ,
Kitne adhure mere kaam abhi bakee hai

Hum tau kerte rahe zindagee se samjhauta ,
Ek din aana maut ka ferman abhi bakee hai

Bewajah befazool guzaar di saree zindagee
Sunani tumhe apni daastan abhi baakee hai.

bahut acchii kavita is baar bhi aapki taraf se ikhi gayee hai sanjay saahab....
likhte rahiye

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