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Zindagi -
22nd August 2006, 06:38 PM
Zindagi
Zindagi bhar zindagi sae, dosti khaayam rahi Dharkanaen jab tak raheen,zindagi khaayam rahi Manziloan ki khoaj main,her koi tha yun magan Raushni,muddham sahi,raushni khaayam rahi Pee rahae thae Jaam-ae-ghum hum sub sae chup ker ghoont,ghoont Jaam tha jab tak bhara ,mae-kashi khaayam rahi Jaantae aur boojhtae bhi ,sub gunaah kertae rahae Thi nazar sub ki jhuki,shermindagi khaayam rahi Muntazir thae zindagi bhar, koi apna aayaega Mergayae hum jeetaegi,ae kami khaayam rahi "RAZ"perwah thi kisae,Maal-o-daulat ki kabhi Khud main khud thae zum hamaesha,bae-khudi khaayam rahi "RAZIA YASMEEN RAZ" ZUM...DIPPED |
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Re: Zindagi -
22nd August 2006, 07:18 PM
Manziloan ki khoaj main,her koi tha yun magan
Raushni,muddham sahi,raushni khaayam rahi Pee rahae thae Jaam-ae-ghum hum sub sae chup ker ghoont,ghoont Jaam tha jab tak bhara ,mae-kashi khaayam rahi Muntazir thae zindagi bhar, koi apna aayaega Mergayae hum jeetaegi,ae kami khaayam rahi razia sahiba kaisi hai aap???? ab yeh kehna to rasm si ho gayi hai ki kya khoob gazal kahi hai aapne.....aapki gazal par tareef karna suraj ko diya dikhane sarikha hai.....aapki yeh gazal bhi aapke jazbaaton ka aaina hai...khaas kar yeh sher behad khubsurat lage..aur apne jazbaaton ki hi pachai nazar aayi inmein mujhe...meri bharpoor daad kuboool kijiye...likhte rhaiye....apna khayal rkahiye -MANOJ karte hai jo "kureel" se gila karte rahein. |
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Re: Zindagi -
24th August 2006, 09:05 AM
raziya ji
yadpi main is session me nahi aata parantu aapki ye gazal mujhe anayas hi yahan kheendh layee. haaon ye baat or hai ki main yahan manoj ji ka reply padkar aaya. or aakar maine paya ki maine yahan aakar koi galti nahi ki. vastab main aapka kalam bahut khoob surat hai. iska ek=ek sher mujhe behad pasand aaya. ab to main aapki gazal ka deebana ho gaya hoon. ki har pal mujhe aapke nayi gazal ka intzar rahega. aapka dost dilip Quote:
 " Dilip " -Ek Adhoora khwab Dard bantne se ab darr lagta hai mere gamo ka usnane falsafa bana diya |
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24th August 2006, 09:46 AM
umda khyaal hai.. wazan bhi khoob raha, magar beher mein dheel reh gai kayi sheron mein..
Pehli baar pada aapko aur achha laga Likhte Rahiye Varinder chal waha chal jahan tere jaise aur bhi hai... |
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