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Aik Nazm Bedilmusafir K Naam<<<< -
12th October 2005, 05:14 PM
BEDIL K NAAM JO AIK ACHA DOST HAY,,,
TITLED SORRY JANA ITS LATE mgar aap se aik darkhwast hay k agar parhiye to complete....yani shayri samjh kar ... thanks ------ ab k lote ho jab sanson main hararat kam hay ab k lute ho jab ragon main shrarat kam hay ab k lote jab sawan bhi thera nahi kuch din ab k lote ho baharon main baghwat kam hay tum ab k lote ho jab main zmaan bhul gya ehde rafta bhi yad nahi dore rwan bhul gya bhulana nai asan magar mujrim ho tumara ehdo paiman yad nhai koolu zuban bhul gya ,,,,,,tum ab k lote ho meri jaan???? ab k waqt ne mita dala hay sabi kuch mere lafzon k kya the unwan yad nai mumkin hay kaha ho kabhi"zindagi tum ho" muaf karna sahi se "meri jaan" yad nai madhoshi main kabhi un ko dohra leta hun jana main tere khaton ko bhi ab har roz nahi parhta apni hi nadani pe ro deta hon kisi raat ab teri yad ka sawan bhi har roz nhai charhta ....tum ab k lote ho meri jaan??? ab tera naam bhi likh lo to behte nahi ansoo honto per to ate hain kuch kahte nahi ansoo pahle jo tere naam par bare shok se girte the ab tere naam ki sakhti ko bhi sehte nahi ansoo ................tum ab k?????? ik waqt tha jab sitara-e-ishq dahkta hwa tha ab waqt hay wo aftab-e-janoon gharob ho chuka ik waqt tha jab main tumse mansoob hwa tha ab waqt hay k koi muj se mansoob ho chuka tum ab k lote ho meri jaan!!!!!!! agar mohabbat hay to judai kiyon or judai main mohabbat kasi???? |
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12th October 2005, 08:11 PM
mere khan,
tumhe padha....... padhti rahi...... tumhari ladli bahna |
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Re: Aik Nazm Bedilmusafir K Naam<<<< |
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Re: Aik Nazm Bedilmusafir K Naam<<<< -
13th October 2005, 11:27 AM
banjara bhai
ek ache shaksh ka dusre ache shaksh ki izzat mein kuch kehna.....dil ko bahooot bahooot acha laga...aajkal aap dono hi yahana birle dikhai padte hai...aaj bahoot acha laga aapko yahan dekh kar... take care -MANOJ karte hai jo "kureel" se gila karte rahein. |
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13th October 2005, 12:06 PM
mere khan,
aaj fir tumhe padhti rahi......... |
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13th October 2005, 09:34 PM
Khan bhai!
Kaisie hain? aapko yahan dekhkar bahut accha laga... umeed hai sab acche se hoga... Bhai likha to humesha hi ki tarah khoobsurat hai aur naam kar diya bedil ke... sach uske liye jo kha jaaye kam hoga... Dost, bhai sab kucch hai.... meri daad kubool lijiyga.. likhte rahiye.. khayal rakhiye  Lagta hai is baar "Pulkit", kismat teri bhi rang laayii hai |
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13th October 2005, 11:51 PM
khan sahab,
kya baat hai...bada accha likkha hai hamesha ki tarah.yuhin mehfil sajate rahiye..take care Subha Kii Gard MeiN Naa Kho JaayeiN Aa ! Tere Gham MeiN Jaagtii AankheiN Kam Se Kam Aik Raat So JaayeiN." **~*FaRhAnA*~** |
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14th October 2005, 10:54 AM
ab tera naam bhi likh lo to behte nahi ansoo
honto per to ate hain kuch kahte nahi ansoo pahle jo tere naam par bare shok se girte the ab tere naam ki sakhti ko bhi sehte nahi ansoo ................tum ab k?????? ik waqt tha jab sitara-e-ishq dahkta hwa tha ab waqt hay wo aftab-e-janoon gharob ho chuka ik waqt tha jab main tumse mansoob hwa tha ab waqt hay k koi muj se mansoob ho chuka tum ab k lote ho meri jaan!!!!!!! khan bhai......... aapko padna har dafa.....ek naya jasbaat....ek naya tajurba..... Akshat ke liye likha kalaam bahut khoob raha.....aur aapne aana bhi kam kar diya hai.....magar jab bhi aate ho...ek dilchaspi hoti hai aapko padne mein..... aapka apna.... **(*·.¸(`·.¸ ¸.·´)¸.·*)** *·.¸Paigaam -e- Aman¸.·* **(¸.·´(¸.·* *·.¸)`·.¸)** ~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~* inhan ankhaaon vicho kadi, tere hanju vaghe si..... aaj ki hoye, jehda ^AMAN^ da lahoo vagda ae...... AMAN RAHI |
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14th October 2005, 12:40 PM
mnoj kureel
kaise ho dost? aik arse baad likha or us par agar tumare jaise parne wale reply krain gain zahir hay likha acha ho jaye ga... bedil k naam karna meri bhi khushkismati hay...ache log hamesha dilon main rehte hain or bedil bohat acha hay aap ki tareef ka shukria apna khiyal;rkahiye ga khan-------- -------------------- pulkit gupta kais eho dost? sab ache se hay na? dekho bhai hmain to sbahi shikayat karterhae k ate nahi likhte nahi....milte nhai jab kuch din pahle tak yehi ilfaz ham dosron ko kaha karte the....khair hmari ghalti hay... hamne likhne ki koshish ki aap ne parha or pasand kiya mehnat wasool hui apna khiyal rkahiye ga khan ----- farhana kasi ho? aapki tareef ka bohat bohat shukria... apna khiyal rkahiye ga khan ------- aman rahi.... kaise ho bhai? tume mera likhe apsand aya thanks... tumne kaha k jab bhi likhta hu us main aik nayi dilchaspi hot hay....sahi kaha bhai...infact ham jaise or ap jaise jo log hote hain na wo shidat psand hote hain...in logon ko dard ki adat ho jati hay or dard acha lagta hay...muje aksar apne opar hansi ati hay isi baat se k likhte hwe mere hont larzte rehte hain ankhain geeli rehti hain(or aksar kagaz bhi)...mgar usi likhe ko likhne k baad jab main parhta hu to lutf milta hay... ise kahte hain dard ko enjoy karna anyw ay bhai thanks aap ne waqt nikala.. khan agar mohabbat hay to judai kiyon or judai main mohabbat kasi???? |
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14th October 2005, 12:47 PM
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meri ladli bahna kasi ho? tumari tareef do lafzon main khob.... or yakeen mano k main inhi lafzo k jwaab main bhi do lafz sochta raha mgar nahi shaya d bohat din hwe tumse bata kiye hwe online ana to btana... bedil or banno ne jab phone kiya to btaya k meena di pareshan hain muje lekar to main hazir ho gya .. bedil k naam kiye chand lafz shayad shayri ki hasiyat se use ache lage.. apna khiyal rkahna jald online ana to btana khan agar mohabbat hay to judai kiyon or judai main mohabbat kasi???? |
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14th October 2005, 07:20 PM
Khan BHai ..
kabhi kabhi tareef karne ke liye humari tabiyat bechain rahti hai magar humari kabiliyat jawab de jati hai .. Sach bahut khoobsorat hai ye .. aisa lag raha hai padhne ke liye nigaheiN aisa hi kuch talaash kar rahi thi aur aisa kyoN likha bhai poora padhne ke liye ye to vo cheez hai ki koi padhne baithe to bas padhta hi rah jayega .. DaaD tah e dil se Qabool ho |
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14th October 2005, 10:16 PM
Adaab Khan Bhai...
laga ki suraj chandrmaa dono hi zara hat ke nikle hain.. laute ho tau sanson mein hararat aa gayi ragon mein bhi shararat machal uthi sawan ki jhadhi bhi lagi hai dekho udaas chaman mein bahaarein chaa gayin apni jaana ko yaad rakha...aur behna ko bhula diya...? koyi baat nahin...jaana ne ek sher sunaya aaj apki dilkash awaaz mein...aur yeh bhi bataya ki aapne unke liye kuch pesh kiya hai...lajawaab...!! ab laute ho tau thehar jaana... gayi ruton ka sulagataa sa intezaar bhii ho mere khuloos kaa andaaz ye bhii sachhaa hai rakhuun na rabt magar dostii shumaar bhii ho --Sayyidaa Fatimaa Hasan |
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15th October 2005, 02:08 AM
KhaN Bhai...
Kaise hai Aap.... Bhai Aap Ke Qalaam Ko PadNe Ke BaaD AaDuRa ChoR NahiN SakTe Hai ...Ek KasisH Hai... PaD KaR BaHuT AccHa LeGa... QalaaM Wakay... QaBile TaReeF Haiii.... AaP Ka DosT AaP Ka DosT -------------- Amrit |
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15th October 2005, 11:36 AM
adaab moon,,,,,,,
vow, its a lovely poem bhut hi acha likha hai aap ne. wasiey is mai aapki jalak bi nazar aati hai aur bedil hi ki bi. bhut khushi hoi ke aap wapis aae to sahi warna shayri.com pe har koi aapki nazmo ko taras giya tha. poem ke baare mai aur kiya kaho maloom nahi kiyoke tareef ke liye lafz chahiye hote hai jo mere paas nahi and i cant express my feeling therefore i leave it to it. keep on writing bye |
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16th October 2005, 09:14 PM
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kais eho dost? sab thek hay na? muje aksar shikayat ki dosto ne k aap ate nahi likhte nahi... jaldi likhain to aik do bar maine aik sher likh kar post kar diya tab unhi dosto ne kaha k yeh sher jis nazm yah ghazal ka hay wo complete post krain jab complete post kiya gya tab un dosto k reply se malom hwa k unho ne nazm ko parhe bgair hi tareefon k pul bandhe the... tab main to shayad khush ho gya un ki tareef se magar mere lafz muj se naraz ho gaye... akshit aisa dost hay jo phone bhi karta tha to kahta tha khan bhai kuch sunao to isi liye us k liye nazm taweel nazm post ki... janta tha k ise app jaise yah kuch aise khas shayri ko samjne wale dost hi parhain gain ... warna to bohat se log yehi dekh kar guzar jate hain k itni taweel... aap ne pasand ki mere lafz khush hogaye apna khiyal rkahna agar mohabbat hay to judai kiyon or judai main mohabbat kasi???? |
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16th October 2005, 09:21 PM
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kaise ho bhai? yar likhna shyad mere liye bohat asan ho magar us likhne ka maza to tab hi ata hay na jab ap jaise kuch dost use parhain or samjhain... aap ki tareef wakayi meri liye hosla afza rahi hay take care... ------------------ parastaar kasi ho? meri jana ne aap ko sher sunaya ???? han mumkin hay? mgar kaise mumkin hay...main yehi soch nahi pa raha hun.... aap ko bhulana mumkin nahi hay or agar bhai se galti ho gayi hay to sorry yar.. next time aisa nahi hoga apna khiyal rkahna... khan agar mohabbat hay to judai kiyon or judai main mohabbat kasi???? |
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16th October 2005, 09:24 PM
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(tumhare us swaal par or paras k is reply par main khud bhi heran hon...) mgar hqeqat kiya hay i think u understand neway... aap ne waqt nikala or meri nazm parhi or tareef bhi ki... aksar aisa hota hay k jis tarah k lafz aap tareef k liye tlash kar rahe hote hain woh mil nhai pate jaise khitiz ne bhi kaha... magar aap k in sada lafzo main sachayi dikhayi deti hay apna khiyal rkahna.... (.....)? moon agar mohabbat hay to judai kiyon or judai main mohabbat kasi???? |
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22nd October 2005, 05:56 PM
Banjara Bhaaii...
Kaise ho? Bahoot dino ke baad aap ko post padhne ka mouka milaa.. behad khoobsoorat likha hai aap ne... Dil ko chhu lene wale ehsaas ke baare mai kya kahna... Apna khayaal rakhiye aur aate rahiye apne is pariwaar me... Aap ka... MayanK |
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anjana rahi
kaise ho bhai? janta hu bohat din baad sahi magar lafz hain kabhi saath dete hain kabhi saath chor jate hain mere lafzon main or meri jana main ik yehi adat milti hay ..kabhi muje lagta hay k sirf meri hain or kabhi lagta hay kabhi meri nahi ho sakti hain... khair aap ki daad ka shukria apna khiyal rkahiye ga khan agar mohabbat hay to judai kiyon or judai main mohabbat kasi???? |
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23rd October 2005, 03:25 PM
Khan Bhai
Aisa kyoN likhte haiN kaun bevkoof hoga jo itni khoobsorat nuzm ko sarapa nahi padhna chahega .. ? aur jo aisa karenge beshaQ unhe iski tameez hi nahi hogi waise aapka Qad in sab batoN se bahut upar hai .. aap sirf likhiye aur hum jaise diwanoN ko ye nazar e sukhan hone dijiye khyaal rakhiye |
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23rd October 2005, 03:29 PM
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aisa kiya likhd iyamiane khitiz bhai aap jaise log hain to ye bazme sukhan kayam hay ... agar mohabbat hay to judai kiyon or judai main mohabbat kasi???? |
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