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Zamana Kharab hai......( Ghayel ) -
28th March 2010, 03:34 PM
Aisa nahi ke mera, har amal kharab hain Kuch aadate buri hain, kuch kismet kharab hain Aye hukamaran tere, hunar ko mera salam Sach_chaiee meri bol bhaithi, jhooth tera lajawab hain Galat pata hain yaro, q mehlo me dhoondte ho Mufliso ke makano me, mohabbat behisaab hain Tareef humne dekhi, Maa ki zubaan me Kahe woh apne lal ko, mera aftab hain Yaha Hain kharaab Ghayel, to tajjub kaisa Kya tumne suna nahi Zamana kharab hain  Sajid GhayelNote: Changes have been made from original work....  Par tujhe bevafa bhi kehna achcha nahi lagta... Mob.: +971 501297654
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28th March 2010, 04:25 PM
[quote=sajid_ghayel;387263]/quote]
Aye hukamaran tere, hunar ko mera salam Sach_chaiee meri bol bhaithi, jhooth tera lajawab hain Galat pata hain yaro, q mehlo me dhoondte ho Mufliso ke makano me, mohabbat behisaab hain Yaha Hain kharaab Ghayel, to tajjub kaisa Kya tumne suna nahi Zamana kharab hain Bahut Khoob ....Sajid Bhai.....Bahut Umdaa khayal.......aur behtreen adaayegi ki jhalak pesh ki hai aapne.....sabhi ashaar saaf bayaani se pur asar nazar aate hai...bahut achi lagi ......aapki yeh ghazal.....nice creation......yunhi likhte rahen...... tahe dil se daad hazir hai.......qubuul farmaayen.... apna khayal rakhen.... duaaon ke saath.....  YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ... Fareb Kaa ChaDhtaa Bazaar Dekh Insaaf Se Bastii Khaalii Ho Rahii Hai ... ---Naresh Mehra---- |
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29th March 2010, 07:19 AM
Aisa nahi ke mera, har amal kharab hai
Kuch aadate buri hain, kuch kismet kharab hai bahut khoob.....sajid saheb yeh to bemisaal hai... Tareef humne dekhi, Maa ki zubaan me Kahe woh apne lal ko, mera aftab hai bilkul sach....bahut badhiya bhai Yaha Hai kharaab Ghayel, to tajjub kaisa Kya tumne suna nahi Zamana kharab hai yeh to sirf aap hi likh sakte haiN....maqta kamaal hai... wah janaab maza aa gaya.....dil se daad qubuul kijiyega... Uss Rizk Se Tau Maut Bhali Jis Rizk Se Aatee Ho Tere Parwaaz MeiN Kotaahi.... vikramjethi@gmail.com |
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29th March 2010, 08:53 PM
bahut khoob likha khaas kar k shuruat aur ant wakai lajawab hai ....
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2nd July 2010, 08:09 PM
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 Par tujhe bevafa bhi kehna achcha nahi lagta... Mob.: +971 501297654
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2nd July 2010, 11:32 PM
Sajid Sahab AadaaB! O salaam sahab...........
Janab maiN aapse kayiN baar kahuNga socha but socha jane do meiN nahi kaha to koi aur kah deNga but abhi tak aap meiN woh kami qayam hai...  Janab Matle meiN do alag alag kafiye ka istemal kijiye....... agar tehreer likhana chahte hai to first line meiN kafiye ki zarurat nahi hai.....  Wel aap jante hi hoge bu I don't Know mujhe aapke khayaal humesha hi achche lage siliye bataya nahi kahiN aap bura na maan jaye..... Khair mujhe aapke sabhi sher bahut achche lage aur aap to bher bhi sikh gaye hai to bher meiN hi likhiye aap bahut achcha likhate hai janab.... so use aage hi badhte rahiye......... Is kalaam per bhi dil se daad hazir hai..... Khush rahiye.... Apna khayaal rakhiye.... Khuda Hafez...... 
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3rd July 2010, 11:05 PM
Aadaab Sajid ji,
Aapki iss peshkash ke khayaal hume achhe lage. Hamaari taraf se daad kubuul kijiye! |
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3rd July 2010, 11:52 PM
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very good bhot achi hai............  If you don't like something, change it. If you can't change it, change your attitude......
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