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कोख में कब्र -
14th March 2009, 11:11 AM
 --------------------- Naam? ...Anaam. Umr? ...Teeh Mahiney Kadd? ...Cheh Ya Saat Centimetre. Wajan? Abhi Tolaa Nahin. Sikhsha? ...Akhsharheen. Shauk? ...Jeeti Aankhon Se Duniya dekhna. Kaam? Jeene Ke Liye Sangarsh. Maata - Pitaa Kaa Naaam? Matt Poochiye. Kyon ? kyonki Woh Nahin Chahate Ki Mera Janm Ho. Mera Koi Naam Ho. Duniya Mujhe Dekh Paaye. Hawa Mujhe Choo Paaye. Koi Goddh Mein Khilaaye. Mere maathey ko sehlaaye. Koi Lohree Sunaaye. Chaand Se mera bhi Parichay Karwaaye. Aur Kya Bataoon!! Dabi Kilkaariyaan Kisey Sunaoon Darr Se Saans Toot Rahi Hain Kokh Qabr Mein Badal Rahi Hain. ------------------------------- 
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14th March 2009, 11:20 AM
Vipinjee
Namaskaar................ Shabd nahi mil rahe ke kya mahesus kar rahi hoon ise padhne ke baad....... Purvi  ~*~Kaash Dil ki aawaz mein aisa asar ho jaaye
Jise Hum Yaad karte hai use Khabar ho jaaye ~*~ |
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14th March 2009, 11:31 AM
Vipin jee:
Pranaam! aapki soch ko maiN naman kartaa huuN.. dil meiN Ghar kar gaii aapki yeh rachanaa..bahot kam log hote hai.n jo aise viShay par liKhanaa pasaNd karte hai.n.. aapne sachchhaa'ii ko baRii hi baareekiyoN se peSh kiyaa haii! YuuNhi liKhate raheN! aapki aglii rachnaa ka iNtezaar raheNgaa! KhuSh raheN... apnaa Khayaal raKheN duaaoN ke saath ijaazat aapka ~ Dhaval |
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14th March 2009, 12:04 PM
Namaskaar Purvi Ji
aapne phir mere prayaas ko parha yeh dekh bahaut accha laga. aapka dhanyavaad karta hoon. aabhaar vipin =============================== Pranaam Dhaval Ji, kaise hain aap? Meri soch ko jab aap jaise mitr aur lekhak ka samarthan milta hai tow iski umr barhney lagti hai. yunhi himmat detey rahiyega. aabhaar vipin
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14th March 2009, 12:05 PM
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vipin ji bus itna hi kah sakta hoon ADBHUT!!!!  " Dilip " -Ek Adhoora khwab Dard bantne se ab darr lagta hai mere gamo ka usnane falsafa bana diya |
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14th March 2009, 09:49 PM
Bahut achchhe,
Vipin Ji, Bahut pyaari rachnaa hai aapki, keep it up With best wishes Quote:
 Tu AndheroN -ujaaloN me mila kar mujhko Zindagi ab to sawaloN me mila kar mujhko |
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15th March 2009, 05:29 PM
Dhanyavaad Dilip Ji
aapne bhi mere prayaas ko parha tow accha laga. aabhaar vipin ============================= Rashid Ji aapne is rachna per apney vichaar rakhey, jisse parhkar khushi hui. aapka bahaut bahaut dhanyavaad aabhaar vipin
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16th March 2009, 05:02 PM
bahot khub, hum to pehle se hi aap ke shayri ke chahte rahe hai, aaj to appne jo likha hai issase to aur bhi chahne lage hai, take care bye
koi doulat chahe to koi shaan chahe, hum to jindagi ke sataye huwe hai, ‘Eliyas’ to khudase do gaaz zameen aur kafan chahe - ELIYAS SHAIKH |
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21st March 2009, 11:08 AM
Dhanyavaad Eliyas Ji
bahaut khushi hui aapne phir meri koshish ko parha aur pasand kiya. aabhaar vipin
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21st March 2009, 11:15 AM
bhaiya pehli bar easa ehsas huaa hai
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22nd March 2009, 06:43 PM
vipin ji
apne aaj ke samaj ki dukhti rag pe hath rakh diya hai! kitna atychar kerte hain wo log jo kokh me hi kabr bana detey hain...ek masoom ki kilkariyoon se mehroom reh jatey hain,,,really they are unlucky! betiyan..sach ghar ki raunak hoti hain,,nadan hai wo jo onko shap samajhker mar daltey hai,,,dhikaar hai unper,, apki ye rachna bhi her rachna ki bhnti ek sulagta prashan chor gayi hai... aise hi likhtey rahiye.. |
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23rd March 2009, 09:32 AM
Vipin jee
namaste: aap ki kavitaae.n hamesha dil me.n utar jaati hai..... ek alag sa andaaz hai aap ka jo auro.n se bohat haT kar hai..... aap ne yahaa.n ek bachchhi (un borned) ki dil ki baat pesh kii hai.... jo ki dill ko chhu kar dil ko jhankjhor deti hai .... mai..n yahii chaahunga ki aap ki yeh kavita har maa, har baap, har vyakti paDhe aur is apraadh ko na kare aur na hone de. isi par ek kahaani maine post kii thii, waqt mile to paDhiyegaa! http://www.shayri.com/forums/showthread.php?t=58333 dhanybaad! yuu.n hi hame aage bhi paDhne ka mauqa dete rahe.n..  Mayank |
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23rd March 2009, 06:11 PM
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very touchy...............i m speechless.....  "LAMHA"mujhko acchaa nahiiN lagtaa ko’ii hamnaam teraa , ko’ii tujhsaa ho to phir naam bhii tujhsaa rakhe.... |
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24th March 2009, 08:56 PM
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आपके विचार ,विचार करने योग्य है ..... आपको पढने का मौका मिला अच्छा लगा , मेरे पास शब्द नहीं है मै क्या कहू ..............लाजवाब है ........ |
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25th March 2009, 02:33 PM
Vipin ji...
Aapke aashaar padh ke aankhein nam ho gayi.... kitni afsos ki baat hai, ki aaj bhi ye baat hindustaan me sachaai ka roop leti hai.. aaj bhi kitni hi betiyon ko janm se pehle hi bhagwaan ke ghar vapis bhej diya jaata hai.. Bahut damdaar likha hai aapne.. ~Priya "Dikha kar khawaab in aankhon ko, De gaye aansoon in mein Tum.. Kaise chalka doo yeh aansoon, In mein bhi To rehTe ho Tum.." ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ Sirf Tanu Ki ChaahaT...... ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ |
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27th March 2009, 06:30 PM
Munna Bhai
aapka dhanyavaad aapne mere prayaas ko parha. aabhaar vipin ===================== Swati Ji boodhe samaaj ko chalne ke liye ek laathi ki awashyaakta padrahi hai. AUr woh laathi usse kewal aaj ka yuva varg hee de sakta hai. Dua karta hoon ki aaj ka yuva aisi ghinauni maansikta se sada door hee rahe. aapne mere is prayaas per apney vichaar rakhey yeh dekhkar bahaut khushi hui. aabhaar vipin ===================== Namaskaar Mayank Ji aapke vichaar parhkar sach mein bahaut khushui hui. aapke dwaara post hui kahani ko maine parha tow sach mein hee woh drishay aakhon ke saamne tha jo humaari dooshit maansikta per taras kha raha tha. aapka aabhaar vipin ====================== Lamha Ji aapne bhi mere prayaas ko parha yeh dekh accha laga. Aapka dhanyavaad aabhaar vipin ====================== Manvinder Ji Namaskaar Aapne is prayaas per apney vichaar rakhey yeh dekhkar accha laga. aabhaar vipin ====================== Priya Ji Aapne sahi kaha ki aaj betiyaan janm se pehle hee wapis jaa rahi hain. Aasha hai aaj ka yuva varg iss maansikta ko jaroor todega aur kal betiyon ke liye bhi khula aakaash banayega. aabhaar vipin ======================
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27th March 2009, 08:05 PM
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Speechless Save me from the safety of my SILENCE
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2nd April 2009, 11:31 AM
well... aapne jo likha hai uske liye to kuch b kehna kam hoga.... but yes jus wana say....
ki jo log aisa karte hai unhone uske ehsaas ko kabhi nahi chua jiski kokh mein kabhi wo baccha aaya hi nahi.............................................. ......... aanchal |
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8th July 2009, 01:57 PM
You seem to be someone who can change lives!
You have that in you Vipin! Regards susheel इस भरे शहर में हम Dard-e-Sush, जो न पाया उसे भी खोते हैं! lab pe muskaan ko liye ae dost, kandhon pe laash apni dhote hein is bhare sheher me ham dard-e-sush, jo na paaya use bhi khote hein |
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8th March 2013, 11:15 AM
Aaj, 08 march ko mahila diwas per iss apne iss prayas ko dobaara parhne ka mann hua to chala aaya shayri.com par.
Fathomless , aapne isse parha to w accha laga, khush rahein.... ================= Aanchal Ji aapke shabdon ko parha, bahaut kuch aabhaas hua. aapne mere prayaas ko parha.....accha laga khush rahein ============== Susheel bhai Aapne bhi mere prayas ko saraaha tow accha laga....bas ek aur baat kehna chahunga ki.....chalo, Let's Change the System aabhaar vipin
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8th March 2013, 11:28 AM
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Speechless..... superbb.... nowords to say anything Vipin bhaiyaa aapki ye rachnaa padh kar yooN lagta hai aapne jaise abhi abhi likh daali ho, aaj bhi wahi sab ho raha hai jo sadiyon se hota chala aa raha hai.... fir kya faayda samaaj ke padhe likhe hone ka.. aaj zarurat hai dakiyanoosi riwaazoN ko jadd se ukhaad fenkne ki... aur uske liye aapki ye rachnaa ek aankh kholne waali misaal saabit ho saktii hai.... bahot khoob.... likhte rahiye... Shaad... |
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10th March 2013, 08:55 PM
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Nihaayat Khoob AbhivyakTi .... ApraTim KriTi ..... Badhaaii !!!  YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ... Fareb Kaa ChaDhtaa Bazaar Dekh Insaaf Se Bastii Khaalii Ho Rahii Hai ... ---Naresh Mehra---- |
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22nd October 2013, 12:36 PM
Namaskaar, Shaad Ji
aapke vichaar parhna sukhad raha. yunhi apne vichaar likhtey rahiyega aabhaar Vipin ============= Namaskaar, Naresh Ji Aapne bhi mere iss prayas ko sarahaa yeh jaankar bahaut khushi hui. aapka aabhaar prakat karta hoon Dhanyavaad Vipin
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22nd October 2013, 11:29 PM
Vipin ji ... Dil jhakjhor dene waalee aur aankhein nam kar dene waalee nazm hai .....aap ko is sashakt vichaar par mubaarakbaad
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24th October 2013, 04:20 PM
Dear Vipin ji,
namaskaar... sir aap kaise hain? bahut dino baad aapka reply dekha to mujhe bahut hi khushi mili ki aap ab bhi samay nikal paate hain.. aapke yah peshakas main padh nahi paaya tha.. kya kahu.. speechless ho gaya.. aap likhi poetry ki uchayi bahut hi adhik hai.. aur apke shabd bahut hi saral hote hain jo ander tak jhakjhor jaate hain.. absolutely great thing created by your brain.. aapka Akant... आहट सी कोइ आये तो समझ लेना कि तुम हो... AahaT si koi aaye to samajh lena ki tum ho... |
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4th March 2014, 01:48 AM
Zarra Ji Namaskaar!
Aapne in vichaaron ko parha ......bahaut accha laga........Mera dhanyavaad sweekaar karein ========== Akant Bhai, Namaskaar! Main theek hoon.....aap batayein aap aur bitiya kaise hain? Akant ji, aap sada hee meri soch ko parhkar mujhe himmat detey hain....yeh dekh bahaut khushi milti ha...mera dhanyavaad seekaar karein
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4th March 2014, 09:24 AM
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No words to describe this beautiful and heart touching poem. iske liye koee alfaaz hi nahin hai mere paas. Bas itna kahoonga ke log agar ek massom jaan ko janm se pehle hi maar dete hain to unpe qatl ka ilzaam kyun nahi lagaayaa jaataa? Wo massom ka to koee kusoor hi nahin. apnee khud kee hawas aur mauj kee sazaa us massom ko kyun jisne ab tak dunya bhee nahin dekhee? Bilkul sahi farmaayaa hai aapne ees kavita men. ख़ुदा परेशां तेरी बला से तेरे सितम से तेरे अधम से अगर हसीँ होते ज़ुल्म तेरे तू भी तो कुछ शर्मसार होता 
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11th August 2014, 02:15 PM
Dhanyavaad Aadeil Sahab
aapne is rachna ke marm ko mehsoos kiya..........aapka aabhaari.
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