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bahut jyada tum hame bhulati rahi - 14th May 2009, 04:42 PM
sabhi ko namaste,
qafiya bada asaan sa mil gaya....gaur farmaiye.....
daad ki koi zarurat nahin...bas galtiyan bata dijiye..

bahut jyada tum hame bhulati rahi
isliye yaad der talak aati rahi


mere rone ka koi dayra baki na tha
aur tum haath pakadkar muskurati rahi


soocha mar jayenge tere bin lekin
saans aati rahi aur saans jati rahi


har shaam khali paimanon ko lekar
zindagi apne jalwe dikhati rahi


nikal gaya janaja teri gali se, magar
tum apna chehra sajati rahi


dikhta raha chehra tera ruk ruk kar
jab jab hawa pardon se takrati rahi
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14th May 2009, 08:18 PM
nicely written, especially these two.

soocha mar jayenge tere bin lekin
saans aati rahi aur saans jati rahi


nikal gaya janaja teri gali se, magar
tum apna chehra sajati rahi
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15th May 2009, 06:53 PM
dear mayoos sahab,
hausla afsaye ke liye teh e dil se shukriya
waise apke maqte mujhe behad pasand hai
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sabhi ko namaste,
qafiya bada asaan sa mil gaya....gaur farmaiye.....
daad ki koi zarurat nahin...bas galtiyan bata dijiye..


bahut jyada tum hame bhulati rahi
isliye yaad der talak aati rahi


mere rone ka koi dayra baki na tha
aur tum haath pakadkar muskurati rahi


soocha mar jayenge tere bin lekin
saans aati rahi aur saans jati rahi


har shaam khali paimanon ko lekar
zindagi apne jalwe dikhati rahi


nikal gaya janaja teri gali se, magar
tum apna chehra sajati rahi


dikhta raha chehra tera ruk ruk kar
jab jab hawa pardon se takrati rahi
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My dear chocboy...................aap achha likhte hain.......
bus isko baher mein likhne ki koshish kijiye......................

khush rahiye
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18th May 2009, 05:41 PM
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My dear chocboy...................aap achha likhte hain.......
bus isko baher mein likhne ki koshish kijiye......................

khush rahiye
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18th May 2009, 05:50 PM
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nicely written, especially these two.

soocha mar jayenge tere bin lekin
saans aati rahi aur saans jati rahi


nikal gaya janaja teri gali se, magar
tum apna chehra sajati rahi
MAYOOS SAHAB...KAISE HAI AAP?
AP TO MAQTA KING HAI...
APKO DEKHKAR MAINE BHI EK TAKKALUS APNA LIYA HAI( CHOTE MUH...BADI BAAT ,HASIYEGA NAHIN..)
ISLIYE JOSH ME AKAR, MERI LATEST GHAZAL ME 2-2 MAQTE KI PRACTICE GUSTHAKI KAR DI.
   
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18th May 2009, 06:03 PM
nikal gaya janaja teri gali se, magar
tum apna chehra sajati rahi


dikhta raha chehra tera ruk ruk kar
jab jab hawa pardon se takrati rahi


bohat acchi lagi aapki ye ghazal.....ye do sher khaasker zyada pasand aaye.........yuhi likhte rahiye....aapse guzarish hai ke aap apne baare me kuch introduction forum me likhiye,taaki hum sab aapko jaan sake...kam se kam apna naam hi bata dijiye....taaki aapko address karne me aasaani ho....



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Ek aaNsu mere zabt ki tauheen kar gaya...

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18th May 2009, 06:40 PM
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nikal gaya janaja teri gali se, magar
tum apna chehra sajati rahi


dikhta raha chehra tera ruk ruk kar
jab jab hawa pardon se takrati rahi


bohat acchi lagi aapki ye ghazal.....ye do sher khaasker zyada pasand aaye.........yuhi likhte rahiye....aapse guzarish hai ke aap apne baare me kuch introduction forum me likhiye,taaki hum sab aapko jaan sake...kam se kam apna naam hi bata dijiye....taaki aapko addrees karne me aasaani ho....
zainy ji,
daad ke liye shukriya....abhi main yeh fan ki bariki seekne me laga hua hu, ap logon ke sahyog se..
ummed hai agee mai,apni koshison ko aur ache se tarash sakunga

apka dusra suggestion mujhe pata nahin kyun pehle strike nahin kiya....main fouran kal apne aap ko formally introduce karta hu..
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